Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0DNKM9FWF06BDWK0WHC4M

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27.1s
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Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Get back!” Harlow Quinn barked, shoving a uniformed officer aside as she stepped into the dimly lit chamber. The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something metallic. She squinted against the flickering light of a single bulb hanging from the ceiling, illuminating the scene before her. A body lay sprawled on the cold concrete floor of the abandoned Tube station, limbs twisted at unnatural angles. The victim’s face was obscured by a tangle of dark hair, but the crimson stain spreading across the chest of a once-white shirt told a grim story. Harlow knelt beside the corpse, her sharp jawline set in a grimace as she took in the details. “Detective Quinn,” a voice called from behind her. It was Davies, her partner in the field, though they had been more like rivals lately. He stepped forward, his camera clicking as he documented the scene. “What do you think?” “Looks like a mugging gone wrong,” she replied, her eyes scanning the area. “But something feels off.” “Off?” He raised an eyebrow, glancing at the body. “You mean the fact that he’s dead? That’s pretty off, if you ask me.” “Not just that.” Harlow’s gaze drifted to the walls, where faded advertisements for long-closed businesses clung stubbornly to the peeling paint. “Look at the position of the body. He’s too far from the entrance. If this was a mugging, he’d have fought back, tried to escape.” Davies shrugged, adjusting his glasses. “Maybe he was caught off guard. It happens.” “Or maybe he was lured here.” Harlow’s voice dropped, her instincts kicking in. “This place is a dead end. No one comes here unless they’re looking for something specific.” “Like what?” Davies asked, his tone sceptical. “Like the Veil Market.” Harlow stood, brushing dirt from her knees. “This station’s been abandoned for years, but it’s known in certain circles. People come here for… unusual goods.” “Unusual?” He chuckled, but the sound was hollow. “You mean like enchanted trinkets and black market potions?” “Exactly.” Harlow’s eyes narrowed as she surveyed the area again. “And look at the blood. It’s too bright, too fresh. This wasn’t just a random act of violence. Someone wanted him dead.” “Or he was in the wrong place at the wrong time,” Davies countered, but Harlow could see the doubt creeping into his expression. “Check his pockets,” she ordered, her voice firm. “See if he has anything on him that might tell us who he was.” Davies hesitated, then knelt beside the body, his fingers deftly searching through the victim’s clothing. Harlow turned her attention to the walls again, tracing the faded advertisements with her eyes. One in particular caught her attention—a poster for a long-gone theatre, its edges curling and yellowing. “Hey, Harlow,” Davies called, his voice muffled. “You might want to see this.” She turned, her heart racing. “What did you find?” He held up a small, crumpled piece of paper, its edges stained with blood. “Looks like a receipt. From an occult shop in Camden. Paid in cash.” “Interesting.” Harlow stepped closer, taking the paper from him. The name of the shop was barely legible, but the date was clear—just two days prior. “He was here for something specific, then. Something he thought he could buy.” “Or sell,” Davies added, his brow furrowing. “You think he was involved in something shady?” “Could be.” Harlow’s mind raced as she considered the implications. “But why here? Why now?” “Maybe he was meeting someone,” Davies suggested, glancing around the chamber. “A deal gone wrong?” “Or a setup.” Harlow’s eyes flicked to the shadows beyond the light. “We need to find out who he was meeting. If he was lured here, there’s a chance someone else is involved.” “Right.” Davies stood, brushing off his trousers. “I’ll get the forensics team down here. They’ll want to take a look at the blood spatter.” “Good idea.” Harlow turned back to the body, her mind racing. “But we can’t wait for them. We need to find out what he was after.” “Where do we start?” Davies asked, his tone shifting from sceptical to intrigued. “The occult shop,” Harlow replied, tucking the receipt into her pocket. “If he was buying something, they might have seen him. And if he was involved in something dangerous, they might know who he was dealing with.” “Alright, let’s go.” Davies moved towards the exit, but Harlow hesitated, her instincts prickling. “Wait.” She turned back to the body, her eyes narrowing. “Something’s not right.” “What now?” Davies asked, impatience creeping into his voice. “Look at the way he’s lying. His hands are clenched into fists.” Harlow knelt again, examining the victim’s fingers. “He was fighting back. This wasn’t just a mugging. He was trying to defend himself.” “Maybe he was just scared,” Davies suggested, but Harlow shook her head. “No, it’s more than that. He was angry. Look at the blood on his knuckles.” She pointed to the dried crimson stains. “He fought back against someone. But who?” “Could be anyone,” Davies said, but Harlow could see the gears turning in his mind. “Not just anyone. Someone who knew him. Someone he trusted.” Harlow stood, her heart racing. “We need to find out who he was meeting. This wasn’t random. This was personal.” “Right.” Davies nodded, his expression shifting from scepticism to determination. “Let’s get to that shop.” As they made their way back through the darkened corridors of the Tube station, Harlow’s mind raced with possibilities. The Veil Market was a dangerous place, filled with secrets and shadows. But if they could uncover the truth behind this murder, they might just find the answers they were looking for. “Do you think it’s connected?” Davies asked, breaking the silence as they stepped into the cool night air. “Connected?” Harlow shot him a glance. “To what?” “To the case you’ve been working on. The one with the missing persons.” Harlow’s heart sank. “I don’t know. But if it is, we’re in deeper than I thought.” “Then we need to move fast,” Davies said, urgency creeping into his voice. “Before whoever did this gets away.” “Agreed.” Harlow’s mind raced as they climbed into the car, the engine roaring to life. “But we need to be careful. The Veil Market isn’t just a place for enchanted goods. It’s a den of thieves and liars.” “Then let’s catch a thief,” Davies replied, determination etched on his face. As they sped through the streets of London, Harlow felt the weight of the case pressing down on her. The shadows were closing in, and she could sense that they were on the brink of something far more sinister than a simple murder. “Hold on,” she said, gripping the steering wheel tighter. “This is just the beginning.” And with that, they plunged into the night, the darkness swallowing them whole as they raced towards the unknown.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags37
