Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0N934HYA43HVEJPQJV5YT

Run Details

Duration:
24.2s
Cost:
$0.008847
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The stench of ozone and wet pennies choked the air inside the abandoned station. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the rusted rail tracks, her boots crunching over decades of accumulated grime and glass shards. Blue and red police lights pulsed against the soot-stained tiles of the Camden platform, casting rhythmic, rhythmic shadows that danced like ghosts against the arched ceiling. Uniformed officers circled the perimeter, their movements cautious, avoiding the center of the platform where a body lay twisted into an impossible knot. Quinn checked her worn leather watch. Two in the morning. The air felt thick, vibrating with a low-frequency hum that set her teeth on edge. She adjusted the collar of her wool coat and squinted through the gloom. "You're late, Harlow." Detective Miller stood over the body, his notepad out and a smear of mustard on his tie. He gestured vaguely at the victim, a man in his thirties wearing a silk suit that probably cost more than Quinn's hatchback. "Transport took its time. The tunnel entrance is a maze." Quinn approached the corpse. The man was splayed out near a row of boarded-up ticket kiosks. His skin had turned a translucent, pearlescent white, the veins underneath showing through like blue ink on parchment. No blood pooled on the concrete. No signs of a struggle disturbed the thick dust surrounding the boots. "Entry wound is a mystery, but the cause of death is clear as day. Cardiac arrest. Stress-induced. Look at his face." Miller pointed his pen at the victim's expression. The man’s mouth hung open in a frozen, jagged silent scream. His eyes were wide, the pupils dilated until the irises disappeared into black pits. Quinn crouched, her sharp jaw tightening. She didn't look at the face. She looked at the floor three inches from the victim’s outstretched hand. A faint, circular indentation pressed into the dust—a ring that didn't match the heavy soles of the medical examiner's boots. "Heavy heart load, Miller? The man is thirty-five and fits into a slim-cut suit. He didn't drop dead because he saw a rat." "Could be drugs. New synthetic. Causes the heart to explode before the high even hits. We found a small leather pouch in his pocket, empty. Probably tossed the evidence before he turned blue." Quinn reached into her pocket and pulled out a pair of latex gloves. The snap of the rubber echoed through the cavernous station. She leaned closer to the victim’s hand. Beneath the fingernails, a shimmering, violet powder clung to the skin. It didn't look like any narcotic she’d processed in eighteen years on the force. It glowed with a faint, internal phosphorescence. "He didn't toss anything. He was looking for something." She stood up and scanned the platform. The "Veil Market" rumors had been crossing her desk for months—whispers of an underground bazaar that drifted through the city’s discarded spaces like smoke. This station was supposed to be empty, a relic of the 1940s, yet the air tasted of sulfur and expensive perfume. "The ME is going to call it natural causes, Harlow. Don't go digging for a conspiracy in a subway station. It’s a mugging gone sideways or an overdose." Quinn ignored him. She followed the trail of dust. Most of it had been trampled by the initial response team, but near the edge of the tracks, the grime remained undisturbed. She saw a series of rhythmic markings, like the drag of a heavy cloak. "Look at the soot on the third rail, Miller." "What about it? It’s a dead line. Hasn't had power since the Blitz." "Then why is it sweating?" Quinn pointed. Beads of thick, oily moisture bubbled on the surface of the iron rail. The liquid didn't drip; it vibrated, defying gravity to crawl upward. She pulled a small brass compass from her inner pocket—the shadow compass she’d confiscated from a squatter near the British Museum a month ago. The needle didn't point north. It spun in frantic, dizzying circles, the brass casing warm against her palm. "Harlow, put that away. If Internal Affairs sees you playing with junk shop toys at a crime scene—" "The victim has no wallet, but he has a bone token tucked into his collar." Quinn used a pen to flick the dead man's lapel. A small, polished piece of ivory, carved with a weeping eye, rolled onto the platform. Miller stared at it, his skepticism faltering for a heartbeat before he masked it with a scoff. "A souvenir. Probably a collector." "He was an initiate. He was here for the Market." Quinn walked toward the dark mouth of the tunnel leading toward Mornington Crescent. The air grew colder there, a localized frost creeping up the brickwork. She spotted a figure lingering in the shadows of an old service alcove—a flash of curly red hair and round glasses. "Eva Kowalski. Step out into the light before I decide you're a suspect." The woman