Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0RZQMN3MT1X36M8W5PGK9

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Duration:
1m 10s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The brass compass spun wildly in Quinn's palm, its needle whirring like a trapped insect. She'd found it clutched in the victim's left hand — wrong hand for a suicide, wrong angle for the wound, wrong everything about this scene. "Touch anything else?" Detective Morrison's voice carried that particular tone reserved for crime scenes that made no sense. "Just documenting." Quinn slipped the compass into an evidence bag. The thing looked Victorian, all etched sigils and verdigris patina. Not exactly standard issue for a banker's Tuesday morning. The body sprawled across mahogany floorboards in what the estate agent would call 'characterful disarray'. Male, mid-forties, Armani suit worth more than Quinn's monthly salary. The blood pool had stopped spreading an hour ago, edges already darkening to rust. "Neighbours heard the shot at 7:23." Morrison consulted his notebook. "Building security shows nobody in or out since yesterday evening. Classic locked room." Quinn crouched beside the body. Entry wound behind the right ear, powder burns consistent with close range. The Glock lay three feet away, exactly where physics said it should fall from a slack hand. Too exact. "You buying suicide?" Morrison shrugged. "Man's got debts. Wife left him last month. Lost the Camden development deal to Porter Industries." He gestured at the panoramic windows overlooking the Thames. "Nice last view though." The victim's office occupied the entire top floor of a converted warehouse in Southwark. All exposed brick and steel beams, the kind of place that screamed success until you looked closer. Dust on the awards. Dead plants. Coffee rings on documents marked FINAL NOTICE. Quinn stood, knees protesting. Eighteen years on the force had left their marks. She walked to the desk, careful to avoid the blood spatter that decorated the wall like a Jackson Pollock. "What's that?" Morrison pointed to chalk marks on the floor. White lines formed a rough circle around the body, intersected by symbols that hurt to look at directly. "Probably nothing. Decorator's marks, maybe." But Quinn photographed them anyway. The symbols looked almost Greek, if Greek had been invented by someone having a stroke. One particular character caught her eye — a backwards sigma where an S should be. Her phone buzzed. Text from forensics: 'No gunpowder residue on victim's hands.' "Morrison." She held up the phone. "Our banker's never fired that gun." "Could've worn gloves. Suicides get fancy sometimes." Quinn opened the desk drawers. Tax documents, contracts, the usual detritus of a failing business. The bottom drawer stuck. She yanked harder and it flew open, revealing a leather-bound journal and a receipt. 'The Cunning Crow - Occult Supplies & Curiosities.' Address in Camden. Paid by credit card two days ago. "Since when do investment bankers shop for occult supplies?" Morrison peered over her shoulder. "Since they get desperate enough to try anything. My aunt reads tea leaves when her pension's looking dodgy." Quinn flipped through the journal. Pages of cramped handwriting, growing more erratic toward the end. References to 'the Market', 'shadow paths', 'the price of passage'. The final entry, dated yesterday: 'E says the Veil Market can solve everything. One trade. One sacrifice. Dawn at the Camden entrance.' "E?" Morrison raised an eyebrow. "Could be anyone. Ex-wife's name was Sarah though." Quinn walked back to the body, studying the chalk circle from different angles. The symbols weren't random. They formed a pattern, like someone following instructions they didn't quite understand. "Look at his shoes." Morrison crouched beside her. The victim's Oxford shoes gleamed with fresh polish except for the soles. Brick dust and something else — a green residue that smelled of damp earth and decay. "That's not from here." Quinn scraped a sample into a vial. "This building's been renovated for years. No exposed brick dust." "Could've picked it up anywhere." "At 7 AM? In Armani?" Her phone rang. Unknown number. "Quinn." "Detective?" A woman's voice, nervous. Young. "I... I think I need to report something. About James Fletcher." Quinn's pulse quickened. Nobody had released the victim's name. "Who is this?" "I work at the museum. British Museum. Archives. James came to see me yesterday about... about some materials." "What's your name?" A pause. "Eva. Eva Kowalski. He wanted information about something called the Veil Market. I told him it was just folklore, but..." Quinn grabbed Morrison's notebook, scribbled furiously. "But what?" "He had a compass. Brass, with strange markings. Said he'd bought it in Camden. Said it would show him the way." The evidence bag weighed heavy in Quinn's pocket. "Where are you now?" "Still at work. Detective, James was scared. Really scared. He kept talking about debts that couldn't be paid with money." "Stay there. Don't talk to anyone else." Quinn ended the call, mind racing. Morrison had moved to the window, studying the view. "Forensics are here. Want to tell them about your phone friend?" "In a minute." Quinn returned to the chalk circle, seeing it differently now. Not decoration. Not random markings. Instructions. Bad instructions, like someone trying to perform surgery from a YouTube video. The compass in evidence bag had stopped spinning. Its needle pointed steadily northwest. Toward Camden. "Morrison, pull everything on occult-related calls in Camden the past week. Break-ins, disturbances, anything weird." "Weirder than this?" The forensics team bustled in, bringing cameras and chemicals and the clinical detachment that made death into data. Quinn stepped aside, but kept her eyes on that chalk circle. Three years ago, she'd lost her partner to something the official report called 'misadventure'. Morris had been following leads into a series of disappearances, all connected to Camden Market. His body turned up in an abandoned Tube station, surrounded by symbols nobody could explain. Different symbols