Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0P1YDN9C7916K4Z07XQCA

Run Details

Model:
GPT-4.1
Duration:
34.9s
Cost:
$0.022460
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“You've got your wires crossed.” Detective Harlow Quinn dropped to a knee, unbothered by the grime pressed into the tile cracks. Chalk dust motes swirled. She snapped on nitrile gloves, pinching her lips as she surveyed the scene. The abandoned Tube platform at Camden lay cordoned behind police tape, one booted constable at either end keeping back the odd vagrant and more enterprising teenager. A body sat propped against the oyster-tiled wall, legs splayed, chin sunk on chest. Blood darkened the shirt between a set of ribs, old, already tacky. Coins were pressed into both eyelids—coins not British, their stamped halos picked out in odd, runic script. Sergeant Patel hovered, shifting from heel to shin, notebook clutched with knuckles gone pink. His voice clanged, practiced but brittle. “Cause of death’s stabbing. See there? Puncture, straight through the lower sternum. No sign of a struggle—no defensive wounds, either. We’re chalking it up as attempted robbery gone foul.” Quinn grunted, letting her gaze map the field of play: a rucksack, half-zipped, contents scattered—phosphored books, a snap-top Tupperware, battered phone. No wallet in evidence. She plucked her penlight and tracked its beam over the nearest item: a small brass compass, casing mottled with green stains, ornate sigils etched about the face. The needle ticked, then quivered, twitching at angles no north could command. “Victim’s name?” She didn’t look back. “Arnold Dashwood. Civil servant, by his pass, works up at Whitehall. Odd one, ma’am. Tube records say he tapped in at Oxford Circus, then… nothing. CCTV blanks out for about four minutes. And the doors—sealed from the inside, control panels fried. Half the lot says it’s electrical fault.” Quinn said nothing. She picked up the compass, felt the grain of the sigils through the glove. She held it near the victim’s wrist—veins blue, skin gone the stiff white of candle wax. Patel persisted. “Notes in the books are all gibberish. Actual code, or a diary written on too much cough syrup. Shoreditch station logs a flicker on their alarm grid at 1:07 AM, but the logs got wiped.” She held up the coins from the eyes, pinched between finger and thumb. “These look like drachma, but they aren’t. Not Greek. Not Roman. The relief’s wrong, too crisp—tooling looks… recent.” Her eye narrowed. “And who robs a bloke, leaves a phone, but takes zero cash?” Patel’s lips drew thin. “Could be a copycat. Ritual goes viral every few years—urban myth stuff. Copycats never get the details right, though. Real occultists don’t use modern coins.” Quinn flicked her gaze to the dark in the tunnel mouth. Air smelled not just of oil and city-fatigue, but chalk, burnt ozone, something metallic with a back-note of singed lilac. She rose. Her boots cracked the dusty layer as she circled the victim, penlight skimming the soot-etched wall. “You checked the CCTV, you said?” “Whole stretch is buggered, not just here. Signal loops, then fuzz. Engineers swear it’s rats chewing cable.” “Rats ever make the air feel like static’s crawling up your arm?” She angled her torch—caught, just out of line in the bluish filter of dust and ancient grime, a set of half-moon marks gouged into the grout between tiles. She knelt, bringing her face close. The symbols, part-scrawled, half-carved, spiralled inward, each line angled as if drawn with a trembling, desperate hand. Quinn looked up. Patel started, looking as if he’d rather stare anywhere else but the corpse’s ruined chest. “Doors sealed from inside, you said?” She swept her gaze sideways, back at the entry. “And yet—the victim walks in, alone, sits himself down, and carves runes? All while bleeding neat into his own shirt? You buy that?” Patel’s voice came tight. “Two witnesses in the service tunnel say they heard music. Bells, maybe—a child’s toy, they reckon. No one saw anyone leave.” Quinn looked at her watch, scratched faceplate caught the shadows. DS Morris had loved the Tube. Out of sight, out of mind—safe until you glimpsed something that watched you back. She raised the victim’s wrist with her gloved fingers. Abrasion—a narrow welt, high on the palm. Not a defensive wound. Rope-burn, old but layered, like someone habitually bound the hand for weeks. She pressed the tips, methodical: found a trace of wax below the thumbnail. She scraped a sample into a tiny plastic pouch. “Night staff recognise Dashwood?” she asked. Patel shook his head. She swept her gaze to the ceiling, caught a dark stripe across the pipes. Tar? No—thicker, almost congealed, and the scent lingered: not smoke, not grease, some lingering ghost of burnt thyme. She thumbed the compass. The