Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0JV7K55Q14QX5J10RD2Z8

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Duration:
28.9s
Cost:
$0.001675

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open, and Aurora Carter froze, her heart thundering in her chest. Lucien Moreau stood there, impeccably dressed in a tailored charcoal suit, his slicked-back platinum blond hair glinting under the dim light of the cramped flat. The air thickened with unspoken words, a tension that crackled like static electricity. “Lucien,” she breathed, the name slipping from her lips like a secret. “Rory.” His voice was smooth, but the edge of it hinted at something deeper, something unresolved. He stepped inside, the scent of his cologne—a mix of cedar and something darker—filling the small space. She could feel the weight of his presence, the way it shifted the atmosphere around them. “What are you doing here?” She crossed her arms, trying to shield herself from the memories that threatened to flood back. “Business,” he replied, his amber and black eyes scanning the cluttered room, taking in the stacks of books and scrolls that littered every surface. “But I thought I’d check in on you while I was in the neighbourhood.” “Check in?” She scoffed, the bitterness rising in her throat. “You don’t get to check in after—” “After what?” He interrupted, stepping closer, his gaze piercing. “After I left? After you pushed me away?” The accusation hung in the air, heavy and suffocating. Aurora felt her pulse quicken, a mix of anger and something else—something she had buried deep. “Maybe I didn’t want to be a part of your world,” she shot back, her voice sharper than she intended. “You know how dangerous it is.” “Dangerous?” He laughed, a low, dark sound that sent a shiver down her spine. “You think I’m here to drag you back into that life? I’m not that selfish.” “Selfish?” She stepped back, her back hitting the edge of the kitchen counter. “You think showing up unannounced is not selfish? You think I want to see you after everything?” “Do you?” His voice softened, and for a moment, the walls between them seemed to waver. “Do you really want to pretend there’s nothing between us?” Aurora’s breath caught in her throat. The memories surged—late nights filled with laughter, whispered secrets, and the way his touch had ignited something within her. But those moments were tainted by the shadows of their past, the hurt that had driven them apart. “Lucien, we can’t—” “Why not?” He stepped closer, invading her space, his presence overwhelming. “Because it’s easier to forget? To pretend we don’t feel this?” She shook her head, fighting against the pull of his words. “You don’t understand. I can’t go back to that. Not after everything.” “Then let’s not go back.” His voice was low, almost a whisper, as he reached out, brushing a stray lock of hair behind her ear. The touch sent a jolt through her, igniting a fire she thought she had extinguished. “Let’s move forward.” Aurora’s heart raced, caught between the desire to lean into his touch and the fear of what it meant. “You don’t get to just waltz back into my life and expect everything to be fine.” “Fine?” He scoffed, stepping back, the distance between them suddenly feeling insurmountable. “I never said it would be fine. I just want a chance to explain.” “Explain what?” She challenged, her voice rising. “How you disappeared without a word? How you left me to pick up the pieces?” “I had my reasons,” he said, his tone shifting, a hint of defensiveness creeping in. “You know that.” “Do I?” She glared at him, her fists clenched at her sides. “You never told me. You just vanished.” “Because I thought it was for the best!” His frustration flared, and for a moment, the cool facade cracked. “I thought you’d be safer without me.” “Safer?” She laughed bitterly, the sound echoing in the small space. “You think leaving me was the answer? You think I wanted to be alone?” “I didn’t want to put you in danger,” he said, his voice dropping to a near whisper. “You have no idea what I was dealing with.” “Then tell me!” She stepped forward, her heart pounding in her chest. “Tell me what was so important that you had to cut me out of your life.” Lucien hesitated, his eyes searching hers, as if weighing the consequences of his next words. “I was in too deep, Rory. The underworld isn’t just a game. I had enemies, and I couldn’t risk them finding you.” “Enemies?” She shook her head, disbelief flooding her. “You think I can’t handle that? You think I’m weak?” “No, I think you’re strong,” he replied, his voice earnest. “But I didn’t want to drag you into my mess. I thought I was protecting you.” “By abandoning me?” The hurt in her voice was palpable, and she could see the guilt flicker across his face. “You didn’t protect me, Lucien. You left me to fend for myself.” “I know,” he admitted, his voice thick with regret. “And I’m sorry. I should have done better. I should have fought for you.” “Fought for me?” She scoffed, the bitterness rising again. “You didn’t fight for anything. You just walked away.” “Because I thought it was the right thing to do!” His frustration boiled over, and he ran a hand through his hair, the tension palpable. “But I was wrong. I see that now.” Aurora’s heart ached at the sincerity in his voice, the way his eyes bore into hers, pleading for understanding. “And what do you want from me now?” “Just a chance,” he said, his