Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0R5M54GZYEB0G4EB3GGT1

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
25.0s
Cost:
$0.013151
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The lock clicked open before Rory could lift her head. Feet in polished charcoal brogues filled the threshold. Rory’s fingertips froze on the edge of her notebook. Ptolemy’s tail whipped against the floorboards. He stepped in without waiting. His tailored charcoal suit pressed ink-black against the cluttered walls. Amber eye flicked to her bright blue gaze, then to the small crescent scar on her left wrist. “I was unwise to assume you’d gone out,” Lucien said, voice smooth as the ivory handle of his cane. Rory closed the notebook with a snap. “You were unwise to show up unannounced.” He traced a finger along the spines of Eva’s reference books. Dust motes drifted through the kitchen doorway, catching the dim lamplight. “I require sanctuary.” She rose, spine straight. Every book in the flat glared at her, accusing. “Eva’s cooking dinner. You’ll disturb her.” His amber eye softened. “Only if you allow me.” Ptolemy hissed and darted behind Rory’s legs. She braced a hand on the doorframe. Heart thudded, a memory she’d never exorcised. “Why now?” She searched his face for the ghosts she knew too well. He rested the cane on the worn rug. “I have no one else.” Rory swallowed. She reminded herself to stay cool-headed. Lucien Moreau, half-demon fixer, information broker—her ex, by all accounts, though they never labelled it. Hurt glimmered beneath his slicked-back platinum blond hair. Hurt she still felt. She stepped aside. “Make it quick.” He passed, shoulders squared. A faint scent of brimstone clung to his starched collar. Rory clenched her jaw as he closed the door. The three deadbolts of Eva’s flat far below would hold exactly long enough. She motioned toward the single chair by the narrow table. “Sit.” Lucien settled, cane leaning against his knee. His black eye darted around the cramped space, landing on her scattered papers. “You’re researching the Avaros sigils.” Her chest tightened. “Just helping Eva catalogue her notes.” He smirked, amber eye gleaming. “Always the dutiful assistant.” She ignored the barb. The room smelled of cardamom and old parchment. She perched on the edge of the bed. “Talk.” Silence settled for a moment so thick it crackled. Then he spoke, each word deliberate. “Avaros hunts me.” Her pulse jumped. “Hunts you? Why?” “Betrayal,” he said, voice low. “I stole something from their vault.” She pushed to her feet, pacing past the table. “You risked London for a whim?” His gaze followed her. “That vault held more than silver. It held proof of my father’s murder.” She paused, pen trembling in hand. “You wanted revenge.” “Closure.” He closed his eyes, amber eye darkening. “I never asked you to join.” Rory leaned against the battered wardrobe. She traced a chipped knot in the wood. “You did ask. Three months ago, at the docks.” His jaw tightened. “Circumstance.” She snapped the pen cap. “You lied.” He nodded, slow. “I lied.” Her breath caught. Years of unsaid words pressed at her throat. “Why leave me behind?” Lucien rose. He moved nearer, closing the distance to the narrow bed. “To protect you.” Her gaze swiped to the cane. “Protect me? You disappeared.” He lifted his chin. “I had to draw them away. You weren’t strong enough—” Her fist slammed the mattress. “I would have fought.” His black eye flashed. “You have no idea what they can do.” She pressed her palm to the scar on her wrist. Passionate minutes earlier, this had felt petty. Now it stung with unshed tears. A rumble vibrated through the floorboards. Ptolemy spat and darted beneath the table. Rory’s head snapped to the kitchen door. Lucien’s shoulders stiffened. “They’re close.” Rory backed toward the window. The single pane rattled. Streetlamps cast long shadows across the cramped room. Smoke from the curry house drifted in, redolent of turmeric and scorch. “Wasn’t I enough?” Rory whispered. He bent, slid the cane blade free with a soft click. “If I could have left them here—” A sudden crash echoed from below. Metal against metal. The wall beside the door quivered. Rory glanced at Lucien’s blade. Cold silver. Her heart pounded. “Why help you now?” He faced her, cane held like a promise. “Because I owe you the truth.” A deafening bang shook the flat. Splinters flew from the frame. Lucien dropped the cane and gripped her shoulders. “Move.” They dived behind the table as the door splintered inward. A low chant slithered through the crack. Something heavy pressed against the wood from outside. Rory’s knuckles whitened on the table’s edge. Ptolemy screeched. The glass panel beside her rattled loose. Lucien swept her arm. “To the window.” Together they scrambled, stumbling over scattered scrolls. Rory yanked the pane free. The ledge was narrow, more dream than solid. Beyond, the alley reeked of rubbish and damp bricks. A ragged claw scraped the door. Rotting wood fell into the flat. Lucien seized Rory’s wrist. “Trust me.” She met his black eye, found the spark that had drawn her across crowded rooms and burning docks. She swallowed. “Always.” He slung the cane over his shoulder, blade glinting. He hoisted her onto the ledge. Rory kicked off the floor, found purchase on the grimy brick. Below, shadows shifted. A shape crouched, chanting in a tongue older than London. Fingers tipped in bone. Lucien vaulted next to her, blade drawn. Ptolemy’s frantic mew drifted through the gaping door. Rory’s breath