Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0S27B5C9KVZYZ9XXRXC9Q

Run Details

Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.004903
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to Eva’s Flat sighed open, letting in the bite of the Brick Lane night and the smell of cumin and rain. Three deadbolts rasped softly as the frame absorbed a weight that wasn’t there before. Ptolemy, the tabby with too much opinion for a creature born of fuss and mischief, lifted his head from a pile of books, flicked his ears, and decided a stranger hadn’t taken his seat on the radiator. Lucien Moreau stepped inside and let the door fall shut behind him with the precise, almost ceremonial click of a lock being set. The corridor narrowed around his shoulders, the suit he wore swallowing the space with a quiet menace. He paused long enough for the cane he carried to tip lightly against the floor, the ivory handle catching a pale glint of lamplight. The air changed, as if the room had exhaled and found itself lighter with the demon-blooded man in it. Lucien’s arrival threaded a current through the flat’s clutter—books and scrolls stacked in precarious towers; chalk circles faintly scuffed on the floor where someone once traced wards and warnings; a map pinned to a corkboard bleeding ink into the edge of a coffee-stained notebook. The cat watched from the edge of a chair, then hissed once when the footsteps stopped measuring the room. Lucien’s eyes, one amber like a flame, the other a black coal, scanned quickly before they settled on Rory. She stood by a low table cluttered with a mug and paper, blue light from a screen bleaching the edges of a scar on her left wrist—the small crescent-shaped mark that wasn’t hers to forget. Lucien: "Miss Carter. I didn’t expect the barrow of secrets to roll this far up Brick Lane." Rory’s fingers tightened around the mug, the ceramic cool against her skin. She kept her gaze fixed on him, as if the room’s shadows could reflect his face better than any mirror could. Lucien’s presence shifted the air, and the cat, offended by abrupt interruption in his kingdom, slunk along the edge of the radiator, tail a crisp white line behind it. Rory walked the short distance from the table to the doorway so she could close the space between them with a measured step. Her voice came low and even, a line drawn in the dust of old battles. Rory: "You’re the last person I expected at my door, Lucien. Or at my flat, for that matter." Lucien tilted his head slightly, his cane’s tip tapping a lodestar-like rhythm on the floorboards. He did not smile; the expression was too precarious for a fixer who wore masks as easily as a tailor wears a suit. Lucien: "A stubborn woman deserves a stubborn visitor. I found myself with a window to London you’d miss if you blinked." Rory’s lips pressed into a fine line and then loosened as she stepped aside, gesturing toward the living space as if to invite him to the scene of the crime he had not yet confessed. She wore a slender jacket over a sweater, boots scuffing the edge of a rug that had seen better days. Her hair hid the edges of a night she would never fully reconcile with. Rory: "This is Eva’s Flat. Not the place for a sermon on barters and bargains. Speak plainly, or leave." Lucien stepped forward, letting the door close behind him with a careful precision that betrayed nothing of impulse. He crossed into the living space with the easy stride of someone who knew how to own a room without shouting. Lucien’s gaze swept the room again, as if memorising every detail that would later matter in a negotiation that bore its teeth. Then his words came, patient and precise, like a surgeon’s scalpel finding its mark. Lucien: "You’ve been quiet since Marseille, Rory. Too quiet for a woman who wears a storm as well as a smile." Rory’s eyes flickered, bright blue and sharp, a flare of heat lighting the corners of the room. She moved to the edge of the pile of notes and papers, as if smoothing out a crease in the fabric of a fragile truth. Rory: "Do you want a tea break, or a confession? If you came here to stir up old debts, you’ll find I’ve learned to pay with silence these days." Lucien’s mouth pulled into a restrained curve. He didn’t mock, and he didn’t pretend to be hurt. He simply stood still enough for Rory to measure the space between them, the distance she kept and yet did not truly want to keep. Lucien: "You know why I’m here. There’s a matter that won’t wait, not with what crawls in the dark corners of this city." Rory let the mug rest against the table, the ceramic throat of it clinking softly. Her fingers found the crescent scar on her wrist again, a touch that seemed