Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0TDNY59FV8P1066FK2Y17

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt gave way with a metallic snap. I hauled the door open, expecting Eva's familiar scowl and the takeaway bags she usually forgot to bring up from the curry house. Instead, charcoal wool and bergamot. "You've lost weight, Rory." Lucien Moreau leaned on his ivory cane, platinum hair catching the hallway's sulphur light. "The Welsh climate never did suit you." My fingers whitened on the doorframe. Six weeks. Six weeks since I'd woken in his Mayfair bedroom to silk sheets and silence, his note written in Marseille French scrawled across hotel stationery. Six weeks of looking over my shoulder during Golden Empress deliveries, wondering if the demon half of him had finally digested what remained of his humanity. "Wrong flat," I said. "I live above Silas' bar." "And yet here you are." The amber eye glimmered with predatory amusement. The black one, dull as wet obsidian, remained fixed on my throat. "Hiding in your witch friend's book nest. How predictable." Behind me, Ptolemy leapt from the windowsill with a yowl. Stacks of Eva's research papers shuffled in the sudden draught. Three days I'd spent pent up in this cramped Brick Lane flat, surrounded by grimoires and the smell of madras rising through the floorboards, trying to outthink a problem that had no legal precedent. "Evan's in London," Lucien said. My stomach turned to ice. "You promised he wouldn't find me." "I promised I'd watch him." He adjusted his grip on the cane. The motion revealed the blade concealed within, catching the light. "My apologies. Demons make shit witnesses." I should have slammed the door. Every instinct honed during my escape from Cardiff screamed to shut him out, to retreat among Eva's scrolls and pretend I'd never met this fixer with his tailored suits and his forked tongue. Instead, I watched him step across the threshold. The flat shrank with him inside. At five-eleven, Lucien filled spaces not with height but with presence, the way smoke saturates a room. He navigated the teetering piles of occult texts with practised ease, cane tapping against worn floorboards, avoiding the loose plank near the kitchenette that I'd nearly tripped over twice this morning. "Still running errands for Yu-Fei Cheung?" He picked up a clay jar from the sideboard, turning it in gloved fingers. The jar contained grave dirt and something that chirped resentfully when disturbed. "Delivering dumplings to demons. How far the barrister's daughter has fallen." "How far the information broker has sunk, coming to retrieve me himself." I leaned against the door, arms crossed. "Your clientele usually comes to you, Luc. Unless you've lost your edge." The jar clicked back into place. He turned, and for a moment the mask slipped, the polished Marseille sophisticate cracking to show something hungry beneath. "I didn't come for business, Laila." The alias hit like a physical blow. Laila. The name I'd used in his bed, whispered against his collarbone while his amber eye had tracked shadows across the ceiling. Nobody called me that. Not even me anymore. "Don't," I said. "Your ex-boyfriend hired a bloodhound." He moved closer, shedding the scent of rain and expensive tobacco. "Not human. Something from the lower realms that answers to cash and pain. It tracked you to Shoreditch last night during your delivery shift." My breath came short. The crescent scar on my left wrist ached, a phantom pulse of the childhood accident that had nearly taken my hand. "Evan doesn't have contacts in the underworld. He's a solicitor from Cardiff. He drafts wills and screams at clerks." "He's motivated." Lucien stopped an arm's length away. Close enough to see the fever-brightness in his amber eye, the way his pupils bled into the sclera of the black one. His charcoal suit hung differently than I remembered, the shoulders tight with tension. "When you ran, you bruised his pride along with his jaw. Men like Evan don't forgive either. They hunt." I remembered the bruises. The careful placement of them where clothing would hide the evidence. My father's disappointed letters asking when I'd finish law school at Cardiff University. The night I'd fled to London with nothing but a rucksack and Eva's spare key, the crescent scar burning in the cold night air. "Why warn me?" I asked. "You left without goodbye." "Because I was hungry." The admission rumbled low, almost subvocal. He reached out, gloved thumb tracing the scar on my wrist with obscene gentleness. "And you smelled like salvation. I didn't trust myself to stay, Aurora. Not with what you make me feel." The touch burned. I should have pulled away. Three deadbolts hadn't kept him out, and my anger proved just as flimsy a defense against the heat coiling in my stomach. "You don't get to do this." My voice cracked. "You don't get to disappear and then show up playing the protector. I'm not your project, Lucien. I'm not your midnight snack." "Project?" His laugh was sharp as broken glass. He gripped my chin, forcing my gaze to meet that terrible mismatched stare. His thumb pressed against my lower lip with possessive cruelty. "I spent six weeks hunting nightmares in the Avaros realm to keep this bloodhound from your scent. I haven't slept. I haven't fed. And when I close my eyes, I taste your hair on my tongue like communion wine." The air between us thickened. Ptolemy's tail lashed against a stack of