Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0GJR8DS7YYA775YM86R0Q

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1m 26s
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$0.004896
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The arch shivered and opened, and Rory stepped into a glass-lit world that hummed beneath her heels. Nyx slid from the arch’s shadow, their voice a soft wind against stone. “Keep low, keep quiet.” Rory nodded, the Heartstone Pendant at her throat warming in response, a pale, insistent throb like a heartbeat she recognised from childhood summers gone sour. She pressed a finger to the pendant’s crimson gem and felt the stone deliver a careful heartbeat of its own: warm, precise, almost polite. “Right behind you,” she muttered, eyes sweeping the unknown ahead. Isolde’s silver voice came after, drifting with riddles that seemed to hover in the air rather than be spoken. “Beyond the gate, what you seek seeks you back, and the grove remembers every footstep you take.” The three of them stepped through the arch and into a seam of light that did not so much illuminate as rearrange the senses. The air tasted like honeyed rain and something unexpectedly metallic, a tang of old coin and fresh earth. Roots and moss glittered with dew that wasn’t dew at all but light, a soft radiance that clung to skin and clothes as if the air itself clung to them. The ground was a living mosaic underfoot, a lattice of mossy tiles that shivered with each step. The Fae Grove, they discovered, did not quite belong to Earth, nor to the concealed corners of the Fae realm Isolde had described when she settled into Richmond Park’s hidden clearing. It lay in a pocket between, a place where time did something mischievous to reason. The path itself unfurled like a ribbon, veering in directions that made as much sense as a dream and as much sense as patience could bear. A ring of ancient oaks formed a boundary that was less a wall and more a listening mouth. Their trunks bore runes, not carved with chiselled tools but pressed, as if the trees themselves remembered the act of memory. The runes pulsed faintly with a pale blue light, the script a language Rory didn’t know, but somehow understood in a way that bypassed the mind and tapped straight at the pulse. “Bloody lovely,” Nyx commented, a tone that might have been admiration or warning, Rory couldn’t tell. “Walls that listen. Boundaries that talk. It’s polite until it isn’t.” Isolde spoke, her words a glittering thread of oddness in the air. “The Veil breathes here where the worlds brush shoulders. Listen—can you hear it?” Rory lowered her gaze to the mossy floor and found it alive with motion, like tiny figures scurrying beneath a festival floor. The ground tingled under her boots, a playful tremor that suggested the grove was aware of them in the most intimate, almost intimate way. The wildflowers did not wilt when she blinked; they seemed to glow brighter with every breath she took. A pool lay at the heart of a small clearing, a sheet of liquid glass that did not reflect the sky so much as reveal another sky—a sky with two moons, a night that glittered not with stars but with the glow of creature-dreams that scuttled just beyond sight. The pool’s surface moved with a ripple that was not water’s ripple but a whisper of wind in a forest far away. The wind did not blow through, but through and around, as if the grove had its own weather system, a microclimate of wonder and unease. Rory stepped closer, the pendant’s glow intensifying—a warm crimson glow that did not banish shadows but invited them to stay and tell their secrets. The blade at her hip—the Fae-Forged Blade, moonsilver, slender and leaf-shaped—hung cold to the touch, an unsentimental blade that remembered every ward and every demon it had cut through in the old courts of the Fae. “Look there,” Isolde whispered, almost to herself, and Rory followed her gaze. On a stone pedestal near the pool, runes that did not resemble any human script glowed with a soft amber hue. The letters slid and rearranged themselves in the corner of Rory’s eye, then snapped back when she looked directly at them. The sight was disorienting in the way a dream can be when you wake and cannot quite tell if you were awake or still inside the dream. Nyx’s shadow moved with the clarity of someone who could pass through walls. They paused a step back from the pool, the faint violet glow around their eyes flickering as they studied the water’s surface, watching the two moons’ reflections twining together like a double helix that had learned to smile. “The Grove is hungry for footsteps,” Nyx murmured, almost as if tasting the words. “Not for your feet, for your attention.” Isolde stepped forward, her silver hair catching the light the way frost catches the moon. “The Seer’s eye never lies, but it loves misdirection. The grove sings in riddles, and those who listen with care hear the truth beneath the note.” “Careful,” Rory warned, though the word sounded pale against the thick sweet air. “This place is not a tourist attraction. It’s a doorway.” And then it happened—the pool’s surface shivered, not like a reflection rippling but like a window trembling in its frame. The amber runes blurred, and the air grew denser, as though the grove exhaled in a long, patient sigh that pressed against their backs and pressed into their lungs. A whisper rose from the water, not a voice but a sense of someone speaking directly into their minds, soft as velvet and sharp as a blade’s edge. The voice was not one voice but many, braided together from a hundred small currents of thought. Welcome, wanderers. You step where not all step. The Veil breathes. Speak your name, and tell us what you seek in a place that forgets the self. Rory steadied her breath, for once glad of the pendant’s warmth, a small circle of heat in the cold of the unknown. She spoke aloud rather than letting the whisper go unchallenged. “We seek passage, we seek knowledge, and we seek a way to hold onto our own lives while the worlds around us fray.” The pool’s surface calmed, though the ripples remained under its skin, as if the water’s own memory was too full for perfect stillness. The choir of voices—voices separated by time and space—sounded again, closer, more intimate. Be wary of wishes, child of Cardiff. The grove is a mirror, and every reflection asks for a price. Nyx leaned into a patch of light, their form bending and reconstituting as they touched the air with a gloved finger. “Shadows don’t bargain,” they said, almost to themselves. “We bargain with the dark, and it always wins if you forget what you paid.” Isolde lifted her head and offered a riddle like a key. “What grants sight, yet blinds the eye that looks too long?” Rory felt the words slide into her as if Isolde had pressed them into her ear with a cold, bright finger. The answer came not as a thought but as a sensation: a memory you didn’t know you cherished, a fear you would rather forget, the image of a door standing open while you stood on the threshold. The grove listened, but not to their minds. It listened to the cadence of footsteps, to the rhythm of breath, to the soft scrape of boot upon root. The ground themselves seemed to tilt ever so slightly, the moss beneath their boots rearranging its pattern as if to guide their path. