Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0QT9QB0PFT9MV0R8F18ZH

Run Details

Duration:
1m 8s
Cost:
$0.004210
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to Eva's Flat hissed shut behind him, and the room swallowed the sound like a drawn breath. Ptolemy, the tabby, tracked the visitor with a slow blink from the windowsill, tail flicking with bored curiosity. Lamps threw pools of warm light across stacks of parchment, coffee cups, and a map that hadn’t seen a pin in months. The air carried the scent of cumin from downstairs and rain from outside, a blend that should have felt ordinary and did not. Lucien Moreau stood in the doorway, ivory cane resting against his forearm, the tip tapping a metronome against the tile. His suit was charcoal, the angle of his jaw sharp, the way his eyes moved—one amber, one black—telling him to assess first, ask later. He stepped in, and the door sighed shut behind him with a finality that reminded Rory of close calls and worse failures. Lucien: Rory. Rory didn’t flinch at the sound, only let her shoulders drop a fraction, like a hinge easing after a storm. She stood on the threshold of the living area, the glow of the lamp catching the crescent scar on her left wrist as if it remembered every childhood misstep that had led her here. Rory: You picked a good moment to resurface. The remark came out dry, almost clinical, as she closed the distance between them. Her eyes—bright blue, the colour of ice and sky torn in one moment—held him at arm’s length, though her posture betrayed a tremor she pretended not to feel. Lucien’s cane tapped the floor once, twice, a patient knock on a closed door. He didn’t hurry into her space. He didn’t need to. Lucien: London has a way of arranging reunions, doesn’t it? Like a streetlight that won’t stop buzzing until you walk into its glow. Rory’s lips pressed into a line, then relaxed when she remembered to keep the edge in check. She stepped closer to the desk, not far from the lamp, and set the delivery bag she had been carrying down with deliberate care. The room felt smaller all at once, crowded with memory and the soft whine of the city outside the window. Rory: You said you’d stay away from places that bite. This one bites back. Lucien glanced around, the corners of his mouth lifting in a small, almost shameful smile. He rarely showed such signs—not to Rory, not to anyone who could read him like a street map. Lucien: I learned to read the bite. It’s not about staying away. It’s about knowing where to stand when it happens. The words hung between them, heavy with the weight of things left unsaid: what had brought them to this moment, what broken thing they might try to mend if they loosened their grip, what truth they were both pretending wasn’t true. Ptolemy stretched, padded softly toward Rory, then paused and flicked his tail toward Lucien as if acknowledging a rival in the room. The cat’s quiet presence did something to Rory’s shoulders, a reminder that not all battles required a blade. Rory: I didn’t invite you here to trade weather and old ghosts. There’s a reason you’re here, and it isn’t nostalgia. Lucien angled his head, the pale blond hair catching the lamp’s glow, making the platinum color almost unreal. He didn’t answer immediately, letting the moment stretch until the silence began to feel pointed. Lucien: You know I don’t waste a doorway unless there’s a stake in it. I have information you want. And I know you want something more than that. Rory’s breath hitched, just a fraction, and she rubbed at the crescent scar again without thinking. It was a habit she kept hidden behind a free-wheeling calm, but right now it felt like a badge she wore to remind herself of who she used to be. Rory: Speak plainly, Lucien. Eva’s Flat doesn’t run on charm and phrases. Lucien stepped further in, the cane’s ivory grip catching a glint of the lamp. He studied her face, the corners of his mouth twitching with something like regret and something else she could not name. Lucien: There’s a job. Not your usual delivery route. It drags the supernatural into the open and drags you along with it whether you want to be dragged or not. You’re the one I trust to keep a straight line through the chaos. Rory: And you’re the one who will twist a line until it snaps. What’s the job? The question came out sharper than she intended, but she hadn’t asked for a soft landing. She wanted facts. She wanted to know whether the old spark between them could stand a stiff wind or vanish beneath the dust of past mistakes. Lucien set the cane down against the edge of a chair, not caring if it scraped. His gloved fingers found the edge of his lapel, adjusted it with surgical precision, and then he looked at her with a directness that might have frightened someone less steady. Lucien: The source has gone missing. A courier with a half-remembered name—Aurora Carter—delivered a package that wasn’t a package, not exactly. It was a map, a handful of coordinates, and a warning carved into the wood of the box. Whoever took the map knows enough to hurt us both if we trust the wrong mouth. Rory: And you expect me to trust your mouth? Lucien offered a dry half-smile that didn’t quite reach his eyes. Lucien: You know I don’t trust easily. But you’ve never been the kind to sit back while the game plays out. I’m offering you a way to cut the thread before it unravels everything