needle snapped west, but then twitched again, widdershins, unsettled. Patel hovered by the books. “You ever seen a compass like this?” She weighed it in her hand. “Not one that won’t point north.” She scanned the pages—ink scribblings, train numbers, dates, sigils scrawled in a meticulous, looping hand. Some margins bulged, odd words pressed so ink bled through. She leafed gently through one page, only to stop. Crumpled between thin chapters, a bone token clattered to the tile—off-white, smoothed and stamped with the unmistakable glyph of the Veil Market. Harlow sighed, a bone deep ache. “Where’s the security feed backup?” Patel straightened. “Digital only. No analogue back here—tapes stopped last year.” Her mouth bent, half smile, half razor-blade. “Right. And the power?” “Half the grid’s dead. Nothing tripped in the usual boards. Fault teams are waiting.” She pushed upright, slipped the coin and the bone token into separate evidence bags. “Get labs on this. Chain of custody tight—I’ll want the prints, metallurgical, the works. Audible trace check on those frequency bands, too. Anything that might pick up music. And—Patel, bring in Hargraves from the linguistic unit.” He nodded stiffly, the air charged between their tight ring of evidence. The boredom and routine of a robbery gone wrong faded beneath the scurry of wheels and boots up above—the world rolling on without them, the shadowed realm below pulsing with its secrets. Her mobile vibrated. Quinn checked it, quick flick: ‘OFFICE: URGENT. BARNET CALL 147’. She ignored it and slipped the mobile away. Patel hovered, more anxious now. “You look like you know something.” “Nothing I’d bet a week’s wages on.” She crouched at the tiles again, tracing her pen between spiral and scratch-mark. “But tell your blokes I want this area sealed by three corridors out. No one but authorised crew, forensics—no Tube men down here, no lone cleaners.” He licked his lips. “You see something I missed?” “Everyone sees the surface, Sergeant. Trick is to see the scratch behind the mirror.” She paused, eyes landing again on the compass—its needle now spinning in place, an agitated dance shadowed with intent. Patel shifted. “You think he came for this—” he pointed at the compass “—or for the Market?” Quinn only smiled, eyes flat. “People kill for a lot less. But if this is what I think it is—” A burst of noise shattered the hush. Bootsteps hammered down the far stairs. A blue-uniformed constable crashed up to the tape, panting, face wild. “Detective! We’ve got movement! Lights just flicked on down the tunnel—maintenance room’s open. Someone’s in there—swears they saw a girl with red hair run past.” Quinn’s eyes snapped to the shadowed end, then to the compass, then to the bloody marks etched into the ancient wall. She bolted.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1262
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1262
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"etched"
count3
1
word"quivered"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count2
4
word"methodical"
count1
5
word"unsettled"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"vibrated"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"dance"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"quivered"
2"flicker"
3"flicked"
4"methodical"
5"unsettled"
6"scanned"
7"charged"
8"vibrated"
9"tracing"
10"dance"
11"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences76
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1225
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.06% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount770
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.3
worstName"Patel"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn9
Tube2
Camden1
British1
Patel10
Tupperware1
Morris1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Patel"
3"Tupperware"
4"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
globalScore0.851
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
36.73% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.633
wordCount1225
matches
0"not just of oil and city-fatigue, but chalk, burnt ozone, something metallic with a back-note of s"
1"No one but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean21.12
std13
cv0.616
sampleLengths
05
133
226
343
420
529
625
739
86
948
1033
1137
1213
1333
1429
1531
1618
176
1817
1940
2023
2118
2238
2325
2430
2545
269
276
284
2932
3014
3112
3212
3325
349
3522
366
375
3811
397
404
4114
4214
4336
4444
4521
4611
4746
484
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"were pressed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs150
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences98
ratio0.112
matches
0"Coins were pressed into both eyelids—coins not British, their stamped halos picked out in odd, runic script."
