Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0TES3XXCMTF7T20PQY92X

Run Details

Duration:
17.5s
Cost:
$0.001034
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before I could even register who was on the other side; the force of it nearly knocking me back. Eyes, dark and stormy, met mine—amber and black—an expression that flickered between surprise and something darker, deeper. Lucien. He was dressed in that immaculate tailored tailcoat, as if he'd stepped straight out of a noir film—platinum blond hair slicked back, a faint smirk curling at the edge of his chiseled face. His ivory-handled cane tapped against the wooden threshold, almost impatient, as he surveyed me with that smirk that always hinted at secrets he’d never quite share. “Rory,” he drawled, voice smooth, but loaded with something unspoken. “I didn't expect to see you here.” The faint scent of cologne clung to him—leathery, smoky—and I felt that familiar pull, a tug that tightened my chest even as my mind raced through everything I wanted to say. Instead, I crossed my arms, trying to mask the flutter of nerves inside me. The crescent scar on my wrist prickled with memory. “What are you doing here, Lucien?” He tilted his head, eyes narrowing just slightly, as if studying me, weighing his next words. “I could ask you the same, but I have no patience for riddles. You’ve been avoiding me." I drew a breath, steadying myself. The flat was cramped—papers and ancient tomes cluttered every surface, a chaos I usually thrived in. Tonight, it felt oppressive; suffocating, like a trap waiting to close. “Is that why you came? To accuse me of hiding? Or are you just bored?” My voice was sharper than I intended, but the ache of long-buried feelings made it difficult to tame. I kept my posture firm, despite the fluttering in my stomach. Lucien’s eyes flicked down to the scar on my wrist, then back up, unreadable. His lips twisted into a crooked grin. “Boredom’s a dangerous game, Rory. You know that. And I tend to prefer confrontation.” He shifted his weight, cane resting on the threshold. “Besides, this is hardly the time for formalities.” The tension stretched thick—neither of us willing to break the silence. Still, I noticed his gaze lingered just a fraction too long on my face, as if trying to decipher something beneath the surface. “I thought you’d left, Lucien,” I said softly, voice trembling despite the effort I made to sound composed. “After everything.” He stepped inside, and I instinctively took a step back, pressing into the narrow confines of the flat. His presence was too much—intense and familiar, yet charged with history. “Leaving would have been too easy. We both know that. Besides...” His voice lowered, almost conspiratorial. “Some debts are harder to pay than we think.” That hit a nerve, and I clenched my fists. The memories—the way his voice had haunted me after the night we parted—returned with a vengeance. The heated exchanges, the hesitation, the promises left unspoken. But I refused to let him see that. “You have no idea what you’re walking into,” I muttered, voice strained, fighting the urge to shout. “Stay out of my life, Lucien. Just go.” He laughed softly, the kind that made the hairs on the back of my neck stand on end. “I think you’ll find I’ve never been so easy to dismiss.” He moved further into the flat, cane tapping a slow rhythm, like a heartbeat. The shadows flickered across his features, making him seem both alluring and dangerous. It was the Lucien I remembered—born from Marseille, half-demon, and always one step ahead of me, never quite revealing everything. “You came unannounced,” I said, voice cracking despite my efforts. “What do you want?” His smirk widened. “You’re still as challenging as ever. I want what’s mine, Rory. That’s all.” Rage flickered—hot and immediate—before I could stop it. “You mean the information? The relic? You think you can come back and just take what you feel entitled to?” He leaned on his cane, eyes gleaming. “Entitlement’s a human invention. I simply want what’s rightfully mine—and perhaps, what I’ve left behind.” The word “left behind” sank deeper than I liked. It twisted something inside me, that mixture of longing and regret that I’d tried to suppress since that night in the rain. The argument, the pain, the silence that stretched far past what I’d thought I could endure. “You don’t get to decide,” I said, voice muffled with emotion. “Not anymore.” Lucien’s gaze drifted over me, contemplative, as if measuring the cracks in my facade. Then, unexpectedly, he took a step closer, just enough that I could feel the heat radiating from his body. That smirk still played on his lips, but his eyes softened—just a flicker. “I never wanted to hurt you, Rory,” he said quietly. “But that was never in my control. Neither of us is free from the past.” The words hung between us like a fragile thread, vulnerable but dangerous. I felt my breath hitch as memories surged—nights under flickering London streetlights, whispered promises, the way his voice had trembled when he’d finally admitted his demons. “I’ve moved on,” I whispered, voice brittle. “Whatever unfinished business you think we have—” “Is what keeps us tethered,” he finished for me, voice husky, almost desperate. “You feel it too.” Before I could react, he reached