around us. Rory: Why tell me now? If this is a trap, you’ve already walked into it. Lucien’s gaze softened, the weathered severity in him thinning for a moment to reveal something almost vulnerable. Lucien: Because you deserve the truth, and because you’ve got a reason to care—more than most people who walk away from you would admit. The coordinates point to Eva’s Flat itself, to this building. It’s not far from the place you’ve been living, Rory. It’s a lure, and you know it’s a lure. But you also know what a lure looks like when it’s lined with truth. The room seemed to tilt, the way information lands when it carries a personal weight. Rory’s grip tightened around the back of a chair, the wood cool under her fingers, the tremor in her hand barely visible. Rory: You’re asking me to walk into a trap you sent? You’re asking me to trust you again in the middle of something you’ve set up to test loyalty? Lucien raised a hand, palms outward, as if to calm both of them and the space around them. Lucien: I’m asking you to move with your eyes open. If you choose not to walk into the trap, you walk around the edge of it. You don’t walk alone. That word—alone—hit harder than a slap. Rory dropped her gaze, letting the lamplight catch the blue of her eyes, the glint of something that looked suspiciously like longing rather than calculation. Rory: You’re not the Lion of this city. You’re a man who makes bargains with monsters and then calls it a service. I learned to survive on my own terms, Lucien. I learned to keep the people I care about at arm’s length because I can’t afford to watch them get burned. Lucien’s lips pressed into a line, and he looked away toward the window as if the street below held something he couldn’t bear to face. The rain began to patter softly against the pane, a slow drumbeat that seemed to mark time with their heartbeat. Lucien: You cared once. You cared enough to walk away from Evan when he turned the room hot with fear, enough to put your own future on hold for a friend. You still care. I can smell it in the way you stand, in the way you keep your hand on the chair as if it might teach you to trust again. Rory’s breath hitched—not with anger but with something close to relief that he hadn’t slashed at the truth with another possible excuse. Her gaze traveled the room as if trying to map out every tiny thing that might keep them from stepping too close to each other. Rory: It’s not about him now. It’s about what you’ll do if I agree to this. If we work together, what comes after? Lucien’s eyes—amber and black—held hers with a steady, almost surgical patience. Lucien: After, you have more power than you think. The map reveals a place where an old breach between realms might reopen, or seal itself, depending on who touches it and when. You have reason to care about that breach. You, more than most people in London, know how fragile the line between us and what waits beyond. Rory staggered back a step, not because she was disoriented but because the weight of old decisions pressed down on her. She pressed a hand to her wrist, the opposite palm covering the caress of the scar she wore like a stubborn piece of weathered metal. Rory: And if I say yes? What then? Lucien stepped closer, his shadow swallowing the small light around him. He did not touch her, not yet, but the distance was narrowing in a way that felt like a film catching fire in slow motion. Lucien: Then we move. You lead when you must, I cover when you don’t think you can. We decide what to tell Eva’s Flat’s cat and what to keep to ourselves. There are lines no one should cross, Rory, and we won’t cross them alone. Ptolemy purred, as if on cue, and sauntered toward Rory’s boot, rubbing against her ankle with a casual insistence that felt almost intimate. The cat’s warmth spread through Rory’s leg, grounding her a little despite the tremor in her stomach. Rory: Eva’s Flat is a trap. If you’re right, and the coordinates point here, then someone wants us to collide. If we collide, we will burn. Lucien’s jaw shifted, the shadow of a smile hovering, then dropping away. Lucien: I’ve learned to walk through fires without burning. Not to pretend I’m immune, but to pretend I don’t care if the smoke makes us cough. Your lungs remember the smoke from a long time ago, Rory. My lungs remember something else—what it’s like to be saved by a decision you didn’t fully understand. Rory’s eyes softened, briefly, almost apologetically, before she hardened again. She looked at the map of notes pinned to the wall, a network of lines and codes that she had spent weeks deciphering. Her voice dropped to a careful, almost cautious tone. Rory: You want me to trust you because you’ve helped in the past. But trust is not a currency you can set on a corner and expect it to stay there when the wind shifts. Lucien reached for the edge of the desk, his fingers brushing over a folded parchment as if it were a fragile memory he refused to spill. He lifted his gaze to hers, a silent invitation. Lucien: Then we rebuild trust with one deliberate act. Tonight, when the rain stops—if the rain stops—we move together toward Eva’s Flat’s center, toward that edge. We stand there, not looking away, and we decide what to do with the map and what to do with what it tells us. Rory’s breath came a touch faster, but the fight in her remained, buried beneath the practical, careful lines of her