Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0SB6ZGC8ACP60MNQFQP4S

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1m 11s
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$0.004580
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The scream ripped through the tunnel, and Quinn reacted before the words finished forming in her head. Her knee buckled into a crouch as the market’s lanterns stuttered, throwing the passage into half-light and shadow. The bone token in her palm warmed, a hot ember against the cold metal of the rail. She rooted her feet, mind sliding into gear as a row of stalls came into view, each one selling something that should have stayed buried: worked bone wind-chimes, a glass jar filled with something that looked like dried moths, a ledger whose numbers rearranged themselves when you blinked. "Quinn!" A voice cut through the murmur of murmured deals and whispered curses. Her partner—DS Mara Kline, a tall woman with nerve and a stubborn set to her jaw—pushed through the crowd with the same measured pace she always used when the case turned its back on them. "Right behind you," Mara said, voice low enough to blend with the hiss of the ventilation shaft above. She kept her eyes on the body, not on the crowd. Not on the glimmer of copper and brass lying on the floor. The crime scene had not occurred where a normal detective would expect one to occur. The Veil Market moved locations every full moon, and tonight the station beneath Camden wore its newest mask: damp concrete, fresh chalk runes on the platform, the creak of timber under stall boards, and a body laid out as if awaiting a critique from a gallery of occult purchases rather than a courtroom. Quinn knelt first, careful as a surgeon with a scalpel she’d never quite trusted. The body lay on its side, an anonymous man in a charcoal suit, tie loosened as if he’d been mid-exhale when something had interrupted him. No rustle of wind, no blood pooling, just the odd sting of copper in the air and the way the chalk sigils around him looked newly drawn and freshly smeared, as if someone had tried to scrub them away and failed. "Tell me that’s not a ritual," Mara muttered, stepping closer, eyes scanning the chalk lines that spiralled outward in a lazy wheel. Quinn traced a finger along the sigils, the chalk dust flaking onto her glove. The patterns were unfamiliar, not the standard circle-and-triangle stuff you saw in police archives. More like a language written in curves and untraceable intent. The symbol at the centre looked like a closed eye, lid half-raised, as if the figure had witnessed something it wanted unseeable. "Thought you’d be here, Quinn," a voice carried through the murmur, rough with sleep and underlying menace. A third person stepped from behind a stall—a tall, lean man in a trench coat that looked like it’d survived more markets than marriages. This one wore a mask of sorts, dark-dark fabric pulled over from chin to brow, eyes glittering with calculation rather than fear. It was as if he’d stepped straight from the shadows between stalls and decided to pretend he owned the night. "Morning, Marcus," Mara said, keeping her tone even, a coin tossed into a dry drawer. "You’re late for a wake or a guess?" Marcus, the unofficial gatekeeper of the market’s questionable auras, shrugged. He moved with the kind of quiet confidence that suggested he enjoyed watching people misinterpret his intentions. "The Veil Market doesn’t run on human clocks. It runs on full moons and broken promises." Quinn stood, dusted chalk from her gloves, and kept her eyes on the body. "What do we know about him?" "Name on the collar pin," Marcus said, lifting the man’s lapel to reveal a badge that looked counterfeit in the wrong light. The name was clear enough to read, but the badge’s enamel wore in the corners as if it had spent more nights catching damp than days catching criminals. "Quiet citizen, not rich, not powerful. The usual—except the wound isn’t there. It’s… ritualistic." "Rituals leave marks," Mara said, bending to inspect the wrists. The man’s skin bore a faint blue-glow bruise—an odd, almost chemical sheen that suggested something other than a blade had touched him. "This isn’t a strike. It’s a message." Quinn’s eyes flicked toward the stalls. The Veil Market’s offerings pulsed with residual energy—the sort you could feel in your teeth, a paltry echo of a heartbeat. A man in a glass case sold memories in jars; a woman sold minor curses for the price of a name. The loitering crowd moved as if drawn by a tide, each face momentarily catching something human in the moment before the market devoured it again. Her attention snagged on a small, unassuming desk tucked between a stall selling talismans and another selling whispered curses. The desk held a brass lantern that burned with a pale blue flame and, beneath it, a parchment that looked as if it had been left to dry on purpose. The ink on the parchment wasn’t ink at all but something metallic and malleable, moving under the light as if it knew the observer’s gaze. Quinn rose, brushing chalk from her knees. "Do a quick sweep of the exits. See if any of those doors line up with the token entrances." She looked toward the lantern, then past it to a narrow corridor that disappeared behind heavy curtains. The Veil Market did not advertise its backdoors; it required one to know where to look. The bone token wasn’t a prop; it had to be a key. Marcus followed the direction of her gaze and shrugged again. "The token’s not the only gate. There are other ways in, depending on who you know and what you want to see." "Tell that to the victim," Mara snapped, though her voice carried no heat, only the cool edge of a professional who’d seen this play before. Quinn crouched again to examine the body’s right hand. The fingers curled in as if the man had tried to grasp something. In the palm lay a small brass compass, its needle still, its face etched with sigils that seemed to move when you blinked. The Veil Compass, etched by a Shade artisan, was supposed to be attuned to supernatural energy, its needle tugging toward any rift or portal. If someone killed him here, the compass would be a clue about the location of that portal—or a trap to lure investigators into a false lead. "Left-hand pocket," Marcus said, stepping closer with his customary, almost theatrical nonchalance. "If you believe in signs, you’ll want