emerged slowly, clutching a worn leather satchel to her chest. Her green eyes darted between Quinn and the body on the platform. She tucked a rogue spiral of hair behind her left ear, her fingers trembling. "I told the sergeant I was lost. I was just taking a shortcut from the museum." "In a restricted Tube station? At two in the morning?" Quinn stepped into Eva’s personal space, using her height to shadow the younger woman. She smelled the dust of old books and something sharper—cinnamon and ozone. "You’re a long way from the archives, Eva. Did the victim find what he was looking for, or did the seller decide his soul was worth more than his gold?" "I don't know what you're talking about, Detective. I really don't." "The violet residue on his fingers. It matches the stain on your satchel strap." Eva’s breath hitched. She tightened her grip on the bag. Miller started toward them, his heavy footsteps echoing, but Quinn held up a hand to stop him. She needed the girl to break, not to bolt. "He bought a Veil Compass, didn't he? A Shade artisan special. But the needle didn't point to the rift. It pointed to something else. Something that followed him back from the Market." Eva looked at the body, her expression softening into a pained grimace. "He shouldn't have opened the casing. You never open the brass if the needle starts to hum. It lets the anchor go." "The anchor for what?" "The things that live in the gaps. The things that don't like being tracked." Quinn looked back at the pearlescent skin of the victim. The light from the police lanterns seemed to be getting sucked into the corpse, the shadows deepening around the body even as the officers moved their lights. "Miller, get everyone off the platform. Now." "Harlow, what the hell are you on about? We haven't even finished the photos." "Move them, Miller! Clear the station!" The low hum in the air spiked into a piercing whine. The sweating rail hissed, a cloud of violet vapor rising from the iron. Quinn grabbed Eva by the arm and hauled her back toward the emergency exit. In the center of the platform, the shadows draped over the dead man began to thicken, rising like black bile. The "natural causes" Miller had joked about started to manifest—a towering, formless void that lacked limbs but possessed a distinct, predatory intent. It hovered over the corpse, the violet powder on the man’s fingers igniting into tiny sparks of cold fire. "It’s still hungry," Eva whispered, her glasses fogging in the sudden drop in temperature. "The compass didn't just track the Market. It was a lure." Quinn pulled her service weapon, but the weight of the steel felt useless against the shimmering distortion in the air. She didn't fire. She watched as the entity's presence caused the very tiles of the station to warp and flake away, revealing not dirt or stone behind them, but a shimmering, iridescent membrane. "You knew he was coming here," Quinn accused, her eyes fixed on the shadow. "I tried to warn him. He thought he could haggle with a Shade. Nobody wins a trade at the Veil Market, Detective. Not even the ones who think they're in charge." The entity turned toward them. It had no face, yet Quinn felt a cold, analytical gaze sweeping over her, lingering on the worn leather watch on her wrist. The watch that had stopped the moment her partner died three years ago. The shadow pulsed, a sound like a thousand whispers echoing through Quinn’s skull. "Miller! Get out!" Quinn shoved Eva toward the stairs and turned back to find Miller standing frozen. He wasn't looking at the shadow. He was looking at his notepad, which had begun to smolder in his hand. The ink was running, forming patterns that looked less like English and more like the sigils etched into the brass compass in Quinn's pocket. "My hands," Miller gripped. "Harlow, I can't feel my hands." Grey frost climbed up Miller's sleeves. The pearlescent pallor of the corpse was spreading to him, the ozone smell turning into the stench of a thousand-year-old tomb. Quinn lunged forward, grabbing Miller by the belt and yanking him backward just as the shadow surged. The entity slammed into the space where he’d been standing, the concrete floor shattering under the weight of nothingness. The impact didn't make a sound. It was a vacuum of noise, a hole in the world that swallowed the light of the police flares. "Up the stairs! Don't look back!" Quinn pushed Miller toward the exit, her heart hammering against her ribs. She felt the cold reaching for her heels, a localized winter that threatened to brittle her bones. She reached the bottom of the iron staircase and looked up. Eva was already at the top, her silhouette framed by the streetlights of Camden. Quinn glanced back one last time. The platform was empty. The body, the shadow, and the violet light had vanished as if they’d never existed. Only the shattered concrete and the sweating rail remained. "It moved," Eva called down, her voice trembling. "The moon shifted. The Market