voice softening again. “To show you that I’ve changed. That I’m not the same man who left.” “Changed?” She raised an eyebrow, scepticism lacing her tone. “How can I trust that?” “Because I’m here,” he replied, stepping closer again, the space between them shrinking. “Because I’m willing to fight for you now. I’ll do whatever it takes.” Aurora’s breath hitched, the weight of his words crashing over her like a wave. She wanted to believe him, to let herself fall into the warmth of his embrace, but the scars of their past held her back. “Lucien, I—” Before she could finish, the door swung open again, and Eva burst in, her tabby cat Ptolemy trailing behind her. “Rory! You won’t believe what I just found—” She stopped short, her eyes darting between them, the tension in the room palpable. “Oh. I see you two are… busy.” “Eva,” Aurora said, her voice strained, the moment shattered. “Right. I’ll just… um, give you two a moment.” Eva backed out, her eyes wide with surprise, leaving the door ajar. “Damn it,” Aurora muttered, the interruption pulling her back to reality. Lucien’s expression shifted, a mix of frustration and amusement. “Well, that was… timely.” “Not helpful,” she snapped, her heart racing. “This isn’t how I wanted to—” “Neither did I,” he cut in, his voice low and intense. “But we can’t keep avoiding this.” Aurora’s mind raced, the weight of their unresolved feelings pressing down on her. She could feel the pull between them, the magnetic attraction that had always been there, but the fear of getting hurt again loomed large. “Rory,” he said, his voice softening again, “I’m not asking for everything right now. Just a chance to prove that I can be the man you deserve.” The words hung in the air, heavy with promise and uncertainty. Aurora’s heart raced, caught between the desire to leap into the unknown and the instinct to protect herself from the pain of the past. “Just a chance,” she echoed, her voice barely above a whisper. “Just a chance,” he repeated, his gaze unwavering. And in that moment, as the door swung shut behind Eva, sealing them in their own world, Aurora felt the walls she had built around her heart begin to crack.
total_cost0.0016751999999999997

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags38
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She stepped back [back]"
1"She laughed bitterly [bitterly]"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.514
leniency1
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.053
88.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1304
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"suddenly"
2"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1304
totalAiIsms36
found
0
word"glinting"
count1
1
word"unspoken"
count1
2
word"tension"
count3
3
word"could feel"
count2
4
word"weight"
count3
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count3
9
word"raced"
count3
10
word"desire"
count2
11
word"facade"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count1
13
word"pounding"
count1
14
word"palpable"
count3
15
word"flicker"
count1
16
word"eyebrow"
count1
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"shattered"
count1
19
word"racing"
count1
20
word"magnetic"
count1
21
word"loomed"
count1
22
word"echoed"
count1
23
word"unwavering"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"unspoken"
2"tension"
3"could feel"
4"weight"
5"scanning"
6"pulse"
7"down her spine"
8"whisper"
9"raced"
10"desire"
11"facade"
12"echoing"
13"pounding"
14"palpable"
15"flicker"
16"eyebrow"
17"warmth"
18"shattered"
19"racing"
20"magnetic"
21"loomed"
22"echoed"
23"unwavering"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches6
maxInWindow5
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
2
label"hung in the air"
count2
3
label"sent a shiver through"
count2
highlights
0"fists clenched"
1"the weight of his words"
2"hung in the air"
3"sent a shiver down"
4"sent a jolt through"
98.12% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences62
matches
0"k with regret"
1"e with surprise"
96.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences62
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1299
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
80.38% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount790
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.39
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora11
Carter1
Moreau1
Lucien3
Eva3
Ptolemy1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Moreau"
3"Lucien"
4"Eva"
5"Ptolemy"
places(empty)
globalScore0.804
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if weighing the consequences of his next words"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1299
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
85.24% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean24.98
std11.2
cv0.448
sampleLengths
052
112
249
321
438
517
617
725
826
929
1030
1126
1243
133
1422
1523
1643
1735
1826
1922
2018
2119
2226
2325
2426
2528
2637
2718
2826
2932
3023
3118
3233
3327
3423
3514
3626
3738
382
3949
409
4121
4211
4313
4413
4517
4637
4727
4835
4911
99.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"were tainted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs149
matches(empty)
55.39% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences98
ratio0.031
matches
0"He stepped inside, the scent of his cologne—a mix of cedar and something darker—filling the small space."
