Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0M3QH2DBFEST997XV02GB

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Duration:
3m 48s
Cost:
$0.026813
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AtlasCloud

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System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory felt the Heartstone Pendant pulse against her collarbone before she saw the tear. The gem's rhythm matched no heartbeat she recognized—too slow, too ancient. She pulled the chain free. The crimson stone pointed toward the standing stones ahead, glowing with inner luminescence. Between the ancient oaks of Richmond Park, reality had worn thin. The air shimmered, not with heat, but with a visible absence, a place where the world forgot to be solid. Nyx coalesced beside her, their shadow form flickering at the edges. The Shade's violet eyes reflected the distortion. "The Veil frays here. Winter's approach weakens the Barrier." Isolde stood apart, her silver hair stirring though the air lay still. The Half-Fae left no indentation in the grass. "Doors open widest when hunger strikes. We stand at the threshold of appetite." Rory touched the Fae-Forged Blade strapped to her thigh. The moonsilver was cold, even through her jeans. Her left wrist itched—a childhood scar in the shape of a crescent moon, reminder of a window she'd broken fleeing a shouting match. She traced it when anxious. They stepped through. The shift jarred every bone. Sound died. Then returned, amplified—the whisper of wind became a roar, the scrape of her boot on stone became thunder. Rory stumbled. The ground held firm, but her inner ear insisted she fell. The sky pressed down in hues of warm amber. Not sunset. Not sunrise. Perpetual golden hour stretched in every direction, thick as syrup. Where London's grey afternoon had waited moments before, now vineyards sprawled toward horizons that curved upward, impossible and immense. "Warm." Nyx's voice carried on currents that stirred the vines heavy with fruit. The Shade solidified partially, gainings density in the alien light. "Too warm for shadows. I feel... stretched." Rory wiped sweat from her upper lip. The air tasted of honey left too long in the sun, of fermentation and saffron. Each breath coated her tongue with richness. Her stomach grumbled, then clenched. The pendant thrummed against her palm, hotter now, guiding them forward. Isolde moved ahead, her bare feet silent across marble paths that wound between the rows. No prints marked the dust. "What feasts without hunger." Her gaze fixed on distant spires. "What drinks without thirst." They walked. The vines grew thicker, twisting into trellises of obsidian and gold. Rory reached out to steady herself against a post. The material pulsed under her palm—warm, alive. She jerked her hand back. Clusters of fruit hung within arm's reach. Pomegranates the size of rugby balls split their skins to reveal seeds like rubies. Grapes wept wine that pooled in crystal basins carved from single pieces of quartz. Rory's fingers twitched. She hadn't eaten since morning. "Don't." Isolde caught Rory's shoulder, her fingers ice against overheated skin. "To eat is to owe. To owe is to remain." Rory withdrew, wiping her hand on her jacket. The air shimmered above the fruit, suggesting heat, though the temperature remained constant, cloying, intimate. Figures moved between the rows ahead—humans in chef's whites stained with sauces that glowed faintly. Their eyes were hollow, dark circles sunk into faces too thin for the profession they practiced. They harvested with jerking, precise movements, plucking fruits that opened mouths to scream, though Rory heard no sound, only felt the vibration in her molars. "They're cooking." Rory's voice sounded flat in the heavy air. Nyx drifted toward a rise, their form thinning as they moved uphill against the amber light. "Not cooking. Being prepared." From the vantage point, Dymas sprawled in impossible geometry. Castles of spun sugar and bone perched atop waterfalls of wine that flowed upward, defying gravity. Kitchens the size of stadiums belched steam that formed shapes—hands reaching, mouths opening—before dissipating into the amber sky. And everywhere, the eating. Long tables groaned with meats that still moved, with vegetables that sang harmonies, with breads that rose and fell like breathing lungs. Rory's stomach turned. The pendant pulsed faster, frantic against her chest. They descended into a valley where the vines grew meat. Rory stopped dead. Trees of marbled fat and muscle stretched upward, branching into ribs that held spheres of perfect, raw filet mignon. The bark was seared, crusted with herbs. The smell wasn't putrid—it was magnetic, making her mouth water despite the revulsion. Her hand went to her stomach. The scar on her wrist burned. "Don't breathe too deep." Nyx's form had compressed, growing denser, smaller, as if the atmosphere pressed against them. "It fills you up. Empties you out. Leaves no room for refusal." Isolde walked faster here, her ethereal form blurring at the edges. "Gluttony is not fullness. It is the endless opening. The mouth that never closes." Beyond the meat-grove, they found the river. It flowed not with water but with broth—dark, aromatic, carrying chunks of vegetation and spice. Bridges of stale bread stretched across it, sagging in the middle, being replaced by helbound workers even as they watched. On the far bank, a palace loomed, its walls built from stacked dining tables, its towers made of reaching silverware that caught the amber light and refracted it into rainbows that tasted of sugar when they touched Rory's skin. The pendant grew hot—almost painful—against her sternum. She pulled it free. The stone pointed toward the palace like a compass needle, glowing crimson against the golden sky. "There." Rory pointed with the hand holding the pendant. "Of course." Nyx's voice was wind through dry leaves. "The heart of appetite." They crossed the bread bridge. It squelched underfoot, warm and yielding, regenerating beneath them even as they crushed it. Midway across, Rory felt the structure shift, growing, healing itself. The broth river steamed below, carrying the scent of her mother's cooking, of Sunday dinners in Cardiff, of safety. She gripped the bridge rail—a baguette crust hard as