Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0NKAS69Z4DGE3264T0MAV

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1m 13s
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$0.004327
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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Nyx slid from the seam of shadow first, a whisper of smoke that tasted of iron and rainless memory. The grove answered with a soft, thrumming throat—not sound so much as a heartbeat beneath bark and stone. Aurora followed, the Heartstone Pendant at her throat giving off a shy, inward glow, like a firefly trapped inside a velvet chest. Isolde paused at the lip of the boundary, silver hair catching a tremor of light that wasn’t there a moment before, and spoke to the air as if the air could hear and reply. “Step softly,” Isolde said, voice a thread of smoke and rain. “The grove remembers every footfall, and forgets nothing you owe it.” Rory caught her breath and exhaled it as a cautious invitation. “Noted. Let’s move before the memory turns spiteful.” Nyx moved again, a living shadow with a silhouette that refused to stay still. They drifted along the edge of the oldest boundary stones, where runes lay under moss like a language nobody quite spoke anymore. The stones felt warm, not hot, as if they had swallowed a sun and kept it tucked inside their brocade of lichen. The air had a weight to it, a scent of resin and something sweeter and older—honey, perhaps, and something sharp like iron filings. “Time behaves here as a suggestion,” Nyx said, voice a whisper that seemed to ride the fibres of the air. The words drew no breath, but they drew attention. Rory’s eyes widened not because of fear but because the world did not push back the way it should. Isolde stepped closer to the stones, her footprints invisible, leaves rustling the moment she moved. The grove did not merely accept her presence; it acknowledged it with a subtle sigh, like a tree waking from a long sleep. A few wildflowers bloomed in that instant, colours too vivid, petals catching light in ways that didn’t correspond to any sky they’d ever known. “Look where the world chooses to remember nothing,” Isolde murmured. “We walk in a reliquary, and every step writes another sigil in the dust.” Rory half-smiled, more to reassure herself than anyone else. The pendant warmed again, a soft pulse against her sternum, as if the heart within it woke to the rhythm of the grove’s own secrets. The Fae-Forged Blade at her hip felt colder than usual, its moonsilver edge nipped with frost that refused to melt, even in the odd glow of the clearing. The group pressed deeper, past the boundary’s ring of standing stones, into a corridor of living branches. The trees leaned in, as if listening to a conversation they were not supposed to hear. The ground rose and fell in small, unaccountable hills; when Rory stepped on a rise, the earth beneath her boot gave a tiny sigh, as though the soil preferred her to press on, not linger. It was as if the grove breathed in measured, careful cycles, and every exhale carried a whisper of another realm. Every sound felt amplified and distant at once: a twig snapping seemed to echo from a thousand directions, the hush of leaves sounded like a held breath, and far away the faint clack of something like wooden teeth biting on the dry air. The world smelled of rain-soaked earth and something sweeter that teased the tongue—a sweetness that pushed at fear, tugging it into a knot behind the ribcage. Nyx paused by a pool of something that looked like liquid starlight, shallow and still yet not quite water, more like a mirror thinned to a whisper. It rotated slowly when touched by shadow; it did not reflect faces so much as possibilities. The surface shivered at their approach, and for a moment Rory thought she saw inside it, a reflection not of their bodies but of versions of themselves that could have been living already, or could be living in some other moment yet to come. “Do not drink,” Isolde warned softly, as if the warning might drive away a memory. “Water of the gate remembers every voice that sang to it last winter.” Rory pressed her lips tight. The Heartstone pendant thumped against her chest—an irregular march, like a drumline that insisted on keeping time with a strange, unknowable measure. She touched the stone with the tip of a gloved finger, and the warmth spread through her hand, curling up her forearm, then relaxing into a steady warmth that made the blade at her hip feel almost friendly. “Forward,” Nyx breathed, a word that was scarcely more than a figure of speech in their mouth, yet enough to coax movement. They slid between two trees that bent inward as if listening, their shadows brushing Rory's shoulder in the way a cautious friend might brush away a melting fear. The grove opened into a space that felt deliberately carved for wonder. A domed canopy of leaves arching high, not a ceiling so much as a galaxy of green that shifted and rearranged with a slow, almost musical gravity. Above, motes of light drifted like pollen caught in a sunless current; they glowed with a pale amber that did not belong to any day Rory had ever known. The air tasted of mineral sweetness and something a little metallic, the way copper tastes when you lick a coin you know is old and valuable. The group slowed, not out of caution but because the space pressed in around them, as if the grove were listening to their breath and composing a response. The ground beneath their boots grew soft, springy, almost yielding, as if it remembered every step laid upon it and chose to cradle those feet for a heartbeat longer than necessary. “I’ve never seen anything quite like this,” Isolde admitted, her voice a soft cadence that kept time with the whisper of leaves. “The Fae Grove is not merely a place; it is a memory with teeth.” Rory’s eyes swept the interior of the chamber. The walls were not walls at all but living trees, their trunks bearing knots that glowed faintly with the pale amber light. The knots formed patterns that resembled constellations, and in one place the pattern resolved into a circle of tiny, perfectly shaped eyes. They blinked once and then vanished, leaving no trace but a tremor in Rory’s fingertips where the blade’s handle rested. “The Veil thins here,” Nyx observed, voice barely above a hiss. “Not thin enough to slip through unscathed, but thin enough to hear what would never reach a mortal ear.” A soft chime—not a sound, exactly, more like a sensation of air rearranging itself—came from the heart of the chamber. The air around a puddle of luminous liquid jittered with tiny waves, and from the depths rose a scent: spice and old book ink and something that tasted faintly like honeyed thunder. Rory stepped toward the pool but stopped short of touching it. The Fae-Forged Blade hummed against her leg, colder than before, a shade of blue running along its edge as if it had just tasted something frostbite could only dream. The Heartstone Pendant’s warmth grew bolder, pushing up against the fabric of her skin with a growing confidence that suggested it knew something they did not. “Isolde,” Rory spoke levelly, “do you see a path through this place, or a warning?” Isolde studied the luminous pool with the calm gaze of someone listening to a riddle answer itself in time. “The pool speaks in ripples not of water, but of choices. It will show you what you fear, and what you desire to fear less.” Nyx drifted closer to Rory, their form wavering at the edge of the pool’s light. They spoke not to Rory, but to the space between them. “The Grove favors the brave who listen and the wise who do not touch until they know what their fingers will wake.” Rory’s breath hitched at the edge of a risk she could not