books, sending them tumbling. Neither of us looked. "Then why come here?" I whispered against his thumb. "If you're so dangerous?" "Because I tracked the hound to this building five minutes ago." The words landed between us like a dropped blade. Lucien's hand dropped to his cane, freeing the steel with a whisper of sound. The blade was thin and cruel, etched with symbols that hurt to look at directly. "It's already inside, Rory. It followed me up the stairs while I was admiring your hospitality." A crash sounded from the kitchen, the window Eva always left cracked for the cat. The scent of copper flooded the room, heavy and wet, cutting through the smell of curry and old paper. Ptolemy screeched. Lucien shoved me behind him as the bedroom door splintered inward, and something that wore Evan's face but moved with too many joints spilled into the lamplight, grinning with a mouth full of needle teeth. "Found you, lovely," it said in my ex-boyfriend's voice.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.441
leniency0.882
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1068
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.46% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1068
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"predictable"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count2
6
word"navigated"
count1
7
word"grave"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"tracing"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"silk"
3"silence"
4"predictable"
5"stomach"
6"navigated"
7"grave"
8"pulse"
9"tension"
10"tracing"
11"whisper"
12"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences67
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1065
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount760
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.79
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Six"
discoveredNames
Eva5
Moreau1
Mayfair1
Marseille2
French1
Golden1
Empress1
Ptolemy3
Brick1
Lane1
Cardiff2
Lucien6
Close1
University1
London1
Evan1
Six3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"French"
3"Ptolemy"
4"Lucien"
5"Evan"
places
0"Marseille"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.939
wordCount1065
matches
0"not with height but with presence, the way smoke saturates a room"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean28.78
std18.59
cv0.646
sampleLengths
032
15
225
358
49
533
654
75
811
928
1039
118
1254
1343
1431
1525
166
1737
183
1940
2044
2162
2252
239
2443
2530
2631
2770
2820
2913
3011
319
3245
3334
342
3535
369
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs129
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount762
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.023622047244094488
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.009186351706036745
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean12.53
std8.39
cv0.669
sampleLengths
09
123
25
318
47
56
62
724
826
94
105
1112
1212
139
1410
1510
1634
175
185
196
2012
2110
226
236
2433
258
266
2717
2831
2920
3012
3111
3219
3312
346
3519
366
377
381
3921
404
414
423
4316
4424
454
4621
4719
488
4922
70.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.4470588235294118
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners38
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences60
matches
0"Instead, charcoal wool and bergamot."
1"Instead, I watched him step"
ratio0.033
73.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences60
matches
0"I hauled the door open,"
1"My fingers whitened on the"
2"My stomach turned to ice."
3"He adjusted his grip on"
4"I should have slammed the"
5"He navigated the teetering piles"
6"He picked up a clay"
7"I leaned against the door,"
8"He turned, and for a"
9"He moved closer, shedding the"
10"My breath came short."
11"His charcoal suit hung differently"
12"I remembered the bruises."
13"My father's disappointed letters asking"
14"He reached out, gloved thumb"
15"I should have pulled away."
16"My voice cracked"
17"His laugh was sharp as"
18"He gripped my chin, forcing"
19"His thumb pressed against my"
ratio0.367
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences60
matches
0"The third deadbolt gave way"
1"I hauled the door open,"
2"Lucien Moreau leaned on his"
3"My fingers whitened on the"
4"The amber eye glimmered with"
5"The black one, dull as"
6"Stacks of Eva's research papers"
7"My stomach turned to ice."
8"He adjusted his grip on"
9"The motion revealed the blade"
10"I should have slammed the"
11"Every instinct honed during my"
12"The flat shrank with him"
13"He navigated the teetering piles"
14"He picked up a clay"
15"The jar contained grave dirt"
16"I leaned against the door,"
17"The jar clicked back into"
18"He turned, and for a"
19"The alias hit like a"
ratio0.833
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
47.62% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Three days I'd spent pent up in this cramped Brick Lane flat, surrounded by grimoires and the smell of madras rising through the floorboards, trying to outthink…"
1"The jar contained grave dirt and something that chirped resentfully when disturbed."
2"The crescent scar on my left wrist ached, a phantom pulse of the childhood accident that had nearly taken my hand."
3"Lucien shoved me behind him as the bedroom door splintered inward, and something that wore Evan's face but moved with too many joints spilled into the lamplight…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.059
88.9908%