Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0JCYF4RC62W4YHS4NDCJF

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Duration:
41.6s
Cost:
$0.007651
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt clicked open under her hand, the second and third following in quick succession. Three locks, Eva's paranoid security measure against London's supernatural underworld. Or perhaps just against unwanted ex-boyfriends. The irony wasn't lost on Rory as she pulled the door inward. "You're not Eva." The voice cut through the corridor's dim light, smooth as aged whisky but with an undercurrent she hadn't been able to forget in six months. Rory's hand froze on the doorknob. Lucien Moreau filled the narrow hallway, his charcoal suit immaculate despite the London drizzle that had surely coated the city outside. His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—fixed on her with unnerving intensity. "Lovely to see you too, Lucien." She stepped back, gesturing him inside with a practised nonchalance she didn't feel. "Eva's out. Research emergency at the British Library." "So you're house-sitting." He entered, his ivory-handled cane tapping a rhythmic beat on the wooden floor. The faint scent of expensive cologne and something otherworldly—ozone and cardamom—followed him into the cramped flat. "Something like that." Rory closed the door, flipping all three deadbolts back into place. A necessary precaution, though she doubted even three locks would keep Lucien anywhere he didn't want to stay. The flat seemed smaller with him in it. Books towered in precarious stacks on every available surface, scrolls and research papers threatening to cascade from Eva's desk. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, watched from the top of a bookshelf, yellow eyes narrowed with suspicion. "I see Eva's organisational skills haven't improved." Lucien ran a finger along a dusty shelf, coming away with a layer of grime he examined with disdain. "She prefers 'organised chaos.'" Rory moved to the small kitchenette, putting distance between them. "Tea?" "You don't have to play hostess, Aurora." The use of her full name sent a shiver down her spine. He only called her that when he was angry or when they'd been— "Tea?" she repeated, her voice firmer this time. "If you insist." As she put the kettle on, her back to him, she could feel his gaze like a physical touch. Six months of silence, of pretending she didn't miss his impossible conversation or the way he made her feel both safe and dangerously vulnerable. "The delivery business treating you well?" he asked, his voice closer than she expected. She turned, finding him leaning against the doorframe, watching her with an expression she couldn't read. "It pays the bills. Yu-Fei's generous with the tips." Lucien's lips twitched. "Always practical. Still living above Silas's bar?" "Where else would I go?" She busied herself with mugs, her movements precise. "Not all of us have penthouses overlooking the Thames." "Touché." He moved into the tiny living space, his cane stilling as he surveyed a particularly unstable tower of books. "Your Welsh mother would have a fit if she saw this mess." Rory's hands tightened on the mug. "Eva's systems make sense to her. And to me." "I didn't mean to criticise." His voice softened. "I forget sometimes how much you've adapted to this world." "This world?" She carried the mugs to the small table cluttered with more papers. "You mean the world of information brokers, half-demons, and supernatural intrigue? Or just London in general?" Lucien sank into the only armchair not covered in research materials. His suit jacket strained slightly across his shoulders as he settled, the movement reminding Rory of his deceptive strength. "Both, I suppose." "Right." She sat opposite him, the table's narrow width feeling both too close and miles away. "To what do I owe the pleasure, Lucien? Information brokers don't typically make house calls unless they're collecting or selling." "Can't a man visit an old friend?" "We were never just friends." The words slipped out, sharp and honest. His expression didn't change, but the amber eye seemed to glow faintly. "No. I suppose we weren't." The kettle clicked off, the sound unnaturally loud in the tense silence. Rory rose to pour the water, giving herself a moment to breathe. When she returned, she set Lucien's tea in front of him, taking her own seat without comment. "I need your help with something," he said finally, fingers tracing the rim of the mug. "Of course you do." Rory leaned back, crossing her arms. "Let me guess—some supernatural mystery needs solving, and Eva's the expert, but since she's not here, I'll do?" His lips thinned. "It's not like that." "Then what is it like?" Lucien set his tea aside untouched. "There's been a breach. At Avaros." Rory's breath caught. Avaros—his father's realm, the demon dimension she'd only heard described in whispers and warnings. "What kind of breach?" "Something's coming through. Something that shouldn't be able to cross the veil." He hesitated, something she rarely saw from him. "Something that knows about you." "Me?" She laughed, the sound brittle. "I'm just a human who delivers Chinese food and occasionally helps Eva translate ancient texts. Why would anything from Avaros care about me?" Lucien's gaze dropped to her left wrist, where the small crescent-shaped scar was visible beneath her sleeve. "That scar. It's not from a childhood accident, is it?" Rory instinctively covered her wrist with her right hand. "Eva told you that?" "Eva didn't need to tell me anything. I recognised the mark the moment I first saw it." He leaned forward, his voice dropping to a near-whisper. "It's the sigil of Malphora." The name struck her like a physical blow. "That's impossible." "Is it?" His eyes held hers, unyielding. "You've never wondered why Evan became so obsessed with you? Why he tracked you from Cardiff to London after you left him?" "Evan was just an abusive bastard with control issues." But even as she said it, doubts she'd long suppressed began to surface. "Human abusers don't typically know about the Veil between worlds, Rory. They don't usually have access to magic that can bind supernatural creatures." Lucien's voice hardened. "Evan wasn't just human. And he wasn't working alone." Rory stood, suddenly needing space. "You're saying I'm not human either?" "I'm saying you're more than you know." He rose with her, his movements fluid despite the cane. "And whatever's coming through from Avaros knows it too. They're looking for Malphora's heir." "That's ridiculous." But her mind was racing, fragments of nightmares and half-remembered dreams suddenly taking on new meaning. "Is it?" Lucien closed the distance between them, his presence overwhelming. "Think about it. Why have you always been drawn to the supernatural? Why did Eva's research make sense to you almost immediately? Why can you see things others can't?" Rory's heart hammered against her ribs. "I don't know what you're talking about." "Liar." His voice was soft now, intimate. "You feel it too. The connection. The power you've never acknowledged because it scared you." "Stop it." She took a