face. The room felt tighter, the space between them a line they might walk until it broke. Rory: We do this by the book, not by a fever dream. No heroics, Lucien. If this goes wrong, I won’t pretend it’s your fault or mine. It’ll just be something we learned to live with. There was a long blink of silence, during which the rain intensified, drumming a patient rhythm against the windowpane and the ceiling. Ptolemy rose and settled into Rory’s lap, curling his striped tail around the crook of her elbow as if to mark the moment with a small seal of mercy. Lucien leaned his weight onto the cane and stepped a fraction closer, the scent of rain and citrus rising with his breath. He didn’t touch her; he never pressed beyond a careful, respectful distance. He spoke softly, as if the room could absorb every syllable if he spoke just so. Lucien: Then we start with a map, and we finish with a decision. Tonight, Rory, you have a choice—to walk away again or to walk forward with me into a future we can control, if not entirely understand. Rory tilted her head, looking at him with a fierce, almost defiant tenderness that surprised even her. She wasn’t the kind to surrender to hope easily, but in the dim light of Eva’s Flat, with the cat purring at her knee and the rain tracing silver paths on the glass, it felt possible to admit what she’d never allow aloud: that the pull between them still existed, stubborn as an old scar and bright as a new dawn. Rory: Then we walk. But we walk on my terms, Lucien. If we’re going to shake hands with fate, we do it with honesty and a plan that won’t unravel the moment someone breathes the wrong way. Lucien’s eyes brightened at the challenge, and his mouth quirked into a cautious, almost boyish grin that didn’t suit the severity of his usual poise. He stepped the remaining inches forward, not touching, yet closer than before, their breaths mingling in the small space between them. Lucien: Then we begin with the courier’s name, the broken map, and the truth we’ve carried for too long. Rory, I’m here to stay long enough to see this through—if you still want me there when the dawn comes. Rory’s gaze drifted to the map pinned to the wall, to the faint tremble of the lamp’s light on the glass, to the countenance of a man who had walked into her life with a blade in his pocket and a charm she’d sworn off long ago. She did not answer with words right away. Instead, she reached for the small knife she kept hidden in a drawer, the blade catching a glint in the lamplight. She did not draw it; she set it on the desk where the map lay, a steady, deliberate act, as if telling the world she would not let danger pass unsafely through her hands again. Rory: Then we start by listening, not talking. We hear what this city is trying to tell us, and we decide if we’ll listen twice. Lucien inclined his head once, slowly, the barest reflection of a smile crossing his features. He did not push. He did not rush. The quiet between them stretched and then bent, a rope that might snap or hold, depending on how carefully they walked it. Lucien: Listening first, acting second. I can work with that. The room settled into a rhythm again, the rain against the window a careful percussion that kept time with their breaths. Ptolemy shifted, curling tighter against Rory’s thigh, as if to remind them both of the ordinary life that waited outside the door, a reminder that not all battles needed to be loud. Rory: Fine. You stayed quiet long enough to let me decide. Tell me what you’ve learned about the map. Tell me who wants us listening and why. Lucien’s gaze moved to the parchment, where lines and symbols scrawled in a language only a few would recognise threaded across the page. He spoke in measured, precise syllables, a language the world of London and its shadowed corners understood: names, dates, places, and the way one choice could fracture a dozen futures. Lucien: There’s a name tied to the courier—one that won’t stay quiet. There’s a breach near the old river, a seam between the world we walk and the one we pretend isn’t there. And there’s a person who would rather we be fractured than coordinated. I will tell you the rest, but not all of it tonight. Not all of it, not all at once, not while the cat is listening and the rain keeps time with the truth we’re about to tell. Rory’s lips curved into a small, stubborn smile—one that was all heat and steel and not one ounce of surrender. She reached out, not to touch him, but to push the map a fraction closer to the light, as if the act could make the future more visible. Rory: Then we start with the next move, not the last word. And we keep Eva’s Flat as our ground, not our shield. If we’re walking into a trap, we do it with a plan that makes the trap pull us toward the truth, not toward a noose. The cat’s purr grew louder for a moment, then softened as if content to witness the beginning of something neither of them would admit aloud yet, something that lay somewhere between danger and desire, between fear and trust. The rain kept its patient tempo, and in that rhythm, Rory found something she hadn’t expected to find again: a certainty that she would choose to walk with him into whatever came next—not because she needed him, but because she chose to. Lucien lowered his head, the ivory cane resting against his leg as he studied her face, a careful, almost reverent look that belonged