iron. "Focus." Isolde stood on the other side, though Rory hadn't seen her move. "Memory is meat here. It feeds on what you miss." Rory stepped onto the far bank. Her boots sunk into soil that crunched like fried batter, releasing scents of childhood and comfort. The palace gates stood open, fashioned from the ribcages of leviathans, bleached white and bound with golden sinew. Inside, the amber sky darkened to a deeper gold, and the air hummed with the sound of chewing—thousands of jaws working in wet rhythm. They entered the courtyard. Circular tables ringed a central pit where fire burned blue and cold. At each table sat figures in various states of consumption, their bodies distended, their eyes blissful and vacant. Some had grown into their chairs, flesh merging with wood. And above them, on a balcony of porcelain plates stacked twenty high, a figure watched. Rory's hand found the Blade's hilt. The cold shocked her system, clearing the honey-thick thoughts that had begun to cloud her mind. She drew the weapon. The moonsilver caught the amber light and turned it sickly green, frost forming along the leaf-shaped edge. The figure descended the stairs—not walked, but glided, growing larger with each step, filling space like poured cream, wearing a coat of living moths that ate and regenerated their wings without pause. "Welcome." The figure's coat rustled as it gestured to the feasting tables. "You bring such curious appetites to my table." Rory stepped forward, placing herself between the figure and her companions. The pendant burned against her chest. "We're passing through." The figure smiled. Its teeth were pomegranate seeds, wet and red. "No one passes through Dymas. They only arrive. And then..." It gestured to the feasting tables with hands that had too many joints. "They stay for the feast. Forever hungry. Forever eating." Nyx solidified fully beside Rory, drawing shadows from the corners of the courtyard, forming armor of darkness that drank the amber light. "We are not guests." The figure laughed, and the sound was the clinking of crystal and the pouring of vintage wine. "Everyone is a guest at the table of Belphegor. The only question that remains—" It leaned close, and Rory smelled cinnamon and gravesoil, vanilla and rot. "—are you dining? Or are you the dish?" Rory raised the Blade. The cold radiated outward, frosting the nearest table setting, causing the feasting figures to pause, their jaws working silently. "We're leaving." Rory tightened her grip on the hilt. "Show us the thinnest part of the Veil. The way back." The figure's smile widened, generous, horrible. "The way out is through. Through the kitchens. Through the feast. Through the belly of want itself." It gestured toward archways leading deeper into the palace, where the sounds of cooking—sizzling, chopping, the weeping of ingredients—echoed with increasing fervor. "Truth serves the hungry poorly." Isolde stepped forward, her hair whipping though no wind blew. "We seek the Veil's seam. The thin place. The between." The figure's expression flickered, irritation crossing features that shifted between handsome and horrific. "Then walk deeper, little morsels. The center of Gluttony is a mouth that swallows. See if you taste enough to satisfy it." Rory looked at her companions. Nyx's violet eyes glowed brighter in the dimming light, two points of defiant color. Isolde's hair moved like water in a current. The pendant pulsed in Rory's fist, pointing toward those archways, toward the heart of the feast, demanding they advance deeper into the realm of endless appetite. She stepped forward. The Blade's cold was the only anchor keeping her from drifting into the promised satisfaction, the eternal meal, the comfort that would consume her completely.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"It leaned close [close]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.406
leniency0.813
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.063
96.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1597
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.12% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1597
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"shimmered"
count2
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count3
6
word"marble"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count3
8
word"crystal"
count2
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"magnetic"
count1
11
word"loomed"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"porcelain"
count1
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"shimmered"
2"reminder"
3"traced"
4"whisper"
5"stomach"
6"marble"
7"pulsed"
8"crystal"
9"perfect"
10"magnetic"
11"loomed"
12"structure"
13"porcelain"
14"echoed"
15"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences121
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences121
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1575
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
57.75% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1355
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.85
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Richmond1
Park1
Shade2
Half-Fae1
Fae-Forged1
Blade4
London1
Rory25
Nyx7
Dymas1
Isolde7
Sunday1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Shade"
2"Half-Fae"
3"Blade"
4"Rory"
5"Nyx"
6"Dymas"
7"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore0.577
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
9.52% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.905
wordCount1575
matches
0"not with heat, but with a visible absence, a place"
1"not with water but with broth"
2"not walked, but glided, growing larger with each step, filling space like po"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean33.51
std16.78
cv0.501
sampleLengths
043
131
227
333
445
53
638
742
830
945
1034
1134
1243
1321
1423
1556
1610
1720
1869
1911
2052
2112
2230
2325
2481
2527
269
2713
2858
2923
3064
3159
3243
3332
3420
3520
3643
3726
3851
3923
4020
4123
4222
4325
4435
4553
4628
99.46% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences121
matches
0"was seared"
1"being replaced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs250
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences139
ratio0.101
matches
0"The gem's rhythm matched no heartbeat she recognized—too slow, too ancient."