to see what he carried." Quinn slid her hand into the pocket and pulled out a small, bound notebook. Its cover bore the same pattern as the chalk sigils—an eye, a line, and a circle. The pages were empty but for a single line written in a hurried, almost feverish scrawl: The Market chooses the price of truth. A single word beneath it—Relic. She looked up, eyes narrowing. "Relic implies a theft of something sacred, or something the buyer didn’t know they were paying for." "And who would be paying for relics in a place like this?" Mara asked, her tone light but her eyes hard as flint. "People who want secrets, that’s who." The crowd shifted as someone stepped into Quinn’s field of view. Eva Kowalski, Evie—the childhood friend of Aurora, the occult researcher who had studied enough to know most of the world’s secrets and a few of its lies. Eva wore a satchel full of books and something else she carried with the ease of someone who never forgot a detail: a quiet dread that walked beside her like a third companion. "Evening," Eva said, voice a mix of softly spoken letters and the weight of Oxford behind it. "You’re in deeper than you think." Quinn turned. "You’re late, Evie. Or early, depending on how you look at it. What brings you to Camden’s forgotten tubes?" Eva stepped forward, glancing at the body and then at the chalk sigils. "The sigils are recent, but the patterns aren’t entirely unknown. They’re closer to a ritual of memory than of blood. It’s designed to trap a memory inside a form—to steal a memory by making the victim relive it, over and over, until nothing remains but the memory’s echo." She paused, brushing a curl from her freckled cheek. "The Veil Market houses more than goods. It houses truths people are afraid to tell. If someone wanted a memory, they’d bargain for it here, where reality wears a mask." Quinn studied Eva with a wary patience. "You’ve got a knack for showing up with the truth you want to see. What’s your evidence?" Eva produced a small booklet from her satchel and opened it to a page where a sketch of the Veil Compass appeared, its Verdigis patina detailed in careful lines. "Look at the compass face. The sigils are not random. They’re the same sigils used in protective wards, but here they’re inverted, used to ward off witnesses rather than intruders. It’s a trap to deter anyone who would pry too deeply. The killer wants investigators to misinterpret the scene so their ritual remains hidden." Mara crossed her arms. "So you’re saying the market is weaponised, not merely a backdrop. And this is about memory theft rather than murder." Quinn’s eyes moved from Eva to the body and back again. The memorial of memory idea fit the patterns she’d observed in the chalk rings—but it was a theory that could be dangerous if believed too soon. The market did not suffer fools gladly. "Where does the bone token fit into this?" Mara asked, her voice tight with professional gravity. Quinn turned toward the stalls. The token had not left her hand since she’d laid eyes on it. Its bronze sheen now carried a quiet heat, a pulse beneath the lacquer that suggested it was not merely a token but a conduit. She stepped toward a stall that sold talismans shaped like teeth and kept a careful distance from the vendor who stood with the air of someone who knew how to vanish in the hum of conversation. The vendor, a man with a mouthful of misaligned teeth and a smile that didn’t quite reach his eyes, watched them with a patient suspicion. "You seek access?" he asked, the words wrapping around them like a chain. Quinn did not answer with a lie. She pressed the bone token against the talisman’s edge and felt a tiny jolt of sensation—like a spark traveling up her forearm. The token accepted the vendor’s talisman with a sound like a bell being rung softly. "Access is earned," the vendor added, the corners of his mouth twitching into a human smile that looked more like a snarl. "Is access the same as truth?" Eva asked, eyes bright behind her round glasses. "It depends," the vendor replied, leaning closer as if confiding a secret to a child. "Truth lives in the mouth that speaks it, and the mouth that is quiet enough to listen." Quinn did not engage in this particular debate. She stepped away, pocketing the token with care, and returned to the body. A second look revealed something else: the bruising on the victim’s wrist matched none of the violence Quinn would expect in a standard altercation. It was a calm, controlled pattern, almost surgical. The composition was not the work of a street fight; it felt like something else had prepared the body’s arrival here. "Two sets of footprints," Mara said, kneeling. "One set heavy, deliberate; the other light, almost ceremonial. They meander away from the body toward the back corridor, then disappear into a curtain that hides beyond us." "That’s a good sign," Eva replied. "If the killer left willingly, they knew the market’s interior enough to vanish behind a curtain that supposed to be a dead end." Quinn scanned the tunnel beyond the curtain. A draft of cold air slipped through, the sort that carried the memory of another place—the edge of a different night, perhaps. The Veil Compass’s needle trembled, then steadied, pointing toward the curtain with a definite, almost relieved push. The compass seemed to say: go there. "Follow the needle," she instructed, voice low but urgent enough to cut through the hum. "Let the compass lead, and we’ll find the seam where their story unravels." They moved as one, Quinn at the front, Mara tight behind, Eva a step to the side, measuring every footstep and sign with a historian’s care. The curtain yielded to their approach with a whisper, revealing a narrow passage that dipped down into a lower platform where the cavern of the old station opened up. The air tasted of old coinage and damp velvet—the sort of scent that followed a lifetime spent in cases that insisted the truth wore a disguise. The passage opened into a second, smaller chamber where the market’s underflow pulsed like a living thing. There, in the centre, stood a pedestal, upon which rested a single relic that looked unremarkable at first glance: a small, unadorned brass box with a padlock made of bone. The bone token lay atop the box as if it had always belonged there, a sentinel keeping watch. Quinn did not touch the box. She studied the setup intently. The pedestal itself bore marks, a series of