to people who knew what it meant to risk the heart for something worth having. He stepped closer, the space between them narrowing again, and this time he did not retreat. Lucien: Then we begin, Rory. Not by fear, but by choice. And we’ll decide what to tell Eva’s Flat’s cat when the moment comes. Rory’s gaze found his, bright blue meeting the shade of his amber-black eyes, a collision of past and present that felt almost inevitable. She lifted her chin, a quiet, defiant acknowledgment of what they both already knew—that this might be the last quiet night in Eva’s Flat before the world tilted again, and they would have to choose whether they stood together or fell apart. Rory: Then we start with the map, and we finish with a decision. Tonight, we choose to move forward, or we choose to let go. Either way, you’ll stay long enough for me to see you mean it. Lucien nodded, a slow, grave movement that carried more weight than an oath. He did not smile again, not fully, but the hint of something grateful—perhaps for the stubborn courage she kept forcing to the surface—softened his features enough to be almost tender. Lucien: Then we begin. And we do it with eyes open and hands steady. Ptolemy’s purr turned into a soft exhale, the kind that suggested relief at finding a pair who might actually pull together instead of pulling apart. The room settled into a quiet that felt like the first careful step toward trust, the city outside continuing its patient, indifferent rain, and the future unfolding, moment by moment, in the small, deliberate space of Eva’s Flat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
92.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3239
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"softly"
count3
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
2"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3239
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"weight"
count5
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count2
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"charm"
count2
5
word"glint"
count3
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"tenderness"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"unravel"
count1
11
word"measured"
count1
12
word"fractured"
count1
13
word"desire"
count1
14
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicked"
2"reminder"
3"silence"
4"charm"
5"glint"
6"warmth"
7"stomach"
8"tenderness"
9"tracing"
10"unravel"
11"measured"
12"fractured"
13"desire"
14"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences202
matches
0"t with fear"
1"t with anger"
29.70% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount11
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences202
filterMatches
0"know"
1"think"
2"decide"
3"hear decide"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"began to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences202
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3211
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions153
wordCount3211
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.49
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva11
Flat11
Moreau1
Rory48
You18
London3
Lucien45
Speak1
Aurora1
Carter1
Lion1
Evan1
Listening1
Fine1
Ptolemy6
Tonight3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Flat"
2"Moreau"
3"Rory"
4"You"
5"Lucien"
6"Aurora"
7"Carter"
8"Evan"
9"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.753
windowScore0.5
8.76% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences177
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"as if acknowledging a rival in the room"
1"felt like a badge she wore to remind he"
2"something like regret and something else she"
3"quite reach his eyes"
4"drumbeat that seemed to mark time with their heartbeat"
5"something close to relief that he hadn’t slashed"
6"as if trying to map out every tiny thing that might keep them from stepping too close to each other"
7"felt like a film catching fire in slow"
8"as if telling the world she would not let danger pass unsafely through her hands again"
9"felt like the first careful step toward"
13.14% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords1.869
wordCount3211
matches
0"not with anger but with something close to relief"
1"not yet, but the distance was narrowing in a way"
2"Not to pretend I’m immune, but to pretend I don’t care if the smoke makes us cough"
3"not to touch him, but to push the map a fraction closer to the light, as if the ac"
4"Not by fear, but by choice"
5"not fully, but the hint of something grateful"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences202
matches
0"places that bite"
1"codes that she"
2"knew—that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs82
mean39.16
std19.99
cv0.51
sampleLengths
082
166
22
354
48
542
624
723
861
914
1033
1121
1241
1340
1421
1533
1628
1746
1812
1935
2043
2116
2242
2346
2455
259
2611
2736
2815
2917
3067
3137
3229
3318
3430
3531
3652
3745
3862
3947
4023
4111
4258
4346
448
4536
4645
4740
4826
4912
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences202
matches
0"was disoriented"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs569
matches
0"was narrowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences202
ratio0.094
matches
0"His suit was charcoal, the angle of his jaw sharp, the way his eyes moved—one amber, one black—telling him to assess first, ask later."