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed with a steady, confident warmth, and Rory allowed herself to trust that rhythm, anchoring her awareness in something tactile when the world grew too curious. The corridor of vision opened before them, a tunnel of light carved by roots that reached like patient fingers toward the pool. The violet brightness of Nyx’s eyes—an unusual colour in a shade of living shadow—brightened as they moved deeper. The garden’s glow thickened, filling the air with a scent of honey and rain and something akin to old library dust—aphorisms in the dust, ideas in aroma, futures floating in the air like moths. “Isolde,” Rory said, keeping her voice level, “your prophecies—tell us what you see, not what you think we want to hear.” The Seer’s lips curved into a smile that wasn’t a smile so much as a suggestion of one. She spoke in the familiar rhythm of riddles, but the meaning was there, clear once you listened long enough. “The gate remembers your steps, and the memory is a gate itself. A price you pay becomes a path you walk, and the path asks you to choose again.” Her eyes, pale lavender, searched Rory’s face. “The grove will sharpen what you are, to reveal what you fear. Do you fear what you might become?” Rory met Isolde’s gaze, then glanced at Nyx, whose silhouette flickered at the edge of the light like a question mark made of smoke. The thought of becoming something other—something not quite human, not completely themselves—stung with a cold clarity. The group pressed on, following a corridor made of living vines that glowed with a soft, amber light. The vines reached toward them as if to guide them, then recoiled with a shiver when their fingertips brushed against the poised edge of a leaf. The Fae-Forged Blade hummed faintly against Rory’s hip, a whispering point of cold that offered courage in the face of a sensation that was almost fear. “Where does this path lead?” Rory asked, half to herself, half to the woods that looked back at her with leaves that seemed to breathe. “To the heart,” Nyx replied, not looking at her but at the pool where two moons stitched their light into a single silver thread. The three of them stopped before a clearing that opened like a throat. In the middle stood a stone structure, ancient and untouched by time in a way that suggested it existed outside of the natural order. The walls were stems and branches, woven together into a cathedral of bark and bone, their architecture a stubborn memory that refused decay. The air inside—deeper within the grove—felt colder and more intimate, as if the space itself leaned in to listen. The pool’s glow intensified and cast long, yellow-green shadows across the walls, which moved with a life of their own. The walls bore another set of runes, different from the ring outside, etched into the living wood with a precision that suggested deliberate care. If Rory stretched her hand toward them, she could swear the runes shifted away just enough to tease but not enough to reveal. “Nobody mentions the price,” Isolde murmured, her voice low and almost fond, as if to the grove she spoke a secret language every listener understood but none fully mastered. “The Veil holds more than a seam; it holds a memory of a choice you made long ago, and it demands a continuation of that choice to move forward.” The heartstone’s pulse became a drumbeat against Rory’s chest, a message not of fear but of necessity. She exhaled slow and steady, pushed a lock of her black hair behind her ear, and stepped toward the structure with purpose. The Fae blade responded with a faint glow along its slender edge, catching the amber light and sending a cold silver gleam across the stone’s surface. The grove sighed, a sound not heard so much as felt—a tremor of ancient breath that moved through the air and made the hair on Rory’s arms stand on end. The central chamber felt more intimate, as though the walls had stepped closer to listen, and the space beyond the doorway carried a note of conclusive intent, like a verdict waiting to be spoken. Rory pressed a palm against the bark of the structure, and the wood beneath her fingertips warmed as if the tree itself recognised a familiar touch. The runes along the door—their meaning a hazy memory of something ancient—brightened, replying with warmth rather than menace. The door did not creak open in the traditional sense; it yielded with a slow, patient grace, as though it had waited for them for a long, long time. Beyond the doorway lay a vestibule that felt simultaneously outside and inside the grove, a paradox that the space wore with gleeful defiance. The floor shifted here, not in the sense of tilting, but in the sense of perception. A handful of inches in the grove equated to miles outside, and the outside would be forgotten if one stayed too long in this interior. A figure stood at the far end of the vestibule—not a person, exactly, but a presence formed from shadow and light, the edges of their body flickering with a pale, lunar glow. It wore the air of a sentinel—indifferent, patient, and somehow hungry for truth. The figure’s head inclined in Rory’s direction with the slow exactness of a statue turning to face a curious passer-by. The lantern-light of the grove did not reach this figure’s heart, but the glow around its form sharpened with a new, almost tactile intention. “Welcome to the boundary,” the sentinel said, their voice a chorus of soft echoes that did not fully align with the mouth that spoke. “You have crossed the first threshold, and the Veil’s breath grows louder here. Speak your purpose, and do not squander what you carry.” Rory kept her eyes on the figure, her breath measured. She sensed Nyx’s presence shift, a quiet exhale that told her the shade could slip into a shadow a bare breath away from danger. She kept the blade ready, the pendant warm, and Isolde’s presence steady like a lighthouse. “We seek passage,” she repeated, not as a demand but as a promise. “And we seek to learn what keeps us whole in a place that erases the easy way out.” The sentinel regarded them with something like ancient amusement, a look that suggested the being found the trio’s stubborn bravery endearing rather than naive. “The path you seek lies through memory and consequence. You will be tested by what you treasure most and what you fear to lose. The Veil is not a place for the clever alone; it is a mirror that requires a choice, not a clever answer.” Isolde stepped forward, her silver hair catching the ambient light in a way that made her seem taller, more ascendant. “Riddles can cut if you listen too long, sentinel. We are listening. We are ready to learn, not to bargain away what we are.” The sentinel’s gaze shifted toward the pool, as if acknowledging a truth it could neither confirm nor deny. “Then listen,” it answered, voice now more intimate, less an official address and more a confidant’s whisper. “Beyond this corridor lies a chamber where time’s hands move at their own will. An hour inside may become minutes or days outside. The Hem of Hel, a memory of a thing you once believed you’d left behind, waits there for you. If you choose to take what you earn, you will return with more than you carried in.” The words landed with a weight that made Rory’s shoulders tighten. The Hel reference—the possibility of Hel energy, of demonic or hellish influence—made her heart beat faster. She lowered her gaze to the Heartstone Pendant and saw that the crimson glow had deepened, as if the gem itself felt the weight of the sentinel’s words. Nyx stepped forward, the shadow they wore shrinking to a compact, living silhouette. “We aren’t novices, gatekeeper,” they murmured, their voice a blur of consonants and quiet consonant-like hiss. “We’ve crossed thresholds before. We’ll cross again.” The sentinel regarded Nyx with something like respect, and then with dangerous calm, it spoke again. “Then prove it. Step into the chamber and face what you yourself have carried, for better or worse, since the day you learned to hope.” Rory’s mouth tightened. She looked at Isolde, who simply nodded with that half-smile that meant she accepted the risk and knew the risk might swallow them whole. “We go,” Rory said, her choice made with the precision of a gavel