constellations carved into the stone that matched the chalk sigils on the victim’s body and the notebook’s note. It was all part of a larger scheme to trap memory, to trap truth, and to force a confession the killer could wear like a new skin. "That box—it's a reliquary," Eva said softly, as if the word itself would unlock something. "If that box opens with the token, it isn’t a treasure; it’s a memory bank. The relic is not the memory—it’s the vessel for it." Mara’s eyes flashed. "If they’ve got the memory, what are they planning to do with it? Sell it? Shatter it?" Quinn didn’t answer aloud. Her gaze settled on a second passage, a seam along the wall that looked nothing more than a crack at first, but now shimmered with a faint, otherworldly light. The Veil Compass’s needle rotated in slow, deliberate arcs as if tasting the air. It came to rest, though not on the bone box, but on the seam itself. The seam was not a normal crack. It was a doorway, a threshold that did not belong to the ordinary world. It was a portal—if portals existed in the world at all, which they did, in places like this, where the Veil Market pressed against the world’s soft underbelly. "Stand back," Quinn said, quietly enough to avoid spooking the market’s quiet, watched, patient air. "If that’s a portal, it isn’t something we want in the open. Not unless we know what we’re dealing with." She stepped closer to the seam, her breath fogging faintly in the still air, and extended a gloved hand as if she could push the fault aside with will alone. The seam stirred in response, a ripple that ran along the metal walls and across the curved ceiling like a line of water drawn across glass. A whisper of something—cold, empty, ancient—slid along Quinn’s skin. The bone token in her palm hummed, a soft, insistent note like a distant church bell asking for attention. "Do not touch," a voice hissed from the other end of the chamber, not the voice of a person so much as a language in the walls. The sentence carried a tone of warning that made the hairs on the back of Quinn’s neck stand up. "Show yourself," Quinn answered, keeping her own voice steady. She did not reach for her service weapon. The market would not allow a weapon to be drawn without consequence. It preferred bloodless manipulation. The figure stepped into view. Not a person so much as a shadow given form, a silhouette that moved with the slow, deliberate grace of someone who knew every corner of the tunnel and never forgot a lie told in its passage. The mask was off now, but the face behind it remained an illusion, features shifting like a candle flame catching a draft—enough to tell that a living mind stood behind it, a mind that could orchestrate a ritual and watch it unfold. "Detective Quinn," the figure said, not in greeting but as if acknowledging a shared secret. "You’ve already begun to see the seams. The Market is not the crime; it is the stage. The relic is the truth you’re unwilling to admit you want to keep buried." Quinn’s breath stilled, then steadied. The voice was familiar, but not to the point of familiarity. It belonged to someone who knew the crime scene, who had written the script for a drama Quinn believed she had left behind in the archives of a past case where a partner had vanished in a swirl of whispers and a storm of supernatural rumours. "Who are you?" Mara demanded, stepping closer with her hands spread in a non-threatening stance, a line forming between her and the stranger as if it were drawn in chalk. The figure smiled, a slow, careful curve of lips that didn’t reach the eyes. "Names don’t matter here. Not when you’ve learned the rules. The Market chooses the price of truth, and tonight, the truth is about to be bought with a memory you don’t know you owe." Eva stepped forward, the satchel shifting with her steps. "If this is a ritual, you’re using the victim’s memory to anchor a portal. The relic boxes memory; the relic box opens memory; the token seeds the chain. It’s a chain of theft, a theft not of objects but of moments." Her voice carried a rare sharpness, a scholar’s insistence that the past should be named and not simply observed. The shadow-figure laughed, a dry, rustling sound that seemed to come from every direction at once. "A memory is a powerful thing, Evie Kowalski. It is the most valuable thing in a person, and it is the most dangerous to those who know how to steal it. You three—Quinn, Mara, and the biographer of secrets—you’re closer to the truth than you realise. But closeness is not enough." Quinn studied the doorway. The seam’s glow grew brighter, a pale halo that suggested something living lay beyond. The Veil Compass trembled in her hand, and its needle began to move with a stubborn certainty, as if the device itself would not be deterred by fear or hesitation. "What is beyond that seam?" she asked, voice steady, eyes never leaving the glow. The figure lifted a hand with slow reverence toward the seam as if presenting an offering, and the air shifted with a soft sigh—the sound of something decades old letting out a breath. "Beyond lies the thing you call memory, the thing your world refuses to accept as possible. Beyond lies a threshold between what you remember and what you pretend never happened. Beyond lies the truth you’ve been chasing with fear in your pockets." Mara took a cautious step forward. "This isn’t a theory. It’s a trap. We’re on the edge of something that will pull the case from our hands and spin it into a story nobody can finish." Quinn kept her stance. She could feel the weight of the bone token growing heavier, almost eager to be used, to unlock whatever was behind the seam. The relic box on the pedestal vibrated faintly, as if it were listening and waiting for a key. "Tell me what you want," she said, her voice almost quiet, but with a quiet intensity that reminded them all of the times she’d faced down fear with nothing but a plan and a weapon she could trust to stay in her hand. The shadow-figure’s smile widened, a crescent that did not reach the eyes. "I want the truth you’re afraid to tell. I want the market to claim its due. I want you to choose the memory you’ll exchange for the life you could have saved." Quinn did not blink. She held the bone token up a fraction, allowing the light from the lantern to touch its edges. The token had a purpose beyond momentum; it could unlock a path that was as much a metaphor as a corridor. It