more of a habit than a memory. Her voice stayed even, but the tremor she wouldn’t grant to fear crept into it like a breath. Rory: "Curse your timing. If you’d come yesterday, I might have listened. If you come tomorrow, I’ll pretend nothing happened." Lucien’s lashes lowered, shadowing the amber in his eyes. He spoke with the measured gravity of someone who had learned to carry impossible truths and still look people in the eye. Lucien: "No pretending. Not when the truth has teeth and is hungry for daylight." In the space between them, Ptolemy rose with a slow, deliberate elegance, tail arced as if drawing a question mark in the air. The cat’s green eyes tracked the two, and then fixed on Rory with a regard that felt almost protective. Rory’s breath hitched momentarily, and she stepped back, not retreating so much as giving herself room to anchor the present to something steadier than memory. She studied Lucien the way a map might be studied before a crossing—careful, patient, searching for the fault lines. Rory: "If you’re here for alliance, you’ll find the weather hasn’t warmed toward you. If you’re here to pick a fight, you’ll get one that ends with your back against the wall and your cane on the floor." Lucien moved a fraction closer to the lantern-lit corner where a circle of wards glowed faintly, a reminder of the world’s thin margins and the danger that still braided around both their lives. He kept his voice calm, almost solicitous, a tone designed to coax information out of a guarded heart. Lucien: "Alliance could be useful—if you want more than the obvious. You’ve always seen through the obvious." Rory’s eyes flickered with something almost like a laugh, but the sound never left her throat. She opened her hands in a gesture that was half invitation, half warning. Rory: "Then say what you’ve come to say, Lucien. The night isn’t a guest you can eject with a broom." The room tightened around them, as if the walls themselves leaned closer for leverage—between the scented tea and the rain-slicked street outside, there lay a history no one could erase with a single sentence. Lucien stepped closer to the table, the pale light catching the metal edge of his blade-hiding cane, the elegance of his charcoal suit outlining the shape of someone who spent a lifetime making others believe only his voice mattered. Lucien: "There’s a artifact, a ring, something tied to a ritual that can reverse a grave mistake. It’s in play again because someone who shouldn’t know how to wield it learned how to call it back into the streets." Rory kept her hands still, the knuckles turning pale where they pressed against the edge of the table. Her voice softened, not with mercy but with the ache of shared history. Rory: "And you think I’m the easiest path to get that ring? Or is your aim simply to see me in danger again so you can watch the rescue through?" Lucien: "I don’t want to see you harmed. I want the ring out of the wrong hands, and I want my debts settled in a way that lets us both breathe without a badge of fear over our heads." The air shifted, as it always did when he spoke of debts and bargains. Rory’s mouth tightened, but a fleeting curve of her lips betrayed the tremor she fought to suppress—an echo of a night when all the wrong kinds of truths had slipped through their fingers. Rory: "You think you can undo what you started? You think a single loan can be paid with a favor and a warning?" Lucien regarded her with a steady, almost affectionate seriousness. He was a man who understood price tags and penalties, who knew the exact weight of a decision that could fold a life in a single breath. Lucien: "The rings don’t bargain themselves back to the right owner. They are stubborn, like us." The words lingered in the space between them, heavy with the implication of all they hadn’t said when they last stood this close and looked away. Rory stepped along the table and paused, letting the soft chalk-wax scent of the wards mingle with the rain-smell coming from outside. Her finger traced a line across a map, though she wasn’t mapping tonight so much as testing whether the room would still hold when she laid down a new line of trust. Rory: "There’s history here you can’t rinse away, not with a blade and not with a bargain. If the ring’s in play, it’s in play because someone’s decided fear is the best currency. We’ll need more than a kiss on the back of a debt to handle this." Lucien’s lips pressed into something like a smile that never quite reached his eyes. He reached into the pocket of his jacket and pulled out a folded sheet of parchment, sliding it toward Rory so she could see the marks, the glyphs, the faint glow that still pulsed