fall. “No more talk.” They advanced as one, crossing the threshold into the deeper chamber. The boundary behind them closed with a soft sigh, and the grove exhaled as though it were releasing breath after a held prayer. The air grew cooler, the light more austere, and the space sharpened into something more real than the belief of a dream. The chamber beyond the sentinel’s vestibule resembled a cathedral carved from living wood and star-dust. Columns spiralled with bark-like texture, each one ringing with a resonance that felt almost musical, deeper than sound, older than memory. The ground underfoot swam with patterns of luminescent moss, and when Rory lifted her gaze, she saw the ceiling—a network of twigs and branches—woven into a lattice that let in a pale, silver light not from any sun but from something else entirely, something watching and patient. The pool lay once again at the room’s heart, but now it reflected not just the three of them but a field of possibility—the various paths their futures might take if they pressed forward. The two moons from the previous pool still glowed within its depths, but the reflection now shifted, turning into scenes that looked like a life not chosen, a life chosen and followed to its bitter end, a life where someone dear vanished into the Veil as if swallowed by smoke. Rory’s breath snagged in her throat. The Heartstone Pendant warmed more insistently, pulsing with a rhythm that felt almost like a heartbeat from a larger creature: a thing that watched and waited for a purpose to be fulfilled. “Isolde,” she whispered, not sure she could trust her own voice to stay calm, “are these futures… are they real?” Isolde answered not with a direct yes or no but with an image, a mental thread she wove with the silver of her voice. “The grove stores memories like seed banks store seeds. Some sprout when tended; some rot if you hurry. Look, but do not take without a return.” Her eyes glittered with a sly light. “And listen to the ground. It speaks in tremors when a step shifts fate.” Nyx moved closer to Rory’s side, their shadow stretching long along the floor and then shrinking again as they adjusted to the chamber’s otherworldly light. “Stand ready,” Nyx said, their whisper sighing through the air. “The Veil isn’t a door you walk through. It’s a breath you share, and the breath grows heavier when you try to steal more breath than you deserve.” The sentinel’s voice returned, not from anywhere this time and everywhere at once. It seemed to come from the walls themselves, from the moss, from the very air that tasted of ancient rain. “To pass, you must bind your purpose to your memory. Speak aloud the one thing you will give up in exchange for what you seek.” Rory felt a sting in her chest, a small, sharp ache that was not physical but moral—the ache of choices made in the past that had led her to this moment in the grove. The small crescent scar on her left wrist—carved long ago in a childhood accident—felt suddenly both distant and uncomfortably close, a reminder of the vulnerability that had driven her to leave Cardiff, to flee to London, to become someone who could deliver meals or carry her life into unknown realms when summoned by a friend or a danger she hadn’t anticipated. “The price,” she murmured, deciding to honour her own heart rather than chase power. “I will give up certainty.” It sounded almost noble, like something a hero would say in a heroic pamphlet and then do nothing about in real life. The admission felt dangerous because it left her open to the unknown, a vulnerability that the grove could smell and would use. Nyx’s response came without hesitation. “I offer the shadow’s edge, the quiet of what is unseen, to keep those I care about safe.” Their voice carried a quiet steel, the last fragment of a life that refused to be simple. “Protect them, even when protection means stepping into nothingness.” Isolde’s riddle returned, a soft, lilting murmur that hovered on the edge of the ear like a bell’s faint chime. “The price you pay is the price you pay to live. Do you still want to live when living means choosing between what you are and who you might become?” For a moment the room held its breath, the air dense with the scent of old pine and something sharper, more metallic—the scent of a decision that would tilt the world. Rory faced the pool’s shifting reflections, the three futures stretching toward them like a chorus of possibilities. She exhaled, steadied the blade in her hand, and looked at her companions. Nyx’s form was a silhouette of calm, their presence a shield of cool and shadow. Isolde stood with the remnants of a smile, knowing that the right question had finally been asked. “We go forward,” Rory said, voice even. “If we must lose something, we lose it for the chance to keep something we’ll hard-won keep elsewhere.” Isolde nodded, and her riddled mouth gave a final line that sounded almost like a blessing or a curse depending on who listened. “Then walk, travellers. The door you seek is not a door you step through; it is a door you walk into together.” The gate behind them did not reopen in the old-fashioned way, but the chamber shifted as if the space itself acknowledged their decision. The amber runes along the central wall brightened, and the pool’s surface trembled, revealing one last image before the images drew away: a corridor of countless doors, each like a memory they could walk through, each door bearing the letters of a name they knew or a life they might have led. Rory’s grip tightened on the Fae-Forged Blade. Its moonsilver edge felt like a blade forged from winter night and moonlight, always cold to the touch, always ready to cut through what no longer served. The blade hummed again, a soft, warning note, as if a sentinel within the metal watched for any misstep. The three of them stepped into that moment’s next passage, into a corridor of doors that appeared to be hung from the ceiling by threads of light. The corridor was not straight; it curved in ways that made the stomach drop a little and the heart lift a little more with each turn. The ground beneath their boots was a living thing, fingers of moss pressing up along their ankles as if to test their resolve. A soft crack in the air drew their attention to a corner where space itself seemed to fracture, like a heat shimmer but colder, sharper, and more deliberate. A figure stepped from the fracture, stepping into the light with a measured calm that spoke of patient endurance and inevitable consequence. It wore a coat of shadow that did not absorb light but twisted it into small, peculiar shapes. Its eyes glowed faintly amber, a mirror to the pool’s reflection, and the mouth barely quirked in a smile that did not reach those eyes. A demon of Hel? A wardens’ caution made Rory stiffen, but Nyx’s body did not so much as tense. The being spoke rather than roared, as if the word had no need for volume to have authority. “You have crossed the Veil’s breath,” it said, and its voice sounded like a door closing softly on a chapter that had just begun. “What you seek is not the end but the start of something else. The Grove does not yield power as easily as it yields truth.” Rory met the amber gaze, her own eyes suddenly bright with a resolve that surprised even her. “We seek what allows us to walk through without being broken, and what keeps our friends from becoming shadows themselves.” The creature—its form a composite of shadow and moonlight—considered them with the slow patience of someone who knew every rule and every loophole. Then it inclined its head in acceptance, or perhaps in concession. “Then walk. The path that begins here ends not with you, but with what you carry away.” The corridor brightened as if the entire grove approved. The three of them moved as a trio, their