name. The pendant pulsed again, suddenly brighter, illuminating a circle of moss that lay in the exact shape of a doorway carved into the roots of the ancient trees. The doorway was not physical; it shimmered as if it were painted on air, an entrance framed by roots that glowed with a faint copper sheen. It looked almost like a mouth waiting to be spoken to, or a throat to be swallowed by memory. “Words first, then steps,” Isolde murmured, stepping back as if the space itself preferred silence until its question found a mouth. Rory approached the moss doorway. Her gloved hand hovered just above the glowing circle, then settled, light as a moth’s wing, on the edge of the doorway. The Heartstone stuttered, once, twice, and steadied as if the grove approved. She drew a slow breath, then pushed her fingers through the moss and into the threshold. The moment she did, the boundary gave, not with a crack but with a voice, a chorus that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once, mouthing images rather than words. Do not touch, the chorus suggested in a thousand voices, or touch to wake what should sleep. She did not speak aloud—she did not want to wake what lay sleeping within. Instead she stepped through slowly, feeling the moss lift like a soft carpet under her palm, the world narrowing and widening all at once as if the grove itself was folding. The other side did not come as a new room, but as a different way of feeling the same room. The air was cooler, and the glow stronger, a harsher amber that burned away the pale tinge of the surface world. The new place had a smell of wet stone and cinnamon, and a sound—like quills scratching across an ancient parchment—that seemed to come from every direction and none. They stood in what could be described as a secondary chamber or a sub-layer of the grove, where the ground had grown a lattice of roots that rose above the surface, forming a cathedral of living wood. The walls fluttered with the leaves of trees that stretched their limbs in strange, almost human gestures. It felt less like stepping through a door and more like borrowing a breath that had always belonged to someone else. Nyx stepped in after Rory, their shadow silvering and uncoiling along the floor like smoke sucked into a chimney. Isolde followed, her cloak catching the glow and turning it into a silver thread that braided around her wrists. The sound of their footsteps—taps and soft sighs of fabric—sounded almost ceremonial here, as if they had crossed into a sanctum where memory was kept in every grain of dust. The ground beneath shifted again, not in a way that threatened to throw them, but in a way that suggested it was learning them. They could feel the grove measuring them, noting their pace, their breath, the strength in their wrists as they clutched their weapons. The Fae Grove did not merely watch; it tested. “This place is a library of who we could be,” Isolde said softly, almost to the leaves. “But every library has a catalogue of doors.” Rory tested the air with the tip of the Fae blade, knowing its cold edge could cut through illusions as easily as it sliced through wards. The blade didn’t bite, but it did glow with a pale blue about a quarter of the way along its length, as if it recognised a map the others could not read. She did not move to draw it fully. Not yet. The garden of possibility required a careful touch, not a reckless flourish. “The bond with the Heartstone seems to thrum when we near something truth-bearing,” Rory observed, glancing toward the pendant. The gem on the chain flashed a sharper crimson then settled back to a warm glow, as if something answered a call and then forgot to finish. “Truth-cutters lie in wait here,” Nyx said, almost as if they welcomed the challenge. “Notall lies, mind—some lies are useful to those chewing through a stronger truth.” Isolde’s gaze softened, and for a moment Rory saw the ancient woman’s expression shift into something almost tender—the kind of look a seer might reserve for a true believer or a marked child. Then Isolde’s voice came again, a riddle, a flame curled in a throat: “The first light is the last shadow. The last shadow, the first light. The grove knows what you fear to know.” The group advanced toward a central feature—a pedestal carved from living roots, its surface smooth as glass and filled with a faint, tremulous light, as though the stone itself were breathing. On the pedestal rested a small relic—no larger than Rory’s thumbnail—the Heartstone Pendant’s crimson glow answering the relic’s presence as if they were kin. The pedestal’s light intensified when Rory drew closer, the glow pushing back the amber haze, revealing etched glyphs along its surface. The glyphs whispered in a language Rory had studied only in the margins of forbidden textbooks—the language of wards and solstice doors, the language that binds Hel and Earth. She did not speak their words aloud, but she translated them in her mind with a surgeon’s precision: a warning, a promise, a hinge. Nyx moved to the pedestal’s side, their shadow thinning into a narrow thread that traced the edge of the stone. “There is always a choice that will feel like a mistake until it isn’t,” they whispered, the words fusing with the faint mythos of the place. Isolde stepped forward, her silver hair catching the pedestal’s glow. “Three truths, one mislead. Decide which is which, and you may passage claim.” Rory looked at the glyphs, then at her companions. The Heartstone pendant pulsed with a rhythm that seemed to lace through her already-busy thoughts, urging steadiness. She spoke aloud, choosing not to yield to the grove’s riddling pace but to take it in measured syllables. “The first truth: we are here for a reason stronger than fear. The second: any exit carries a cost. The third: the grove will not lie, but it can mislead if you listen for the wrong truth.” Isolde inclined her head slightly, the silver of her hair catching light in the same moment the glyphs’ glow brightened. The air thickened, and a scent—honey and thunderclap—spilled across the chamber in a wave that pressed against their chests. “The third truth you must guard,” Isolde said, voice quiet as frost on a window. “Guard the third truth, and your feet will find the true doorway.” Rory’s senses sharpened. The world’s texture grew tactile in a way it hadn’t before: the roots at her feet hummed under her boot, the pendant warmed and then cooled in quick breaths, and Nyx’s shadow solidified into a form strong enough to touch the carved stone without fear. The pool’s ripples had ceased, but the memory of those ripples remained, as if someone had whispered a name under their breath and then forgotten what name it was. A sound—soft as spoken lace—arrived from the grove’s far edge, where the light thinned and the trees grew taller and stranger. It was not a voice so much as a sensation of being watched by someone who knew too much about you. The sound came again, a syllable that did not belong to any Earth language Rory had learned, a sound that felt stolen from a dream. Nyx turned toward the sound, their eyes (or what would pass for eyes in their shade-body) bright as a blade’s edge. A presence stepped from among the trees, a shadow formed not of darkness but of intention. It moved with a precision that suggested a long acquaintance with many doors and many rooms. It did not step into the light but into the memory of light, as though it remembered something from a century ago when this place was a different sort of world. The presence was not hostile at first, but it carried a severity and a suggestion of consequence that filled the chamber with the weight of a trial. The air grew taut, and even the leaves seemed to pause in their rustle, listening for a