Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0P6H6D55GYSMAJPDA1MET

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Duration:
36.1s
Cost:
$0.004735
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The flickering emergency lights cast long shadows across the abandoned Tube station. Detective Harlow Quinn descended the concrete steps, her worn leather watch catching the intermittent glow. The air hung thick with the coppery scent of blood and something else—something ancient and wrong. "About time, Quinn." Sergeant Davies stood beside a body crumpled against the tiled wall. "Control radioed you were en route twenty minutes ago." "Traffic on Camden High Street." Harlow's eyes swept the scene. "What have we got?" "Your usual Camden lowlife." Davies gestured with his penlight. "Nigel Croft. Thirty-two. Record longer than your arm. Petty theft, aggravated burglary, two counts of GBH. Found by maintenance crew this morning. Wallet's gone. Phone's gone. Looks like a robbery gone wrong." Harlow crouched beside the body, her military precision evident in every movement. She noted the victim's eyes—wide open, pupils dilated. The wound on his neck was precise, almost surgical. "Robbery?" She ran a gloved finger across the victim's jacket. "No defensive wounds. No signs of struggle. His pockets are inside out, but carefully so. Not the work of some desperate addict looking for a fix." Davies shrugged. "Professional then. Someone who knew what they were doing." "Maybe." Harlow tilted the victim's head slightly, revealing a small symbol etched behind the ear. "But professionals don't usually leave their calling cards." Davies leaned in. "What is that? Some gang tattoo?" "It's not a tattoo." Harlow's voice dropped. "It's fresh. Done post-mortem." She stood and walked the perimeter of the scene. The abandoned station had been out of service for decades, dust thick on everything except where the body lay. Her eyes caught something glinting beneath a discarded newspaper. She bent to retrieve it. "Found this?" she asked Davies, holding up a small brass compass with verdigris patina and etched sigils on its face. Davies nodded. "In his hand. Probably nicked it from some tourist. Worth anything?" "Depends who you ask." Harlow watched the needle spin erratically before pointing steadily toward a dark tunnel ahead. "This is no ordinary compass." The SOCO team arrived, their equipment cases clattering on the concrete. Harlow gestured to the tunnel entrance. "Seal off the main area. I want that tunnel checked." "Quinn, it's probably collapsed. This station's been closed since the seventies." "Just humour me, Davies." She pulled her torch from her belt. "I'm going to take a look." The tunnel was narrower than the main platform, pipes running along the ceiling. Water dripped somewhere in the darkness. Ten metres in, Harlow found what she was looking for—a section of wall that looked newer than the rest, the bricks less weathered. "Davies!" she called out. He approached, his torch beam bouncing off the walls. "What is it?" "A false wall." Harlow ran her hands along the mortar. "Recently built. Look at the difference in the brickwork. And this symbol here." She pointed to a small carving just above eye level. "Same as the one on our victim." "So he was part of whatever operation this is?" "Or he stumbled onto it." Harlow stepped back. "Get the team to bring the heavy equipment. We're going through." An hour later, the wall came down, revealing a narrow passage. The air that rushed out carried scents Harlow recognised—incense, herbs, and something metallic that wasn't blood. "Christ," Davies whispered. "What is this place?" Harlow stepped through the opening into a hidden chamber. Shelves lined the walls, filled with jars, books, and items that defied easy classification. In the centre stood a stone altar, stained with what looked like old blood. "Unsolved cases from the last six months," Harlow said, her voice barely above a whisper. "All with similar symbols, all with victims who had connections to the underground markets." Davies followed her gaze. "You think this is connected to those disappearances in Camden?" "I know it is." Harlow picked up a leather-bound ledger from the altar. "And I think Nigel Croft wasn't a victim of a robbery. He was a sacrifice." She opened the ledger, flipping through pages filled with names, dates, and astronomical calculations. Halfway through, she found a page marked with a fresh bloodstain. "Tomorrow night," she read. "The full moon. The ritual requires three more." Davies paled. "Three more what?" "Victims." Harlow closed the ledger. "And I think I know who they're planning to take." She pulled out her phone, scrolling through a list of names. "Three people with connections to the British Museum's restricted archives. All working on supernatural research. All reported missing in the last week." "The museum?" Davies shook his head. "That's not your usual territory, Quinn." "No, it's not." Harlow's eyes narrowed. "But my source at the museum mentioned a researcher named Eva Kowalski who specialises in occult artifacts. She was supposed to meet me yesterday with information about a supernatural black market operating in Camden." "You think she's one of the targets?" "I know she is." Harlow slipped the ledger into an evidence bag. "And this Veil Market moves locations every full moon. Tomorrow." Davies followed her back through the tunnel. "So what's the plan? We can't just raid a place we can't find." Harlow held up the compass, watching its needle spin. "We don't need to find it. It will find us." As they emerged back into the main station, Harlow's phone buzzed. A single