Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0N3GDQ995B96G7R8SW8PN

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
24.4s
Cost:
$0.015921
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Moonlight pooled between ancient oaks, silvering the undergrowth in the Grove. Aurora stepped through the last gap in the standing stones and raised her head. The air tasted of wildflowers and memory—time shifting, thick as honey one moment, then thinning until her pulse seemed to echo in her ears. Isolde drifted ahead, skirts of moonlit moss brushing the moss-slick stones. No footprints marred her path. Pale lavender eyes gleamed in the gloom. “Not many have crossed this threshold,” she murmured, voice drifting like wind-chimes. Nyx hovered at Aurora’s shoulder, a ripple of shadow. They exhaled a whisper that slid along her collarbone. “And fewer still have returned.” Aurora’s fingers closed around the silver chain at her throat. The deep crimson Heartstone pulsed under her palm, a soft heartbeat in the dark. The Fae-Forged Blade at her hip grew cold, its moonsilver edge humming with promise. She took a steadying breath. “What if we find something…” She swallowed. “Dangerous?” Isolde paused beside a gnarled root that arched over a mossy hollow. “Danger lives here,” she said, lips tilting into a faint smile. “But so does wonder.” They slipped into the hollow. Phosphorescent fungi bloomed like lanterns. Their glow pulsed in time with Aurora’s pendant. Gossamer motes drifted through the air, drifting in lazy spirals. Nyx reached out; the motes parted around their inky fingers. A low thrumming rose beneath the soil. Aurora crouched, pressed a hand to the earth. The ground pulsed, echoing the pendant’s beat. A web of pale veins spread beneath the moss, etching patterns like constellations. “Runes,” Isolde whispered, kneeling beside Aurora. Silver hair brushed damp stone. “Older than the Fae Courts.” “Can you read them?” Aurora traced a line with her blade’s tip. The metal glowed faintly. “Not in any tongue spoken on Earth,” Isolde said. She knelt with her head bent, lips moving in a silent song. The runes shimmered, throbbing in time with her breath. A ripple passed through the Grove. Bark crackled. Roots quivered. The amber sky of Dymas bled into view beyond a bramble-thorn portal, a shimmering distortion that twisted trees into grotesque silhouettes. Nyx’s violet eyes brightened. “A rift.” Aurora shot to her feet. Heart pounding, she hefted the blade. Its leaf-shaped edge drank the moonlight, winking cold. Isolde rose, arms outstretched, gaze locked on the rift. “Time fractures here. An hour inside could be days outside.” The runes along the arches flared. A gale of fragrance swept the hollow, sweet and cloying—ripe grapes, roasted chestnuts, sugar-drifted pastry. Aurora’s teeth ground together. “Gluttony’s breath,” Nyx said, voice thin. “Hel’s ambition leaks through.” Isolde pressed a hand to the nearest standing stone. Light pooled beneath her palm and leaked down its surface, pooling at Aurora’s feet. “Solidify that breach,” she instructed. Aurora slid the Fae blade’s point into the stone’s mossy seam. It bit with a chime that rang through her bones. The rift flickered. Amber haze receded, replaced by forest green. Gossamer motes quivered back into the Grove’s gentle glow. Nyx exhaled. Shadow rippled back into solid form. They rounded the circle of oaks and stood at the threshold again, as though the breach had never been. Isolde turned, silver hair catching the fungi’s light. “Few can coax the Veil to bend without breaking it.” Aurora exhaled, fingers tightening around the pendant. “I didn’t know the Heartstone could—” “Your benefactor prepared you,” Nyx whispered. They surveyed the hollow. “Still, something stirred beyond. We clipped its wings, but we didn’t kill it.” Isolde nodded once. “Deeper in lies its heart. We must chart the path carefully.” The hollow opened onto a clearing that neither Aurora nor Nyx had seen before—nor, by the confused gleam in Isolde’s eyes, had she. The trees here leaned inward, their trunks twisted into gigantic arches that arched overhead, fingers clasped in silent council. The ground felt spongy, as though it might breathe. Pale blooms—flowering vines coiled around twisted branches—shivered in silence. A pool of black water lay at the center. Aurora approached. Her reflection trembled like smoke on the surface. Scattered around the pool were scattered shards of moonsilver mirror, fractured faces without bodies. “Pieces of a broken gate,” Isolde said. She knelt, lifting a shard. The mirror reflected her pale lavender eyes back at her. “Fragments of the Boundary.” Nyx drifted closer, examining the cracks. Violet glow pooled in the fractures. “The Veil bled through here long ago. This place remembers.” Aurora set her blade’s hilt against the earth. She leaned forward. The water rippled, and she jerked back as a face swam to the surface—hers, but older, hollow-eyed, skin drawn tight across high cheekbones. She yanked her gaze away. Heart thundered. Nyx murmured a soft word and the reflection vanished. Only ripples remained. Isolde rose, lips curved. “The pool reveals truth and lies,” she said. “It shows what was, what might be.” Aurora scrubbed palms against her trousers. “I saw something I don’t understand.” Nyx flickered closer. “We’ll find meaning yet.” A wind brushed through the arching trunks. Leaves rattled. A pulse of warmth pressed against Aurora’s chest, and the Heartstone surged. She clutched it, leaning back