verdict. Rory’s grip tightened on the Fae-Forged Blade, though she did not draw it. The blade’s temperature remained cold to the touch, a steadying influence rather than a weapon, and she glanced toward Isolde once more, the Seer’s eyes bright with forced calm, as if a huge question rested behind that pale lavender gaze. “Who trespasses in a memory’s throat?” the intruder asked, voice low and smooth, insinuating, not loud enough to announce a challenge so much as to invite a negotiation that could end the grove’s hospitality or extend its hospitality to a dangerous guest. Isolde answered with that strange, musical dryness she used when she chose to reveal more by saying less. “We seek passage, not surrender. We seek truth, not theft. Speak your intent so we may decide if the door welcomes or wards.” The shadow figure paused, an almost human gesture of hesitation. Then it bowed its head slightly, a polite gesture that carried an implied threat. “I am a keeper of angles,” it said, and the words did not make sense in a literal way but felt true in the body’s memory. “I guard the threshold where memory refuses to be merely memory.” Rory stepped forward, driven by something practical and stubborn, a stubbornness shaped by her pre-law training and the stubborn courage of someone who has learned to walk away with a scholarship and a broken relationship but not a broken sense of self. “If you guard this threshold, you also guard us from something we need. What do you want in return?” The keeper’s shadow shifted, a ripple that ran along the edge of the pedestal’s light. The eyes formed in the air again, not real eyes but the illusion of many possibilities, one of which might be a mirror. In that moment Rory glimpsed a future in which she never delivered that order to the Golden Empress or never escaped Evan’s hold; a future in which a different choice had led her to ruin or glory in equal measure. She did not flinch. “The door is not a door you can simply walk through,” the keeper replied, not with malice but with the calm certainty of something that had seen many proposed paths and knew which ones truly mattered. “The Veil is not a wall to be broken but a map to be read. You seek passage, you must first align your hunger with the world’s.” Nyx stepped closer to the keeper, their shadow coiling around the edge of the pedestal, listening to the conversation that was not spoken but implied through the shapes and shadows of the grove. “What hunger?” they asked, the words tasting of smoke and old rain. The keeper’s form shifted, becoming more tangible for a moment—a figure wearing a coat of night, with eyes like smeared stars. The entity looked at Rory with a kind of patient calculation, as if weighing the weight of a single choice against a lifetime of regrets. “Ms Carter,” the keeper said, using a formal cadence that suggested an etiquette older than any court. “You would unlock the corridor. You must also reckon with the small, stubborn fact that you may not come back the same person from any door you open.” “Is this a bargain?” Isolde asked, stepping forward again, her voice still a veil of riddles but with a thread of something like steel running through it. “What are the terms?” The keeper inclined the shadowed head a fraction, a gesture that felt almost like a bow. “Two things: first, you must leave behind a single desire you are unwilling to carry home. Second, you must give the grove a single memory you would not care to lose. The rest is a choice, a path, and then a test.” Rory looked at her companions, then down at the Heartstone Pendant that pulsed in time with her breathing. The hollow of the grove felt exactly like a throat that could swallow you if you spoke the wrong word. The decision pressed, heavy as a stone in her chest. “Which memory?” Nyx asked, their voice a hush that could have been a breeze or a rustle or a sigh from a sleeping city. Rory answered with a decisive calm that surprised her, the same calm that had kept her from breaking down under stress when she left Cardiff, when she walked away from Evan, when she took the job with the Golden Empress. “The memory of being paused by fear, when I knew I should run and didn’t. I won’t walk back with that fear as a shadow.” Isolde spoke next, her words slower, a chant that felt like a ritual even when spoken in normal speech. “The grove will seal the door if fear tries to anchor you here. Then you must prove courage by stepping forward.” The keeper’s smile—if it could be called a smile when the mouth did not exist—was almost visible. “A fair exchange,” it said, and the air shifted with a low sigh that sounded like pages turning. Rory drew a breath through teeth that felt suddenly bared in anticipation. She held up the Heartstone Pendant, letting its glow kiss the edge of the pedestal’s light. The light thickened, the amber glow sharpening into a pale gold that braided into the blue line of the blade’s frost. The memory she offered settled on the surface of the pedestal like a stone dropped into a pool. The grove tightened around them, the air thick and almost sweet with the memory’s weight. The keeper’s eyes gleamed with a light that was almost pity. Then the door—if it could still be called a door—shimmered along the moss circle, the edge of the moss curling inward as if the wall itself were being turned. “Go,” the keeper said softly, almost in a whisper that sounded like a breeze through dry leaves. “Let your fear be a map, not a jailer.” Rory stepped forward, guided by the grove’s quiet insistence. The others followed, Nyx’s shadow curling around her like a protective cloak of darkness and wind. The moss door opened with a sigh, and beyond it lay a corridor of living light—an otherworldly tunnel where the amber glow gathered into constellations and moved as if a current ran through the air. The ground beneath their boots no longer felt like soil but a living, breathing thing, a path that accepted their weight and would hold them if they trusted it. As they moved, the space around them changed—not abruptly, but with a patient transformation. The ceiling rose into a vault of leaves that peered down with a thousand patient eyes. The walls hummed gently as if the trees themselves were singing in a key nobody on Earth knew. The air carried a whisper, a soft chorus that did not belong to any one language, and yet each syllable felt like a memory brushing the skin, like a distant friend tapping a familiar rhythm on your shoulder. Rory’s awareness widened. The grove’s sigils pressed against the edges of her perception, not invading but inviting. The Heartstone Pendant grew warmer, then cooler, then warmer again, a pendulum tracing the edges of a door she hadn’t opened yet. She wasn’t sure where the door led or what lay on the other side, but she understood one thing: the Grove was not an obstacle to be overcome, but a teacher offering a different measure of courage. Somewhere behind them the pool’s light began to shimmer more strongly; a ripple moved across its surface, not from droplet disturbance but from a presence approaching, something with shape and intention and hunger—perhaps the Grove’s own appetite for discovery, or something older and darker that had learned to wear wonder as a disguise. “Something follows,” Nyx warned, their voice a low thread across the floor. The shadow thickened, pooling at their feet as if the being behind them wanted to become visible. The corridor opened into a broader chamber where the ground undulated like a living map. The floor grew translucent enough to reveal the network of roots beneath, an intricate lattice pulsing with the same amber light. In the centre, a column of seven stones rose, each carved with runes that sang in a language that only the heart could translate. The