could call forth a memory the living would pay a price to forget. "Open the relic," Eva whispered, and the words felt like a spark thrown into dry tinder. The relic’s brass box responded with a soft, prophetic chime, the same sound a compass might make when it finds its own north. The killer’s voice softened, turning almost pleading. "You’ve seen the seams. You’ve learned to listen. Now, choose. Will you release the memory of your partner—the one who died under circumstances that never made sense—or will you accept the price of staying silent about the truth you’ve refused to call by its name?" The words struck Quinn with the precision of a blade. Her partner—DS Morris—had died three years earlier during a case that had queer, impossible overtones, something supernatural that she hadn’t yet understood. The memory of that night had wandered through her nights, gnawing at the edges of her sleep, a door she’d never quite dared to open. She stepped forward, letting the bone token’s warmth seep through her gloves and into her fingers. The market’s whispers rose into a chorus, a ritual lullaby that promised miracles and memories and mistakes that would never be undone. "Not you," she said, voice steady, eyes locked on the seam. "Not this memory they want to force me to give up. I’ve earned the right to tell the truth in my own way." The shadow-figure seemed to draw back, the glow around the seam intensifying as if the space itself braced for something monumental. For a breathless moment, the room held its collective gaze on the gate between worlds, and then the Veil Compass—still in Quinn’s hand—tilted, its needle spinning like a ring of daggers around the outstretched finger. The seam did not merely widen. It pooled into a whirlpool of air, a soft, pulling current that tugged at the edges of their clothing and hair, as if the tunnel itself exhaled a sigh of relief or a threat. The other side of the seam flickered with a pale, dreamlike light—the outline of a corridor, a breath of a different night, a memory not yet named. "Stand back!" Mara cried, but the warning came too late. The relic box gave a soft, sinister clang, the bone lock snapping as if some long-cherished secret had finally been coaxed free. The shadow-figure hissed, a sound that wasn’t heard so much as felt, as if a memory itself were opening up and screaming through the throat of the world. The memory was not a thing. It was a throat, a voice, a confession that could not be unsaid. Then, like a gunshot through quiet glass, the scene shifted. The chamber blurred, not with the same walls and floors, but with a chessboard of streets Quinn recognised from the case files she hadn’t dared to consult in years. The Market hummed around them as if the walls breathed with relief when a truth finally escaped into the open. In a heartbeat, the world reassembled, and the body lay still but not dead; it simply rested in a moment before a decision was made again. A figure stepped out of the seam, not human and not animal, but something in between—an incarnation of a memory itself, wearing the face of the victim’s past and the future’s fear. It was a representation of what happened, a ghost made of truth, and it spoke with the voice of a man who’d never existed except in the margins of the records the police refused to reread. "Quinn," it said, calmly, almost tenderly, "you have the token. You can end this now. You can decide what your partner saw and what you refused to admit. The Market will remember you if you remember it." Quinn took a breath that tasted of old rain and iron, steadying herself. The memory could be faced; the truth could be owned. But there was a cost—there always was. She looked at Eva, her friend’s pale eyes reflecting the glow of the seam, and at Mara, whose mouth was set in a line that spoke of battles fought and won and paid for in moments of sleep lost. "Not this," she said, voice clear and cold as a blade. "Not when memory is the weapon and truth is the bullet. The truth I want is the truth you’re hiding behind your disfavour, those signals you never decoded because you were stuck on a version of the case that made sense to you." The memory-ghost—whatever it was—smiled again, a deceptive, patient thing. "Very well. If you won’t trade a memory, you can trade a moment. Remember your partner not as a casualty of a supernatural event but as a person who stood next to you and did what needed to be done. The Market will let you tell that story, but only if you are willing to let the memory live in you, not erase it." Quinn’s gaze never left the seam. The note in the victim’s notebook—Relic—tugged at her, a final, stubborn clue that would not be silenced. She considered the cost and the possibility that the entire case—this strange, illogical crime scene—was not about a thief of memories but about the city’s desire to keep a truth locked away. "Look at the compass," Eva whispered, almost as if she were afraid to disturb what the seam was becoming. "If the needle is right, the portal isn’t simply a doorway; it’s a corridor between what is known and what must be faced. You have to decide how far you’re willing to walk." Quinn lifted the Veil Compass, its verdigris patina catching the light as the needle wavered, then moved with quiet resolve toward the seam’s unfolding glow. The token in her hand burned with bright heat, a signal that the moment of choice had come and there was no turning back. The crowd’s murmurs rose to a hush, then a roar, then silence as if the market itself paused to watch what would happen next. The seam thickened, a dark boundary between two generations of memory, and then a figure stepped from it—not the killer, not the victim, but a presence that seemed to claim both. "Time to decide," Marcus—the market’s unlicensed confidant—murmured from the shadow, his voice a blend of heat and smoke. "Time to choose which memory becomes your truth and which truth you leave behind for the rest of us to live with." Quinn met the gaze of the shadow-figure, then squeezed the bone token once, hard. A jolt ran through her, and the room’s energy snapped into a sharper focus, the chalk lines around the body tightening as if drawn with new intent. She did not flinch as the memory pressed forward, not a memory of a night she could not face, but the memory she refused to let go—the moment she learned what lay behind the supernatural origin of Morris’s death, the