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Harlow turned back [back]"
1"She turned back [back]"
2"Harlow knelt again [again]"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.536
leniency1
rawRatio0.081
effectiveRatio0.081
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1151
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1151
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"tracing"
count1
3
word"racing"
count3
4
word"furrowing"
count1
5
word"raced"
count4
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"roaring"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"sinister"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"eyebrow"
2"tracing"
3"racing"
4"furrowing"
5"raced"
6"flicked"
7"silence"
8"roaring"
9"etched"
10"weight"
11"sinister"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
2
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"clenched into fists"
2"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences58
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1145
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount633
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.63
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Tube2
Davies18
Harlow23
Veil1
Market1
London1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Davies"
2"Harlow"
places
0"London"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1145
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"sense that they"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean24.36
std13.28
cv0.545
sampleLengths
051
164
239
317
423
546
613
729
87
929
1017
1132
1223
1322
1446
1513
169
1727
1838
1915
2015
2115
2233
2324
2426
2513
2637
2714
2813
299
3034
3112
3229
3315
3430
3515
3651
3718
388
3913
4016
4119
4238
4312
4443
4514
4619
99.21% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"was obscured"
94.18% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs126
matches
0"were looking"
1"were closing"
47.62% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences90
ratio0.033
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something metallic."
1"One in particular caught her attention—a poster for a long-gone theatre, its edges curling and yellowing."
2"The name of the shop was barely legible, but the date was clear—just two days prior."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount639
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.026604068857589983
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.00782472613458529
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean12.72
std5.89
cv0.463
sampleLengths
018
114
219
319
427
518
68
716
811
94
1013
114
129
1314
1421
1525
165
178
1813
1916
207
2111
2218
238
249
2510
2622
2723
288
2914
3015
3115
3216
337
346
355
364
3714
3813
399
4016
4113
427
438
4410
455
4611
474
4812
4921
86.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5333333333333333
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners48
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences58
matches
0"She squinted against the flickering"
1"It was Davies, her partner"
2"He stepped forward, his camera"
3"she replied, her eyes scanning"
4"He raised an eyebrow, glancing"
5"He chuckled, but the sound"
6"she ordered, her voice firm"
7"She turned, her heart racing."
8"He held up a small,"
9"She turned back to the"
10"She pointed to the dried"
11"she said, gripping the steering"
ratio0.207
3.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences58
matches
0"Harlow Quinn barked, shoving a"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She squinted against the flickering"
3"A body lay sprawled on"
4"The victim’s face was obscured"
5"Harlow knelt beside the corpse,"
6"a voice called from behind"
7"It was Davies, her partner"
8"He stepped forward, his camera"
9"she replied, her eyes scanning"
10"He raised an eyebrow, glancing"
11"Harlow’s gaze drifted to the"
12"Davies shrugged, adjusting his glasses."
13"Harlow’s voice dropped, her instincts"
14"Davies asked, his tone sceptical"
15"Harlow stood, brushing dirt from"
16"He chuckled, but the sound"
17"Harlow’s eyes narrowed as she"
18"Davies countered, but Harlow could"
19"she ordered, her voice firm"
ratio0.914
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags37
uselessAdditionCount13
matches
0"she replied, her eyes scanning the area"
1"Davies asked, his tone sceptical"
2"she ordered, her voice firm"
3"Davies called, his voice muffled"
4"Davies added, his brow furrowing"
5"Harlow turned back, her mind racing"
6"Davies asked, his tone shifting from sceptical to intrigued"
7"She turned back, her eyes narrowing"
8"Davies asked, impatience creeping into his voice"
9"Harlow stood, her heart racing"
10"Davies nodded, his expression shifting from scepticism to determination"
11"Davies said, urgency creeping into his voice"
12"Harlow’s mind raced, the engine roaring to life"
63.04% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Harlow Quinn barked (bark)"
1"He chuckled (chuckle)"
2"she ordered (order)"
3"Davies added (add)"
4"Davies suggested (suggest)"
5"Davies suggested (suggest)"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.261
leniency0.522
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.174
75.1104%