against a root. A wave of exhaustion rolled over her, as though she’d run a race in deep water. “Stand strong,” Isolde said, reaching out. Her fingers hovered, then drifted away without touching. “You carry more than you know.” Aurora straightened, blade humming at her side. She met Nyx’s violet gaze and found calm in the shadow being beside her. “What now?” Isolde walked to the pool’s edge, toes sinking into the mud. “We claim these fragments. Each shard carries a sliver of the Veil’s memory. Reassemble them, and we might reshape the Boundary.” Nyx drifted toward a broken mirror half-buried in fern. “Demons slip through the smallest opening,” they said. “We must seal every tear.” Aurora knelt, lifting a shard freckled with starlight. Its broken edge ran cool against her palm. “One piece at a time,” she murmured. She rose, cradling the shard, and followed Isolde deeper into the grove of twisted arches. Moonlight filtered through gaps in the canopy, painting the trunks in ghostly patterns. Roots crossed overhead like great serpents, dripping sap that gleamed like quicksilver. They moved in silence, voices hushed, hearts sharp. The pendant pulsed in time with Aurora’s steps, as though urging her forward. Nyx slipped through shadowed paths, testing the air for tremors in the Veil. Isolde mapped the rune-fragments against the trunks, murmuring questions in a language older than Fae or mortal. Every few paces, the world shifted. The amber sky of Dymas peeked through one arch, apple orchards rippling with depthless hunger. In another, the stars of the mortal sky winked, distant and cold. Time fractured; Aurora tread on fallen leaves that crackled into dust before her boots, then found herself stepping into a carpet of fresh spring grass. At the far end of the grove, they reached another hollow ringed by standing stones far older than those at the entrance. In its center lay a monolith carved with intricate patterns—a tree sprouting from a chalice, its branches entwined with serpents. Aurora stepped closer, pressing the mirror shard into a socket at the monolith’s base. The stone accepted it with a soft click. Light spilled up the carved trunk, weaving vines of silver into the air. The grove sighed. Roots stirred. The amber haze retreated, replaced by the Grove’s true dusk-blue shadow. Nyx placed their hand on another socket and nestled in the next shard. The monolith glowed brighter, and a pulse ran through the ground, over Aurora’s boots, into her blade, through the pendant, uniting everything in a single, resonant heartbeat. Isolde raised her arms. Silver hair flared around her. “The Boundary answers.” Aurora gathered the remaining shard, breath hitching with possibility. She met Nyx’s gaze. They shared a silent vow: they would rebuild the gate, seal the Veil’s tears, and hold the line between realms. But first, they would press on. Deeper into the ancient Grove where secrets lay buried beneath layers of time, waiting for hands brave enough to unearth them. And as the monolith’s light pulsed once more, the arches above them bent closer, as if to listen.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1379
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1379
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"echo"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count5
5
word"echoing"
count1
6
word"etching"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"shimmered"
count1
9
word"quivered"
count2
10
word"pounding"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count2
12
word"silence"
count2
13
word"trembled"
count1
14
word"fractured"
count2
15
word"thundered"
count1
16
word"warmth"
count1
17
word"race"
count1
18
word"intricate"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"echo"
2"gloom"
3"whisper"
4"pulsed"
5"echoing"
6"etching"
7"traced"
8"shimmered"
9"quivered"
10"pounding"
11"flickered"
12"silence"
13"trembled"
14"fractured"
15"thundered"
16"warmth"
17"race"
18"intricate"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences129
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences150
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1362
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
46.91% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1164
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.06
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Grove5
Nyx15
Aurora24
Heartstone2
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Isolde16
Silver2
Dymas2
Fae3
Veil2
Roots3
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Aurora"
2"Heartstone"
3"Blade"
4"Isolde"
5"Dymas"
6"Roots"
places
0"Grove"
1"Veil"
globalScore0.469
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as though urging her forward"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.734
wordCount1362
matches
0"neither Aurora nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences150
matches
0"clearing that neither"
96.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean27.8
std13.51
cv0.486
sampleLengths
049
123
212
323
443
58
627
738
835
916
1016
1130
1231
136
1419
1519
1625
1710
1828
1940
2027
2118
2213
2323
2414
2560
2633
2726
2822
2934
3019
3119
3212
337
3445
3520
3623
3732
3822
3923
4040
4151
4258
4342
4451
4540
4612
4733
4845
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs221
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences150
ratio0.053
matches
0"The air tasted of wildflowers and memory—time shifting, thick as honey one moment, then thinning until her pulse seemed to echo in her ears."
