Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0EXDQCD65DX2FXVCWR92P

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54.7s
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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The abandoned platform still held the stale breath of decades past, a cocktail of rust and mildew that Detective Harlow Quinn had learned to associate with London's forgotten places. She ducked under the police tape, her leather watch catching briefly on the yellow plastic before she tugged it free. "Mind the third rail housing," called out the constable stationed at the entrance. "Power's been dead since the sixties, but there's standing water." Quinn's boots found the puddle anyway. Cold seeped through the leather as she made her way down the platform toward the cluster of forensic lights that turned the abandoned Tube station into something resembling a film set. Harsh white beams cut through darkness that had gone undisturbed for half a century, illuminating graffiti tags that looked older than some of her junior officers. The body lay between the rusted tracks, positioned with an almost theatrical precision that made Quinn's stomach tighten. Male, mid-thirties, wearing what appeared to be an expensive suit now stained with something darker than the tunnel's endemic grime. His eyes were open, fixed on the vaulted ceiling above as if searching for stars that had never shone down here. "Detective Quinn." The voice belonged to DS Chen, her temporary partner since the department's latest reshuffling. He stood near the body, tablet in hand, the blue glow of the screen reflecting off his glasses. "Victim's been identified as Marcus Webb, forty-two, financial consultant. Wife reported him missing three days ago." "Three days." Quinn crouched beside the body, pulling on nitrile gloves with practiced efficiency. "And he ends up here. How did anyone even find him?" "Anonymous tip. Called in about four hours ago." "To this location specifically?" Chen nodded. "Caller knew about the access point through the Camden Lock maintenance tunnel. Knew the exact platform number." Quinn filed that away. The station had been closed since 1963, officially sealed and forgotten beneath the chaos of modern Camden. Finding it required knowledge that didn't come from Google searches or urban exploration forums. This place had been chosen deliberately. She leaned closer to the body, her eyes tracking across the details that the forensic photographers had already begun documenting. Webb's hands were clean—too clean for a man who'd supposedly been dead in a filthy tunnel for days. His fingernails showed no defensive wounds, no torn cuticles from struggling against an attacker. The expensive watch on his wrist remained intact, a Patek Philippe that would have fetched enough on the black market to keep a desperate man comfortable for months. "Not robbery," Chen said, following her gaze. "Wallet's still in his jacket. Cards, cash, everything." "Cause of death?" "Medical examiner's initial assessment suggests cardiac arrest. No obvious wounds, no ligature marks, no signs of poisoning that they can see without a full toxicology workup." Quinn stood, her knees protesting the movement. She'd felt older lately, the accumulated weight of eighteen years on the force settling into her joints like sediment. "A healthy forty-two-year-old financial consultant has a heart attack in an abandoned Tube station that's been sealed for sixty years. Someone knows exactly where to find the body and calls it in anonymously." "Strange things happen in London." Chen shrugged, making a note on his tablet. "Maybe he was meeting someone. Drug deal gone wrong, the stress triggered cardiac—" "No track marks. No nasal damage. His pupils aren't dilated in any of the photographs." Quinn walked the perimeter of the scene, her flashlight sweeping across the platform's edges. "And how did he get down here in the first place? The maintenance tunnel requires a key that Transport for London keeps under lock and audit trail." "Could have found another way in." "Show me." Chen hesitated, then gestured toward the far end of the platform where the tunnel mouth gaped like a wound in the darkness. "There's supposedly an older access point through the basement of a building on the high street. One of the urban exploration forums mentioned it a few years back." Quinn moved toward the tunnel, her flashlight beam catching something that made her stop. The accumulated dust and debris of decades formed a gray carpet across the platform's edge, disturbed only in specific places. She could see the forensic team's bootprints, her own, Chen's sensible brogues. But leading from the tunnel mouth to where the body lay, the dust remained pristine. "Chen. Come here." He joined her, tablet tucked under his arm. "What am I looking at?" "The dust." "It's an abandoned station. There's dust everywhere." "Look at the pattern." Quinn swept her flashlight in a slow arc, tracing the path from tunnel to body. "No footprints. Not ours, not the first responders who found him, and not from whoever brought Marcus Webb down here." Chen frowned, adjusting his glasses. "The body could have been dragged. That would disturb the dust differently." "Would