1"Her eyes—bright blue, the colour of ice and sky torn in one moment—held him at arm’s length, though her posture betrayed a tremor she pretended not to feel."
2"He rarely showed such signs—not to Rory, not to anyone who could read him like a street map."
3"A courier with a half-remembered name—Aurora Carter—delivered a package that wasn’t a package, not exactly."
4"Lucien: Because you deserve the truth, and because you’ve got a reason to care—more than most people who walk away from you would admit."
5"That word—alone—hit harder than a slap."
6"Rory’s breath hitched—not with anger but with something close to relief that he hadn’t slashed at the truth with another possible excuse."
7"Lucien’s eyes—amber and black—held hers with a steady, almost surgical patience."
8"My lungs remember something else—what it’s like to be saved by a decision you didn’t fully understand."
9"Tonight, when the rain stops—if the rain stops—we move together toward Eva’s Flat’s center, toward that edge."
10"He didn’t touch her; he never pressed beyond a careful, respectful distance."
11"Tonight, Rory, you have a choice—to walk away again or to walk forward with me into a future we can control, if not entirely understand."
12"Rory, I’m here to stay long enough to see this through—if you still want me there when the dawn comes."
13"She did not draw it; she set it on the desk where the map lay, a steady, deliberate act, as if telling the world she would not let danger pass unsafely through her hands again."
14"Lucien: There’s a name tied to the courier—one that won’t stay quiet."
15"Rory’s lips curved into a small, stubborn smile—one that was all heat and steel and not one ounce of surrender."
16"The rain kept its patient tempo, and in that rhythm, Rory found something she hadn’t expected to find again: a certainty that she would choose to walk with him into whatever came next—not because she needed him, but because she chose to."
17"She lifted her chin, a quiet, defiant acknowledgment of what they both already knew—that this might be the last quiet night in Eva’s Flat before the world tilted again, and they would have to choose whether they stood together or fell apart."
18"He did not smile again, not fully, but the hint of something grateful—perhaps for the stubborn courage she kept forcing to the surface—softened his features enough to be almost tender."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3239
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount113
adverbRatio0.03488731089842544
lyAdverbCount22
lyAdverbRatio0.006792219820932387
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences202
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences202
mean15.9
std9.42
cv0.593
sampleLengths
019
118
222
323
420
524
622
72
820
934
108
1114
1228
1314
146
154
1610
1713
1817
1924
2020
2110
224
2315
2418
257
265
279
2841
2922
3018
3112
329
3318
3415
3514
365
379
3816
3930
404
418
4214
4321
444
455
4621
4713
4813
493
40.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.15841584158415842
totalSentences202
uniqueOpeners32
16.75% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences199
matches
0"Instead, she reached for the"
ratio0.005
93.37% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences199
matches
0"His suit was charcoal, the"
1"He stepped in, and the"
2"She stood on the threshold"
3"Her eyes—bright blue, the colour"
4"He didn’t hurry into her"
5"He didn’t need to."
6"She stepped closer to the"
7"He rarely showed such signs—not"
8"It’s not about staying away."
