Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0GT2S6CF1N3863WZ7T7TM

Run Details

Duration:
11.5s
Cost:
$0.042180
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"A body. In a place like this." The echo of Harlow Quinn's voice bounced off the grimy, tiled walls of the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. She stepped over debris, the light from her torch cutting through the darkness. The metallic tang of mildew and mould gnawed at her senses. "Tell me, Davies," she said, her eyes scanning the scene with military precision. "What makes this case special enough to wake me at four in the morning?" Davies stood beside the victim, his usually composed self appeared vaguely unsettled. The flickering lights from a dying generator cast eerie shadows across his face. "It's not the body, Harlow. It's where it is." She knelt beside the corpse, a young man clutching a small, brass compass — the kind you don’t find in your typical high street shop. The casing bore a patina of verdigris, and the face was etched with protective sigils. Not the kind of thing someone just stumbled upon. "Veil Compass," she muttered, recognising the craftsmanship. "Points to supernatural rifts and portals. Means he was probably sniffing around things he shouldn't." "That’s the problem," Davies said, scratching the back of his neck. "This place — The Veil Market — it’s supposed to shift locations every full moon. Yet, there's no sign suggesting the Market was ever here." Quinn narrowed her eyes, a sharp jawline set in focused determination. She probed the young man's pockets, retrieving a bone token. "Entry requirement," she noted, holding it up between her fingers. As she stood, the portable lights revealed more of the station's dilapidated state. Broken benches, advertisement boards from decades past, and a whisper, barely audible, of something ancient lingering within the walls. "You see what I mean?" Davies continued, his round glasses slipping to the bridge of his nose as he checked his notes. "The compass suggests he was tracking something. The token proves he wanted in. But there's no sign of any other Market paraphernalia — no stalls, no goods, no nothing." Quinn tapped her worn leather watch, a subconscious habit since Morris’s death three years ago. The whole place felt wrong, as if time had stopped but the world moved on without it. "I see a few possibilities here," she began, her brown eyes scanning the area. "One: he arrived too early or too late. Two: the Market isn’t what it used to be. Or three: something or someone made damn sure there’s no trace left." Davies frowned, tucking a few errant strands of curly red hair behind his ears. "Or he wasn't supposed to be here at all and the Market moved on before he arrived." Intrigued, Quinn crouched again, examining the young man's curly red hair and green eyes, both reminiscent of her own best friend, Eva Kowalski. Eva would likely be head-deep in some ancient book right now, probably at the British Museum. A voice crackled through her radio, snapping Quinn back to the moment. "Quinn, report." "One dead in the old Camden station. Male, mid-twenties. Found with a Veil Compass and entry token. No signs of The Veil Market currently present. Davies and I are on the scene." "Roger that. Watch your back, Quinn. This reeks of something we haven't dealt with before." Returning to her feet, she spoke aloud while observing the surroundings. "No blood. No sign of struggle. Either he died instantly or was placed here." "A heart attack, then?" Davies suggested, jotting down notes. "No." Quinn’s eyes flicked to a dusty corner. "That’d be too mundane. I'm thinking something more… sinister." She moved towards the corner, her sharp senses picking up a faint glow. Kneeling, she brushed away the dust to reveal a faintly pulsating rune. Flashing her torch on it revealed an ancient symbol, slightly smudged but still active. Sweat beaded on Davies’ brow. "Is that...?" "A containment rune." Quinn stood, eyes widening in realisation. "Someone wanted to keep something in—or out." "But what could—" “An entity?” Quinn interrupted, following a hunch. "A supernatural force makes more sense. Someone or something used this rune to either trap or release something." Quinn's eyes darted back to the body, replaying the scene in her mind like a director editing a film. She pictured the young man with the compass, following it religiously, desperate to find an entry point to the Market. Something — or someone — intercepted him. The containment rune made for a convenient trap. Her thoughts circled back to Eva. Ancient histories and the restricted archives of the British Museum held secrets most couldn't fathom. Eva would know where to start. "Davies, any other signs of disturbances?" she asked, hoping to spot one last clue. A phone buzzed in her pocket. Eva’s voice came through, tense and hushed. "Harlow, I've been researching something for you. Spotted an anomaly at the museum. A gathering of energy I've not seen before. Be careful." Quinn pocketed the phone. Her fingers brushed against the leather where her partner’s photograph nestled. His unexplained death during an eerily similar case still haunted her nights. "Any theories on why this rune is here?" Davies asked, nervously adjusting his glasses again. "Only one," she replied. “The Market knew he was coming and decided he wasn’t worth the risk. They used the rune — a trap fashioned by someone with a strong understanding of both supernatural entities and ancient scripts.” "Could he have been looking for something specific?" Davies speculated. "Information, maybe. Banned substances, artefacts. Hard to tell without more to go on." Her torchlight landed on a discarded piece of