steps in sync as if they had learned to anticipate one another in the murmur of this otherworldly place. The air grew crisper, the light sharper, and the floor gave way to a polished stone that reflected not the world but the possibility of worlds. Behind them, the doorway into the vestibule began to close, the hearing of the grove becoming a soft, distant murmur that sounded almost like distant bells. They did not hurry, nor did they linger. They pressed forward with deliberate speed, knowing that to slow would invite the wrong kind of attention, and to speed might sever the thread that kept them tethered to their own reality. Then the first moment of true danger arrived not with roar or flame but with a whispering wind that gusted through a seam in the ceiling, carrying a shadow that looked like smoke and sounded like crystal chimes fallen from the sky. It moved toward them as if drawn by their breath, and in it Rory caught a glimpse of a world not their own—of Hel’s distant outskirts, of gluttons and gardens and rifts in the Veil that might swallow a person whole or spit them out again, broken and wiser. The three slowed, and Nyx slipped into the nearest shadow, a second skin against the coming storm. The archway in front of them blurred for a breath, then sharpened again, as if the grove itself was testing the metal of their will. Rory looked to Isolde, who gave nothing away with face or gesture, only the faintest tilt of the head that suggested the grove approved and the grove warned in the same breath. The Seer’s eyes flashed with a pale lavender light, and the rune-work along the walls grew more vibrant, true, and finally legible—an invitation and a warning carved into living wood. “Remember,” Isolde said softly, her voice now a thread of sound that pulled at Rory’s attention, “the Veil is a breath, not a barrier. It pushes back on those who try to take more than is offered. It accepts those who offer more of themselves in return.” The decision pressed down hard. Rory stepped forward, the Heartstone Pendant warm again, a circle of reassuring warmth that reminded her of quieter days when life was simpler and danger was a map she could read. The Fae-Forged Blade settled into a ready position at her side, glowing a little brighter with a faint frost-blue cast in the strange light. The corridor opened into a chamber that did not resemble the grove at all, yet every element of it belonged to the grove’s logic. Here, surfaces did not reflect reality so much as reveal possibilities. The walls shimmered with living, changing maps of their choices; the floor showed several possible futures, each one as tangible as the steps they took. The last moment before the danger was not a shock but a breath held too long. A figure formed in the far corner, not quite a person and not quite a shadow, its body woven from threads of night and a moon’s pale halo. It stepped forward with the quiet inevitability of a tide turning, and the ground trembled underfoot with a low, resonant sound that travelled through their bones rather than through the air. Rory tried to steady herself, but a crack split the chamber—tiny at first, then larger, a widening seam through which a colder, heavier air pressed. The Veil trembled, and the two moons in the pool’s depths glowed in furious sympathy, as if the cosmos itself watched with bated breath. Nyx did not hesitate. They surged from their hiding place, a living blackout of movement, and used their shadow to wedge between the interlaced seam and the world beyond. The seam buckled under the pressure, and the room filled with a low, creaking sound as if the grove were bending to hear what was said. The figure—whatever sutured its existence from nightmares and starlight—lunged not with malice but necessity, the way a door gets pushed open when the room behind it refuses to stay closed any longer. Rory reacted with swift certainty. She lifted the Fae-Forged Blade, let the blade’s cold kiss meet the air, and stepped forward as the creature’s shadow-laden hand swept toward them with a volley of dark energy. The blade met the energy with a blossoms-of-cold light—an eruption that sang like wind chimes in a storm. It carved a line through the oncoming force, a pale blue slash that burned not with heat but with a cold, precise purpose—ward-breaking and ward-creating all at once. Nyx’s shadow flared, and the space around them widened into a corridor of light as the Shade pressed into the shadow’s edge, turning the creature’s own form against itself. The shadowy figure recoiled, a hiss of breath that crossed their ears like a knife across skin, and for a moment the chamber filled with the scent of rain and iron. Isolde spoke—her voice calmer than the tremor in the walls, more precise than a star’s mathematics. “The Veil tests every joint of your resolve. Do not fear the fracture; it is how you learn to walk as one with the fracture rather than be broken by it.” The amber runes brightened, and the grove’s heart—whatever it might be in this moment—pulsed in the ceiling with a careful rhythm the group could follow. The room’s wind stilled, and the pale luminescence settled into a patient glow. The shadow-monster looked at them with a hunger that was almost curiosity, and then, as if deciding that they had proven something beyond fear, it paused and retreated, dissolving into motes of light that drifted away along a beam of moonlight that threaded through the chamber. The chamber settled into a serene, almost reverent quiet. The pool’s two moons reflected into a single, perfect circle, and the world outside the grove—whatever layer of reality existed beyond this pocket—seemed to tilt, as if listening to a new story being told inside this small, living cathedral. Rory lowered the blade and breathed out slowly, the room’s gravity easing in the presence of a clear, successful defence. Her heart steadied, the pendant’s warmth finally returning to a gentle, familiar throb. “We did not fail the test,” she said, more to herself than to her companions, and then looked to Nyx with a quick, small smile that felt almost hesitant. The Shade returned the look with something close to a nod, their face a quiet mask of acceptance. Isolde stepped closer to the pool’s edge, her eyes tracing the water’s surface as if she could read the ripples the way a scribe reads a manuscript. “The Veil does not forgive misreading its breath,” she warned softly. “But it grants passage to those who took the measure of themselves and stood firm.” Rory shifted, adjusting the weight of the Heartstone, still cradled in its chain against her skin, warm and steady, a known constant in a world made of shifting truths. The grove’s whispers swelled again, a chorus of a hundred small voices answering the questions asked and still lingering in the air, as if discussing them after they had left and re-entered reality. A sudden gust, not of weather but of motive, swept through the chamber. The wall of the corridor behind them started to fade, the living wood rearranging its pattern into something more like a doorway than a wall. Beyond the doorway, Rory glimpsed a corridor that resembled the outside world—yet not quite. It showed a world where time stretched, a place where a single hour could become days and where far-off futures pressed close enough to touch. The three shared a look, a trio of faces that knew the price of risk, the weight of decision, and the bittersweet taste of turning away from a life one thought would stay simple. Then, almost in unison, they stepped forward again, crossing another threshold, the door dissolving into a line of light that wrote itself across the air as they moved. The moment’s end came not with a scream but with a single, soft note—the note of a blade meeting air and then the quiet, careful