text message from an unknown number: THEY HAVE ME. VEIL MARKET. MIDNIGHT. Harlow showed the message to Davies. "They're getting desperate. That means they're getting careless." "Or it's a trap." "Definitely a trap." Harlow smiled grimly. "But they don't know we have this." She tapped the compass. "Or that I know exactly what they're planning." She turned to leave, then stopped. "Davies, get a team together. Tactical unit. No one from my usual squad. And make sure they're all clean." "You think there's a leak?" "After what happened to Morris?" Harlow's hand instinctively went to her watch. "I know there is." She headed back toward the station entrance, her mind already working through the possibilities. Tomorrow night. The Veil Market. And a ritual that required three more sacrifices before the full moon reached its peak. Three years ago, she'd lost her partner to something she couldn't explain. Something supernatural. Now she had a chance to understand what really happened to DS Morris—and to stop it from happening to anyone else. The compass in her pocket grew warm against her leg. Whatever lay ahead in the Veil Market, she would be ready for it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Harlow stepped back [back]"
1"Harlow smiled grimly [grimly]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.377
leniency0.754
rawRatio0.087
effectiveRatio0.066
81.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1085
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"slightly"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1085
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"etched"
count2
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"glinting"
2"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
81.63% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences70
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1077
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount603
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.65
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Harlow22
Quinn1
Davies12
Veil2
Market2
Morris1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Davies"
3"Morris"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0
windowScore0
96.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like old blood"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1077
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean21.12
std11.31
cv0.535
sampleLengths
043
123
214
341
429
536
611
723
89
911
1042
1120
1213
1323
1417
1510
1611
1717
1842
194
2012
2140
229
2319
2427
257
2637
2729
2814
2928
3025
3112
325
3315
3433
3512
3640
377
3822
3920
4019
4125
4214
434
4425
4525
465
4716
4834
4935
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs107
matches
0"was looking"
9.35% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences107
ratio0.047
matches
0"The air hung thick with the coppery scent of blood and something else—something ancient and wrong."
1"She noted the victim's eyes—wide open, pupils dilated."
2"Ten metres in, Harlow found what she was looking for—a section of wall that looked newer than the rest, the bricks less weathered."
3"The air that rushed out carried scents Harlow recognised—incense, herbs, and something metallic that wasn't blood."
4"Now she had a chance to understand what really happened to DS Morris—and to stop it from happening to anyone else."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount609
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.026272577996715927
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.011494252873563218
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean10.07
std6.06
cv0.602
sampleLengths
012
115
216
314
49
510
64
79
832
912
108
119
1210
1326
142
159
1615
178
183
196
207
214
229
2319
249
255
2620
272
2811
2918
305
3111
326
3310
3411
3511
366
3713
386
3923
404
419
423
4310
4423
457
469
478
4811
4911
87.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5327102803738317
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners57
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences61
matches
0"She noted the victim's eyes—wide"
1"She ran a gloved finger"
2"She stood and walked the"
3"Her eyes caught something glinting"
4"She bent to retrieve it."
5"she asked Davies, holding up"
6"She pulled her torch from"
7"she called out"
8"He approached, his torch beam"
9"She pointed to a small"
10"She opened the ledger, flipping"
11"She pulled out her phone,"
12"She tapped the compass"
13"She turned to leave, then"
14"She headed back toward the"
ratio0.246
9.18% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences61
matches
0"The flickering emergency lights cast"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
2"The air hung thick with"
3"Sergeant Davies stood beside a"
4"Harlow's eyes swept the scene"
5"Davies gestured with his penlight"
6"Harlow crouched beside the body,"
7"She noted the victim's eyes—wide"
8"The wound on his neck"
9"She ran a gloved finger"
10"Harlow tilted the victim's head"
11"Davies leaned in."
12"Harlow's voice dropped"
13"She stood and walked the"
14"The abandoned station had been"
15"Her eyes caught something glinting"
16"She bent to retrieve it."
17"she asked Davies, holding up"
18"Harlow watched the needle spin"
19"The SOCO team arrived, their"
ratio0.902
81.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"Now she had a chance"
ratio0.016
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Harlow said, her voice barely above a whisper"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Davies whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.049
leniency0.098
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.033
84.3306%