at the center of the design—an old sigil that had always tangled their fates more than their hearts. Lucien: "We have a window. A safe house to draw from, and people who owe me more than a few favors. You still keep your contact at the embassy? The one who can move quietly through the shadows of the city without anyone noticing it’s not just a person in the room but gravity itself bending to them." Rory’s gaze swept the parchment, her breath a measured rhythm against the quiet that followed. She studied the sigil until the edges softened, as if her memory could smooth over the old wounds by simply looking at them again. Rory: "So you want to drag me back into the underworld corridor you prowl? You want a partner, not just a lookout." Lucien angled his head, the cane’s ivory handle catching a glimmer of lamplight like a blade’s chill edge. He didn’t flinch at the word “partner.” He only offered a spark of vulnerability that rarely crossed his features. Lucien: "I want a co-prosecutor for a crime that’s more than a crime. It’s a misalignment of what we owe to ourselves, Rory. If we fix the ring, maybe we fix the part of us that still keeps reaching for something better than the fight." Ptolemy, unamused and thoroughly judgmental, settled back onto the radiator with a soft, huffing purr that sounded suspiciously like mockery of their fragile honesty. Rory blinked at the cat and then at Lucien, the motion slow, almost ceremonial. Rory: "If we do this, we do it right. No more secrets. No more borrowed days. We call the shots, not them, not the fear, not the past." Lucien moved another measured step closer, a shadow moving in sync with his own need to keep a distance that felt almost painful to close. He lowered his voice just enough to feel the room tilt toward him without admitting the tilt in his own chest. Lucien: "Then start with something easy. Tell me where you’ve kept the last piece of your shield—the thing that keeps you from breaking apart when the wind blows the wrong way." Rory’s fingers folded around the mug again, the rim biting into her knuckles. She didn’t look away from him, not truly; she studied the tremor that sometimes pressed at the back of his eyes, the way fear and resolve fought for space in a person who lived between shadows. Rory: "There’s no shield left that isn’t already visible to people who watch you closely. Marseille wasn’t a storm you survived alone. It was a map we drew in the dark and forgot to destroy when the sun came up." The word storm came back to him like a flare. He could not help but search for the little tremor in her voice that announced a confession she pretended not to give. Lucien: "Then let the confession begin. If we’re to walk this street together again, we do it with our eyes open and our hands ready to act, not to touch prematurely." Rory’s mouth quirked into something that wasn’t a smile but not entirely a scowl either. The tension between them, the dangerous music that had always stretched between their two breaths, tightened once more into something almost tender. Rory: "We’ll need to bring Eva into this, not because she’s the best ally—though she might be the best kind of ally—but because this flat, these wards, this city, it all ties back to her. She keeps a ledger of the kinds of favors that won’t be repaid by the usual rules." Lucien’s gaze softened just a fraction, enough to reveal something closer to a truth he rarely permitted himself to voice. He stepped back from the edge of the wards and looked for the smallest sign of permission in the room, as if asking the room itself to sanction their next move. Lucien: "If Eva signs on, I’ll sign on too. If she won’t, we’ll still move with the knowledge she would have given us. We won’t pretend we aren’t carrying a storm’s memory." The room held its breath for a moment—a held breath that tasted of rain and old betrayals, of choices weighed against safety and the faint, stubborn pulse of something that could still become affection. Ptolemy slid from the radiator’s edge to Rory’s boot, rubbing his side against her leg in a display of begrudging trust. The cat’s purr trembled through Rory’s calf, an anchor that reminded her of what she could still risk. Rory moved to the coffee table, collecting the parchment and tucking it away with the care of someone who’d learned to hide their own heart as if it were a forbidden artifact. She locked the drawer with a click that sounded louder than it should in the quiet room. Then she faced him again, the blue of her eyes a bright beacon in a storm-tossed moment. Rory: "We’ll do it your way for the moment. You’ll keep your promises. You’ll keep your distance if I tell you to. And