settling of footsteps that told of resolve maintained and danger temporarily held at bay. The grove, still and patient, seemed to exhale once more, the two moons aligning as if in a whispered oath to those who had entered. And then—without warning—the floor beneath Rory shivered, not dangerously but with insistence, and the light above them pulsed in a rapid rhythm. A new sound rose—a chorus of high, almost crystalline voices that did not belong to any creature they had met so far, the sound of old doors breathing in rhythm with new decisions. “Do you hear it?” Isolde whispered, her voice a thread of silk and steel. “The Veil remembers.” Rory did not hesitate. She stepped forward and pressed her palm to the nearest of the living walls, feeling the bark’s old warmth answer her touch, the runes’ glow answering her breath. Nyx moved closer, their body a shade of midnight that carried a wind-chill bite even in the grove’s strange warmth. Isolde stood behind them, a quiet presence, guiding with the memory of prophecies and the weight of a history that stretched beyond three lives. The chamber’s new order settled like a breath after a long, held pause. The grove’s heart thrummed, and the atmosphere brightened with a confident, almost victorious aura, as if the place itself had decided to trust these travellers with its enigma. Rory turned to her companions, eyes bright with an almost childlike curiosity that belonged to someone who had learned the hard way that wonder could be a weapon as well as a sustenance. “We came here for passage,” she said, her tone precise, almost clinical, but softened by the wonder that still threaded through her words. “Let’s move with the knowledge we’ve earned and return with something more than we brought in.” Nyx flashed a quick smile of sorts, a rare human moment from a shade. “We move as one,” they said, their voice hedged with inevitability and a sly humor that didn’t quite fit their quiet, contemplative nature. Isolde gave them a final look, a look that had shaped many journeys before this one. “Then go watch the doors we leave behind and the doors we’ll find ahead. The grove remembers.” And so they did, three figures stepping forward through the living cathedral’s space, stepping back toward air and ordinary sound, stepping out with the certainty that they carried more than they had entered with: a map of a future that was still not theirs to claim, a memory of a path that would bend as they walked it, and a quiet, resolute promise to return when the time came to face the next door. The Veil’s breath pressed again at their backs as they moved, not to push them backward but to remind them that some doors, once opened, could not be closed in the same way again. The grove watched, patient and old, the amber runes dimming to a safe glow, until the trio disappeared into the corridor’s curve, leaving behind nothing but the soft, living echo of a place that would remember their footsteps long after they had left. The doorways whispered to one another in the stillness, and the air held the scent of rain and memory and becoming. The first step of the journey had ended, and the next step—to return or to continue—began right there, in the heart of a place that was as much dream as reality, as much invitation as demand.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags32
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"It sounded almost [almost]"
1"Isolde said softly [softly]"
2"she warned softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.492
leniency0.985
rawRatio0.094
effectiveRatio0.092
92.62% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount6100
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count2
4
adverb"softly"
count3
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"ever so slightly"
1"completely"
2"very"
3"suddenly"
4"softly"
5"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount6100
totalAiIsms80
found
0
word"throb"
count2
1
word"mosaic"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count4
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count5
5
word"footsteps"
count4
6
word"sense of"
count3
7
word"velvet"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count7
9
word"perfect"
count2
10
word"familiar"
count3
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"structure"
count3
13
word"etched"
count1
14
word"sentinel"
count10
15
word"echoes"
count1
16
word"measured"
count2
17
word"weight"
count5
18
word"resonance"
count1
19
word"depths"
count2
20
word"otherworldly"
count2
21
word"reminder"
count1
22
word"trembled"
count3
23
word"stomach"
count1
24
word"resolve"
count4
25
word"crystal"
count1
26
word"shimmered"
count1
27
word"tangible"
count1
28
word"tracing"
count1
29
word"crystalline"
count1
30
word"silk"
count1
31
word"chill"
count1
32
word"enigma"
count1
33
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"throb"
1"mosaic"
2"pulsed"
3"pulse"
4"whisper"
5"footsteps"
6"sense of"
7"velvet"
8"warmth"
9"perfect"
10"familiar"
11"flickered"
12"structure"
13"etched"
14"sentinel"
15"echoes"
16"measured"
17"weight"
18"resonance"
19"depths"
20"otherworldly"
21"reminder"
22"trembled"
23"stomach"
24"resolve"
25"crystal"
26"shimmered"
27"tangible"
28"tracing"
29"crystalline"
30"silk"
31"chill"
32"enigma"
33"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences239
matches
0"g with warmth"
1"felt a sting"
71.13% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount12
narrationSentences239
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
2"began to"
3"tried to"
4"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences274
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen74
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords6024
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions56
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"The sentinel regarded Nyx with something like respect, and then with dangerous calm, it spoke again."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions140
wordCount5096
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory46
Heartstone6
Pendant5
Isolde23
Fae9
Grove1
Earth1
Richmond1
Park1
Fae-Forged5
Blade5
Nyx21
Veil5
Cardiff2
Seer2
Hel4
London1
Shade2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Pendant"
2"Isolde"
3"Grove"
4"Blade"
5"Nyx"
6"Veil"
7"Seer"
8"Hel"
9"Shade"
places
0"Fae"
1"Earth"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Cardiff"
5"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences226
glossingSentenceCount22
matches
0"riddles that seemed to hover in the air rather than be spoken"
1"tasted like honeyed rain and something un"
2"not quite belong to Earth, nor to the concealed corners of the Fae realm Isolde had described when she settled into Richmond Park’s hidden clearing"
3"quite tell if you were awake or still inside the dream"
4"as if tasting the words"
5"something akin to old library dust—aphorisms in"
6"not quite human, not completely themselves—stung with a cold clarity"
7"leaves that seemed to breathe"
8"something like ancient amusement, a look tha"
9"as if acknowledging a truth it could neither confirm nor deny"
10"something like respect, and then with danger"
11"looked like a life not chosen, a life cho"
12"felt like a blade forged from winter ni"
13"sounded like a door closing softly on a ch"
14"looked like smoke and sounded like crysta"
15"sounded like crystal chimes fallen from th"
16"not quite a person and not quite a shadow, its body woven from threads of night and a moon’s pale halo"
17"not quite a shadow, its body woven from threads of night and a moon’s pale halo"
18"as if deciding that they had proven something beyond fear, it paused and retreated, dissolving into motes of light that drifted away along a beam of moonlight that threaded through the chamber"
