Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0J41J2FDDPWGDQM450QE2

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25.1s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Get back!” Harlow Quinn barked, shoving a uniformed officer aside as she stepped into the dimly lit chamber. The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something metallic, a smell that clawed at her throat. She squinted against the flickering light of a single bulb hanging from the ceiling, illuminating the scene before her. A body lay sprawled on the cold concrete floor of the abandoned Tube station, limbs twisted at unnatural angles. The victim, a young woman, had dark hair matted with blood, her face frozen in a mask of terror. Quinn knelt beside the corpse, her sharp jawline set in a grim line. “Who found her?” she asked, her voice steady despite the chaos swirling around her. “Some kids, ma’am. They were exploring the old station,” a constable replied, his voice trembling slightly. “They thought it was just a prank at first.” “Prank?” Quinn’s brow furrowed as she examined the scene. The body was positioned too deliberately, too staged for a mere joke. She glanced around, taking in the graffiti that adorned the walls, the remnants of old advertisements peeling away like the skin of a forgotten memory. “Looks like a drug deal gone wrong,” her partner, Detective Davies, said, stepping closer. He adjusted his glasses, peering down at the body with a mix of curiosity and disdain. “You know how these things go. She probably crossed the wrong people.” Quinn shook her head, her instincts prickling. “No. This isn’t right.” She reached for her worn leather notebook, flipping it open to jot down her observations. “The blood’s too fresh. And look at the positioning of her hands—clenched, like she was trying to fight back.” Davies scoffed, crossing his arms. “You’re reading too much into it. It’s a simple case of bad luck.” “Bad luck doesn’t leave a body like this.” Quinn’s voice was low, almost a growl. She leaned closer, examining the victim’s hands. “There’s something else here.” “Like what?” Davies asked, his tone dismissive. “Look at her nails. They’re broken, like she was clawing at something.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she scanned the area around the body. “And the bruising on her neck—someone choked her. This wasn’t just a random attack.” “Alright, so she fought back. Doesn’t mean it’s anything more than a street deal gone wrong.” Quinn stood, her gaze sweeping the room. “No, it’s more than that. The graffiti—these symbols.” She pointed to a series of intricate designs scrawled on the wall behind the body. “They’re not just random tags. They’re occult.” “Occult?” Davies raised an eyebrow, his scepticism palpable. “You think this is some sort of ritual?” “Not just any ritual. This is the work of someone who knows what they’re doing.” Quinn’s heart raced as she recalled the whispers she’d heard in the precinct about a new player in the supernatural underbelly of London. “We need to get a forensic team down here. And I want a full background check on the victim.” “Sure, but you’re chasing shadows, Quinn.” Davies shrugged, but there was a flicker of uncertainty in his eyes. “You know how these things go. It’s always the same story.” “Not this time.” Quinn’s voice was firm, her resolve hardening. She stepped back, allowing the officers to do their work while she continued to scan the room. The flickering light cast eerie shadows, and she felt a chill creep up her spine. “Oi! Detective!” A voice called from the entrance. It was Eva Kowalski, her freckled face flushed with excitement. She rushed in, her worn leather satchel bouncing against her hip. “I heard you were here. What’s going on?” “Not now, Evie,” Quinn snapped, but the urgency in her tone softened as she saw the glint of curiosity in her friend’s green eyes. “Just… stay back for a moment.” Eva’s gaze darted to the body, her expression shifting from excitement to horror. “Oh God. What happened?” “Looks like a murder,” Quinn replied, her voice steady. “But it’s not just any murder. There’s something more to this.” Eva stepped closer, her round glasses slipping down her nose. “What do you mean?” Quinn gestured to the symbols on the wall. “These aren’t just random graffiti. They’re part of something bigger. I need you to look into them. See if you can find any connections to the occult.” “Right. I can do that.” Eva nodded, her freckled complexion paling as she took in the scene. “But… are you sure it’s safe to be here?” “Safe?” Quinn scoffed. “Nothing’s safe in this city anymore. But we can’t let fear dictate our actions.” “True,” Eva murmured, her eyes darting back to the body. “But still… this feels different.” Quinn’s gaze hardened as she turned back to the victim. “It is different. And I intend to find out why.” As the forensic team arrived, Quinn stepped aside, her mind racing. She watched as they began to document the scene, snapping photos and collecting evidence. But something nagged at her, a feeling that there was more lurking beneath the surface. “Quinn!” Davies called, his voice cutting through her thoughts. “You need to see this.” She approached him, her heart pounding. He held up a small brass compass, its casing tarnished with age. “Found it near the body. Thought it was just junk, but…” Quinn’s breath caught in her throat. “No. That’s not just junk. That’s a Veil Compass.” “A what?” Davies frowned, confusion etched on his face. “It’s a tool used in the supernatural community. It points to rifts or portals.” Quinn’s mind raced as she considered the implications. “If this was here, it means someone was trying to summon something—or someone.” “Or it was just a coincidence,” Davies said, but his voice lacked conviction. “No coincidences in this line of work.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she took the compass from him, feeling the weight of its significance. “We need to find out who the victim was connected to. This isn’t just a murder; it’s a message.” “Alright, but you’re going to need more than just a hunch.” Davies crossed his arms, his scepticism returning. Quinn shot him a glare. “I don’t need your approval. I need you to back me up.” “Fine. But if this goes sideways, it’s on you.” “Noted.” Quinn turned her attention back to the body, her mind racing with possibilities. The pieces were starting to fall into place, but she needed more information. “Evie!” she called, her voice cutting through the chaos. “Get to the archives. I need everything you can find on this victim and any connections to the occult.” “On it!” Eva nodded, determination lighting her eyes as she rushed out of the station. Quinn turned back to the scene, her heart pounding with anticipation. Something was brewing beneath the surface, and she was determined to uncover the truth. “Let’s get to work,” she said, her voice steady as she prepared to dive deeper into the mystery. The darkness was closing in, but Quinn was ready to face whatever lay ahead.