you’ll answer for Marseille as if the city itself could testify to what we did or didn’t do. I don’t have room for old ghosts in a plan that might save us this time." Lucien’s response did not rise into bravado, nor did it sink into resignation. He simply met her gaze, the weight of his history with her sitting between them like a held breath. Lucien: "I wouldn’t ask for your trust if I didn’t intend to repay it with something that’s real." Rory’s lips pressed into a narrow line, but the edge there softened at the corners, the stubbornness yielding to the gravity of the moment. She moved closer to him, not to close the distance they preserved for years of guarded nights, but to re-establish the human geometry between their bodies—one that could endure. The room’s light, a thin, stubborn glow, glinted off the edge of Lucien’s blade-like cane as if the metal itself wanted to listen to what they refused to name aloud. Rory: "We begin with a plan. We end with the truth that doesn’t burn the mouth or scorch the hands. If the ring is in play, we’ll take it apart the way we used to—carefully, together, and with a reckoning to the future that isn’t written in fear." Lucien inclined his head just enough to acknowledge the agreement without surrender. He looked at Rory not as an obstacle but as a partner who still offered him something he’d once believed was gone—an equal stake, a glimmer of something worth risking. Lucien: "Then we start with Eva. If she’s in, we move in arming ourselves with the knowledge we refused to admit before. If she’s out, we move anyway, because the city won’t forget what we owe it." Rory’s gaze met his, a spark within the cool night of her eyes that was almost a flame. She did not smile, but the stiffness softened, a delicate relinquishment of the wall she had built so meticulously around her heart. Rory: "No more ghosts in the chamber, no more whispers under the door. We test the air, we test the ring, and we decide what to do with the consequences. We won’t pretend we’re not drawn to one another while we pretend we aren’t stepping into the danger hand in hand." A quiet exhale seemed to pass through Lucien, a rare concession to something like relief, and he looked at Rory as if finally letting himself admit a long-held truth—that he had come here not only for the artifact or the alliance, but for the person who remained in the quiet center of his own complicated life. Lucien: "If we survive this, I’ll buy you a drink that isn’t borrowed or dangerous. I’ll tell you the truth about Marseille when you’re ready to listen without a weapon in your hand." Rory’s face shifted in the lamplight, a delicate blend of spark and weariness. She stepped closer, the cat’s eyes following the movement with a wary but curious glow. Rory: "Keep the offer for when we’re not underground and hunted, and I’ll listen. For now, we set the course, we guard the line between life and ruin, and we see how far this old thread can still pull us toward something warm instead of cold." Lucien dropped his gaze for a heartbeat, then lifted it again to meet hers with a quiet resolve. He did not extend his hand, not yet. The moment would come when they could fall back into something they recognized and trusted—only this time with a knowledge of the peril that awaited them if they faltered. The room, the city beyond the thin pane of glass that separated the two, held its breath for the next choice. Ptolemy shifted again, as if sensing the shift in the room’s weather and the tremor that ran beneath Rory’s calm exterior. He stretched out a paw, then withdrew it, as if deciding to let the humans have their moment before he claimed the warmth of the radiator again. The city outside continued to hum with rain-slicked life. The lamps along Brick Lane glowed amber through the blinds, and the clock on the wall ticked with a steady, unhurried patience. The room settled into a tense, hopeful quiet—the kind that travels down your spine when a door opens and reveals something you’d believed you had lost forever and found again not in a burst of grand romance but in a shared plan, a careful negotiation, and the honest confession of fear turned toward each other, not away. Rory lowered herself into a chair and watched Lucien move across the room to stand near the chalk wards again, a silhouette framed by the soft light. The two of them, strangers once more, stacked their old history into the same box the night had used to hide secrets, and began to sort through it with a careful, careful touch. The moment stretched, then pulled tighter, a braid of resolve and longing braided together with the promise of action. The door remained closed, the flat quiet except for the distant thunder of rain on brick and the soft, patient equalizing of two hearts that had tried to run from what they might mean to one another. And somewhere in the quiet between the breaths, Eva’s Flat held its own kind of breath—a space that could still hold two people who could not forget how to dream together even as they stood on the edge of danger, waiting to see whether the next step would break them or save them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.029