moment someone had whispered a name that could not be spoken aloud in police precincts. Behind the seam, the corridor waited, its air crisp with possibilities and danger. The Veil Compass hummed again, and the needle settled toward the path of the corridor, the one that would lead them into a revelation that could both save and ruin them. And then, before any of them could react, the floor gave a single, deceptive creak—the kind that sounded like a trap snapping shut. The brass relic box shivered on the pedestal as if it recognised the moment and approved it. The bone token flared, a bright, searing line of light, and the entire chamber trembled with a thunderous, otherworldly breath. The crowd of market-goers gasped as if someone had slapped them with a memory they’d forgotten they possessed. The veil between worlds thinned to a hair’s breadth. The seam widened further, threatening to swallow the entire room into that other night. "Now!" Quinn snapped, not to any of them but to the force of will inside her. She stepped toward the seam, the Veil Compass in her one hand, the bone token burning in her other, Eva at her side, Mara behind them with a weapon in her grip but her eyes fixed on the doorway, not the weapon. From the seam, a cold wind threaded through, carrying the ghost of a memory, a memory of a night when Morris had stood at her side and whispered that there were some truths even the dead would ask to keep quiet. The wind carried a risk, a promise, a threat. It carried the Market’s own due—an exchange, a price, a choice. The room snapped into a pale, dreamlike glow. The crowd’s murmurs fell away to a hush. The memory demanded a reckoning, and Quinn, with the bone token burning in her hand, found the nerve to speak—not a headline or a justification, but a simple, direct truth. "We will face this," she said, voice even, eyes locked on the seam, "and we will tell the story that must be told. Not the one the Market wants us to tell. Not the one the clique wants to hide behind ritual and fear. The truth we owe to the memory of the dead and the living who still remember." The seam answered with a final, breathless sigh. The relic box cracked open on its own, releasing a pulse of light that braided with the Veil Compass’s glow. In that instant, a figure moved out of the seam, not a conqueror but a sentinel, a keeper of thresholds. It stepped toward them with quiet authority and spoke a single sentence that silenced the market’s clamor, a sentence that sounded like a verdict from a court no one could fight. "Truth is a memory you must live with, not a memory you must own," it said, voice clear and far away, yet close enough to touch. Then the light intensified, the corridor beyond the seam stretching into a corridor of light and shadow, and the market’s hum rose again to a fever pitch—then dropped to a still, like a theatre going quiet before the curtain rises. The last sound Quinn registered before the world blurred into a flood of possibilities was the soft, almost respectful click of the bone token leaving its heated warmth, as if it had fulfilled its purpose and could rest now. The scene ended not with a confession, but with an incomplete truth that left questions spinning in the air like the dust motes in the lantern-blue glow. The crime’s peculiar location had yielded no simple culprit, only a doorway—an invitation to a deeper reckoning that would demand more of them than a standard investigation ever would. Quinn stood with Eva beside her, Mara at her shoulder, a line of steel and resolve drawn across their faces. The market’s hush clung to their coats as if the air itself were listening for an order. They had arrived looking for an explanation; they left with a doorway open, a memory unsettled, and a promise that the next step would not be small, nor would it be easy. The Veil Market’s lanterns flickered in a final, wavering rhythm, and the tunnel’s breath settled. Beyond the seam, the corridor waited, patient and dark. The memory’s price remained unspoken, but the truth—that truth Quinn refused to hide any longer—hung between them, a palpable weight ready to shift the case from a mystery to a reckoning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags40
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.541
leniency1
rawRatio0.025
effectiveRatio0.025
95.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount5351
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"softly"
count3
1
adverb"tenderly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"tenderly"
2"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount5351
totalAiIsms50
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"standard"
count3
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"could feel"
count2
7
word"echo"
count2
8
word"etched"
count2
9
word"weight"
count3
10
word"pulse"
count2
11
word"scanned"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count3
13
word"whisper"
count2
14
word"velvet"
count1
15
word"sentinel"
count2
16
word"shimmered"
count1
17
word"otherworldly"
count2
18
word"familiar"
count1
19
word"vibrated"
count1
20
word"intensity"
count1
21
word"warmth"
count2
22
word"flickered"
count2
23
word"sinister"
count1
24
word"desire"
count1
25
word"wavered"
count1
26
word"resolve"
count2
27
word"silence"
count1
28
word"searing"
count1
29
word"unsettled"
count1
30
word"wavering"
count1
31
word"unspoken"
count1
32
word"palpable"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"scanning"
2"traced"
3"standard"
4"flicked"
5"pulsed"
6"could feel"
7"echo"
8"etched"
9"weight"
10"pulse"
11"scanned"
12"trembled"
13"whisper"
14"velvet"
15"sentinel"
16"shimmered"
17"otherworldly"
18"familiar"
19"vibrated"
20"intensity"
21"warmth"
22"flickered"
23"sinister"
24"desire"
25"wavered"
26"resolve"
27"silence"
28"searing"
29"unsettled"
30"wavering"
31"unspoken"
32"palpable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences227
matches
0"d with relief"
92.51% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences227
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences260
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen64
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5283
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions55
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions127
wordCount4110
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Quinn41
Mara18
Kline1
Veil15
Market8
Camden1
Marcus5