runes shifted and rearranged themselves as if the column breathed, the letters rearranging into sentences Rory almost understood in a moment of not-quite memory. A low, rich sound rolled through the chamber—like a cello played by a hand that had learned its instrument in another life. It was not coming from any one place; it seemed to exist inside the air itself, a gravity of sound that drew the trio toward the column. The pendant pulsed more insistently as they approached, answering the column’s rhythm with a soft, ancestral thump. Then the ground trembled, not violently, but with the cadence of a drumbeat that told them a threshold stood ahead, waiting for someone to cross and decide what kind of travellers they would become. The seven stones’ runes flared in a sequence, a momentary blaze that painted their faces with a pale fire. Rory felt a chill in her bones, a memory she had not dared to speak aloud: the first time she had truly trusted her instinct and spoken up in a room full of people who dismissed her. The grove pressed in, and the truth of her fear rose, a sharp, cleansing sting. “Frontier smaller than fear,” Isolde whispered, almost to herself, the way a riddle would speak to its own echo. “The memory you carry is the key you hold. The question is what you will become when you turn it.” The glow from the pedestal brightened, then coalesced into a thin thread that snaked toward Rory’s heart. She grasped it with her will, letting the thread wrap around the pendant and the blade, binding their fates to the path forward. The seven runes on the stones flared in unison, and a door of air opened before them, a false wall that melted away to reveal a corridor of night-sky blue, dotted with tiny points that resembled stars. “Through here,” Nyx said, their voice a breath of cold fire. “Not all doors go forward. Some doors go deeper, and some doors remember you long after you close them.” Rory stepped into the doorway with a firm breath; the others followed. The moment they did, a new sound rose, a chorus of voices not human yet not purely animal—a rustling of leaves and a chorus of whispered promises that one thing would be gained if they walked far enough and one thing would be lost if they faltered. The corridor was narrow but not cramped; the walls moved with them, not against them, guiding their steps as if the grove itself authored each movement. The passage opened into a vast auditorium carved in living wood, its ceiling an arched canopy of leaves that formed a ribbed vault, like a cathedral built from a forest’s bones. The space hummed with a quiet, inexhaustible energy. On the far end of the chamber stood a figure carved not of flesh but of light and shadow, a silhouette that flickered at the edges, a boundary creature that wore the shape of a sentinel and the intent of a judge. The figure did not move toward them; it watched. The seven runes again glowed on the column, and a language of light poured from the sentinel’s form, swirling across the chamber in a stream of glyphs Rory could almost decipher. The glyphs spoke of thresholds, of choices, of a gate that would not remain open forever. Isolde took a step forward, the silver threads of her hair lifting in a breeze that did not exist, as if the grove itself leaned toward them. “If you would pass,” she said, her voice a measured chant, “you must pay what you owe to your own past and offer what you will become without fear.” Rory found the Sentinel’s gaze, or what looked like a gaze, and held it. The Heartstone Pendant’s glow intensified, bathing her hand in warmth that was almost a memory of sunlight on a winter day. She could feel the blade against her hip, the cold metal now a partner rather than a weapon, a tool for cutting through the veils of their own inclinations. “Speak your truth, walker of doors,” the sentinel’s voice—or the echo of it—rolled through the room, not loud but inexorable. “What did you give for passage?” Rory did not flinch. “A memory I was afraid to name, and the fear I refuse to let become my future.” The sentinel’s shadow-lengthened, and for a heartbeat the room seemed to tilt, as if the entire grove were listening to the exchange with a careful, almost clinical curiosity. Then the door behind them—the doorway that had brought them here—began to seal itself, the moss curling back into a solid border as if the thing that had welcomed them now grew tired of their company. A soft chime sounded again, and with it a heavy, mortal breath—someone or something drawing life from the space itself. The seven runes flared one last time, and the room’s walls rearranged, creating a new doorway that pointed toward the sentinel’s right, a path that would take them deeper, or perhaps down a different memory’s corridor. Rory stepped toward the new doorway without hesitation. Beside her, Nyx’s shadow stretched and gathered into a form of their own, a silhouette that felt ready to shield, strike, or simply stand between the party and whatever came next. Isolde’s eyes flashed with that ancient light, the kind of gaze that could pierce a lie without a single spoken word. “The door opens when you walk,” Isolde said, and the riddle finally found a doorway of its own in the certainty of her calm. “Follow the word your heart has learned to speak in a language the grove already understands.” They entered the new corridor together, a small group moving through a living gate that breathed and exhaled with them. The amber luminescence waxed and waned in a rhythm that felt almost like a heartbeat, guiding them toward a far-off glimmer that crawled along the edge of perception, a promise of something behind the door that would test them again, and again, and again. As they neared the glow at the corridor’s end, a tremor ran through the earth beneath their feet, a deeper rumble that reminded Rory of something primal woken from centuries of sleep. The shard of space before them split with a sigh and a hiss, revealing a mouth that was not a mouth but a memory with teeth. It did not hunger for flesh but for choice. It did not demand violence, but demanded a decision as sharp as the blade’s edge and as clean as the pendant’s glow. The hall of doors lay before them, a crooked election of possible paths. Each door was distinct: one framed with frost that hummed with the memory of every winter ever endured; another edged with vines that unpicked themselves when touched, revealing a deeper, darker seam beneath; a third that breathed a scent of spice and rain, as if a storm bottled itself into wood. They would have to pick one, and that choice would set the next height of the grove’s hospitality—the difference between welcome and ward. The guardian—the whisper of a presence—the sentinel—the Veil—the memory it haunted—watched. The moment stretched, a taut string ready to snap, as Rory felt the world hold its breath along with her. Then the first door yielded to her touch, a faint, cold kiss along her knuckles. She did not step through yet. She waited, listening to the life and breath of the grove, letting the silence become a language. The tree-sky above, a canopy of living, breathing leaves, began to hum again, a note that thrummed through their bones and into the blade’s frost and the pendant’s warmth, binding them to the moment—an instant in which all possibilities pressed in, and any wrong move could tumble them into a darkness from which the grove might never retrieve them. The scene held—then, in the next heartbeat—an unearthly crack. Not a breaking sound, but a kind of tearing of the air, like fabric thinning to reveal a vast, unknowable distance beyond. The portal they’d prepared for—if prepared they had—shivered, and the light that surrounded it wavered. The guardian’s breath sharpened, a voice not spoken