Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0G5GNZY46SME6FN83N0K6

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter's heart skipped a beat as she swung open the door to Eva's flat, her hand still clutching the handle. The sight of Lucien Moreau standing there, impeccably dressed in his tailored charcoal suit, was both unexpected and electrifying. His heterochromatic eyes, one amber and the other black, locked onto hers with an intensity that made her pulse quicken. "Rory," he said, his voice smooth and rich, like velvet draped over steel. She blinked, momentarily speechless. The last time they'd seen each other, words had been exchanged that cut deeper than any blade. Yet here he was, unannounced, standing in the doorway of her sanctuary. "What are you doing here, Lucien?" Her voice was steady, but the question hung in the air, laden with the weight of their shared past. He leaned slightly on his ivory-handled cane, a subtle reminder of the concealed blade within. "I need your help." Aurora stepped aside, allowing him entry. The flat was cramped, every surface covered with books, scrolls, and research notes. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, eyed Lucien warily from his perch atop a stack of ancient tomes. Lucien's gaze swept the room, taking in the chaos with a raised eyebrow. "Eva's place hasn't changed." "Neither have you," Aurora replied, closing the door behind him. The click of the deadbolts echoed in the silence. He turned to face her, a hint of a smile playing at the corners of his lips. "I could say the same about you." Aurora crossed her arms, a defensive gesture she couldn't quite suppress. "You said you needed help." Lucien nodded, his expression shifting to something more serious. "There's a situation in the supernatural underworld. A power struggle. I need information, and you're the best at finding it." She studied him, searching for any sign of deception. Lucien was a master of manipulation, but there was something genuine in his request. "Why me?" "Because you're the only one I trust," he said simply. The admission caught her off guard. Trust was a fragile thing between them, fractured by past betrayals and unspoken truths. Yet here he was, offering it to her like a lifeline. Aurora moved to the cluttered desk, rifling through papers until she found a map of London marked with cryptic symbols. "What exactly are we dealing with?" Lucien joined her, his presence a magnetic force she couldn't ignore. "A demon faction is trying to seize control. They're using human pawns, and it's getting messy." She glanced at him, her bright blue eyes searching his face for answers. "And you think I can help untangle this mess?" "I know you can," he replied, his voice low and earnest. Aurora's mind raced, weighing the risks against the potential rewards. Working with Lucien again meant reopening old wounds, but it also meant confronting the unresolved tension between them. "Alright," she said finally, her decision made. "But we do this my way." Lucien's smile was slow, a promise of things to come. "I wouldn't have it any other way." They spent the next hour poring over maps and notes, their conversation punctuated by the occasional hiss from Ptolemy, who seemed to disapprove of Lucien's presence. Aurora found herself slipping into the familiar rhythm of their partnership, the synergy that had once made them an unstoppable force. As they worked, the air between them crackled with unspoken words and lingering glances. Aurora couldn't deny the attraction that simmered beneath the surface, nor could she ignore the hurt that still lingered from their last encounter. "Why did you really come to me, Lucien?" she asked, breaking the silence. He paused, his gaze steady and unwavering. "Because I couldn't stay away." The confession hung between them, a fragile bridge spanning the chasm of their past. Aurora felt her resolve waver, the walls she'd built around her heart beginning to crumble. Lucien reached out, his fingers brushing against the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist. The touch was electric, a reminder of the connection they shared. "I never wanted to hurt you, Rory." She met his gaze, her heart pounding in her chest. "Then why did you?" His expression softened, a hint of vulnerability breaking through his polished exterior. "I was protecting you. From things you didn't know about." Aurora's breath caught, the revelation shifting the foundation of her understanding. "You should have told me." "I know," he admitted, his voice tinged with regret. "But I thought it was the only way." The truth settled between them, a fragile peace offering. Aurora felt the weight of their history, the attraction that had always drawn them together, and the hurt that had kept them apart. "Maybe it's time we start over," she suggested, her voice barely above a whisper. Lucien's smile was slow, a promise of redemption. "I'd like that." As they continued to work, Aurora felt the tension between them ease, replaced by a sense of possibility. The past was a shadow that lingered, but the future was a canvas waiting to be painted. And as they stood side by side, Aurora knew that whatever came next, they would face it together.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
51.85% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said simply [simply]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.148
76.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount850
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"warily"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"warily"
2"really"
3"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount850
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"skipped a beat"
count1
1