is gone." Quinn climbed the stairs, her breath coming in ragged gasps. She reached the street level and leaned against the brick wall of the station entrance. Miller sat on the curb, staring at his hands, which were still stained with the grey frost. "What was that, Quinn?" Miller’s voice was a ghost of its usual bluster. "That wasn't a heart attack." Quinn pulled the brass compass from her pocket. The needle had stopped spinning. It pointed steadily toward the British Museum. She looked at Eva, who was busy readjusting her satchel, her eyes shielded by the reflection on her glasses. "It was a closing of accounts, Miller. And we're just the witnesses." She looked down at her watch. For the first time in three years, the second hand ticked once. Then it stopped again. Quinn felt a chill that had nothing to do with the night air. The case wasn't reaching its end; the station was just the foyer. "Detective?" Eva stood a few feet away, her posture defensive. "Are you going to arrest me?" Quinn rubbed the leather strap of her watch. She saw the violet powder lingering in the cracks of her own gloves. "Not today, Eva. But you’re going to tell me everything you know about Shade artisans. And you’re going to start with why they use bone tokens as currency." "It’s not just currency," Eva said, her voice dropping to a whisper. "It’s collateral." Quinn looked back at the dark hole of the station entrance. The police sirens were getting louder, more units arriving to a scene that now defied every rule of forensics she knew. She felt the weight of the mystery pressing in on her, a physical force. The evidence didn't add up because the math belonged to a different world. "Get in the car, Miller," Quinn commanded, her military precision returning like a shield. "We have a lot of paperwork to fake." She watched Eva walk away into the London fog, the girl’s satchel heavy with secrets that Quinn was only beginning to glimpse. The detective didn't follow. She waited until the first rays of a grey dawn began to bleed over the horizon, illuminating the soot on her boots. The violet shimmer was gone, but the hum remained, a low vibration in the marrow of her bones that told her the Veil Market hadn't just moved—it had left a door open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.184
leniency0.367
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2105
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2105
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"rhythmic"
count3
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"synthetic"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"processed"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"vibrated"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count2
11
word"weight"
count3
12
word"etched"
count1
13
word"shattered"
count1
14
word"chill"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"rhythmic"
2"gloom"
3"silk"
4"synthetic"
5"echoed"
6"processed"
7"scanned"
8"vibrated"
9"footsteps"
10"echoing"
11"weight"
12"etched"
13"shattered"
14"chill"
15"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences120
matches
0"felt a chill"
35.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences120
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"seemed to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences159
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2090
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
49.29% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions69
wordCount1539
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.01
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn31
Camden2
Miller12
British2
Museum2
Mornington1
Crescent1
Eva12
English1
Grey1
London1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Miller"
3"Eva"
4"Market"
places
0"British"
1"Mornington"
2"Crescent"
3"London"
globalScore0.493
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences107
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.478
wordCount2090
matches
0"not dirt or stone behind them, but a shimmering, iridescent membrane"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences159
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean29.03
std19.57
cv0.674
sampleLengths
083
138
23
339
410
552
621
733
844
923
1033
1162
129
1352
1428
1545
169
1713
185
1968
2018
2115
2242
235
2410
2546
2613
2738
2816
2910
3026
3130
3211
3314
3436
3532
3612
3722
384
3914
4037
417
4214
436
4438
4561
4625
4753
4814
4931
93.57% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences120
matches
0"was splayed"
1"was supposed"
2"been trampled"
3"was gone"
66.13% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs249
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"was looking"
2"was running"
3"was spreading"
4"were getting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences159
ratio0.057
matches
0"A faint, circular indentation pressed into the dust—a ring that didn't match the heavy soles of the medical examiner's boots."