19"as if listening to a new story being told inside this small, living cathedral"
20"something close to a nod, their face a quiet mas"
21"as if discussing them after they had left and re-entered reality"
22"not quite"
23"quite fit their quiet, contemplative nature"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches29
per1kWords4.814
wordCount6024
matches
0"not carved with chiselled tools but pressed, as if the trees themselves remembered the act of me"
1"not with stars but with the glow of creature-dreams"
2"not water’s ripple but a whisper of wind in a forest far away"
3"not banish shadows but invited them to stay"
4"not like a reflection rippling but like a window trembling in its frame"
5"not a voice but a sense of someone speaking directly into their minds, soft"
6"not one voice but many, braided together from a hundred small currents of thou"
7"not as a thought but as a sensation: a memory you didn’t know you cherished, a fe"
8"not looking at her but at the pool"
9"not of fear but of necessity"
10"not in the sense of tilting, but in the sense of perception"
11"not a person, exactly, but a presence formed from shadow"
12"not as a demand but as a promise"
13"neither confirm nor"
14"not from any sun but from something else entirely, something watching"
15"not just the three of them but a field of possibility"
16"not with a direct yes or no but with an image, a mental thread she wove with the silver of h"
17"not physical but moral"
18"not the end but the start of something else"
19"not with you, but with what you carry away"
20"not the world but the possibility of worlds"
21"not with roar or flame but with a whispering wind"
22"not a shock but a breath held too long"
23"not with malice but necessity, the way a door gets pushed open"
24"not with heat but with a cold, precise purpose"
25"not of weather but of motive, swept through the chamber"
26"not with a scream but with a single, soft note"
27"not dangerously but with insistence"
28"not to push them backward but to remind them"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences274
matches
0"trust that rhythm"
1"saw that the"
2"deciding that they"
75.68% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs114
mean52.84
std21.92
cv0.415
sampleLengths
017
117
249
310
436
589
672
771
827
925
1064
1196
1260
1312
1469
1551
1621
1741
1823
1977
2017
2127
2232
2323
2436
2519
2644
2722
2858
2980
3074
3121
3237
3355
3440
3570
3625
3724
3879
3967
4058
4165
4264
4373
4464
4589
4647
4749
4831
4970
96.45% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences239
matches
0"being found"
1"been asked"
2"being spoke"
3"was said"
4"gets pushed"
5"being told"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs766
matches
0"was disorienting"
1"were releasing"
2"was testing"
3"were bending"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount49
semicolonCount9
flaggedSentences43
totalSentences274
ratio0.157
matches
0"The wildflowers did not wilt when she blinked; they seemed to glow brighter with every breath she took."
1"A pool lay at the heart of a small clearing, a sheet of liquid glass that did not reflect the sky so much as reveal another sky—a sky with two moons, a night that glittered not with stars but with the glow of creature-dreams that scuttled just beyond sight."
2"Rory stepped closer, the pendant’s glow intensifying—a warm crimson glow that did not banish shadows but invited them to stay and tell their secrets."
3"The blade at her hip—the Fae-Forged Blade, moonsilver, slender and leaf-shaped—hung cold to the touch, an unsentimental blade that remembered every ward and every demon it had cut through in the old courts of the Fae."
4"And then it happened—the pool’s surface shivered, not like a reflection rippling but like a window trembling in its frame."
5"The choir of voices—voices separated by time and space—sounded again, closer, more intimate."
6"The violet brightness of Nyx’s eyes—an unusual colour in a shade of living shadow—brightened as they moved deeper."
7"The garden’s glow thickened, filling the air with a scent of honey and rain and something akin to old library dust—aphorisms in the dust, ideas in aroma, futures floating in the air like moths."
8"The thought of becoming something other—something not quite human, not completely themselves—stung with a cold clarity."
9"The air inside—deeper within the grove—felt colder and more intimate, as if the space itself leaned in to listen."
10"“The Veil holds more than a seam; it holds a memory of a choice you made long ago, and it demands a continuation of that choice to move forward.”"
11"The grove sighed, a sound not heard so much as felt—a tremor of ancient breath that moved through the air and made the hair on Rory’s arms stand on end."
12"The runes along the door—their meaning a hazy memory of something ancient—brightened, replying with warmth rather than menace."
13"The door did not creak open in the traditional sense; it yielded with a slow, patient grace, as though it had waited for them for a long, long time."
14"A figure stood at the far end of the vestibule—not a person, exactly, but a presence formed from shadow and light, the edges of their body flickering with a pale, lunar glow."
15"It wore the air of a sentinel—indifferent, patient, and somehow hungry for truth."
16"“The path you seek lies through memory and consequence. You will be tested by what you treasure most and what you fear to lose. The Veil is not a place for the clever alone; it is a mirror that requires a choice, not a clever answer.”"
17"The Hel reference—the possibility of Hel energy, of demonic or hellish influence—made her heart beat faster."
18"The ground underfoot swam with patterns of luminescent moss, and when Rory lifted her gaze, she saw the ceiling—a network of twigs and branches—woven into a lattice that let in a pale, silver light not from any sun but from something else entirely, something watching and patient."
19"The pool lay once again at the room’s heart, but now it reflected not just the three of them but a field of possibility—the various paths their futures might take if they pressed forward."
20"“The grove stores memories like seed banks store seeds. Some sprout when tended; some rot if you hurry. Look, but do not take without a return.” Her eyes glittered with a sly light."
21"Rory felt a sting in her chest, a small, sharp ache that was not physical but moral—the ache of choices made in the past that had led her to this moment in the grove."
22"The small crescent scar on her left wrist—carved long ago in a childhood accident—felt suddenly both distant and uncomfortably close, a reminder of the vulnerability that had driven her to leave Cardiff, to flee to London, to become someone who could deliver meals or carry her life into unknown realms when summoned by a friend or a danger she hadn’t anticipated."
23"For a moment the room held its breath, the air dense with the scent of old pine and something sharper, more metallic—the scent of a decision that would tilt the world."
24"“Then walk, travellers. The door you seek is not a door you step through; it is a door you walk into together.”"
25"The corridor was not straight; it curved in ways that made the stomach drop a little and the heart lift a little more with each turn."
26"The creature—its form a composite of shadow and moonlight—considered them with the slow patience of someone who knew every rule and every loophole."
27"It moved toward them as if drawn by their breath, and in it Rory caught a glimpse of a world not their own—of Hel’s distant outskirts, of gluttons and gardens and rifts in the Veil that might swallow a person whole or spit them out again, broken and wiser."
28"The Seer’s eyes flashed with a pale lavender light, and the rune-work along the walls grew more vibrant, true, and finally legible—an invitation and a warning carved into living wood."