word"intensity"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"sanctuary"
count1
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"reminder"
count2
7
word"eyebrow"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
9
word"silence"
count2
10
word"fractured"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count2
12
word"magnetic"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"potential"
count1
15
word"tension"
count2
16
word"familiar"
count1
17
word"encounter"
count1
18
word"unwavering"
count1
19
word"resolve"
count1
20
word"electric"
count1
21
word"pounding"
count1
22
word"tinged"
count1
23
word"whisper"
count1
24
word"sense of"
count1
highlights
0"skipped a beat"
1"intensity"
2"pulse"
3"velvet"
4"sanctuary"
5"weight"
6"reminder"
7"eyebrow"
8"echoed"
9"silence"
10"fractured"
11"unspoken"
12"magnetic"
13"raced"
14"potential"
15"tension"
16"familiar"
17"encounter"
18"unwavering"
19"resolve"
20"electric"
21"pounding"
22"tinged"
23"whisper"
24"sense of"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences53
matches
0"d with regret"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences53
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences71
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords848
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
54.69% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount682
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.91
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Eva2
Lucien11
Moreau1
London1
Aurora13
Ptolemy2
persons
0"Carter"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Aurora"
places
0"London"
1"Ptolemy"
globalScore0.547
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite suppress"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount848
matches(empty)
72.77% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences71
matches
0"exchanged that cut"
1"knew that whatever"
87.58% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean23.56
std10.75
cv0.457
sampleLengths
060
113
233
325
419
535
617
719
824
916
1029
1125
1210
1331
1426
1527
1622
1711
1828
1913
2017
2147
2237
2313
2412
2529
2631
2714
2822
2916
3017
3132
3214
3311
3435
3518
85.40% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences53
matches
0"been exchanged"
1"was, unannounced"
2"was cramped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs125
matches
0"was, offering"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences71
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount684
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.027777777777777776
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.01023391812865497
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences71
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences71
mean11.94
std5.61
cv0.47
sampleLengths
021
119
220
313
44
517
612
725
815
94
106
1113
1216
1313
144
1510
169
1717
187
1911
205
219
2220
239
2414
252
2610
276
2814
2911
3020
316
3211
3316
3413
359
3611
3710
3818
397
406
4110
427
4326
4421
4514
4623
4713
487
495
63.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.38028169014084506
totalSentences71
uniqueOpeners27
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
84.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences53
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber"
1"he said, his voice smooth"
2"She blinked, momentarily speechless."
3"Her voice was steady, but"
4"He leaned slightly on his"
5"He turned to face her,"
6"She studied him, searching for"
7"he said simply"
8"She glanced at him, her"
9"he replied, his voice low"
10"she said finally, her decision"
11"They spent the next hour"
12"she asked, breaking the silence"
13"He paused, his gaze steady"
14"She met his gaze, her"
15"His expression softened, a hint"
16"he admitted, his voice tinged"
17"she suggested, her voice barely"
ratio0.34
16.60% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences53
matches
0"Aurora Carter's heart skipped a"
1"The sight of Lucien Moreau"
2"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber"
3"he said, his voice smooth"
4"She blinked, momentarily speechless."
5"The last time they'd seen"
6"Her voice was steady, but"
7"He leaned slightly on his"
8"Aurora stepped aside, allowing him"
9"The flat was cramped, every"
10"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, eyed"
11"Lucien's gaze swept the room,"
12"Aurora replied, closing the door"
13"The click of the deadbolts"
14"He turned to face her,"
15"Aurora crossed her arms, a"
16"Lucien nodded, his expression shifting"
17"She studied him, searching for"
18"Lucien was a master of"
19"he said simply"
ratio0.887
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
61.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber and the other black, locked onto hers with an intensity that made her pulse quicken."
1"They spent the next hour poring over maps and notes, their conversation punctuated by the occasional hiss from Ptolemy, who seemed to disapprove of Lucien's pre…"
2"Aurora found herself slipping into the familiar rhythm of their partnership, the synergy that had once made them an unstoppable force."
3"Aurora couldn't deny the attraction that simmered beneath the surface, nor could she ignore the hurt that still lingered from their last encounter."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said, his voice smooth and rich, like velvet draped over steel"
1"he replied, his voice low and earnest"
2"she said finally, her decision made"
3"she suggested, her voice barely above a whisper"
75.93% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he admitted (admit)"
1"she suggested (suggest)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.296
leniency0.593
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.148
74.3349%