cloth near the tracks. A silk handkerchief, embroidered with a single letter: 'M'. A sign, perhaps, of the one who lured their victim to this miserable fate. "What do you think, Harlow?" Davies’ voice broke her concentration. "Do we chase the Market, or dig deeper into this rune?" Quinn sighed. The weight of her watch seemed heavier on her wrist, a reminder of a partner lost to the unknown. Today, another soul joined that mystery. "We'll chase both. But first, let’s see what Eva can uncover.” Lifting her brows in emphasis, she added. "We still need to figure out why the Market deserted this place. If there's one thing about entities, Davies, it's that they always leave a trace. No matter the magic, no matter the lore." And with that, Quinn switched off her torch and turned towards the exit, her mind alight with the possibilities that lay hidden beneath London’s streets. One thing was certain: whatever game the Veil Market played, she was always ready to challenge its rules.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.421
leniency0.842
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1087
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"nervously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1087
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"echo"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count2
2
word"unsettled"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"sinister"
count1
7
word"silk"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
9
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"scanning"
2"unsettled"
3"etched"
4"whisper"
5"flicked"
6"sinister"
7"silk"
8"weight"
9"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences58
matches(empty)
93.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1091
ratio0
matches(empty)
98.68% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"Returning to her feet, she spoke aloud while observing the surroundings."
1"Lifting her brows in emphasis, she added."
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount650
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.85
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn12
Tube1
Camden1
Davies7
Morris1
Eva5
Kowalski1
British2
Museum2
Market2
London1
Veil1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Davies"
3"Morris"
4"Eva"
5"Kowalski"
6"Museum"
places
0"British"
1"London"
globalScore0.577
windowScore0.5
50.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"appeared vaguely unsettled"
1"seemed heavier on her wrist, a reminder of a partner lost to the unknown"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1091
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"joined that mystery"
91.30% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean27.97
std13.14
cv0.47
sampleLengths
07
143
227
334
449
522
636
731
832
951
1032
1143
1231
1339
1414
1532
1615
1725
189
1917
2039
217
2216
233
2425
2554
2627
2714
2836
2927
3015
3138
3210
3313
3435
3521
3638
3741
3843
99.21% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs115
matches(empty)
73.17% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences82
ratio0.024
matches
0"She knelt beside the corpse, a young man clutching a small, brass compass — the kind you don’t find in your typical high street shop."
1"Something — or someone — intercepted him."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount544
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.029411764705882353
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.01838235294117647
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean13.3
std7.09
cv0.533
sampleLengths
07
119
213
311
413
514
612
713
89
925
1015
119
127
1315
1411
1525
1611
1710
1810
1913
2019
2122
2229
2315
2417
2514
2629
2714
2817
2923
3016
3112
322
3332
3415
3511
3614
379
388
399
4013
4112
4214
435
442
459
467
473
487
4918
92.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5609756097560976
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences55
matches
0"She stepped over debris, the"
1"she said, her eyes scanning"
2"She knelt beside the corpse,"
3"she muttered, recognising the craftsmanship"
4"She probed the young man's"
5"she noted, holding it up"
6"she began, her brown eyes"
7"She moved towards the corner,"
8"She pictured the young man"
9"Her thoughts circled back to"
10"she asked, hoping to spot"
11"Her fingers brushed against the"
12"His unexplained death during an"
13"Her torchlight landed on a"
ratio0.255
69.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences55
matches
0"The echo of Harlow Quinn's"
1"She stepped over debris, the"
2"The metallic tang of mildew"
3"she said, her eyes scanning"
4"Davies stood beside the victim,"
5"The flickering lights from a"
6"She knelt beside the corpse,"
7"The casing bore a patina"
8"she muttered, recognising the craftsmanship"
9"Davies said, scratching the back"
10"Quinn narrowed her eyes, a"
11"She probed the young man's"
12"she noted, holding it up"
13"Davies continued, his round glasses"
14"Quinn tapped her worn leather"
15"The whole place felt wrong,"
16"she began, her brown eyes"
17"Davies frowned, tucking a few"
18"Eva would likely be head-deep"
19"A voice crackled through her"
ratio0.782
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she said, her eyes scanning the scene with military precision"
1"she began, her brown eyes scanning the area"
2"Quinn stood, eyes widening in realisation"
3"she asked, hoping to spot one last clue"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she noted (note)"
2"Davies continued (continue)"
3"Davies suggested (suggest)"
4"Quinn interrupted (interrupt)"
5"Davies speculated (speculate)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.579
rawRatio0.545
effectiveRatio0.316
78.5845%