but felt, and the chamber’s walls sharpened, focusing the sense of sight into a singular, unbearable clarity. The door that Rory had chosen—the one framed by frost—glowed with a pale, cold light that tasted of ice and truth. It stood ready to snap shut behind them if their courage faltered. “Go,” Nyx urged, the word a thread of night that pulled at Rory’s sleeve. “We step and we become more than we thought we could be, or less. The grove will judge us by what we take from it, and what we leave behind.” Rory looked at Isolde, who offered a quiet nod, a cryptic blessing, a sentence unfinished but understood. Then Rory turned to the frost-framed door and stepped through. The moment she crossed the threshold, the world dissolved into a narrow, bright corridor of memories and futures, all braided together as if a hundred threads held the same seam in place. Behind her, the other two hesitated only for a breath—Isolde’s face showing a smile that was not a smile and a fear she would not name; Nyx, a shadow now only a shade, not quite a person and not quite a reflection, ready to move in tandem if the moment demanded. The door slammed shut behind them with a sound that was not sound, a feeling of closing and sealing that sent a shiver through the grove. The corridor darkened to a pale blue, and the light that guided them grew sharper, more crystalline, as if they walked not through a doorway but into a blade’s edge. And in that moment of stillness, a presence stepped forward from the shadow of the closest tree—slow, deliberate, and not exactly human. It was as though the grove had decided to reveal the consequence of their choice, a consequence that wore many faces and spoke in the language of echoes. Rory’s breath caught. The Heartstone Pendant’s warmth flared, then steadied, soothed by something older than fear. The last thing she heard, before the corridor closed behind them and the world beyond became a whispered rumor, was a soft, resonant chord, as if the grove itself were singing a verdict in the key of destiny. Then a new sound rose—a deliberate, careful crunch of something stone and alive breaking under deliberate weight—and the world pitched a little, as though the memory of gravity had shifted in their favour or against it. The corridor narrowed to a point where the light pooled, drawing the three together into a compressed space where every thought felt visible, every breath readable, every heartbeat a confession. They could not go back now, not fully, not while the grove chose its verdict so carefully. The next breath could be a conversation, or a revelation, or a fight. Or all three. The moment held, and the chapter hung in it, waiting for what came through the next door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
43.75% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags32
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"Isolde warned softly [softly]"
1"Rory spoke levelly [levelly]"
2"Isolde said softly [softly]"
3"Isolde’s voice came again [again]"
4"the keeper said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.533
leniency1
rawRatio0.156
effectiveRatio0.156
86.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount6000
totalAiIsmAdverbs16
found
0
adverb"softly"
count4
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"deliberately"
count1
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count2
5
adverb"slightly"
count2
6
adverb"truly"
count2
7
adverb"gently"
count1
8
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
2"deliberately"
3"perfectly"
4"suddenly"
5"slightly"
6"truly"
7"gently"
8"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount6000
totalAiIsms71
found
0
word"whisper"
count8
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"footfall"
count1
3
word"weight"
count6
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"measured"
count3
6
word"echo"
count3
7
word"warmth"
count6
8
word"resolved"
count1
9
word"depths"
count1
10
word"desire"
count2
11
word"wavering"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count4
13
word"shimmered"
count2
14
word"silence"
count2
15
word"tinge"
count1
16
word"fluttered"
count1
17
word"footsteps"
count1
18
word"could feel"
count2
19
word"etched"
count1
20
word"traced"
count1
21
word"sense of"
count2
22
word"tangible"
count1
23
word"anticipation"
count1
24
word"otherworldly"
count1
25
word"familiar"
count1
26
word"tracing"
count1
27
word"intricate"
count1
28
word"trembled"
count1
29
word"chill"
count1
30
word"flickered"
count1
31
word"sentinel"
count7
32
word"wavered"
count1
33
word"crystalline"
count1
34
word"echoes"
count1
35
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"velvet"
2"footfall"
3"weight"
4"pulse"
5"measured"
6"echo"
7"warmth"
8"resolved"
9"depths"
10"desire"
11"wavering"
12"pulsed"
13"shimmered"
14"silence"
15"tinge"
16"fluttered"
17"footsteps"
18"could feel"
19"etched"
20"traced"
21"sense of"
22"tangible"
23"anticipation"
24"otherworldly"
25"familiar"
26"tracing"
27"intricate"
28"trembled"
29"chill"
30"flickered"
31"sentinel"
32"wavered"
33"crystalline"
34"echoes"
35"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"sent a shiver through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences248
matches
0"d in anticipation"
1"felt a chill"
2"d in warmth"
67.97% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount11
narrationSentences248
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences277
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5935
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions46
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions142
wordCount5193
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.96
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone11
Pendant8
Rory50
Fae-Forged3
Blade3
Isolde25
Fae5
Grove3
Hel1
Earth3
Nyx20
Seer1
Golden2
Empress2
Evan2
Cardiff1
Sentinel1
Veil1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"Blade"
3"Isolde"
4"Grove"
5"Nyx"
6"Seer"
7"Evan"
places
0"Fae"
1"Golden"
2"Cardiff"
3"Sentinel"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences236
glossingSentenceCount20
matches
0"whisper that seemed to ride the fibres of the air"
1"as if listening to a conversation they were not supposed to hear"
2"It was as if the grove breathed in measured, careful cycles, and every exhale carried a whisper of another realm"
3"something like wooden teeth biting on the dr"
4"sounded like a held breath, and far away t"
5"not quite water, more like a mirror thinned to a whisper"
6"looked like liquid starlight, shallow and"
7"as if listening their shadows brushing Rory's shoulder in the way a cautious friend might brush away a melting fear"
8"chorus that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once, mouthing images rather than words"
9"parchment—that seemed to come from every direction and none"
10"rhythm that seemed to lace through her already-busy thoughts, urging steadiness"
11"as if weighing the weight of a single choice against a lifetime of regrets"
12"something like steel running through it"
13"felt like a ritual even when spoken in"
14"sounded like pages turning"
15"sounded like a breeze through dry leaves"
16"felt like soil but a living, breathing"
17"felt like a memory brushing the skin, l"
18"not-quite memory"
19"looked like a gaze, and held it"
20"not quite a person and not quite a reflection, ready to move in tandem if the moment demanded"
21"not quite a reflection, ready to move in tandem if the moment demanded"
22"It was as though the grove had decided to reveal the consequence of their choice, a consequence that wore many faces and spoke in the language of echoes"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches29
per1kWords4.886
wordCount5935
matches
0"not of their bodies but of versions of themselves"