hitched. “They’ll follow.” Lucien’s amber eye narrowed. “Let them.” They dropped together into the alley. Rory hit the cobbles, pain lancing her hip. Lucien rolled, sprang to his feet, helping her up. Above them, the flat door burst open. The chanting turned into a hiss, then a roar. Rory limped beside Lucien as he guided her between bins. He whispered, “I led them here. I’ll lead them away.” She shook her head, vision skittering with fear and something like exhilaration. “Not without me.” A sickly green glow bled down the stairwell. Lucien smiled, blade poised. “We go together.” The first inhuman shriek reverberated off the brick walls. Lucien’s lips curved. “After you.” Rory drew in a ragged breath. She raised her chin, pain forgotten. “Right.” They charged into the narrow passage, side by side, light from the flat flickering behind them. Shadows surged forward. Their chase began.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1046
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1046
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"traced"
count2
2
word"sanctuary"
count1
3
word"gleaming"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count1
8
word"quivered"
count1
9
word"glinting"
count1
10
word"reverberated"
count1
11
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"traced"
2"sanctuary"
3"gleaming"
4"silence"
5"pulse"
6"vibrated"
7"echoed"
8"quivered"
9"glinting"
10"reverberated"
11"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences124
matches
0"g with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences124
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences166
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen19
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1041
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
37.71% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount846
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity2.25
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory19
Eva2
Moreau1
Lucien15
London1
Ptolemy5
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Moreau"
3"Lucien"
4"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.377
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like exhilaration"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1041
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences166
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean15.09
std7.54
cv0.5
sampleLengths
010
18
215
333
419
514
625
719
89
921
1013
1113
1235
136
1436
1511
1625
179
189
1921
2018
216
2211
2315
2417
259
2614
2723
284
297
305
3115
3215
3310
3414
359
3612
3723
3820
395
4029
415
4218
4315
4414
4514
4620
4725
4816
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs168
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences166
ratio0.006
matches
0"Lucien Moreau, half-demon fixer, information broker—her ex, by all accounts, though they never labelled it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount851
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.01880141010575793
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0023501762632197414
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences166
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences166
mean6.27
std3.46
cv0.552
sampleLengths
010
18
29
36
45
510
618
719
87
97
1011
1111
123
134
149
156
164
175
187
197
207
2113
228
235
242
256
2615
278
284
293
303
314
3210
339
3413
3510
361
377
3813
395
403
416
425
434
444
458
468
471
489
496
61.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3795180722891566
totalSentences166
uniqueOpeners63
28.49% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences117
matches
0"Then he spoke, each word"
ratio0.009
62.74% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences117
matches
0"He stepped in without waiting."
1"His tailored charcoal suit pressed"
2"He traced a finger along"
3"She rose, spine straight."
4"His amber eye softened."
5"She braced a hand on"
6"She searched his face for"
7"He rested the cane on"
8"She reminded herself to stay"
9"She stepped aside."
10"He passed, shoulders squared."
11"She motioned toward the single"
12"His black eye darted around"
13"Her chest tightened."
14"He smirked, amber eye gleaming."
15"She ignored the barb."
16"She perched on the edge"
17"Her pulse jumped."
18"he said, voice low"
19"She pushed to her feet,"
ratio0.393
11.28% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount105
totalSentences117
matches
0"The lock clicked open before"
1"Feet in polished charcoal brogues"
2"Rory’s fingertips froze on the"
3"Ptolemy’s tail whipped against the"
4"He stepped in without waiting."
5"His tailored charcoal suit pressed"
6"Amber eye flicked to her"
7"Lucien said, voice smooth as"
8"Rory closed the notebook with"
9"He traced a finger along"
10"Dust motes drifted through the"
11"She rose, spine straight."
12"Every book in the flat"
13"His amber eye softened."
14"Ptolemy hissed and darted behind"
15"She braced a hand on"
16"Heart thudded, a memory she’d"
17"She searched his face for"
18"He rested the cane on"
19"She reminded herself to stay"
ratio0.897
42.74% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences117
matches
0"Now it stung with unshed"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Lucien said, voice smooth as the ivory handle of his cane"
1"he said, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Rory whispered (whisper)"
1"He whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.083
leniency0.167
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.083
82.7418%