than these. But the same desperate amateur quality. "Detective Quinn?" The lead forensics officer, a thin man who looked like he survived on coffee and disappointment. "We've got something odd." He led her to the desk where UV lights revealed more writing, invisible to the naked eye. Coordinates. Times. And a single word repeated over and over: PAYMENT. "Blood?" "No. Something organic though. We'll need lab analysis." Quinn's phone buzzed again. Morrison, from across the room: 'Found something.' She joined him by the window where he'd pulled back heavy curtains to reveal more symbols drawn directly on the glass. These were different — older looking, more carefully crafted. "Protection symbols," Morrison said. "My grandmother used to draw these. Old country stuff." "They didn't work." "Maybe they weren't meant to keep something out." Morrison's face had gone pale. "Maybe they were meant to keep something in." A metallic taste filled Quinn's mouth. The air felt heavier suddenly, charged like before a storm. The compass in her pocket began spinning again, needle going haywire. "We need to get to Camden." She headed for the door. "Call for backup to meet us at the old Warren Street station." "The abandoned one? Why?" Quinn thought about Morris, about symbols in the dark, about debts that couldn't be paid with money. The journal had mentioned dawn at the Camden entrance. It was barely nine AM now. "Because whatever killed James Fletcher, it wasn't that gun." The compass needle swung north, insistent as a heartbeat. Pointing the way to answers she wasn't sure she wanted to find.
total_cost0.20496

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.32
leniency0.64
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1204
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"carefully"
2"suddenly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Sarah"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1204
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"standard"
count1
2
word"eyebrow"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"quickened"
count1
5
word"racing"
count1
6
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"standard"
2"eyebrow"
3"pulse"
4"quickened"
5"racing"
6"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1205
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount815
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity2.33
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn19
Morrison12
Victorian1
Tuesday1
Male1
Armani1
Glock1
Thames1
Southwark1
Jackson1
Pollock1
White1
Greek2
One3
Camden4
Oxford1
Young1
YouTube1
Morris2
Market1
Tube1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morrison"
2"Victorian"
3"Glock"
4"Jackson"
5"White"
6"Greek"
7"Morris"
places
0"Thames"
1"Southwark"
2"Camden"
3"Oxford"
4"YouTube"
globalScore0.334
windowScore0.167
62.28% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite understand"
1"looked like he survived on coffee and dis"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1205
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean17.99
std12.25
cv0.681
sampleLengths
040
118
229
339
423
534
62
73
831
944
1032
1128
125
1335
1412
1512
167
1733
1818
199
2023
2147
225
238
2429
254
2632
2721
285
295
305
311
3217
3312
3418
353
3622
378
3821
3912
4020
4113
4220
433
4428
4513
462
4715
483
4929
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"been invented"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs137
matches(empty)
58.82% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences136
ratio0.029
matches
0"She'd found it clutched in the victim's left hand — wrong hand for a suicide, wrong angle for the wound, wrong everything about this scene."
1"One particular character caught her eye — a backwards sigma where an S should be."
2"Brick dust and something else — a green residue that smelled of damp earth and decay."
3"These were different — older looking, more carefully crafted."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount352
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.022727272727272728
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.008522727272727272
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean8.86
std5.62
cv0.634
sampleLengths
015
125
218
310
410
59
615
710
814
910
1013
115
1212
1317
142
153
162
1725
184
1914
2017
214
222
237
244
259
2619
2710
2818
295
305
3115
3215
333
349
356
366
377
385
3910
404
4114
4211
437
449
455
4618
475
4810
4910
93.87% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5808823529411765
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners79
39.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"All exposed brick and steel"
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences84
matches
0"She'd found it clutched in"
1"He gestured at the panoramic"
2"She walked to the desk,"
3"Her phone buzzed."
4"She held up the phone"
5"She yanked harder and it"
6"They formed a pattern, like"
7"Her phone rang."
8"Its needle pointed steadily northwest."
9"His body turned up in"
10"He led her to the"
11"She joined him by the"
12"She headed for the door"
13"It was barely nine AM"
ratio0.167
61.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences84
matches
0"The brass compass spun wildly"
1"She'd found it clutched in"
2"Detective Morrison's voice carried that"
3"Quinn slipped the compass into"
4"The thing looked Victorian, all"
5"The body sprawled across mahogany"
6"The blood pool had stopped"
7"Morrison consulted his notebook"
8"Quinn crouched beside the body."
9"Entry wound behind the right"
10"The Glock lay three feet"
11"He gestured at the panoramic"
12"The victim's office occupied the"
13"Dust on the awards."
14"Coffee rings on documents marked"
15"Quinn stood, knees protesting."
16"She walked to the desk,"
17"Morrison pointed to chalk marks"
18"The symbols looked almost Greek,"
19"Her phone buzzed."
ratio0.798
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The forensics team bustled in, bringing cameras and chemicals and the clinical detachment that made death into data."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.02
leniency0.04
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.6996%