leniency0.057
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3464
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"truly"
count2
5
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"lightly"
2"quickly"
3"slightly"
4"truly"
5"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3464
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"weight"
count3
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"glint"
count1
3
word"traced"
count2
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"measured"
count4
7
word"flickered"
count2
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"restrained"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count1
11
word"grave"
count1
12
word"fleeting"
count1
13
word"echo"
count1
14
word"implication"
count1
15
word"pulsed"
count1
16
word"chill"
count1
17
word"resolve"
count3
18
word"tension"
count1
19
word"pulse"
count1
20
word"affection"
count1
21
word"trembled"
count1
22
word"beacon"
count1
23
word"peril"
count1
24
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicked"
2"glint"
3"traced"
4"footsteps"
5"scanned"
6"measured"
7"flickered"
8"silence"
9"restrained"
10"reminder"
11"grave"
12"fleeting"
13"echo"
14"implication"
15"pulsed"
16"chill"
17"resolve"
18"tension"
19"pulse"
20"affection"
21"trembled"
22"beacon"
23"peril"
24"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences138
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
1"seemed to"
2"began to"
3"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3435
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions100
wordCount2387
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva2
Flat2
Brick2
Lane2
Moreau1
Rory45
Lucien41
Ptolemy5
persons
0"Eva"
1"Flat"
2"Moreau"
3"Rory"
4"Lucien"
5"Ptolemy"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore0.557
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"as if memorising every detail that would later matter in a negotiation that bore its teeth"
1"as if smoothing out a crease in the fabric of a fragile truth"
2"as if drawing a question mark in the air"
3"something like a smile that never quite reac"
4"as if asking the room itself to sanction their next move"
5"something like relief, and he looked at Rory"
6"as if sensing the shift in the room’s weather and the tremor that ran beneath Rory’s calm exterior"
7"as if deciding to let the humans have their moment before he claimed the warmth of the radiator again"
25.33% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords1.747
wordCount3435
matches
0"not with mercy but with the ache of shared history"
1"not just a person in the room but gravity itself bending to them"
2"not to close the distance they preserved for years of guarded nights, but to re-establish the human geometry between their bodies"
3"not as an obstacle but as a partner who still offered him something he’d once belie"
4"not only for the artifact or the alliance, but for the person who remained in the quiet center of his own c"
5"not in a burst of grand romance but in a shared plan, a careful negotiation"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
70.74% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs84
mean40.89
std16.26
cv0.398
sampleLengths
074
183
263
354
417
533
629
738
818
938
1021
1169
1219
1339
1436
1521
1642
1729
1842
1923
2054
2120
2231
2314
2442
2544
2638
2751
2817
2929
3020
3134
3239
3339
3431
3530
3639
3747
3823
3936
4016
4126
4254
4348
4466
4558
4639
4722
4837
4945
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs353
matches
0"wasn’t mapping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences138
ratio0.109
matches
0"Lucien’s arrival threaded a current through the flat’s clutter—books and scrolls stacked in precarious towers; chalk circles faintly scuffed on the floor where someone once traced wards and warnings; a map pinned to a corkboard bleeding ink into the edge of a coffee-stained notebook."
1"She stood by a low table cluttered with a mug and paper, blue light from a screen bleaching the edges of a scar on her left wrist—the small crescent-shaped mark that wasn’t hers to forget."
2"He did not smile; the expression was too precarious for a fixer who wore masks as easily as a tailor wears a suit."