1"Aurora felt her pulse quicken, a mix of anger and something else—something she had buried deep."
2"The memories surged—late nights filled with laughter, whispered secrets, and the way his touch had ignited something within her."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount795
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.025157232704402517
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005031446540880503
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean13.26
std5.96
cv0.449
sampleLengths
014
125
213
312
416
517
616
721
824
914
1010
117
129
138
149
1516
1620
176
1814
1915
2013
2117
2216
2310
246
2519
2618
273
2811
2911
3011
3112
3225
3315
343
3519
3616
3712
3814
397
4015
4115
423
4312
447
4519
467
4711
4814
4917
69.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4387755102040816
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences62
matches
0"she breathed, the name slipping"
1"His voice was smooth, but"
2"He stepped inside, the scent"
3"She could feel the weight"
4"She crossed her arms, trying"
5"he replied, his amber and"
6"She scoffed, the bitterness rising"
7"He interrupted, stepping closer, his"
8"she shot back, her voice"
9"He laughed, a low, dark"
10"She stepped back, her back"
11"His voice softened, and for"
12"He stepped closer, invading her"
13"She shook her head, fighting"
14"His voice was low, almost"
15"He scoffed, stepping back, the"
16"She challenged, her voice rising"
17"he said, his tone shifting,"
18"She glared at him, her"
19"His frustration flared, and for"
ratio0.629
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences62
matches
0"The door swung open, and"
1"Lucien Moreau stood there, impeccably"
2"The air thickened with unspoken"
3"she breathed, the name slipping"
4"His voice was smooth, but"
5"He stepped inside, the scent"
6"She could feel the weight"
7"She crossed her arms, trying"
8"he replied, his amber and"
9"She scoffed, the bitterness rising"
10"He interrupted, stepping closer, his"
11"The accusation hung in the"
12"Aurora felt her pulse quicken,"
13"she shot back, her voice"
14"He laughed, a low, dark"
15"She stepped back, her back"
16"His voice softened, and for"
17"Aurora’s breath caught in her"
18"The memories surged—late nights filled"
19"He stepped closer, invading her"
ratio0.952
80.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"Before she could finish, the"
ratio0.016
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Lucien hesitated, his eyes searching hers, as if weighing the consequences of his next words."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags38
uselessAdditionCount22
matches
0"she breathed, the name slipping from her lips like a secret"
1"She scoffed, the bitterness rising in her throat"
2"she shot back, her voice sharper than she intended"
3"She stepped back, her back hitting the edge of the kitchen counter"
4"She challenged, her voice rising"
5"he said, his tone shifting, a hint of defensiveness creeping in"
6"She laughed bitterly, the sound echoing in the small space"
7"he said, his voice dropping to a near whisper"
8"She stepped, her heart pounding in her chest"
9"She shook, disbelief flooding her"
10"he replied, his voice earnest"
11"he admitted, his voice thick with regret"
12"She scoffed, the bitterness rising again"
13"he said, his voice softening again"
14"She raised, scepticism lacing her tone"
15"Eva backed out, her eyes wide with surprise, leaving the door ajar"
16"Aurora muttered, the interruption pulling her back to reality"
17"she snapped, her heart racing"
18"he cut in, his voice low and intense"
19"he said, his voice softening again,"
20"she echoed, her voice barely above a whisper"
21"he repeated, his gaze unwavering"
14.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"it hinted (hint)"
2"He interrupted (interrupt)"
3"He laughed (laugh)"
4"She challenged (challenge)"
5"She laughed bitterly (laugh)"
6"he admitted (admit)"
7"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
8"she snapped (snap)"
9"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.243
leniency0.486
rawRatio0.556
effectiveRatio0.27
72.2856%