Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0SN46SA1H1VS7CS6AJBYC

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47.9s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chalk outline looked wrong against the ancient cobblestones. Detective Quinn crouched beside the body, her worn leather watch catching the sodium glow of the street lamps. Three AM in Camden's back alleys, where the tourist crowds never ventured and the locals knew better than to ask questions. The deceased lay sprawled between two Victorian brick walls, arms akimbo, face turned skyward with an expression of genuine surprise. "Overdose," DS Mitchell announced from the mouth of the alley. "Classic signs. Needle's right there by his left hand." Quinn studied the scene without touching anything. Something prickled at the edge of her awareness, the same instinct that had kept her alive through eighteen years on the force. The same one that had screamed warnings the night Morris died. "When did you last see a junkie inject between his toes whilst wearing £300 trainers?" Mitchell approached, pulling out his notepad. "Rich kids experiment. Daddy's money doesn't buy common sense." "No." Quinn stood, brushing dust from her knees. "Look at his hands." The victim's palms faced upward, fingers slightly curled. Clean fingernails. No track marks on visible veins. But what caught Quinn's attention was the small brass compass clutched in his right fist, its verdigris patina gleaming dully in the artificial light. "Antique dealer maybe?" Mitchell suggested. "Camden Market's full of them." Quinn examined the compass without picking it up. Strange symbols etched around its face, definitely not standard maritime markings. The needle pointed steadily northwest, which would be wrong for magnetic north in London. She'd seen similar items before, in evidence bags from cases that never made it to trial. Cases that got buried under bureaucratic red tape and convenient explanations. "Run his ID." "Already did. Thomas Hartwell, twenty-four, student at UCL. Anthropology major. Clean record except for a drunk and disorderly last year." The alley felt colder than it should for September. Quinn walked the perimeter, noting the scuff marks in the ancient mortar between bricks. Fresh scratches. Someone had climbed this wall recently. "Witnesses?" "None. Body was found by a street sweeper around two thirty. Coroner estimates time of death between midnight and one AM." Quinn knelt again, this time focusing on the ground around the body. The cobblestones here were older than the surrounding street, probably original Victorian. But there was something else. Between two stones, barely visible, white powder caught the light. "Got a torch?" Mitchell handed over his LED flashlight. Quinn directed the beam downward, following a thin line of white substance that formed what might have been geometric patterns around the body. "Cocaine residue?" Mitchell offered. "Wrong texture." Quinn stood, following the powder trail with the torch beam. "And wrong placement." The powder formed a rough circle around the body, with smaller symbols at cardinal points. Amateur work, like someone following instructions from a book without understanding the purpose. But the intent was clear enough. "Ritual killing?" "Ritual something." Quinn photographed the markings with her phone. "Question is whether our student was the perpetrator or the victim." She turned her attention back to the compass. The symbols around its edge were definitely not English, possibly not European at all. The needle remained fixed northwest, pointing toward the heart of Camden Market. "Mitchell, what's northwest of here?" "Camden Lock. Some old tube station that's been closed for decades. Why?" Quinn's stomach tightened. Closed tube stations meant tunnels. Tunnels meant places where screams echoed and bodies disappeared. Places where cases like Morris went cold. "I need you to call for a full forensics team." "Already requested basic—" "Full team. And I want background checks on anyone Hartwell associated with in the past six months. University records, social media, everything." Mitchell scribbled notes. "You think his friends are involved?" Quinn studied the compass again. Whoever had placed it in Hartwell's hand wanted it found. Wanted someone to follow that steady northwest bearing. The smart play was to bag it as evidence and let someone else chase shadows. But shadows had claimed Morris. And three years of nightmares wouldn't let her look away. "I think Thomas Hartwell found something he shouldn't have. Or someone found him." A woman's voice echoed from the street entrance to the alley. Quinn recognized the accent immediately. Irish, educated, with the particular precision that came from years of academic work. "Excuse me, officers? I'm looking for my research partner." Quinn looked up to see a young woman with curly red hair approaching cautiously. Round glasses reflected the street lamps, and she clutched a worn leather satchel against her chest with white-knuckled fingers. "I'm Eva Kowalski. Tommy, Thomas Hartwell, he was supposed to meet me at the British Museum tonight. For our project." Mitchell stepped forward. "Miss, this is a crime scene. You'll need to—" "What kind of project?" Quinn interrupted. Eva's green eyes darted between them and the chalk outline. "Medieval manuscript translation. We're working on some texts from the restricted archives." Quinn felt that familiar prickle again. "What kind of texts?" "Historical accounts of London's supernatural folklore. Pre-Christian ritual sites, that sort of thing." Eva tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear, a nervous gesture that seemed habitual. "Tommy thought he'd found references to active sites. Places where the old practices might still..." She trailed off as her gaze fell on the compass in the dead man's hand. "Oh no. Tommy, what did you do?" Quinn stepped between Eva and the body. "You recognise that compass?" "It's from the Veil Market. Tommy bought it last week against my advice." Eva's voice carried the weight of someone who'd been proven horribly right. "I told him those dealers were dangerous, but he thought it was just a curiosity shop." "What's the Veil Market?" Eva looked genuinely surprised. "You don't know? It's an underground market