3"She studied Lucien the way a map might be studied before a crossing—careful, patient, searching for the fault lines."
4"The room tightened around them, as if the walls themselves leaned closer for leverage—between the scented tea and the rain-slicked street outside, there lay a history no one could erase with a single sentence."
5"Rory’s mouth tightened, but a fleeting curve of her lips betrayed the tremor she fought to suppress—an echo of a night when all the wrong kinds of truths had slipped through their fingers."
6"He reached into the pocket of his jacket and pulled out a folded sheet of parchment, sliding it toward Rory so she could see the marks, the glyphs, the faint glow that still pulsed at the center of the design—an old sigil that had always tangled their fates more than their hearts."
7"She didn’t look away from him, not truly; she studied the tremor that sometimes pressed at the back of his eyes, the way fear and resolve fought for space in a person who lived between shadows."
8"The room held its breath for a moment—a held breath that tasted of rain and old betrayals, of choices weighed against safety and the faint, stubborn pulse of something that could still become affection."
9"She moved closer to him, not to close the distance they preserved for years of guarded nights, but to re-establish the human geometry between their bodies—one that could endure."
10"He looked at Rory not as an obstacle but as a partner who still offered him something he’d once believed was gone—an equal stake, a glimmer of something worth risking."
11"A quiet exhale seemed to pass through Lucien, a rare concession to something like relief, and he looked at Rory as if finally letting himself admit a long-held truth—that he had come here not only for the artifact or the alliance, but for the person who remained in the quiet center of his own complicated life."
12"The moment would come when they could fall back into something they recognized and trusted—only this time with a knowledge of the peril that awaited them if they faltered."
13"The room settled into a tense, hopeful quiet—the kind that travels down your spine when a door opens and reveals something you’d believed you had lost forever and found again not in a burst of grand romance but in a shared plan, a careful negotiation, and the honest confession of fear turned toward each other, not away."
14"And somewhere in the quiet between the breaths, Eva’s Flat held its own kind of breath—a space that could still hold two people who could not forget how to dream together even as they stood on the edge of danger, waiting to see whether the next step would break them or save them."
86.35% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2411
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped mark"
1"ceramic cool against her"
adverbCount101
adverbRatio0.041891331397760266
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.010783907092492741
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean24.89
std11.39
cv0.457
sampleLengths
023
114
237
323
417
524
619
744
819
919
1035
1117
1212
1321
1429
1523
1615
1718
1815
1923
2021
2135
2220
2314
2419
2518
2621
2722
2814
2921
3017
3125
3229
337
3410
3525
3623
3715
3821
3918
4020
419
4222
4314
4423
4519
4625
4719
4838
4933
42.75% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.08695652173913043
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners12
64.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"Then his words came, patient"
1"Then she faced him again,"
ratio0.019
85.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences104
matches
0"He paused long enough for"
1"She stood by a low"
2"She kept her gaze fixed"
3"Her voice came low and"
4"He did not smile; the"
5"She wore a slender jacket"
6"Her hair hid the edges"
7"He crossed into the living"
8"She moved to the edge"
9"He didn’t mock, and he"
10"He simply stood still enough"
11"Her fingers found the crescent"
12"Her voice stayed even, but"
13"He spoke with the measured"
14"She studied Lucien the way"
15"He kept his voice calm,"
16"She opened her hands in"
17"Her voice softened, not with"
18"He was a man who"
19"Her finger traced a line"
ratio0.337
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount99
totalSentences104
matches
0"The door to Eva’s Flat"
1"Ptolemy, the tabby with too"
2"Lucien Moreau stepped inside and"
3"The corridor narrowed around his"
4"He paused long enough for"
5"The air changed, as if"
6"Lucien’s arrival threaded a current"
7"The cat watched from the"
8"Lucien’s eyes, one amber like"
9"She stood by a low"
10"Rory’s fingers tightened around the"
11"She kept her gaze fixed"
12"Lucien’s presence shifted the air,"
13"Rory walked the short distance"
14"Her voice came low and"
15"Lucien tilted his head slightly,"
16"He did not smile; the"
17"Rory’s lips pressed into a"
18"She wore a slender jacket"
19"Her hair hid the edges"
ratio0.952
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences99
technicalSentenceCount30
matches
0"The air changed, as if the room had exhaled and found itself lighter with the demon-blooded man in it."