have left a trail. A smear. Something." Quinn crouched again, this time examining the dust itself. Fine particles, gray and uniform, the kind that only accumulated in places undisturbed by air circulation or human presence. Except— There. Near the platform's edge, almost invisible unless you knew to look for it. A small brass object, half-buried in the grime. Quinn pulled an evidence bag from her pocket and used a pen to ease it free. A compass. Old, judging by the verdigris that crusted its casing, but well-crafted. The face bore markings she didn't recognize—angular symbols that looked almost like runes, etched into the brass with precision that spoke of craftsmanship beyond mere decoration. The needle spun lazily when she tilted it, ignoring true north entirely. "What's that?" Chen leaned in. "No idea. But it wasn't here for sixty years. The corrosion pattern's wrong—this green patina forms over years of handling, not abandonment." Quinn sealed it in the evidence bag. "Someone dropped this recently. Or left it deliberately." "Could belong to the victim." "His wife can tell us." But Quinn didn't think so. The compass didn't match Webb's aesthetic—his Patek Philippe, his Italian leather shoes, his silk tie. This object belonged to a different world entirely. She turned her attention back to the body, this time looking for what she might have missed. The forensic lights cast harsh shadows, but in that contrast, details emerged. Webb's suit jacket had ridden up slightly, exposing his belt. Standard enough, expensive leather, silver buckle. But tucked into the waistband, nearly invisible against the dark fabric— Quinn pulled out another evidence bag and extracted the item with careful fingers. A small bone, polished smooth, carved with symbols that matched the ones on the compass. It was pierced at one end, as if meant to be worn on a cord or chain. "That's not in the initial inventory," Chen said, consulting his tablet. "The first responders must have missed it." "Or it wasn't there when they looked." "That's not possible." Quinn didn't answer. She'd learned three years ago that possible was a more flexible concept than she'd once believed. DS Morris had taught her that, in the moments before he'd died screaming about something she couldn't see. The official report called it a psychotic break. Quinn had signed the paperwork and spent the years since trying to convince herself she hadn't seen his shadow detach from his body and crawl away. "The victim was looking for something," she said finally. "Or someone. He had whatever this is—" she held up the bone token, "—which suggests he knew how to find this place. But he came alone, or his companion abandoned him. And whatever happened to him wasn't natural." "The ME said cardiac arrest—" "I know what she said." Quinn's voice came out sharper than intended. "I'm saying the evidence doesn't support a simple heart attack. Look at his expression, Chen. Look at his posture." The body lay with arms slightly raised, fingers curved as if warding something off. The face held an expression that the harsh forensic lights rendered in terrible detail—not pain, not the slack absence of death, but terror. Pure, absolute terror frozen in features that had once belonged to a man who traded in numbers and projections. "People can look frightened when they have heart attacks," Chen offered, but his voice had lost its certainty. "They can." Quinn stood, knees aching. "But they usually fall. Clutch their chest. Try to call for help. They don't lie down in the middle of train tracks and arrange themselves like they're waiting for something." She walked the perimeter again, this time looking up rather than down. The station's ceiling arched overhead, Victorian brickwork stained by decades of neglect. In the harsh light, she could see where water had seeped through, leaving mineral deposits like frozen waterfalls. Could see, too, where the graffiti gave way to older marks—scratches in the brick that formed patterns, symbols, the same angular script that adorned the compass and the bone. "Chen. Get me a ladder." "There's not—" "Find one." He disappeared toward the maintenance tunnel, leaving Quinn alone with the body and the darkness pressing in from all sides. She stood very still, listening. The station had its own sounds—water dripping somewhere in the distance, the creak of ancient infrastructure settling, the faint rumble of modern trains passing through tunnels far overhead. But beneath those familiar noises, something else. A whisper at the edge of hearing, like wind moving through spaces too small for wind to exist. Her hand went to her service weapon, a reflexive gesture she'd developed in the years since Morris. The whisper faded, if it had ever been there at all. When Chen returned with a stepladder scavenged from somewhere, Quinn positioned it beneath the clearest cluster of scratched symbols and climbed. Up close, the marks resolved into something more deliberate than random vandalism. Words, she realized. Written in a language she didn't recognize, carved into the brick with tools and patience and purpose. "What does it say?" Chen asked from below. "I don't know." But she photographed it anyway, her phone's flash briefly illuminating patterns that seemed