Compass10
Shade1
Relic2
Kowalski1
Evie1
Aurora1
Oxford1
Eva17
Verdigis1
Morris3
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Mara"
2"Kline"
3"Market"
4"Camden"
5"Marcus"
6"Compass"
7"Relic"
8"Kowalski"
9"Evie"
10"Eva"
11"Morris"
places
0"Oxford"
globalScore1
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences210
glossingSentenceCount17
matches
0"looked like dried moths, a ledger whose n"
1"as if awaiting a critique from a gallery of occult purchases rather than a courtroom"
2"looked like a closed eye, lid half-raised"
3"looked like it’d survived more markets th"
4"It was as if he’d stepped straight from the shadows between stalls and decided to pretend he owned the night"
5"sigils that seemed to move when you blinked"
6"quite reach his eyes, watched them with a patient suspicion"
7"as if confiding a secret to a child"
8"felt like something else had prepared t"
9"as if tasting the air"
10"as if acknowledging a shared secret"
11"sound that seemed to come from every direction at once"
12"as if presenting an offering, and the air shifted with a soft sigh—the sound of something decades old letting out a breath"
13"felt like a spark thrown into dry tinde"
14"presence that seemed to claim both"
15"sounded like a trap snapping shut"
16"sounded like a verdict from a court no one"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches16
per1kWords3.029
wordCount5283
matches
0"not merely a token but a conduit"
1"not on the bone box, but on the seam itself"
2"not in greeting but as if acknowledging a shared secret"
3"not of objects but of moments"
4"not with the same walls and floors, but with a chessboard of streets Quinn recognised from the case"
5"not human and not animal, but something in between"
6"not animal, but something in between"
7"not as a casualty of a supernatural event but as a person who stood next to you"
8"not about a thief of memories but about the city’s desire to keep a truth locked away"
9"not the killer, not the victim, but a presence"
10"not the victim, but a presence"
11"not a memory of a night she could not face, but the memory she refused to let go"
12"not to any of them but to the force of will inside her"
13"not a headline or a justification, but a simple, direct truth"
14"not a conqueror but a sentinel, a keeper of thresholds"
15"not with a confession, but with an incomplete truth"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences260
matches
0"tell that a"
72.66% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs104
mean50.8
std20.54
cv0.404
sampleLengths
0100
148
241
368
480
522
660
783
823
943
1020
1164
1239
1373
1474
1571
1632
1725
1895
1924
2058
2122
2229
2371
2423
2521
26100
2724
2883
2924
3044
3116
3278
3338
3444
3522
3614
3732
3874
3935
4029
4153
4228
4381
4465
4564
4640
4720
4862
4949
94.44% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences227
matches
0"been left"
1"was supposed"
2"being rung"
3"were drawn"
4"been coaxed"
5"was made"
6"was—smiled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs645
matches
0"were listening"
1"were opening"
2"were listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount41
semicolonCount14
flaggedSentences46
totalSentences260
ratio0.177
matches
0"Her partner—DS Mara Kline, a tall woman with nerve and a stubborn set to her jaw—pushed through the crowd with the same measured pace she always used when the case turned its back on them."
1"A third person stepped from behind a stall—a tall, lean man in a trench coat that looked like it’d survived more markets than marriages."
2"The man’s skin bore a faint blue-glow bruise—an odd, almost chemical sheen that suggested something other than a blade had touched him."
3"The Veil Market’s offerings pulsed with residual energy—the sort you could feel in your teeth, a paltry echo of a heartbeat."
4"A man in a glass case sold memories in jars; a woman sold minor curses for the price of a name."
5"The Veil Market did not advertise its backdoors; it required one to know where to look."
6"The bone token wasn’t a prop; it had to be a key."
7"If someone killed him here, the compass would be a clue about the location of that portal—or a trap to lure investigators into a false lead."
8"Its cover bore the same pattern as the chalk sigils—an eye, a line, and a circle."
9"A single word beneath it—Relic."
10"Eva Kowalski, Evie—the childhood friend of Aurora, the occult researcher who had studied enough to know most of the world’s secrets and a few of its lies."
11"The memorial of memory idea fit the patterns she’d observed in the chalk rings—but it was a theory that could be dangerous if believed too soon."
12"She pressed the bone token against the talisman’s edge and felt a tiny jolt of sensation—like a spark traveling up her forearm."
13"The composition was not the work of a street fight; it felt like something else had prepared the body’s arrival here."
14"\"One set heavy, deliberate; the other light, almost ceremonial. They meander away from the body toward the back corridor, then disappear into a curtain that hides beyond us.\""
15"A draft of cold air slipped through, the sort that carried the memory of another place—the edge of a different night, perhaps."
16"The air tasted of old coinage and damp velvet—the sort of scent that followed a lifetime spent in cases that insisted the truth wore a disguise."
17"\"If that box opens with the token, it isn’t a treasure; it’s a memory bank. The relic is not the memory—it’s the vessel for it.\""
18"It was a portal—if portals existed in the world at all, which they did, in places like this, where the Veil Market pressed against the world’s soft underbelly."
19"A whisper of something—cold, empty, ancient—slid along Quinn’s skin."
20"The mask was off now, but the face behind it remained an illusion, features shifting like a candle flame catching a draft—enough to tell that a living mind stood behind it, a mind that could orchestrate a ritual and watch it unfold."
21"\"You’ve already begun to see the seams. The Market is not the crime; it is the stage. The relic is the truth you’re unwilling to admit you want to keep buried.\""
22"\"If this is a ritual, you’re using the victim’s memory to anchor a portal. The relic boxes memory; the relic box opens memory; the token seeds the chain. It’s a chain of theft, a theft not of objects but of moments.\" Her voice carried a rare sharpness, a scholar’s insistence that the past should be named and not simply observed."