1"Quinn grunted, letting her gaze map the field of play: a rucksack, half-zipped, contents scattered—phosphored books, a snap-top Tupperware, battered phone."
2"She held it near the victim’s wrist—veins blue, skin gone the stiff white of candle wax."
3"“Rats ever make the air feel like static’s crawling up your arm?” She angled her torch—caught, just out of line in the bluish filter of dust and ancient grime, a set of half-moon marks gouged into the grout between tiles."
4"Out of sight, out of mind—safe until you glimpsed something that watched you back."
5"Abrasion—a narrow welt, high on the palm."
6"No—thicker, almost congealed, and the scent lingered: not smoke, not grease, some lingering ghost of burnt thyme."
7"She scanned the pages—ink scribblings, train numbers, dates, sigils scrawled in a meticulous, looping hand."
8"Crumpled between thin chapters, a bone token clattered to the tile—off-white, smoothed and stamped with the unmistakable glyph of the Veil Market."
9"The boredom and routine of a robbery gone wrong faded beneath the scurry of wheels and boots up above—the world rolling on without them, the shadowed realm below pulsing with its secrets."
10"“Everyone sees the surface, Sergeant. Trick is to see the scratch behind the mirror.” She paused, eyes landing again on the compass—its needle now spinning in place, an agitated dance shadowed with intent."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount775
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.024516129032258065
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005161290322580645
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean12.5
std9.34
cv0.747
sampleLengths
05
116
24
313
426
514
612
717
814
96
1029
1121
124
1327
1412
156
1648
173
1814
1916
202
2135
2213
2321
2412
254
2625
2711
2820
292
3016
316
3217
3340
346
3517
363
3715
3815
3923
404
4121
4210
436
4414
459
467
474
4812
4913
79.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4897959183673469
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners48
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
49.41% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences68
matches
0"She snapped on nitrile gloves,"
1"His voice clanged, practiced but"
2"She plucked her penlight and"
3"She didn’t look back"
4"She picked up the compass,"
5"She held it near the"
6"She held up the coins"
7"Her eye narrowed"
8"Her boots cracked the dusty"
9"She angled her torch—caught, just"
10"She knelt, bringing her face"
11"She swept her gaze sideways,"
12"She raised the victim’s wrist"
13"She pressed the tips, methodical:"
14"She scraped a sample into"
15"She swept her gaze to"
16"She thumbed the compass."
17"She weighed it in her"
18"She scanned the pages—ink scribblings,"
19"She leafed gently through one"
ratio0.426
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences68
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn dropped to"
1"Chalk dust motes swirled."
2"She snapped on nitrile gloves,"
3"The abandoned Tube platform at"
4"A body sat propped against"
5"Blood darkened the shirt between"
6"Coins were pressed into both"
7"Sergeant Patel hovered, shifting from"
8"His voice clanged, practiced but"
9"Quinn grunted, letting her gaze"
10"She plucked her penlight and"
11"The needle ticked, then quivered,"
12"She didn’t look back"
13"Quinn said nothing."
14"She picked up the compass,"
15"She held it near the"
16"She held up the coins"
17"Her eye narrowed"
18"Patel’s lips drew thin."
19"Quinn flicked her gaze to"
ratio0.926
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The symbols, part-scrawled, half-carved, spiralled inward, each line angled as if drawn with a trembling, desperate hand."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.033
leniency0.067
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.9137%