total_cost0.0012825799999999997

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.492
leniency0.983
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1168
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
18.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1168
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"furrowed"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"intricate"
count1
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"palpable"
count1
5
word"raced"
count2
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"resolve"
count1
8
word"chill"
count1
9
word"glint"
count1
10
word"racing"
count2
11
word"pounding"
count2
12
word"etched"
count1
13
word"weight"
count1
14
word"anticipation"
count1
15
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"furrowed"
1"scanned"
2"intricate"
3"eyebrow"
4"palpable"
5"raced"
6"flicker"
7"resolve"
8"chill"
9"glint"
10"racing"
11"pounding"
12"etched"
13"weight"
14"anticipation"
15"determined"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"The air was thick with"
84.02% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences61
matches
0"felt a chill"
1"d with excitement"
2"g with anticipation"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1164
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount691
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.18
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn22
Tube1
Detective1
Davies9
London1
Eva6
Kowalski1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Detective"
2"Davies"
3"Eva"
4"Kowalski"
places
0"London"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.859
wordCount1164
matches
0"Not now, Evie,” Quinn snapped, but the urgency in her tone softened as she saw the glint of cur"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
95.33% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean27.07
std13.09
cv0.484
sampleLengths
057
151
214
325
446
542
645
718
826
97
1037
1116
1237
1316
1457
1529
1642
1737
1830
1917
2020
2114
2235
2326
2417
2515
2620
2740
2814
2929
3015
319
3235
3313
3442
3518
3617
379
3827
3928
4015
4125
4232
93.76% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences61
matches
0"was positioned"
1"was determined"
52.94% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs136
matches
0"were starting"
1"was brewing"
2"was closing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences90
ratio0.011
matches
0"“We need to find out who the victim was connected to. This isn’t just a murder; it’s a message.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount691
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.024602026049204053
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005788712011577424
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean12.93
std6.02
cv0.466
sampleLengths
018
120
219
319
419
513
614
716
89
99
1012
1125
1214
1316
1412
157
1619
1719
185
1913
2015
217
224
237
2423
2514
2616
277
2823
297
308
318
3238
3319
3418
3511
3610
3717
3815
398
4010
4111
428
4324
446
4513
464
479
4811
4910
87.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5222222222222223
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners47
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences60
matches
0"She squinted against the flickering"
1"she asked, her voice steady"
2"She glanced around, taking in"
3"her partner, Detective Davies, said,"
4"He adjusted his glasses, peering"
5"She reached for her worn"
6"She leaned closer, examining the"
7"She pointed to a series"
8"She stepped back, allowing the"
9"It was Eva Kowalski, her"
10"She rushed in, her worn"
11"She watched as they began"
12"She approached him, her heart"
13"He held up a small"
14"she called, her voice cutting"
15"she said, her voice steady"
ratio0.267
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences60
matches
0"Harlow Quinn barked, shoving a"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She squinted against the flickering"
3"A body lay sprawled on"
4"The victim, a young woman,"
5"Quinn knelt beside the corpse,"
6"she asked, her voice steady"
7"a constable replied, his voice"
8"Quinn’s brow furrowed as she"
9"The body was positioned too"
10"She glanced around, taking in"
11"her partner, Detective Davies, said,"
12"He adjusted his glasses, peering"
13"Quinn shook her head, her"
14"She reached for her worn"
15"Davies scoffed, crossing his arms."
16"Quinn’s voice was low, almost"
17"She leaned closer, examining the"
18"Davies asked, his tone dismissive"
19"Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she"
ratio0.967
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
80.75% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something metallic, a smell that clawed at her throat."
1"She glanced around, taking in the graffiti that adorned the walls, the remnants of old advertisements peeling away like the skin of a forgotten memory."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount12
matches
0"she asked, her voice steady despite the chaos swirling around her"
1"a constable replied, his voice trembling slightly"
2"Davies asked, his tone dismissive"
3"Davies raised, his scepticism palpable"
4"Quinn replied, her voice steady"
5"Eva nodded, her freckled complexion paling as she took in the scene"
6"Eva murmured, her eyes darting back to the body"
7"Davies called, his voice cutting through her thoughts"
8"Davies said, but his voice lacked conviction"
9"Davies crossed, his scepticism returning"
10"Quinn turned, her mind racing with possibilities"
11"she called, her voice cutting through the chaos"
99.15% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Harlow Quinn barked (bark)"
1"Quinn snapped (snap)"
2"Eva murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.441
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.102
75.6584%