step back, bumping into a stack of books that wobbled precariously. Lucien caught her arm, his touch electric. "I stopped because you asked me to, six months ago. But whatever's coming, it won't stop just because you want it to." The air between them crackled with unspoken words, with the memory of their last encounter—the shouting, the accusations, the desperate kiss that had almost changed everything. "Why now?" she whispered, not pulling away from his touch. "Why tell me this now?" "Because the seals are weakening." His thumb brushed against her scar, sending a jolt of something ancient and powerful through her veins. "And because whether you want to admit it or not, you need me." Rory looked up at him, at the man who had shattered her heart and might be the only one who could help her survive what was coming. "I've survived this long without you, Lucien." "Have you?" His eyes searched hers, the amber one burning with an intensity that made her breath catch. "Or have you just been waiting for me to find you again?" Before she could answer, the windows shattered inward, darkness flooding the room as something ancient and hungry crossed the threshold.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She stepped back [back]"
1"he said finally [finally]"
2"Rory leaned back [back]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.397
leniency0.794
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.088
88.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1346
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1346
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"intensity"
count2
1
word"rhythmic"
count1
2
word"otherworldly"
count1
3
word"down her spine"
count1
4
word"could feel"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"intrigue"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"racing"
count1
10
word"electric"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count1
12
word"encounter"
count1
13
word"shattered"
count2
highlights
0"intensity"
1"rhythmic"
2"otherworldly"
3"down her spine"
4"could feel"
5"silence"
6"intrigue"
7"tracing"
8"whisper"
9"racing"
10"electric"
11"unspoken"
12"encounter"
13"shattered"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences68
matches
0"was angry"
79.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences68
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1332
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount810
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.6
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva3
London2
Rory13
Moreau1
Lucien11
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Moreau"
3"Lucien"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.698
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed smaller with him in it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1332
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
87.82% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean23.37
std10.69
cv0.457
sampleLengths
043
128
238
327
432
532
643
726
815
97
1025
118
123
1343
1414
1525
1610
1722
1832
1915
2018
2130
2233
2336
247
2512
2617
2741
2816
2928
307
315
3212
3321
3425
3529
3627
3713
3831
3910
4029
4122
4235
4311
4431
4518
4640
4713
4822
4916
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs137
matches
0"was racing"
1"was coming"
8.09% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences106
ratio0.047
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—fixed on her with unnerving intensity."
1"The faint scent of expensive cologne and something otherworldly—ozone and cardamom—followed him into the cramped flat."
2"He only called her that when he was angry or when they'd been—"
3"Avaros—his father's realm, the demon dimension she'd only heard described in whispers and warnings."
4"The air between them crackled with unspoken words, with the memory of their last encounter—the shouting, the accusations, the desperate kiss that had almost changed everything."
93.39% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount820
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.03414634146341464
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.020731707317073172
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean12.57
std6.77
cv0.539
sampleLengths
015
110
26
312
428
56
621
711
819
98
1016
1116
1214
1318
148
1519
1616
1726
1814
191
207
2112
2213
238
243
2519
2624
2714
2816
299
303
317
3213
339
3420
3512
366
379
388
3910
4014
4116
4211
4319
443
4516
4620
477
4812
4912
81.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5094339622641509
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners54
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
67.06% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences68
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
1"She stepped back, gesturing him"
2"He entered, his ivory-handled cane"
3"He only called her that"
4"she repeated, her voice firmer"
5"he asked, his voice closer"
6"She turned, finding him leaning"
7"She busied herself with mugs,"
8"He moved into the tiny"
9"His voice softened"
10"She carried the mugs to"
11"His suit jacket strained slightly"
12"She sat opposite him, the"
13"His expression didn't change, but"
14"he said finally, fingers tracing"
15"His lips thinned."
16"He hesitated, something she rarely"
17"She laughed, the sound brittle"
18"He leaned forward, his voice"
19"His eyes held hers, unyielding"
ratio0.382
18.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences68
matches
0"The deadbolt clicked open under"
1"The irony wasn't lost on"
2"The voice cut through the"
3"Rory's hand froze on the"
4"Lucien Moreau filled the narrow"
5"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
6"She stepped back, gesturing him"
7"He entered, his ivory-handled cane"
8"The faint scent of expensive"
9"Rory closed the door, flipping"
10"A necessary precaution, though she"
11"The flat seemed smaller with"
12"Books towered in precarious stacks"
13"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, watched"
14"Lucien ran a finger along"
15"Rory moved to the small"
16"The use of her full"
17"He only called her that"
18"she repeated, her voice firmer"
19"he asked, his voice closer"
ratio0.882
73.53% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"Before she could answer, the"
ratio0.015
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Lucien Moreau filled the narrow hallway, his charcoal suit immaculate despite the London drizzle that had surely coated the city outside."
1"The air between them crackled with unspoken words, with the memory of their last encounter—the shouting, the accusations, the desperate kiss that had almost cha…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"she repeated, her voice firmer this time"
1"he asked, his voice closer than she expected"
2"She busied, her movements precise"
3"he said finally, fingers tracing the rim of the mug"
4"He leaned, his voice dropping to a near-whisper"
5"His eyes held, unyielding"
6"Lucien closed, his presence overwhelming"
7"she whispered, not pulling away from his touch"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.088
leniency0.176
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.088
78.4808%