out—slowly, almost like a surrender—his fingers hovering just above my wrist, lingering on the scar. I froze, heart pounding. That small crescent-shaped mark was a relic of childhood chaos, but now it seemed to carry the weight of everything we hadn't spoken about. “Why did you come here tonight?” I asked, voice strained, barely able to hold the tremor from reaching it. Lucien studied me, that flicker of vulnerability flickering across his face. “Because no matter how far I try to run, I keep circling back to you. Always.” He hesitated. “And I need to know if you feel the same—that there’s still something worth fighting for.” My throat tightened. I wanted to rip away from him, push him out that door and slam it with all the force I had. But deep down, I knew I didn’t want him to leave—not yet. Not when the raw, jagged truth of everything lingering between us was finally spilling over. A silence, thick with meaning, stretched until he finally stepped back, voice dropping to a whisper. “I’m not leaving until you tell me. Until you admit there’s still a spark—that it isn’t all burnt out.” His words, daring and raw, hung there, and for a moment I stared at him, caught in a whirlwind of anger and longing I’d fought so hard to ignore. The air shifted, crackling with unspoken promises, threats, and nostalgia. And just when I thought I’d push him out and shut the door—he closed the gap again. His hand reached for my face, fingertips barely grazing my cheek, and in that fleeting touch, I felt everything I refused to face. The heartbreak, the fire, the undeniable pull that had never truly died. Whatever came next, I knew the line had been crossed. No turning back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
12.50% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"I said softly [softly]"
1"His voice lowered almost [almost]"
2"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.438
leniency0.875
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.188
79.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1198
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"slowly"
3"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1198
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"flickered"
count3
1
word"unspoken"
count3
2
word"familiar"
count2
3
word"raced"
count1
4
word"oppressive"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"unreadable"
count1
8
word"weight"
count2
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"silence"
count3
11
word"charged"
count1
12
word"gleaming"
count1
13
word"facade"
count1
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"flicker"
count2
16
word"trembled"
count1
17
word"pounding"
count1
18
word"whisper"
count1
19
word"fleeting"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"unspoken"
2"familiar"
3"raced"
4"oppressive"
5"stomach"
6"flicked"
7"unreadable"
8"weight"
9"tension"
10"silence"
11"charged"
12"gleaming"
13"facade"
14"could feel"
15"flicker"
16"trembled"
17"pounding"
18"whisper"
19"fleeting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched my fists"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
78.89% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences67
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1173
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions7
wordCount889
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity0.56
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien5
Marseille1
London1
persons
0"Lucien"
places
0"Marseille"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
20.69% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if studying me, weighing his next words"
1"as if trying to decipher something beneath the surface"
2"as if measuring the cracks in my facade"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1173
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"regret that I’d"
82.72% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean33.51
std14.73
cv0.44
sampleLengths
041
159
217
354
46
533
633
744
852
934
1020
1154
1242
1325
1429
1547
1614
1716
1828
1922
2047
2113
2246
2325
2438
2514
2617
2749
2819
2945
3051
3135
3239
3352
3413
94.79% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences67
matches
0"was dressed"
1"been crossed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs183
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences85
ratio0.188
matches
0"The door swung open before I could even register who was on the other side; the force of it nearly knocking me back."
1"Eyes, dark and stormy, met mine—amber and black—an expression that flickered between surprise and something darker, deeper."
2"He was dressed in that immaculate tailored tailcoat, as if he'd stepped straight out of a noir film—platinum blond hair slicked back, a faint smirk curling at the edge of his chiseled face."
3"The faint scent of cologne clung to him—leathery, smoky—and I felt that familiar pull, a tug that tightened my chest even as my mind raced through everything I wanted to say."
4"The flat was cramped—papers and ancient tomes cluttered every surface, a chaos I usually thrived in."
5"Tonight, it felt oppressive; suffocating, like a trap waiting to close."
6"The tension stretched thick—neither of us willing to break the silence."
7"His presence was too much—intense and familiar, yet charged with history."