1"She stood by a low table cluttered with a mug and paper, blue light from a screen bleaching the edges of a scar on her left wrist—the small crescent-shaped mark…"
2"She kept her gaze fixed on him, as if the room’s shadows could reflect his face better than any mirror could."
3"Rory’s lips pressed into a fine line and then loosened as she stepped aside, gesturing toward the living space as if to invite him to the scene of the crime he …"
4"She wore a slender jacket over a sweater, boots scuffing the edge of a rug that had seen better days."
5"Lucien stepped forward, letting the door close behind him with a careful precision that betrayed nothing of impulse."
6"Lucien’s gaze swept the room again, as if memorising every detail that would later matter in a negotiation that bore its teeth."
7"Her fingers found the crescent scar on her wrist again, a touch that seemed more of a habit than a memory."
8"He spoke with the measured gravity of someone who had learned to carry impossible truths and still look people in the eye."
9"In the space between them, Ptolemy rose with a slow, deliberate elegance, tail arced as if drawing a question mark in the air."
10"The room tightened around them, as if the walls themselves leaned closer for leverage—between the scented tea and the rain-slicked street outside, there lay a h…"
11"Lucien stepped closer to the table, the pale light catching the metal edge of his blade-hiding cane, the elegance of his charcoal suit outlining the shape of so…"
12"He was a man who understood price tags and penalties, who knew the exact weight of a decision that could fold a life in a single breath."
13"He reached into the pocket of his jacket and pulled out a folded sheet of parchment, sliding it toward Rory so she could see the marks, the glyphs, the faint gl…"
14"Rory’s gaze swept the parchment, her breath a measured rhythm against the quiet that followed."
15"Ptolemy, unamused and thoroughly judgmental, settled back onto the radiator with a soft, huffing purr that sounded suspiciously like mockery of their fragile ho…"
16"Lucien moved another measured step closer, a shadow moving in sync with his own need to keep a distance that felt almost painful to close."
17"He could not help but search for the little tremor in her voice that announced a confession she pretended not to give."
18"The tension between them, the dangerous music that had always stretched between their two breaths, tightened once more into something almost tender."
19"He stepped back from the edge of the wards and looked for the smallest sign of permission in the room, as if asking the room itself to sanction their next move."
20"The room held its breath for a moment—a held breath that tasted of rain and old betrayals, of choices weighed against safety and the faint, stubborn pulse of so…"
21"Ptolemy slid from the radiator’s edge to Rory’s boot, rubbing his side against her leg in a display of begrudging trust."
22"The cat’s purr trembled through Rory’s calf, an anchor that reminded her of what she could still risk."
23"Rory moved to the coffee table, collecting the parchment and tucking it away with the care of someone who’d learned to hide their own heart as if it were a forb…"
24"Rory’s gaze met his, a spark within the cool night of her eyes that was almost a flame."
25"A quiet exhale seemed to pass through Lucien, a rare concession to something like relief, and he looked at Rory as if finally letting himself admit a long-held …"
26"The room, the city beyond the thin pane of glass that separated the two, held its breath for the next choice."
27"The room settled into a tense, hopeful quiet—the kind that travels down your spine when a door opens and reveals something you’d believed you had lost forever a…"
28"The door remained closed, the flat quiet except for the distant thunder of rain on brick and the soft, patient equalizing of two hearts that had tried to run fr…"
29"And somewhere in the quiet between the breaths, Eva’s Flat held its own kind of breath—a space that could still hold two people who could not forget how to drea…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
72.1344%