29"The walls shimmered with living, changing maps of their choices; the floor showed several possible futures, each one as tangible as the steps they took."
30"Rory tried to steady herself, but a crack split the chamber—tiny at first, then larger, a widening seam through which a colder, heavier air pressed."
31"The figure—whatever sutured its existence from nightmares and starlight—lunged not with malice but necessity, the way a door gets pushed open when the room behind it refuses to stay closed any longer."
32"The blade met the energy with a blossoms-of-cold light—an eruption that sang like wind chimes in a storm."
33"It carved a line through the oncoming force, a pale blue slash that burned not with heat but with a cold, precise purpose—ward-breaking and ward-creating all at once."
34"Isolde spoke—her voice calmer than the tremor in the walls, more precise than a star’s mathematics."
35"“The Veil tests every joint of your resolve. Do not fear the fracture; it is how you learn to walk as one with the fracture rather than be broken by it.”"
36"The amber runes brightened, and the grove’s heart—whatever it might be in this moment—pulsed in the ceiling with a careful rhythm the group could follow."
37"The pool’s two moons reflected into a single, perfect circle, and the world outside the grove—whatever layer of reality existed beyond this pocket—seemed to tilt, as if listening to a new story being told inside this small, living cathedral."
38"Beyond the doorway, Rory glimpsed a corridor that resembled the outside world—yet not quite."
39"The moment’s end came not with a scream but with a single, soft note—the note of a blade meeting air and then the quiet, careful settling of footsteps that told of resolve maintained and danger temporarily held at bay."
40"And then—without warning—the floor beneath Rory shivered, not dangerously but with insistence, and the light above them pulsed in a rapid rhythm."
41"A new sound rose—a chorus of high, almost crystalline voices that did not belong to any creature they had met so far, the sound of old doors breathing in rhythm with new decisions."
42"The first step of the journey had ended, and the next step—to return or to continue—began right there, in the heart of a place that was as much dream as reality, as much invitation as demand."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1436
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.02924791086350975
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.002785515320334262
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences274
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences274
mean21.99
std10.4
cv0.473
sampleLengths
017
113
24
325
424
510
619
717
824
918
1030
1117
1231
1315
1426
1518
1621
1732
1816
1911
2012
2113
2222
2324
2418
2549
2622
2725
2824
2936
3012
3121
3221
3327
3413
3538
3614
377
3815
3926
4013
4110
4220
4329
4428
4517
462
476
483
4916
28.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats59
diversityRatio0.17883211678832117
totalSentences274
uniqueOpeners49
42.19% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences237
matches
0"Then it inclined its head"
1"Then the first moment of"
2"Then, almost in unison, they"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences237
matches
0"She pressed a finger to"
1"she muttered, eyes sweeping the"
2"It lay in a pocket"
3"Their trunks bore runes, not"
4"They paused a step back"
5"You step where not all"
6"She spoke aloud rather than"
7"they said, almost to themselves"
8"It listened to the cadence"
9"She spoke in the familiar"
10"Her eyes, pale lavender, searched"
11"She exhaled slow and steady,"
12"It wore the air of"
13"She sensed Nyx’s presence shift,"
14"She kept the blade ready,"
15"she repeated, not as a"
16"it answered, voice now more"
17"She lowered her gaze to"
18"they murmured, their voice a"
19"She looked at Isolde, who"
ratio0.194
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount222
totalSentences237
matches
0"The arch shivered and opened,"
1"Nyx slid from the arch’s"
2"Rory nodded, the Heartstone Pendant"
3"She pressed a finger to"
4"she muttered, eyes sweeping the"
5"Isolde’s silver voice came after,"
6"The three of them stepped"
7"The air tasted like honeyed"
8"Roots and moss glittered with"
9"The ground was a living"
10"The Fae Grove, they discovered,"
11"It lay in a pocket"
12"The path itself unfurled like"
13"A ring of ancient oaks"
14"Their trunks bore runes, not"
15"The runes pulsed faintly with"
16"Nyx commented, a tone that"
17"Isolde spoke, her words a"
18"Rory lowered her gaze to"
19"The ground tingled under her"
ratio0.937
21.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences237
matches
0"If Rory stretched her hand"
ratio0.004
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences189
technicalSentenceCount61
matches
0"The arch shivered and opened, and Rory stepped into a glass-lit world that hummed beneath her heels."
1"The ground was a living mosaic underfoot, a lattice of mossy tiles that shivered with each step."
2"The ground tingled under her boots, a playful tremor that suggested the grove was aware of them in the most intimate, almost intimate way."
3"A pool lay at the heart of a small clearing, a sheet of liquid glass that did not reflect the sky so much as reveal another sky—a sky with two moons, a night th…"
4"Rory stepped closer, the pendant’s glow intensifying—a warm crimson glow that did not banish shadows but invited them to stay and tell their secrets."
5"The blade at her hip—the Fae-Forged Blade, moonsilver, slender and leaf-shaped—hung cold to the touch, an unsentimental blade that remembered every ward and eve…"
6"The amber runes blurred, and the air grew denser, as though the grove exhaled in a long, patient sigh that pressed against their backs and pressed into their lu…"
7"The pool’s surface calmed, though the ripples remained under its skin, as if the water’s own memory was too full for perfect stillness."
8"Nyx leaned into a patch of light, their form bending and reconstituting as they touched the air with a gloved finger."
9"The ground themselves seemed to tilt ever so slightly, the moss beneath their boots rearranging its pattern as if to guide their path."
10"The corridor of vision opened before them, a tunnel of light carved by roots that reached like patient fingers toward the pool."
11"The group pressed on, following a corridor made of living vines that glowed with a soft, amber light."
12"The Fae-Forged Blade hummed faintly against Rory’s hip, a whispering point of cold that offered courage in the face of a sensation that was almost fear."
13"The walls were stems and branches, woven together into a cathedral of bark and bone, their architecture a stubborn memory that refused decay."
14"The air inside—deeper within the grove—felt colder and more intimate, as if the space itself leaned in to listen."
15"The pool’s glow intensified and cast long, yellow-green shadows across the walls, which moved with a life of their own."
16"The central chamber felt more intimate, as though the walls had stepped closer to listen, and the space beyond the doorway carried a note of conclusive intent, …"
17"Rory pressed a palm against the bark of the structure, and the wood beneath her fingertips warmed as if the tree itself recognised a familiar touch."
