Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0GT18839ZC86JQVQ0BK4G

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Watch the step. The third rail's live, or at least it was yesterday." Harlow Quinn didn't break stride, her heavy boots crunching on the scattered glass and detritus of the abandoned tunnel. She stepped over the rusted track, her eyes fixed on the blue-white strobe of emergency lights pulsating fifty yards ahead. The air tasted of wet copper and something sweeter, like burning lavender. "Third rail hasn't carried current since the seventies, Miller." She adjusted her cuffs, the leather strap of her worn watch catching the light. "Try to keep up." DCS Miller huffed behind her, the sound of polished dress shoes scuffing against dirty concrete utterly wrong in this place. "The local grid is a mess, Quinn. Down here, who knows what's juicing the walls? It's a health and safety nightmare, and that's before we get to the stiff." They rounded the bend. The Veil Market lived in the dark spaces of the city, places the tube maps forgot. Tonight, it had claimed the old station beneath Camden. The crime scene team had already erected a plastic tent around the body, but the sheer volume of the tunnel made their efforts look like a child's umbrella in a hurricane. "Victim's male, mid-thirties," Miller said, consulting his notebook. "No ID. Wallet's gone. Looks like a robbery turned fatal, except for the lack of defensive wounds." Harlow ducked under the police tape. "Or he knew the killer." "Unlikely to be a pleasant introduction, given the company." Miller gestured vaguely at the shadows. "Look at the state of him. Gaunt. Tracks on his arms. Probably an addict looking for a score in the wrong place." Harlow crouched beside the body. The man lay on his back, eyes wide, staring at the ceiling stains with an expression of utter rapture. His skin was pale, greyish, but not the grey of death. It was the grey of a statue. "Turnover, Miller." "Excuse me?" "The wallet. Look at his pockets." Miller frowned but knelt, his knees cracking audibly. He reached into the victim's tweed jacket. He pulled out a small, carved object made of bone. A token. Smooth, polished, etched with a single symbol. "Rubbish." Miller dropped it into an evidence bag. "Probably a trinket he stole." "That rubbish is a bone token. Entry fee for the Market." Harlow leaned in close, inhaling the scent of burning lavender again. It wafted from the victim's open mouth. "This wasn't a robbery. He was a customer." "A customer of what? Drugs?" "Information. Power. Things the Met doesn't classify in the DSM." A soft cough echoed from the tunnel entrance. Harlow didn't turn. She knew the rhythm of those footsteps. Light, hesitant, weighed down by books. "Detective Quinn." Eva Kowalski stepped into the circle of light. She looked like a primary school teacher who had taken a wrong turn into a war zone—round glasses perched on a freckled nose, curly red hair escaping a messy bun, and a worn leather satchel clutched to her chest like a shield. "You're late, Evie." "The British Archives... they frown on looting. Even for you." Eva tucked a lock of hair behind her left ear, her eyes darting to the body. "Oh. That's not good." Miller stood up, brushing dust off his trousers. "And who is this? Another consultant?" "Eva Kowalski. Historian." Harlow didn't elaborate. "What do you see, Evie?" Eva approached cautiously, avoiding the puddles of unknown liquid on the floor. She opened her satchel and withdrew a small, brass compass. The casing was green with verdigris, the face etched with protective sigils. The needle inside spun lazily, refusing to settle. "It's the aura," Eva whispered, her voice trembling slightly. "It's... quiet. Too quiet." "It's a corpse, love. They're usually quiet," Miller said. "Not like this." Eva knelt opposite Harlow. She held the compass over the victim's chest. The needle stopped spinning abruptly and pointed straight down, vibrating with a low hum. "He's empty." "He's dead, Eva. That's what happens." "No." Eva looked up, her green eyes wide. "I mean the energy is gone. Drained. Look at the hands." Harlow looked. The victim's hands were relaxed, palms up. The fingertips were blackened, as if touched by frost. "Frostbite?" Miller suggested. "Down here, it gets cold." "In July?" Harlow reached into her pocket and produced a latex glove. She snapped it on. "Miller, shine your torch on his left forearm." Miller complied. The beam hit the skin. There were no needle marks. Instead, a series of thin, dark lines branched across the skin, looking for all the world like a map of the London Underground. "I didn't see that earlier," Miller muttered. "Is it bruising?" "It's a map." Harlow traced the lines with a gloved finger. "See the intersection? That's King's Cross. That loop is the Circle line." "Symbolic," Miller dismissed. "He loved the tube." "Harlow," Eva said, her voice dropping an octave. "The Compass." The brass device in Eva's hand was shaking violently now. The needle was pressing hard against the glass, trying to break through to the victim. "Put it away, Eva." "It's not him it's reading. It's what's left behind." Eva looked around the tunnel, her gaze darting into the darkness beyond the police lights. "He opened something. A rift." "Rift. Right." Miller checked his watch. "Look, Quinn, we've got a dead body in a disused tunnel. Probable