1"The \"Veil Market\" rumors had been crossing her desk for months—whispers of an underground bazaar that drifted through the city’s discarded spaces like smoke."
2"The liquid didn't drip; it vibrated, defying gravity to crawl upward."
3"She pulled a small brass compass from her inner pocket—the shadow compass she’d confiscated from a squatter near the British Museum a month ago."
4"She spotted a figure lingering in the shadows of an old service alcove—a flash of curly red hair and round glasses."
5"She smelled the dust of old books and something sharper—cinnamon and ozone."
6"The \"natural causes\" Miller had joked about started to manifest—a towering, formless void that lacked limbs but possessed a distinct, predatory intent."
7"The case wasn't reaching its end; the station was just the foyer."
8"The violet shimmer was gone, but the hum remained, a low vibration in the marrow of her bones that told her the Veil Market hadn't just moved—it had left a door open."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1551
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"frozen, jagged silent scream."
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.018052869116698903
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0051579626047711154
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean13.14
std6.99
cv0.532
sampleLengths
014
120
226
323
46
54
615
713
83
917
1022
1110
124
1312
1418
156
1612
1721
188
1911
2014
216
226
2312
2420
2523
2633
2713
2810
297
3011
3114
327
339
347
3524
3621
3728
383
396
4022
4114
429
4313
445
452
4613
4711
4824
495
41.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.2578616352201258
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners41
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences118
matches
0"Only the shattered concrete and"
1"Then it stopped again."
ratio0.017
94.58% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences118
matches
0"She adjusted the collar of"
1"He gestured vaguely at the"
2"His skin had turned a"
3"His eyes were wide, the"
4"She didn't look at the"
5"She looked at the floor"
6"She leaned closer to the"
7"It didn't look like any"
8"It glowed with a faint,"
9"She stood up and scanned"
10"She followed the trail of"
11"She saw a series of"
12"She pulled a small brass"
13"It spun in frantic, dizzying"
14"She spotted a figure lingering"
15"Her green eyes darted between"
16"She tucked a rogue spiral"
17"She smelled the dust of"
18"She tightened her grip on"
19"She needed the girl to"
ratio0.314
10.85% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount106
totalSentences118
matches
0"The stench of ozone and"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off"
2"Quinn checked her worn leather"
3"The air felt thick, vibrating"
4"She adjusted the collar of"
5"Detective Miller stood over the"
6"He gestured vaguely at the"
7"Quinn approached the corpse."
8"The man was splayed out"
9"His skin had turned a"
10"Miller pointed his pen at"
11"The man’s mouth hung open"
12"His eyes were wide, the"
13"Quinn crouched, her sharp jaw"
14"She didn't look at the"
15"She looked at the floor"
16"A faint, circular indentation pressed"
17"Quinn reached into her pocket"
18"The snap of the rubber"
19"She leaned closer to the"
ratio0.898
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Blue and red police lights pulsed against the soot-stained tiles of the Camden platform, casting rhythmic, rhythmic shadows that danced like ghosts against the …"
1"The air felt thick, vibrating with a low-frequency hum that set her teeth on edge."
2"A faint, circular indentation pressed into the dust—a ring that didn't match the heavy soles of the medical examiner's boots."
3"He was looking at his notepad, which had begun to smolder in his hand."
4"She felt the cold reaching for her heels, a localized winter that threatened to brittle her bones."
5"She looked at Eva, who was busy readjusting her satchel, her eyes shielded by the reflection on her glasses."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Eva whispered, her glasses fogging in the sudden drop in temperature"
1"Eva called down, her voice trembling"
2"Eva stood, her posture defensive"
3"Eva said, her voice dropping to a whisper"
4"Quinn commanded, her military precision returning like a shield"
88.78% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"The Miller had (have)"
1"Eva whispered (whisper)"
2"Eva called down (call dow)"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.082
leniency0.163
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.122
75.3249%