1"not out of caution but because the space pressed in around them, as if the grove we"
2"not walls at all but living trees, their trunks bearing knots"
3"no trace but"
4"Not thin enough to slip through unscathed, but thin enough to hear what would never reach a mortal ear"
5"not of water, but of choices"
6"not to Rory, but to the space between them"
7"not with a crack but with a voice, a chorus"
8"not in a way that threatened to throw them, but in a way"
9"not to yield to the grove’s riddling pace but to take it in measured syllables"
10"not of darkness but of intention"
11"not hostile at first, but it carried a severity"
12"not real eyes but the illusion of many possibilities, one of"
13"not a door you can simply walk through,” the keeper replied, not with malice but with the calm certainty of something"
14"not with malice but with the calm certainty of something"
15"not a wall to be broken but a map to be read"
16"no longer felt like soil but"
17"not abruptly, but with a patient transformation"
18"not invading but inviting"
19"not an obstacle to be overcome, but a teacher offering a different measure of courage"
20"not from droplet disturbance but from a presence approaching, something with shape"
21"not violently, but with the cadence of a drumbeat"
22"not of flesh but of light"
23"not loud but inexorable"
24"not a mouth but a memory with teeth"
25"not hunger for flesh but for choice"
26"Not a breaking sound, but a kind of tearing of the air, like fabric thinning to reveal"
27"not spoken but felt"
28"not through a doorway but into a blade’s edge"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences277
matches
0"delivered that order"
64.67% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs107
mean55.47
std20.87
cv0.376
sampleLengths
093
122
219
381
448
562
624
762
888
969
1087
1128
1265
1350
1494
1559
1636
1772
1830
1952
2066
2115
2244
2348
2486
2521
2687
2717
2845
2969
3075
3168
3255
3325
3480
3546
3627
3767
3855
3974
4046
4123
4245
4337
4439
4527
4677
4767
4884
4945
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences248
matches
0"were painted"
1"was kept"
2"being watched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount9
totalVerbs764
matches
0"were listening"
1"was folding"
2"was learning"
3"were breathing"
4"were being"
5"were singing"
6"was not coming"
7"were listening"
8"were singing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount52
semicolonCount16
flaggedSentences47
totalSentences277
ratio0.17
matches
0"The grove answered with a soft, thrumming throat—not sound so much as a heartbeat beneath bark and stone."
1"The air had a weight to it, a scent of resin and something sweeter and older—honey, perhaps, and something sharp like iron filings."
2"The grove did not merely accept her presence; it acknowledged it with a subtle sigh, like a tree waking from a long sleep."
3"The ground rose and fell in small, unaccountable hills; when Rory stepped on a rise, the earth beneath her boot gave a tiny sigh, as though the soil preferred her to press on, not linger."
4"The world smelled of rain-soaked earth and something sweeter that teased the tongue—a sweetness that pushed at fear, tugging it into a knot behind the ribcage."
5"It rotated slowly when touched by shadow; it did not reflect faces so much as possibilities."
6"The Heartstone pendant thumped against her chest—an irregular march, like a drumline that insisted on keeping time with a strange, unknowable measure."
7"Above, motes of light drifted like pollen caught in a sunless current; they glowed with a pale amber that did not belong to any day Rory had ever known."
8"“The Fae Grove is not merely a place; it is a memory with teeth.”"
9"A soft chime—not a sound, exactly, more like a sensation of air rearranging itself—came from the heart of the chamber."
10"The doorway was not physical; it shimmered as if it were painted on air, an entrance framed by roots that glowed with a faint copper sheen."
11"She did not speak aloud—she did not want to wake what lay sleeping within."
12"The new place had a smell of wet stone and cinnamon, and a sound—like quills scratching across an ancient parchment—that seemed to come from every direction and none."
13"The sound of their footsteps—taps and soft sighs of fabric—sounded almost ceremonial here, as if they had crossed into a sanctum where memory was kept in every grain of dust."
14"The Fae Grove did not merely watch; it tested."
15"Isolde’s gaze softened, and for a moment Rory saw the ancient woman’s expression shift into something almost tender—the kind of look a seer might reserve for a true believer or a marked child."
16"The group advanced toward a central feature—a pedestal carved from living roots, its surface smooth as glass and filled with a faint, tremulous light, as though the stone itself were breathing."
17"On the pedestal rested a small relic—no larger than Rory’s thumbnail—the Heartstone Pendant’s crimson glow answering the relic’s presence as if they were kin."
18"The glyphs whispered in a language Rory had studied only in the margins of forbidden textbooks—the language of wards and solstice doors, the language that binds Hel and Earth."
19"The air thickened, and a scent—honey and thunderclap—spilled across the chamber in a wave that pressed against their chests."
20"A sound—soft as spoken lace—arrived from the grove’s far edge, where the light thinned and the trees grew taller and stranger."
21"In that moment Rory glimpsed a future in which she never delivered that order to the Golden Empress or never escaped Evan’s hold; a future in which a different choice had led her to ruin or glory in equal measure."
22"The keeper’s form shifted, becoming more tangible for a moment—a figure wearing a coat of night, with eyes like smeared stars."
23"The keeper’s smile—if it could be called a smile when the mouth did not exist—was almost visible."
24"Then the door—if it could still be called a door—shimmered along the moss circle, the edge of the moss curling inward as if the wall itself were being turned."
25"The moss door opened with a sigh, and beyond it lay a corridor of living light—an otherworldly tunnel where the amber glow gathered into constellations and moved as if a current ran through the air."
26"As they moved, the space around them changed—not abruptly, but with a patient transformation."
27"Somewhere behind them the pool’s light began to shimmer more strongly; a ripple moved across its surface, not from droplet disturbance but from a presence approaching, something with shape and intention and hunger—perhaps the Grove’s own appetite for discovery, or something older and darker that had learned to wear wonder as a disguise."
28"A low, rich sound rolled through the chamber—like a cello played by a hand that had learned its instrument in another life."
29"It was not coming from any one place; it seemed to exist inside the air itself, a gravity of sound that drew the trio toward the column."
30"Rory stepped into the doorway with a firm breath; the others followed."
31"The moment they did, a new sound rose, a chorus of voices not human yet not purely animal—a rustling of leaves and a chorus of whispered promises that one thing would be gained if they walked far enough and one thing would be lost if they faltered."
32"The corridor was narrow but not cramped; the walls moved with them, not against them, guiding their steps as if the grove itself authored each movement."
33"The figure did not move toward them; it watched."
34"“Speak your truth, walker of doors,” the sentinel’s voice—or the echo of it—rolled through the room, not loud but inexorable."
35"Then the door behind them—the doorway that had brought them here—began to seal itself, the moss curling back into a solid border as if the thing that had welcomed them now grew tired of their company."