1"Her left wrist itched—a childhood scar in the shape of a crescent moon, reminder of a window she'd broken fleeing a shouting match."
2"Then returned, amplified—the whisper of wind became a roar, the scrape of her boot on stone became thunder."
3"The material pulsed under her palm—warm, alive."
4"Figures moved between the rows ahead—humans in chef's whites stained with sauces that glowed faintly."
5"Kitchens the size of stadiums belched steam that formed shapes—hands reaching, mouths opening—before dissipating into the amber sky."
6"The smell wasn't putrid—it was magnetic, making her mouth water despite the revulsion."
7"It flowed not with water but with broth—dark, aromatic, carrying chunks of vegetation and spice."
8"The pendant grew hot—almost painful—against her sternum."
9"She gripped the bridge rail—a baguette crust hard as iron."
10"Inside, the amber sky darkened to a deeper gold, and the air hummed with the sound of chewing—thousands of jaws working in wet rhythm."
11"The figure descended the stairs—not walked, but glided, growing larger with each step, filling space like poured cream, wearing a coat of living moths that ate and regenerated their wings without pause."
12"\"—are you dining? Or are you the dish?\""
13"It gestured toward archways leading deeper into the palace, where the sounds of cooking—sizzling, chopping, the weeping of ingredients—echoed with increasing fervor."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1268
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"faster, frantic against her"
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.017350157728706624
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.00473186119873817
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean11.33
std6.65
cv0.586
sampleLengths
014
111
25
313
411
520
611
77
89
912
108
1113
129
138
1423
155
163
175
182
1918
202
2111
229
232
242
2510
2619
2713
2810
297
307
3115
327
335
3411
3515
365
3710
384
392
4011
419
427
435
447
4514
4614
473
485
4911
58.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.38848920863309355
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners54
28.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"Then returned, amplified—the whisper of"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences116
matches
0"She pulled the chain free."
1"Her left wrist itched—a childhood"
2"She traced it when anxious."
3"They stepped through."
4"Her stomach grumbled, then clenched."
5"Her gaze fixed on distant"
6"She jerked her hand back."
7"She hadn't eaten since morning."
8"Their eyes were hollow, dark"
9"They harvested with jerking, precise"
10"They descended into a valley"
11"Her hand went to her"
12"It flowed not with water"
13"She pulled it free."
14"They crossed the bread bridge."
15"It squelched underfoot, warm and"
16"She gripped the bridge rail—a"
17"Her boots sunk into soil"
18"They entered the courtyard."
19"She drew the weapon."
ratio0.216
28.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences116
matches
0"Rory felt the Heartstone Pendant"
1"The gem's rhythm matched no"
2"She pulled the chain free."
3"The crimson stone pointed toward"
4"The air shimmered, not with"
5"Nyx coalesced beside her, their"
6"The Shade's violet eyes reflected"
7"Isolde stood apart, her silver"
8"The Half-Fae left no indentation"
9"Rory touched the Fae-Forged Blade"
10"The moonsilver was cold, even"
11"Her left wrist itched—a childhood"
12"She traced it when anxious."
13"They stepped through."
14"The shift jarred every bone."
15"The ground held firm, but"
16"The sky pressed down in"
17"Nyx's voice carried on currents"
18"The Shade solidified partially, gainings"
19"Rory wiped sweat from her"
ratio0.862
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Where London's grey afternoon had waited moments before, now vineyards sprawled toward horizons that curved upward, impossible and immense."
1"Grapes wept wine that pooled in crystal basins carved from single pieces of quartz."
2"They harvested with jerking, precise movements, plucking fruits that opened mouths to scream, though Rory heard no sound, only felt the vibration in her molars."
3"Long tables groaned with meats that still moved, with vegetables that sang harmonies, with breads that rose and fell like breathing lungs."
4"Trees of marbled fat and muscle stretched upward, branching into ribs that held spheres of perfect, raw filet mignon."
5"On the far bank, a palace loomed, its walls built from stacked dining tables, its towers made of reaching silverware that caught the amber light and refracted i…"
6"Her boots sunk into soil that crunched like fried batter, releasing scents of childhood and comfort."
7"The cold shocked her system, clearing the honey-thick thoughts that had begun to cloud her mind."
8"The figure descended the stairs—not walked, but glided, growing larger with each step, filling space like poured cream, wearing a coat of living moths that ate …"
9"Nyx solidified fully beside Rory, drawing shadows from the corners of the courtyard, forming armor of darkness that drank the amber light."
10"The pendant pulsed in Rory's fist, pointing toward those archways, toward the heart of the feast, demanding they advance deeper into the realm of endless appeti…"
11"The Blade's cold was the only anchor keeping her from drifting into the promised satisfaction, the eternal meal, the comfort that would consume her completely."
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Isolde caught, her fingers ice against overheated skin"
1"Isolde stepped, her hair whipping though no wind blew"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
75.1166%