9"It’s about knowing where to"
10"He didn’t answer immediately, letting"
11"I have information you want."
12"It was a habit she"
13"He studied her face, the"
14"It drags the supernatural into"
15"You’re the one I trust"
16"She wanted facts."
17"She wanted to know whether"
18"His gloved fingers found the"
19"It was a map, a"
ratio0.317
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount129
totalSentences199
matches
0"The door to Eva's Flat"
1"Ptolemy, the tabby, tracked the"
2"Lamps threw pools of warm"
3"The air carried the scent"
4"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
5"His suit was charcoal, the"
6"He stepped in, and the"
7"Rory didn’t flinch at the"
8"She stood on the threshold"
9"The remark came out dry,"
10"Her eyes—bright blue, the colour"
11"Lucien’s cane tapped the floor"
12"He didn’t hurry into her"
13"He didn’t need to."
14"Rory’s lips pressed into a"
15"She stepped closer to the"
16"The room felt smaller all"
17"This one bites back."
18"Lucien glanced around, the corners"
19"He rarely showed such signs—not"
ratio0.648
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount10
totalSentences199
matches
0"Whoever took the map knows"
1"If this is a trap,"
2"If you choose not to"
3"If we work together, what"
4"If you’re right, and the"
5"If we collide, we will"
6"If this goes wrong, I"
7"If we’re going to shake"
8"If we’re walking into a"
9"Either way, you’ll stay long"
ratio0.05
33.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences144
technicalSentenceCount22
matches
0"Lamps threw pools of warm light across stacks of parchment, coffee cups, and a map that hadn’t seen a pin in months."
1"He stepped in, and the door sighed shut behind him with a finality that reminded Rory of close calls and worse failures."
2"She stood on the threshold of the living area, the glow of the lamp catching the crescent scar on her left wrist as if it remembered every childhood misstep tha…"
3"Lucien angled his head, the pale blond hair catching the lamp’s glow, making the platinum color almost unreal."
4"His gloved fingers found the edge of his lapel, adjusted it with surgical precision, and then he looked at her with a directness that might have frightened some…"
5"A courier with a half-remembered name—Aurora Carter—delivered a package that wasn’t a package, not exactly."
6"Lucien offered a dry half-smile that didn’t quite reach his eyes."
7"Rory dropped her gaze, letting the lamplight catch the blue of her eyes, the glint of something that looked suspiciously like longing rather than calculation."
8"You’re a man who makes bargains with monsters and then calls it a service."
9"He did not touch her, not yet, but the distance was narrowing in a way that felt like a film catching fire in slow motion."
10"Ptolemy purred, as if on cue, and sauntered toward Rory’s boot, rubbing against her ankle with a casual insistence that felt almost intimate."
11"Lucien reached for the edge of the desk, his fingers brushing over a folded parchment as if it were a fragile memory he refused to spill."
12"Ptolemy rose and settled into Rory’s lap, curling his striped tail around the crook of her elbow as if to mark the moment with a small seal of mercy."
13"Rory tilted her head, looking at him with a fierce, almost defiant tenderness that surprised even her."
14"Lucien’s eyes brightened at the challenge, and his mouth quirked into a cautious, almost boyish grin that didn’t suit the severity of his usual poise."
15"She did not draw it; she set it on the desk where the map lay, a steady, deliberate act, as if telling the world she would not let danger pass unsafely through …"
16"The quiet between them stretched and then bent, a rope that might snap or hold, depending on how carefully they walked it."
17"Ptolemy shifted, curling tighter against Rory’s thigh, as if to remind them both of the ordinary life that waited outside the door, a reminder that not all batt…"
18"The cat’s purr grew louder for a moment, then softened as if content to witness the beginning of something neither of them would admit aloud yet, something that…"
19"Lucien lowered his head, the ivory cane resting against his leg as he studied her face, a careful, almost reverent look that belonged to people who knew what it…"
20"Ptolemy’s purr turned into a soft exhale, the kind that suggested relief at finding a pair who might actually pull together instead of pulling apart."
21"The room settled into a quiet that felt like the first careful step toward trust, the city outside continuing its patient, indifferent rain, and the future unfo…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
78.0261%