36"A soft chime sounded again, and with it a heavy, mortal breath—someone or something drawing life from the space itself."
37"Each door was distinct: one framed with frost that hummed with the memory of every winter ever endured; another edged with vines that unpicked themselves when touched, revealing a deeper, darker seam beneath; a third that breathed a scent of spice and rain, as if a storm bottled itself into wood."
38"They would have to pick one, and that choice would set the next height of the grove’s hospitality—the difference between welcome and ward."
39"The guardian—the whisper of a presence—the sentinel—the Veil—the memory it haunted—watched."
40"The tree-sky above, a canopy of living, breathing leaves, began to hum again, a note that thrummed through their bones and into the blade’s frost and the pendant’s warmth, binding them to the moment—an instant in which all possibilities pressed in, and any wrong move could tumble them into a darkness from which the grove might never retrieve them."
41"The scene held—then, in the next heartbeat—an unearthly crack."
42"The portal they’d prepared for—if prepared they had—shivered, and the light that surrounded it wavered."
43"The door that Rory had chosen—the one framed by frost—glowed with a pale, cold light that tasted of ice and truth."
44"Behind her, the other two hesitated only for a breath—Isolde’s face showing a smile that was not a smile and a fear she would not name; Nyx, a shadow now only a shade, not quite a person and not quite a reflection, ready to move in tandem if the moment demanded."
45"And in that moment of stillness, a presence stepped forward from the shadow of the closest tree—slow, deliberate, and not exactly human."
46"Then a new sound rose—a deliberate, careful crunch of something stone and alive breaking under deliberate weight—and the world pitched a little, as though the memory of gravity had shifted in their favour or against it."
98.77% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2439
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount101
adverbRatio0.04141041410414104
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.01025010250102501
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences277
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences277
mean21.43
std9.98
cv0.466
sampleLengths
019
118
222
334
411
511
611
78
814
922
1022
1123
1220
139
1419
1515
1623
1724
1810
1914
209
2125
2228
2317
2416
2535
2620
2743
2826
2927
3016
3144
3215
3313
345
3522
3638
3722
3828
3912
4027
4129
4226
4328
4431
4522
4614
478
4822
4922
31.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats51
diversityRatio0.20216606498194944
totalSentences277
uniqueOpeners56
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount10
totalSentences245
matches
0"Instead she stepped through slowly,"
1"Then Isolde’s voice came again,"
2"Then it bowed its head"
3"Then the door—if it could"
4"Somewhere behind them the pool’s"
5"Then the ground trembled, not"
6"Then the door behind them—the"
7"Then the first door yielded"
8"Then Rory turned to the"
9"Then a new sound rose—a"
ratio0.041
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences245
matches
0"They drifted along the edge"
1"It was as if the"
2"It rotated slowly when touched"
3"She touched the stone with"
4"They slid between two trees"
5"They blinked once and then"
6"They spoke not to Rory,"
7"It looked almost like a"
8"Her gloved hand hovered just"
9"She drew a slow breath,"
10"She did not speak aloud—she"
11"They stood in what could"
12"It felt less like stepping"
13"They could feel the grove"
14"She did not move to"
15"She did not speak their"
16"they whispered, the words fusing"
17"She spoke aloud, choosing not"
18"It was not a voice"
19"It moved with a precision"
ratio0.163
8.98% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount221
totalSentences245
matches
0"Nyx slid from the seam"
1"The grove answered with a"
2"Aurora followed, the Heartstone Pendant"
3"Isolde paused at the lip"
4"Isolde said, voice a thread"
5"Rory caught her breath and"
6"Nyx moved again, a living"
7"They drifted along the edge"
8"The stones felt warm, not"
9"The air had a weight"
10"Nyx said, voice a whisper"
11"The words drew no breath,"
12"Rory’s eyes widened not because"
13"Isolde stepped closer to the"
14"The grove did not merely"
15"Rory half-smiled, more to reassure"
16"The pendant warmed again, a"
17"The Fae-Forged Blade at her"
18"The group pressed deeper, past"
19"The trees leaned in, as"
ratio0.902
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences245
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences195
technicalSentenceCount60
matches
0"Nyx slid from the seam of shadow first, a whisper of smoke that tasted of iron and rainless memory."
1"The stones felt warm, not hot, as if they had swallowed a sun and kept it tucked inside their brocade of lichen."
2"A few wildflowers bloomed in that instant, colours too vivid, petals catching light in ways that didn’t correspond to any sky they’d ever known."
3"The Fae-Forged Blade at her hip felt colder than usual, its moonsilver edge nipped with frost that refused to melt, even in the odd glow of the clearing."
4"The ground rose and fell in small, unaccountable hills; when Rory stepped on a rise, the earth beneath her boot gave a tiny sigh, as though the soil preferred h…"
5"The world smelled of rain-soaked earth and something sweeter that teased the tongue—a sweetness that pushed at fear, tugging it into a knot behind the ribcage."
6"Nyx paused by a pool of something that looked like liquid starlight, shallow and still yet not quite water, more like a mirror thinned to a whisper."
7"The surface shivered at their approach, and for a moment Rory thought she saw inside it, a reflection not of their bodies but of versions of themselves that cou…"
8"The Heartstone pendant thumped against her chest—an irregular march, like a drumline that insisted on keeping time with a strange, unknowable measure."
9"She touched the stone with the tip of a gloved finger, and the warmth spread through her hand, curling up her forearm, then relaxing into a steady warmth that m…"
10"They slid between two trees that bent inward as if listening, their shadows brushing Rory's shoulder in the way a cautious friend might brush away a melting fea…"
11"Above, motes of light drifted like pollen caught in a sunless current; they glowed with a pale amber that did not belong to any day Rory had ever known."
12"The group slowed, not out of caution but because the space pressed in around them, as if the grove were listening to their breath and composing a response."
13"The ground beneath their boots grew soft, springy, almost yielding, as if it remembered every step laid upon it and chose to cradle those feet for a heartbeat l…"
14"The knots formed patterns that resembled constellations, and in one place the pattern resolved into a circle of tiny, perfectly shaped eyes."
15"The air around a puddle of luminous liquid jittered with tiny waves, and from the depths rose a scent: spice and old book ink and something that tasted faintly …"
16"The Fae-Forged Blade hummed against her leg, colder than before, a shade of blue running along its edge as if it had just tasted something frostbite could only …"
17"Instead she stepped through slowly, feeling the moss lift like a soft carpet under her palm, the world narrowing and widening all at once as if the grove itself…"
18"The new place had a smell of wet stone and cinnamon, and a sound—like quills scratching across an ancient parchment—that seemed to come from every direction and…"
19"Nyx stepped in after Rory, their shadow silvering and uncoiling along the floor like smoke sucked into a chimney."