that sells... specialised items. Moves location every month. Currently operating out of some abandoned tube station." Northwest. The compass needle pointed northwest. Quinn made her decision. "Mitchell, secure the scene. I want everything documented." "Where are you going?" "To find out what Thomas Hartwell was really looking for." Eva stepped forward. "I'm coming with you." "Absolutely not. This is police—" "That compass will only work for someone who understands what they're looking for." Eva's academic composure cracked, revealing genuine fear underneath. "Tommy was my friend. My responsibility. I won't let his death be meaningless." Quinn studied the young woman's face. Determination mixed with grief, intelligence with desperation. The same expression she'd seen in her own mirror after Morris died. "Can you find this market?" "I have a bone token. Entry requirement." Quinn didn't ask how a museum researcher came to possess such things. Some questions were better left unanswered. "Mitchell, radio for backup to meet us at Camden Lock station." "The closed one?" "That's the one." Quinn photographed the crime scene from multiple angles, then carefully extracted the compass from Hartwell's grip using evidence gloves. The needle swung wildly for a moment before settling back to its northwestern bearing. Whatever waited in those tunnels had already claimed one life tonight. She wasn't about to let it claim another.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.192
leniency0.385
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1180
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"cautiously"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"cautiously"
2"really"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1180
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"gleaming"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"standard"
count1
3
word"magnetic"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count2
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"carried the weight"
count1
8
word"absolutely"
count1
highlights
0"gleaming"
1"etched"
2"standard"
3"magnetic"
4"stomach"
5"echoed"
6"familiar"
7"carried the weight"
8"absolutely"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences78
matches
0"d with grief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences78
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1178
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
10.19% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions50
wordCount751
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.8
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn21
Camden2
Victorian2
Mitchell7
Morris4
London1
September1
English1
European1
Market1
Hartwell2
Eva7
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Mitchell"
2"Morris"
3"Eva"
places
0"Camden"
1"London"
2"Hartwell"
globalScore0.102
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed habitual"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1178
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean17.85
std13.86
cv0.777
sampleLengths
09
159
219
340
415
515
612
740
810
960
103
1120
1231
131
1421
1539
163
1729
184
1915
2034
212
2220
2334
245
2512
2624
2710
283
2922
309
3138
3215
3313
3429
359
3633
3720
3812
396
4022
4110
4244
4315
447
4511
4641
474
4827
496
96.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"got buried"
1"been proven"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs126
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences120
ratio0
matches(empty)
92.94% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount752
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"under bureaucratic red tape"
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.03590425531914894
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.02127659574468085
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean9.82
std6.01
cv0.612
sampleLengths
09
118
221
320
410
59
67
722
811
915
106
119
128
134
148
152
166
1724
185
195
208
2111
2214
2316
2411
253
2620
279
2814
292
306
311
3221
3312
3412
355
3610
373
386
3923
404
4112
423
4315
4413
456
462
479
4811
498
84.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5166666666666667
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners62
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount4
totalSentences72
matches
0"She'd seen similar items before,"
1"She turned her attention back"
2"She trailed off as her"
3"She wasn't about to let"
ratio0.056
57.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences72
matches
0"The chalk outline looked wrong"
1"Detective Quinn crouched beside the"
2"The deceased lay sprawled between"
3"DS Mitchell announced from the"
4"Quinn studied the scene without"
5"Something prickled at the edge"
6"The same one that had"
7"Mitchell approached, pulling out his"
8"Quinn stood, brushing dust from"
9"The victim's palms faced upward,"
10"Quinn examined the compass without"
11"The needle pointed steadily northwest,"
12"She'd seen similar items before,"
13"Cases that got buried under"
14"The alley felt colder than"
15"Quinn walked the perimeter, noting"
16"Someone had climbed this wall"
17"Quinn knelt again, this time"
18"The cobblestones here were older"
19"Mitchell handed over his LED"
ratio0.806
69.44% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences72
matches
0"Whoever had placed it in"
ratio0.014
34.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Something prickled at the edge of her awareness, the same instinct that had kept her alive through eighteen years on the force."
1"Cases that got buried under bureaucratic red tape and convenient explanations."
2"Quinn directed the beam downward, following a thin line of white substance that formed what might have been geometric patterns around the body."
3"Irish, educated, with the particular precision that came from years of academic work."
4"The needle swung wildly for a moment before settling back to its northwestern bearing."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
92.31% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"DS Mitchell announced (announce)"
1"Mitchell suggested (suggest)"
2"Quinn interrupted (interrupt)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.058
leniency0.115
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.115
85.9373%