to shift in her peripheral vision. "But I know someone who might." She climbed down, already pulling up her contacts. Eva Kowalski's number sat near the top, a remnant of the informal consultations that had become increasingly frequent since Morris's death. The British Museum's restricted archives held records that no official police database could match. "You're bringing in an outside consultant?" Chen's voice held a note of disapproval. "On what grounds?" "On the grounds that we have a dead body in a location that shouldn't exist, with evidence that doesn't add up and symbols that no one in the Met can read." Quinn pocketed the evidence bags containing the compass and the bone. "Unless you have a better explanation for how a man got here without leaving footprints, died of fear without anyone touching him, and lay undiscovered until someone who knew exactly where to look called it in." Chen was quiet for a long moment. "You think this is connected to something else." "I think—" Quinn stopped. Three years of carefully maintained silence warred with the certainty building in her gut. "I think there are things happening in this city that we don't understand. And I think Marcus Webb found one of them." She turned back toward the tunnel entrance, her flashlight beam cutting a path through darkness that felt thicker than it should. Behind her, the forensic team continued their careful work, documenting a scene that would never make sense in any official report. The compass sat heavy in its evidence bag, its needle still spinning, pointing toward something that existed beyond the maps.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Quinn crouched again [again]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.373
leniency0.746
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.068
82.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1949
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count2
1
adverb"lazily"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"lazily"
2"slightly"
3"very"
4"carefully"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Chen"
1"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
64.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1949
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"stomach"
count1
1
word"comfortable"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"pristine"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
7
word"standard"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count2
10
word"resolved"
count1
11
word"database"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"stomach"
1"comfortable"
2"weight"
3"pristine"
4"tracing"
5"etched"
6"silk"
7"standard"
8"familiar"
9"whisper"
10"resolved"
11"database"
12"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
71.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"happened to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1934
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
68.58% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount1351
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.63
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn22
London1
Tube1
Chen14
Camden1
Google1
Patek2
Philippe2
Fine1
Webb3
Italian1
Morris3
Victorian1
Kowalski1
British1
Museum1
Three1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Chen"
3"Patek"
4"Philippe"
5"Webb"
6"Morris"
7"Kowalski"
8"Museum"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.686
windowScore0.833
59.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if searching for stars that had never shone down here"
1"as if warding something off"
2"patterns that seemed to shift in her peripheral vision"
96.59% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.034
wordCount1934
matches
0"not pain, not the slack absence of death, but terror"
1"not the slack absence of death, but terror"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean31.7
std23.3
cv0.735
sampleLengths
049
123
263
359
450
525
68
74
819
941
1080
1115
123
1326
1459
1526
1656
176
182
1950
2061
213
2213
232
247
2539
2617
2737
2838
2951
305
3137
325
3333
3456
3545
3618
377
383
3971
4047
415
4231
4356
4418
4536
4671
475
482
492
94.74% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences100
matches
0"been closed"
1"been chosen"
2"was pierced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs246
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences137
ratio0.066
matches
0"Webb's hands were clean—too clean for a man who'd supposedly been dead in a filthy tunnel for days."
1"Except—"
2"The face bore markings she didn't recognize—angular symbols that looked almost like runes, etched into the brass with precision that spoke of craftsmanship beyond mere decoration."
3"The compass didn't match Webb's aesthetic—his Patek Philippe, his Italian leather shoes, his silk tie."
4"But tucked into the waistband, nearly invisible against the dark fabric—"
5"\"Or someone. He had whatever this is—\" she held up the bone token, \"—which suggests he knew how to find this place. But he came alone, or his companion abandoned him. And whatever happened to him wasn't natural.\""
6"The face held an expression that the harsh forensic lights rendered in terrible detail—not pain, not the slack absence of death, but terror."