20"Isolde followed, her cloak catching the glow and turning it into a silver thread that braided around her wrists."
21"The sound of their footsteps—taps and soft sighs of fabric—sounded almost ceremonial here, as if they had crossed into a sanctum where memory was kept in every …"
22"The ground beneath shifted again, not in a way that threatened to throw them, but in a way that suggested it was learning them."
23"The group advanced toward a central feature—a pedestal carved from living roots, its surface smooth as glass and filled with a faint, tremulous light, as though…"
24"On the pedestal rested a small relic—no larger than Rory’s thumbnail—the Heartstone Pendant’s crimson glow answering the relic’s presence as if they were kin."
25"The glyphs whispered in a language Rory had studied only in the margins of forbidden textbooks—the language of wards and solstice doors, the language that binds…"
26"The Heartstone pendant pulsed with a rhythm that seemed to lace through her already-busy thoughts, urging steadiness."
27"It did not step into the light but into the memory of light, as though it remembered something from a century ago when this place was a different sort of world."
28"The blade’s temperature remained cold to the touch, a steadying influence rather than a weapon, and she glanced toward Isolde once more, the Seer’s eyes bright …"
29"Rory stepped forward, driven by something practical and stubborn, a stubbornness shaped by her pre-law training and the stubborn courage of someone who has lear…"
30"Nyx stepped closer to the keeper, their shadow coiling around the edge of the pedestal, listening to the conversation that was not spoken but implied through th…"
31"The entity looked at Rory with a kind of patient calculation, as if weighing the weight of a single choice against a lifetime of regrets."
32"Rory answered with a decisive calm that surprised her, the same calm that had kept her from breaking down under stress when she left Cardiff, when she walked aw…"
33"The light thickened, the amber glow sharpening into a pale gold that braided into the blue line of the blade’s frost."
34"The moss door opened with a sigh, and beyond it lay a corridor of living light—an otherworldly tunnel where the amber glow gathered into constellations and move…"
35"The air carried a whisper, a soft chorus that did not belong to any one language, and yet each syllable felt like a memory brushing the skin, like a distant fri…"
36"Somewhere behind them the pool’s light began to shimmer more strongly; a ripple moved across its surface, not from droplet disturbance but from a presence appro…"
37"The shadow thickened, pooling at their feet as if the being behind them wanted to become visible."
38"The runes shifted and rearranged themselves as if the column breathed, the letters rearranging into sentences Rory almost understood in a moment of not-quite me…"
39"A low, rich sound rolled through the chamber—like a cello played by a hand that had learned its instrument in another life."
40"Then the ground trembled, not violently, but with the cadence of a drumbeat that told them a threshold stood ahead, waiting for someone to cross and decide what…"
41"The seven runes on the stones flared in unison, and a door of air opened before them, a false wall that melted away to reveal a corridor of night-sky blue, dott…"
42"The passage opened into a vast auditorium carved in living wood, its ceiling an arched canopy of leaves that formed a ribbed vault, like a cathedral built from …"
43"The Heartstone Pendant’s glow intensified, bathing her hand in warmth that was almost a memory of sunlight on a winter day."
44"The sentinel’s shadow-lengthened, and for a heartbeat the room seemed to tilt, as if the entire grove were listening to the exchange with a careful, almost clin…"
45"The seven runes flared one last time, and the room’s walls rearranged, creating a new doorway that pointed toward the sentinel’s right, a path that would take t…"
46"Beside her, Nyx’s shadow stretched and gathered into a form of their own, a silhouette that felt ready to shield, strike, or simply stand between the party and …"
47"They entered the new corridor together, a small group moving through a living gate that breathed and exhaled with them."
48"The amber luminescence waxed and waned in a rhythm that felt almost like a heartbeat, guiding them toward a far-off glimmer that crawled along the edge of perce…"
49"As they neared the glow at the corridor’s end, a tremor ran through the earth beneath their feet, a deeper rumble that reminded Rory of something primal woken f…"
50"Each door was distinct: one framed with frost that hummed with the memory of every winter ever endured; another edged with vines that unpicked themselves when t…"
51"The tree-sky above, a canopy of living, breathing leaves, began to hum again, a note that thrummed through their bones and into the blade’s frost and the pendan…"
52"Rory looked at Isolde, who offered a quiet nod, a cryptic blessing, a sentence unfinished but understood."
53"The moment she crossed the threshold, the world dissolved into a narrow, bright corridor of memories and futures, all braided together as if a hundred threads h…"
54"Behind her, the other two hesitated only for a breath—Isolde’s face showing a smile that was not a smile and a fear she would not name; Nyx, a shadow now only a…"
55"The door slammed shut behind them with a sound that was not sound, a feeling of closing and sealing that sent a shiver through the grove."
56"The corridor darkened to a pale blue, and the light that guided them grew sharper, more crystalline, as if they walked not through a doorway but into a blade’s …"
57"It was as though the grove had decided to reveal the consequence of their choice, a consequence that wore many faces and spoke in the language of echoes."
58"The last thing she heard, before the corridor closed behind them and the world beyond became a whispered rumor, was a soft, resonant chord, as if the grove itse…"
59"Then a new sound rose—a deliberate, careful crunch of something stone and alive breaking under deliberate weight—and the world pitched a little, as though the m…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags32
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"Isolde warned softly, as if the warning might drive away a memory"
1"Nyx observed, voice barely above a hiss"
2"Isolde’s voice came again, a riddle, a flame curled in a throat:"
3"they whispered, the words fusing with the faint mythos of the place"
4"Isolde said, voice quiet as frost on a window"
5"it said, and the air shifted with a low sigh that sounded like pages turning"
6"Nyx warned, their voice a low thread across the floor"
7"Nyx said, their voice a breath of cold fire"
8"she said, her voice a measured chant,"
9"it—rolled, not loud but inexorable"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags29
fancyCount12
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Isolde warned softly (warn)"
2"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
3"Isolde admitted (admit)"
4"Nyx observed (observe)"
5"Rory spoke levelly (speak)"
6"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
7"Rory observed (observe)"
8"they whispered (whisper)"
9"Nyx warned (warn)"
10"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
11"Nyx urged (urge)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.483
leniency0.967
rawRatio0.414
effectiveRatio0.4
63.6631%