overdose, exposure, maybe a mugging. I don't have time for ghost stories." "Check his pulse, Miller." "What?" "Check his pulse. Properly." Miller sighed, the sound of a man reaching the limits of his patience. He grabbed the victim's wrist. He held it for a second. Then two. His brow furrowed. He moved his fingers to the neck. "The skin... it's warm." "Room temperature," Harlow corrected. "No, it's... warm. Like he's got a fever." Miller pressed his ear to the victim's chest. He froze. The silence in the tunnel stretched, broken only by the distant drip of water and the hum of the generators. "Miller?" Miller pulled back, his face pale. "There's a heartbeat. Slow. Maybe ten beats a minute. But it's there." "That's not a heartbeat," Eva said, backing away towards the tunnel wall. "That's an echo." Harlow stood up slowly. She stared at the map on the man's arm. The dark lines were moving. Slowly, imperceptibly, the ink was shifting, reorganising itself. "Miller, step back from the body." "We need to get him to an ambulance. If he's alive-" "I said step back!" Harlow grabbed Miller by the lapels of his jacket and hauled him backward. A second later, the victim's chest heaved. A cloud of silver dust erupted from his mouth, billowing upward to the ceiling. It didn't disperse. It swirled, forming a vortex directly above the corpse. "What in God's name..." Miller stumbled, falling against the tunnel wall. The Veil Compass in Eva's hand let out a high-pitched screech. The glass face cracked. "The rift isn't closed," Eva yelled over the rising wind. "He wasn't the buyer. He was the battery!" The silver dust descended rapidly, clinging to the victim's skin. The grey pallor vanished, replaced by a flush of vibrant, unnatural health. The map on his arm burned with a sudden, fierce black light. The victim's eyes snapped open. They were entirely black—no iris, no sclera. Just endless void. "Detective Quinn," Miller stammered, drawing his baton, though his hand shook. "I'm calling armed response." Harlow ignored him. She drew her service weapon, aiming for the centre of the man's chest. "Don't move." The thing on the floor smiled. It was a wide, terrible expression that stretched the facial muscles too far. It sat up, the movement fluid, boneless. "Quinn," Eva shrieked. "The Compass! It's pointing at you!" Harlow glanced at the brass device in Eva's hand. The cracked needle was no longer pointing at the body. It was locked on Harlow. The man on the floor opened his mouth, but the voice that came out was a chorus of a dozen different people speaking at once. "The debt is paid. The currency is accepted." He lunged. Not at Miller. Not at Eva. He moved faster than any human should, scrambling across the floor like a spider, his limbs bending at wrong angles, coming straight for Harlow.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Miller gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"Eva looked around [around]"
dialogueSentences72
tagDensity0.361
leniency0.722
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.056
78.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1374
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"cautiously"
count1
2
adverb"lazily"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"utterly"
1"cautiously"
2"lazily"
3"slightly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1374
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"etched"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"furrowed"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"echoed"
2"footsteps"
3"traced"
4"pulse"
5"furrowed"
6"silence"
7"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences107
filterMatches
0"look"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences153
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1369
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount944
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.01
worstName"Miller"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Miller"
discoveredNames
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Miller19
Veil2
Market1
Camden1
Harlow17
Kowalski1
Eva15
London1
Underground1
Compass1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Miller"
2"Market"
3"Harlow"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.494
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a primary school teacher who"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1369
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences153
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean19.28
std14.1
cv0.731
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013
151
227
349
460
525
611
737
842
92
102
116
1234
1313
1437
155
1610
1724
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2214
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431
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464
474
4818
4920
95.43% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences107
matches
0"were relaxed"
1"were blackened"
2"was locked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs168
matches
0"was shaking"
1"was shifting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences153
ratio0.013
matches
0"She looked like a primary school teacher who had taken a wrong turn into a war zone—round glasses perched on a freckled nose, curly red hair escaping a messy bun, and a worn leather satchel clutched to her chest like a shield."