23"The figure lifted a hand with slow reverence toward the seam as if presenting an offering, and the air shifted with a soft sigh—the sound of something decades old letting out a breath."
24"The token had a purpose beyond momentum; it could unlock a path that was as much a metaphor as a corridor."
25"Her partner—DS Morris—had died three years earlier during a case that had queer, impossible overtones, something supernatural that she hadn’t yet understood."
26"For a breathless moment, the room held its collective gaze on the gate between worlds, and then the Veil Compass—still in Quinn’s hand—tilted, its needle spinning like a ring of daggers around the outstretched finger."
27"The other side of the seam flickered with a pale, dreamlike light—the outline of a corridor, a breath of a different night, a memory not yet named."
28"In a heartbeat, the world reassembled, and the body lay still but not dead; it simply rested in a moment before a decision was made again."
29"A figure stepped out of the seam, not human and not animal, but something in between—an incarnation of a memory itself, wearing the face of the victim’s past and the future’s fear."
30"The memory could be faced; the truth could be owned."
31"But there was a cost—there always was."
32"The memory-ghost—whatever it was—smiled again, a deceptive, patient thing."
33"The note in the victim’s notebook—Relic—tugged at her, a final, stubborn clue that would not be silenced."
34"She considered the cost and the possibility that the entire case—this strange, illogical crime scene—was not about a thief of memories but about the city’s desire to keep a truth locked away."
35"\"If the needle is right, the portal isn’t simply a doorway; it’s a corridor between what is known and what must be faced. You have to decide how far you’re willing to walk.\""
36"The seam thickened, a dark boundary between two generations of memory, and then a figure stepped from it—not the killer, not the victim, but a presence that seemed to claim both."
37"\"Time to decide,\" Marcus—the market’s unlicensed confidant—murmured from the shadow, his voice a blend of heat and smoke."
38"She did not flinch as the memory pressed forward, not a memory of a night she could not face, but the memory she refused to let go—the moment she learned what lay behind the supernatural origin of Morris’s death, the moment someone had whispered a name that could not be spoken aloud in police precincts."
39"And then, before any of them could react, the floor gave a single, deceptive creak—the kind that sounded like a trap snapping shut."
40"It carried the Market’s own due—an exchange, a price, a choice."
41"The memory demanded a reckoning, and Quinn, with the bone token burning in her hand, found the nerve to speak—not a headline or a justification, but a simple, direct truth."
42"Then the light intensified, the corridor beyond the seam stretching into a corridor of light and shadow, and the market’s hum rose again to a fever pitch—then dropped to a still, like a theatre going quiet before the curtain rises."
43"The crime’s peculiar location had yielded no simple culprit, only a doorway—an invitation to a deeper reckoning that would demand more of them than a standard investigation ever would."
44"They had arrived looking for an explanation; they left with a doorway open, a memory unsettled, and a promise that the next step would not be small, nor would it be easy."
45"The memory’s price remained unspoken, but the truth—that truth Quinn refused to hide any longer—hung between them, a palpable weight ready to shift the case from a mystery to a reckoning."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount4169
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"quiet, watched, patient air."
adverbCount118
adverbRatio0.028304149676181337
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.005756776205325018
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences260
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences260
mean20.32
std11.97
cv0.589
sampleLengths
017
118
217
348
413
535
618
711
812
915
1053
1114
1225
1341
1422
1514
1614
1710
1822
1917
2024
2122
2220
2315
248
2510
2617
2716
2814
296
3022
3128
3214
3310
3422
357
366
3721
3821
3925
4019
4130
4225
437
4436
4516
4612
4710
4822
4925
38.46% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats30
diversityRatio0.23846153846153847
totalSentences260
uniqueOpeners62
44.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences225
matches
0"More like a language written"
1"Then, like a gunshot through"
2"Then the light intensified, the"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences225
matches
0"Her knee buckled into a"
1"She rooted her feet, mind"
2"Her partner—DS Mara Kline, a"
3"She kept her eyes on"
4"It was as if he’d"
5"He moved with the kind"
6"Her attention snagged on a"
7"She looked toward the lantern,"
8"Its cover bore the same"
9"She looked up, eyes narrowing."
10"She paused, brushing a curl"
11"Its bronze sheen now carried"
12"She stepped toward a stall"
13"he asked, the words wrapping"
14"She pressed the bone token"
15"She stepped away, pocketing the"
16"It was a calm, controlled"
17"she instructed, voice low but"
18"They moved as one, Quinn"
19"She studied the setup intently."
ratio0.231
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount209
totalSentences225
matches
0"The scream ripped through the"
1"Her knee buckled into a"
2"The bone token in her"
3"She rooted her feet, mind"
4"A voice cut through the"
5"Her partner—DS Mara Kline, a"
6"Mara said, voice low enough"
7"She kept her eyes on"
8"The crime scene had not"
9"The Veil Market moved locations"
10"Quinn knelt first, careful as"
11"The body lay on its"
12"Mara muttered, stepping closer, eyes"
13"Quinn traced a finger along"
14"The patterns were unfamiliar, not"
15"The symbol at the centre"
16"a voice carried through the"
17"A third person stepped from"
18"This one wore a mask"
19"It was as if he’d"
ratio0.929
22.22% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences225
matches
0"If someone killed him here,"
ratio0.004
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences146
technicalSentenceCount33
matches
0"She rooted her feet, mind sliding into gear as a row of stalls came into view, each one selling something that should have stayed buried: worked bone wind-chime…"
1"The Veil Market moved locations every full moon, and tonight the station beneath Camden wore its newest mask: damp concrete, fresh chalk runes on the platform, …"
2"The body lay on its side, an anonymous man in a charcoal suit, tie loosened as if he’d been mid-exhale when something had interrupted him."