18"The door did not creak open in the traditional sense; it yielded with a slow, patient grace, as though it had waited for them for a long, long time."
19"Beyond the doorway lay a vestibule that felt simultaneously outside and inside the grove, a paradox that the space wore with gleeful defiance."
20"The sentinel regarded them with something like ancient amusement, a look that suggested the being found the trio’s stubborn bravery endearing rather than naive."
21"Isolde stepped forward, her silver hair catching the ambient light in a way that made her seem taller, more ascendant."
22"She lowered her gaze to the Heartstone Pendant and saw that the crimson glow had deepened, as if the gem itself felt the weight of the sentinel’s words."
23"She looked at Isolde, who simply nodded with that half-smile that meant she accepted the risk and knew the risk might swallow them whole."
24"The boundary behind them closed with a soft sigh, and the grove exhaled as though it were releasing breath after a held prayer."
25"Columns spiralled with bark-like texture, each one ringing with a resonance that felt almost musical, deeper than sound, older than memory."
26"The ground underfoot swam with patterns of luminescent moss, and when Rory lifted her gaze, she saw the ceiling—a network of twigs and branches—woven into a lat…"
27"The two moons from the previous pool still glowed within its depths, but the reflection now shifted, turning into scenes that looked like a life not chosen, a l…"
28"The Heartstone Pendant warmed more insistently, pulsing with a rhythm that felt almost like a heartbeat from a larger creature: a thing that watched and waited …"
29"Rory felt a sting in her chest, a small, sharp ache that was not physical but moral—the ache of choices made in the past that had led her to this moment in the …"
30"The small crescent scar on her left wrist—carved long ago in a childhood accident—felt suddenly both distant and uncomfortably close, a reminder of the vulnerab…"
31"For a moment the room held its breath, the air dense with the scent of old pine and something sharper, more metallic—the scent of a decision that would tilt the…"
32"Isolde nodded, and her riddled mouth gave a final line that sounded almost like a blessing or a curse depending on who listened."
33"The gate behind them did not reopen in the old-fashioned way, but the chamber shifted as if the space itself acknowledged their decision."
34"The three of them stepped into that moment’s next passage, into a corridor of doors that appeared to be hung from the ceiling by threads of light."
35"The ground beneath their boots was a living thing, fingers of moss pressing up along their ankles as if to test their resolve."
36"A figure stepped from the fracture, stepping into the light with a measured calm that spoke of patient endurance and inevitable consequence."
37"The creature—its form a composite of shadow and moonlight—considered them with the slow patience of someone who knew every rule and every loophole."
38"The air grew crisper, the light sharper, and the floor gave way to a polished stone that reflected not the world but the possibility of worlds."
39"Behind them, the doorway into the vestibule began to close, the hearing of the grove becoming a soft, distant murmur that sounded almost like distant bells."
40"They pressed forward with deliberate speed, knowing that to slow would invite the wrong kind of attention, and to speed might sever the thread that kept them te…"
41"It moved toward them as if drawn by their breath, and in it Rory caught a glimpse of a world not their own—of Hel’s distant outskirts, of gluttons and gardens a…"
42"The archway in front of them blurred for a breath, then sharpened again, as if the grove itself was testing the metal of their will."
43"Rory stepped forward, the Heartstone Pendant warm again, a circle of reassuring warmth that reminded her of quieter days when life was simpler and danger was a …"
44"It stepped forward with the quiet inevitability of a tide turning, and the ground trembled underfoot with a low, resonant sound that travelled through their bon…"
45"The blade met the energy with a blossoms-of-cold light—an eruption that sang like wind chimes in a storm."
46"The shadowy figure recoiled, a hiss of breath that crossed their ears like a knife across skin, and for a moment the chamber filled with the scent of rain and i…"
47"The shadow-monster looked at them with a hunger that was almost curiosity, and then, as if deciding that they had proven something beyond fear, it paused and re…"
48"The pool’s two moons reflected into a single, perfect circle, and the world outside the grove—whatever layer of reality existed beyond this pocket—seemed to til…"
49"Isolde stepped closer to the pool’s edge, her eyes tracing the water’s surface as if she could read the ripples the way a scribe reads a manuscript."
50"The grove’s whispers swelled again, a chorus of a hundred small voices answering the questions asked and still lingering in the air, as if discussing them after…"
51"The three shared a look, a trio of faces that knew the price of risk, the weight of decision, and the bittersweet taste of turning away from a life one thought …"
52"Then, almost in unison, they stepped forward again, crossing another threshold, the door dissolving into a line of light that wrote itself across the air as the…"
53"The moment’s end came not with a scream but with a single, soft note—the note of a blade meeting air and then the quiet, careful settling of footsteps that told…"
54"A new sound rose—a chorus of high, almost crystalline voices that did not belong to any creature they had met so far, the sound of old doors breathing in rhythm…"
55"Nyx moved closer, their body a shade of midnight that carried a wind-chill bite even in the grove’s strange warmth."
56"Isolde stood behind them, a quiet presence, guiding with the memory of prophecies and the weight of a history that stretched beyond three lives."
57"The grove’s heart thrummed, and the atmosphere brightened with a confident, almost victorious aura, as if the place itself had decided to trust these travellers…"
58"Rory turned to her companions, eyes bright with an almost childlike curiosity that belonged to someone who had learned the hard way that wonder could be a weapo…"
59"And so they did, three figures stepping forward through the living cathedral’s space, stepping back toward air and ordinary sound, stepping out with the certain…"
60"The grove watched, patient and old, the amber runes dimming to a safe glow, until the trio disappeared into the corridor’s curve, leaving behind nothing but the…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags32
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"she muttered, eyes sweeping the unknown ahead"
1"Isolde whispered, almost to herself, and Rory followed her gaze"
2"Rory warned, though the word sounded pale against the thick sweet air"
3"they said, almost to themselves"
4"they murmured, their voice a blur of consonants and quiet consonant-like hiss"
5"Nyx said, their whisper sighing through the air"
6"she murmured, deciding to honour her own heart rather than chase power"
7"Isolde whispered, her voice a thread of silk and steel"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags27
fancyCount13
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx commented (comment)"
2"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
3"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
4"Rory warned (warn)"
5"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
6"she repeated (repeat)"
7"they murmured (murmur)"
8"she whispered (whisper)"
9"she murmured (murmur)"
10"she warned softly (warn)"
11"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
12"She stepped (step)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.415
leniency0.831
rawRatio0.481
effectiveRatio0.4
64.8470%