8"The memories—the way his voice had haunted me after the night we parted—returned with a vengeance."
9"It was the Lucien I remembered—born from Marseille, half-demon, and always one step ahead of me, never quite revealing everything."
10"Rage flickered—hot and immediate—before I could stop it."
11"That smirk still played on his lips, but his eyes softened—just a flicker."
12"I felt my breath hitch as memories surged—nights under flickering London streetlights, whispered promises, the way his voice had trembled when he’d finally admitted his demons."
13"Before I could react, he reached out—slowly, almost like a surrender—his fingers hovering just above my wrist, lingering on the scar."
14"But deep down, I knew I didn’t want him to leave—not yet."
15"And just when I thought I’d push him out and shut the door—he closed the gap again."
86.74% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount911
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped mark"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.048298572996706916
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.01646542261251372
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean13.8
std7.12
cv0.516
sampleLengths
023
117
21
333
426
510
67
731
814
99
106
1116
1217
136
1416
1511
1633
1711
1814
197
2023
218
2211
2323
2418
252
2618
2711
2816
299
309
3116
329
338
3417
358
3618
3711
3814
3913
4020
4110
424
433
4413
458
4620
477
4815
499
63.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.4
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners34
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences65
matches
0"Instead, I crossed my arms,"
1"Then, unexpectedly, he took a"
ratio0.031
23.08% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences65
matches
0"He was dressed in that"
1"His ivory-handled cane tapped against"
2"he drawled, voice smooth, but"
3"He tilted his head, eyes"
4"I drew a breath, steadying"
5"My voice was sharper than"
6"I kept my posture firm,"
7"His lips twisted into a"
8"He shifted his weight, cane"
9"I said softly, voice trembling"
10"He stepped inside, and I"
11"His presence was too much—intense"
12"His voice lowered, almost conspiratorial"
13"I muttered, voice strained, fighting"
14"He laughed softly, the kind"
15"He moved further into the"
16"It was the Lucien I"
17"I said, voice cracking despite"
18"His smirk widened."
19"He leaned on his cane,"
ratio0.492
29.23% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences65
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Eyes, dark and stormy, met"
2"He was dressed in that"
3"His ivory-handled cane tapped against"
4"he drawled, voice smooth, but"
5"The faint scent of cologne"
6"The crescent scar on my"
7"He tilted his head, eyes"
8"I drew a breath, steadying"
9"The flat was cramped—papers and"
10"Tonight, it felt oppressive; suffocating,"
11"My voice was sharper than"
12"I kept my posture firm,"
13"Lucien’s eyes flicked down to"
14"His lips twisted into a"
15"He shifted his weight, cane"
16"The tension stretched thick—neither of"
17"I said softly, voice trembling"
18"He stepped inside, and I"
19"His presence was too much—intense"
ratio0.862
76.92% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Before I could react, he"
ratio0.015
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Eyes, dark and stormy, met mine—amber and black—an expression that flickered between surprise and something darker, deeper."
1"He was dressed in that immaculate tailored tailcoat, as if he'd stepped straight out of a noir film—platinum blond hair slicked back, a faint smirk curling at t…"
2"The faint scent of cologne clung to him—leathery, smoky—and I felt that familiar pull, a tug that tightened my chest even as my mind raced through everything I …"
3"He tilted his head, eyes narrowing just slightly, as if studying me, weighing his next words."
4"Still, I noticed his gaze lingered just a fraction too long on my face, as if trying to decipher something beneath the surface."
5"He laughed softly, the kind that made the hairs on the back of my neck stand on end."
6"Lucien’s gaze drifted over me, contemplative, as if measuring the cracks in my facade."
7"Before I could react, he reached out—slowly, almost like a surrender—his fingers hovering just above my wrist, lingering on the scar."
8"His words, daring and raw, hung there, and for a moment I stared at him, caught in a whirlwind of anger and longing I’d fought so hard to ignore."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"he drawled, voice smooth, but loaded with something unspoken"
1"He shifted, cane resting on the threshold"
2"I said softly, voice trembling despite the effort I made to sound composed"
3"I muttered, voice strained, fighting the urge to shout"
4"I said, voice cracking despite my efforts"
5"I said, voice muffled with emotion"
6"he finished, voice husky, almost desperate"
56.25% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he drawled (drawl)"
1"I muttered (mutter)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.188
70.1361%