3"No rustle of wind, no blood pooling, just the odd sting of copper in the air and the way the chalk sigils around him looked newly drawn and freshly smeared, as …"
4"The symbol at the centre looked like a closed eye, lid half-raised, as if the figure had witnessed something it wanted unseeable."
5"A third person stepped from behind a stall—a tall, lean man in a trench coat that looked like it’d survived more markets than marriages."
6"The name was clear enough to read, but the badge’s enamel wore in the corners as if it had spent more nights catching damp than days catching criminals."
7"The loitering crowd moved as if drawn by a tide, each face momentarily catching something human in the moment before the market devoured it again."
8"The ink on the parchment wasn’t ink at all but something metallic and malleable, moving under the light as if it knew the observer’s gaze."
9"Eva Kowalski, Evie—the childhood friend of Aurora, the occult researcher who had studied enough to know most of the world’s secrets and a few of its lies."
10"Eva wore a satchel full of books and something else she carried with the ease of someone who never forgot a detail: a quiet dread that walked beside her like a …"
11"The memorial of memory idea fit the patterns she’d observed in the chalk rings—but it was a theory that could be dangerous if believed too soon."
12"She stepped toward a stall that sold talismans shaped like teeth and kept a careful distance from the vendor who stood with the air of someone who knew how to v…"
13"The curtain yielded to their approach with a whisper, revealing a narrow passage that dipped down into a lower platform where the cavern of the old station open…"
14"The pedestal itself bore marks, a series of constellations carved into the stone that matched the chalk sigils on the victim’s body and the notebook’s note."
15"Her gaze settled on a second passage, a seam along the wall that looked nothing more than a crack at first, but now shimmered with a faint, otherworldly light."
16"The Veil Compass’s needle rotated in slow, deliberate arcs as if tasting the air."
17"Not a person so much as a shadow given form, a silhouette that moved with the slow, deliberate grace of someone who knew every corner of the tunnel and never fo…"
18"The mask was off now, but the face behind it remained an illusion, features shifting like a candle flame catching a draft—enough to tell that a living mind stoo…"
19"The shadow-figure laughed, a dry, rustling sound that seemed to come from every direction at once."
20"The figure lifted a hand with slow reverence toward the seam as if presenting an offering, and the air shifted with a soft sigh—the sound of something decades o…"
21"The relic box on the pedestal vibrated faintly, as if it were listening and waiting for a key."
22"Her partner—DS Morris—had died three years earlier during a case that had queer, impossible overtones, something supernatural that she hadn’t yet understood."
23"The shadow-figure seemed to draw back, the glow around the seam intensifying as if the space itself braced for something monumental."
24"It pooled into a whirlpool of air, a soft, pulling current that tugged at the edges of their clothing and hair, as if the tunnel itself exhaled a sigh of relief…"
25"The relic box gave a soft, sinister clang, the bone lock snapping as if some long-cherished secret had finally been coaxed free."
26"The shadow-figure hissed, a sound that wasn’t heard so much as felt, as if a memory itself were opening up and screaming through the throat of the world."
27"A jolt ran through her, and the room’s energy snapped into a sharper focus, the chalk lines around the body tightening as if drawn with new intent."
28"She did not flinch as the memory pressed forward, not a memory of a night she could not face, but the memory she refused to let go—the moment she learned what l…"
29"The crowd of market-goers gasped as if someone had slapped them with a memory they’d forgotten they possessed."
30"The relic box cracked open on its own, releasing a pulse of light that braided with the Veil Compass’s glow."
31"The last sound Quinn registered before the world blurred into a flood of possibilities was the soft, almost respectful click of the bone token leaving its heate…"
32"The crime’s peculiar location had yielded no simple culprit, only a doorway—an invitation to a deeper reckoning that would demand more of them than a standard i…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags40
uselessAdditionCount13
matches
0"Mara said, bending to inspect the wrists"
1"Mara snapped, though her voice carried no heat, only the cool edge of a professional who’d seen this play before"
2"Mara asked, her voice tight with professional gravity"
3"Eva asked, eyes bright behind her round glasses"
4"she instructed, voice low but urgent enough to cut through the hum"
5"Eva said softly, as if the word itself would unlock something"
6"she asked, voice steady, eyes never leaving the glow"
7"Eva whispered, and the words felt like a spark thrown into dry tinder"
8"she said, voice steady, eyes locked on the seam"
9"Mara cried, but the warning came too late"
10"she said, voice clear and cold as a blade"
11"unlicensed confidant—murmured, his voice a blend of heat and smoke"
12"it said, voice clear and far away, yet close enough to touch"
14.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags34
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"Mara muttered (mutter)"
1"Mara snapped (snap)"
2"the vendor added (add)"
3"a voice hissed (hiss)"
4"Mara demanded (demand)"
5"Eva whispered (whisper)"
6"Mara cried (cry)"
7"Eva whispered (whisper)"
8"unlicensed confidant—murmured (murmur)"
9"Quinn snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.459
leniency0.919
rawRatio0.294
effectiveRatio0.27
65.0739%