1"Nyx reached out; the motes parted around their inky fingers."
2"A gale of fragrance swept the hollow, sweet and cloying—ripe grapes, roasted chestnuts, sugar-drifted pastry."
3"The hollow opened onto a clearing that neither Aurora nor Nyx had seen before—nor, by the confused gleam in Isolde’s eyes, had she."
4"Pale blooms—flowering vines coiled around twisted branches—shivered in silence."
5"The water rippled, and she jerked back as a face swam to the surface—hers, but older, hollow-eyed, skin drawn tight across high cheekbones."
6"Time fractured; Aurora tread on fallen leaves that crackled into dust before her boots, then found herself stepping into a carpet of fresh spring grass."
7"In its center lay a monolith carved with intricate patterns—a tree sprouting from a chalice, its branches entwined with serpents."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1181
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"true dusk-blue shadow."
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.02032176121930567
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.002540220152413209
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences150
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences150
mean9.08
std5.4
cv0.594
sampleLengths
011
114
224
311
45
57
612
79
89
95
1010
1114
1214
135
147
151
1612
1711
184
195
205
218
2210
2310
247
258
267
2713
286
295
305
3112
324
339
3412
359
366
372
382
3921
404
412
425
436
448
459
4610
476
4815
494
59.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.36666666666666664
totalSentences150
uniqueOpeners55
29.24% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"Only ripples remained."
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences114
matches
0"she murmured, voice drifting like"
1"They exhaled a whisper that"
2"She took a steadying breath."
3"she said, lips tilting into"
4"They slipped into the hollow."
5"Their glow pulsed in time"
6"She knelt with her head"
7"Its leaf-shaped edge drank the"
8"It bit with a chime"
9"They rounded the circle of"
10"They surveyed the hollow."
11"Her reflection trembled like smoke"
12"She knelt, lifting a shard."
13"She leaned forward."
14"She yanked her gaze away."
15"She clutched it, leaning back"
16"Her fingers hovered, then drifted"
17"She met Nyx’s violet gaze"
18"Its broken edge ran cool"
19"She rose, cradling the shard,"
ratio0.202
21.40% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences114
matches
0"Moonlight pooled between ancient oaks,"
1"Aurora stepped through the last"
2"The air tasted of wildflowers"
3"Isolde drifted ahead, skirts of"
4"she murmured, voice drifting like"
5"Nyx hovered at Aurora’s shoulder,"
6"They exhaled a whisper that"
7"Aurora’s fingers closed around the"
8"The deep crimson Heartstone pulsed"
9"The Fae-Forged Blade at her"
10"She took a steadying breath."
11"Isolde paused beside a gnarled"
12"she said, lips tilting into"
13"They slipped into the hollow."
14"Phosphorescent fungi bloomed like lanterns."
15"Their glow pulsed in time"
16"Gossamer motes drifted through the"
17"Nyx reached out; the motes"
18"A low thrumming rose beneath"
19"Aurora crouched, pressed a hand"
ratio0.877
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
ratio0
68.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Isolde paused beside a gnarled root that arched over a mossy hollow."
1"The trees here leaned inward, their trunks twisted into gigantic arches that arched overhead, fingers clasped in silent council."
2"The pendant pulsed in time with Aurora’s steps, as though urging her forward."
3"Time fractured; Aurora tread on fallen leaves that crackled into dust before her boots, then found herself stepping into a carpet of fresh spring grass."
4"And as the monolith’s light pulsed once more, the arches above them bent closer, as if to listen."
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she murmured, voice drifting like wind-chimes"
1"she said, lips tilting into a faint smile"
2"Nyx said, voice thin"
35.71% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
3"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.229
75.5020%