1"They were entirely black—no iris, no sclera."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount948
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sudden, fierce black light."
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.03375527426160337
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.016877637130801686
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences153
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences153
mean8.95
std6.72
cv0.751
sampleLengths
013
119
220
312
423
54
620
729
84
916
109
1131
128
1317
146
155
1615
1722
185
1919
2011
217
222
232
246
258
267
2710
282
297
308
315
3222
337
348
355
3610
378
383
397
406
412
428
4342
443
4526
464
478
486
496
44.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.35294117647058826
totalSentences153
uniqueOpeners54
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences95
matches
0"Light, hesitant, weighed down by"
1"Instead, a series of thin,"
2"Slowly, imperceptibly, the ink was"
3"Just endless void."
ratio0.042
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences95
matches
0"She stepped over the rusted"
1"She adjusted her cuffs, the"
2"They rounded the bend."
3"His skin was pale, greyish,"
4"It was the grey of"
5"He reached into the victim's"
6"He pulled out a small,"
7"It wafted from the victim's"
8"She knew the rhythm of"
9"She looked like a primary"
10"She opened her satchel and"
11"She held the compass over"
12"She snapped it on."
13"He grabbed the victim's wrist."
14"He held it for a"
15"His brow furrowed."
16"He moved his fingers to"
17"She stared at the map"
18"It didn't disperse."
19"It swirled, forming a vortex"
ratio0.274
2.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences95
matches
0"Harlow Quinn didn't break stride,"
1"She stepped over the rusted"
2"The air tasted of wet"
3"She adjusted her cuffs, the"
4"DCS Miller huffed behind her,"
5"They rounded the bend."
6"The Veil Market lived in"
7"Tonight, it had claimed the"
8"The crime scene team had"
9"Miller said, consulting his notebook"
10"Harlow ducked under the police"
11"Miller gestured vaguely at the"
12"Harlow crouched beside the body."
13"The man lay on his"
14"His skin was pale, greyish,"
15"It was the grey of"
16"Miller frowned but knelt, his"
17"He reached into the victim's"
18"He pulled out a small,"
19"Miller dropped it into an"
ratio0.916
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She looked like a primary school teacher who had taken a wrong turn into a war zone—round glasses perched on a freckled nose, curly red hair escaping a messy bu…"
1"It was a wide, terrible expression that stretched the facial muscles too far."
2"He moved faster than any human should, scrambling across the floor like a spider, his limbs bending at wrong angles, coming straight for Harlow."
28.85% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Eva tucked, her eyes darting to the body"
1"Eva whispered, her voice trembling slightly"
2"Eva looked up, her green eyes wide"
3"Eva said, her voice dropping an octave"
4"Eva looked around, her gaze darting into the darkness beyond the police lights"
38.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Miller suggested (suggest)"
2"Miller muttered (mutter)"
3"Harlow corrected (correct)"
4"Miller pressed (press)"
5"Eva yelled (yell)"
6"Miller stammered (stammer)"
7"Eva shrieked (shriek)"
dialogueSentences72
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.222
81.6749%