7"Could see, too, where the graffiti gave way to older marks—scratches in the brick that formed patterns, symbols, the same angular script that adorned the compass and the bone."
8"The station had its own sounds—water dripping somewhere in the distance, the creak of ancient infrastructure settling, the faint rumble of modern trains passing through tunnels far overhead."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1045
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.02966507177033493
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.014354066985645933
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean14.12
std8.59
cv0.608
sampleLengths
029
120
213
310
46
531
626
718
820
921
1016
1118
1216
1314
1411
158
164
172
1817
194
2017
2114
226
2320
2418
2514
2628
277
288
293
3026
317
3219
3333
3413
3513
3629
3727
386
392
4022
4128
4214
4320
4412
4515
463
478
485
492
72.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.45255474452554745
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners62
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences95
matches
0"She ducked under the police"
1"His eyes were open, fixed"
2"He stood near the body,"
3"She leaned closer to the"
4"His fingernails showed no defensive"
5"She'd felt older lately, the"
6"She could see the forensic"
7"He joined her, tablet tucked"
8"She turned her attention back"
9"It was pierced at one"
10"She'd learned three years ago"
11"she said finally"
12"she held up the bone"
13"She walked the perimeter again,"
14"He disappeared toward the maintenance"
15"She stood very still, listening."
16"Her hand went to her"
17"She climbed down, already pulling"
18"She turned back toward the"
ratio0.2
75.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences95
matches
0"The abandoned platform still held"
1"She ducked under the police"
2"Quinn's boots found the puddle"
3"The body lay between the"
4"His eyes were open, fixed"
5"The voice belonged to DS"
6"He stood near the body,"
7"Quinn crouched beside the body,"
8"Quinn filed that away."
9"The station had been closed"
10"This place had been chosen"
11"She leaned closer to the"
12"Webb's hands were clean—too clean"
13"His fingernails showed no defensive"
14"The expensive watch on his"
15"Chen said, following her gaze"
16"Quinn stood, her knees protesting"
17"She'd felt older lately, the"
18"Chen shrugged, making a note"
19"Quinn walked the perimeter of"
ratio0.768
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Harsh white beams cut through darkness that had gone undisturbed for half a century, illuminating graffiti tags that looked older than some of her junior office…"
1"The body lay between the rusted tracks, positioned with an almost theatrical precision that made Quinn's stomach tighten."
2"His eyes were open, fixed on the vaulted ceiling above as if searching for stars that had never shone down here."
3"Finding it required knowledge that didn't come from Google searches or urban exploration forums."
4"Webb's hands were clean—too clean for a man who'd supposedly been dead in a filthy tunnel for days."
5"The expensive watch on his wrist remained intact, a Patek Philippe that would have fetched enough on the black market to keep a desperate man comfortable for mo…"
6"Quinn moved toward the tunnel, her flashlight beam catching something that made her stop."
7"Old, judging by the verdigris that crusted its casing, but well-crafted."
8"The face bore markings she didn't recognize—angular symbols that looked almost like runes, etched into the brass with precision that spoke of craftsmanship beyo…"
9"Could see, too, where the graffiti gave way to older marks—scratches in the brick that formed patterns, symbols, the same angular script that adorned the compas…"
10"Eva Kowalski's number sat near the top, a remnant of the informal consultations that had become increasingly frequent since Morris's death."
11"She turned back toward the tunnel entrance, her flashlight beam cutting a path through darkness that felt thicker than it should."
12"Behind her, the forensic team continued their careful work, documenting a scene that would never make sense in any official report."
13"The compass sat heavy in its evidence bag, its needle still spinning, pointing toward something that existed beyond the maps."
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Quinn walked, her flashlight sweeping across the platform's edges"
1"Quinn crouched again, this time examining the dust itself"
2"Chen offered, but his voice had lost its certainty"
3"Quinn stood, knees aching"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.068
leniency0.136
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.9828%