Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0VY05Q1M2V7DAW5GAX7HE

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1m 8s
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$0.003750
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The chain hissed as it tightened, and I slammed the railing with a gloved palm to keep my balance. “The body isn’t dead, not yet,” Eva Kowalski whispered, voice steady as a scalpel blade, though her freckled face paled beneath the glow of a hanging lamp that seemed to breath with every breath I took. Show me the blood, I thought, and stepped deeper into the chamber. The Veil Market had collapsed into an abandoned Tube tunnel beneath Camden, a throat of brick and damp that remembered footsteps like old ghosts. Lanterns swung from black wires, casting uneven pools of light on crates and occult paraphernalia. A vendor’s stall stood intact—tarnished coins, jars of unlabelled powders, a row of bone tokens arranged like tiny teeth on a velvet cloth. The market’s current host lay in the space beyond, suspended from a rusted beam by copper cable, wrists bound tight as if to remind the living that some deals never come unworn. There was a scent I could not name, half-cinnamon, half-metallic ozone, and a faint note of something sweet—like a trapped memory lingering in the air. The Veil Compass in my pocket hummed against the fabric of my coat, the small brass circle cool and dangerously precise. Its face etched with sigils glinted in the glow, and the needle quivered faintly, as if peering toward an unseen doorway. “Move aside,” I rasped, and the crowd of shadows shifted. The body’s chest did not rise, not in a way meant to sell the lie of life, but I saw the brief flutter of a breath in the edges of the man’s throat, almost too quick to measure. A doctor would have called it a reflex, a last spark of will refusing to relinquish the body to quiet. “Careful, Harlow,” Eva breathed, stepping closer with the satchel hooked over one shoulder. The leather squeaked as she crouched and slid a gloved hand over the vendor’s wrist. The sigil tattooed there—an intricate knot of circles and runes—seemed to pulse, as if it remembered someone’s touch. “These wards aren’t just ornamental. They cling to the skin, like a memory you don’t forget.” I angled my head and scanned the room with the cold patience you learn after eighteen years on the force, after a partner goes down in a case with more smoke than substance and you keep walking because breaking down is a luxury you can’t afford. My partner had been DS Morris, a quiet man who trusted a routine and paid for it with a last hour that did not resemble a proper ending. Supernatural origins, the others had said, and I’d believed them until I learned to count the days by the clock in my own left wrist—heavy, reliable, and always there even when the world decided not to be. The body’s blood had dried in odd rings around the mouth and wrists, but no obvious wound—no stab, no cut, no blunt force that would pin this to a single killer. The chain tied to the beam ended in nothing but air, as if the weight could levitate away with a whisper. It didn’t make sense. The room smelled of incense and damp stone, and a faint smear of something metallic clung to the floor like a map you could walk on. “They don’t kill like this in the books,” Eva said, her voice a threadbare whisper, and she patted the satchel with a nervous little tug, as if reassurance could be bought in old parchment and moth-eaten notes. Quinn, I told myself, you’ve learned to listen to the nothing between the noises. “What aren’t you telling me, Evie?” She straightened, adjusting the round glasses that sat too far down her nose. “This isn’t a straightforward homicide. Look at the way the wrists are bound. The line of the cord isn’t taut, it’s almost ceremonial. The wards already touching the skin would have burned to the point of lividity if someone had pulled the body free. And the sigil on his wrist—look here.” She slid a gloved finger along the curve of the tattoo. “This isn’t a simple binding. It’s a seal, designed to coax the person into a thought—an idea that something outside is watching and waiting. The market’s energy is threaded through this, Harlow. It wants you to find its story.” I swallowed, not letting the doubt show on my face. The Veil Market did not reward naïveté. It rewarded the patient and the sly. And it did not forget. The crowd parted when a shallow, hurried breath moved through the vendor’s stall, a flicker of motion at the corner of the room. The vendor’s merchandise rustled; something small—perhaps a trinket or a talisman—skittered across a crate, answering the pulse of the room with a tick-tock that seemed to belong to the wrong clock. “This is the wrong room for a murder,” Eva said, rising to her feet with a soft rustle of leather. “The dead are not the sole inhabitants here. The walls drink memories, and a few minds drink too much truth.” I flashed a glance at the Veil Compass in my jacket. Its verdigris patina gleamed with a sickly green light, and the needle quivered as if chasing a scent the air could not hold. “If someone meant to send a message, they used a message many in this market would recognise. The bone tokens—their arrangement—plus the wards—plus the arcane jewellery—this is a calling card, Eva. If Morris were here, he’d read the plaques and know the signature.” “Then let Morris stay in the past,” Eva replied without heat, though the edge of her mouth tightened. “What I see is ritual. Blood focuses the circle; the tokens are the keys; the wards safeguard what lies beyond. The question isn’t who killed him—the question is who invited the ritual into this space.” The phrase hung in the air like a thread of smoke. Ritual. Keys. A doorway. The Veil. We stepped past the vendor’s stall, careful not to disturb the tokens. The air thickened as if someone had bottled a storm and released it a heartbeat too late. The market's hum grew louder, voices in the distance rising and falling with no clear owner. The crowd, cloaked in layers of fabric and fear, watched us with eyes that did not track the same reality we did. “Your theory involves openings,” I said, letting the words sit between us. “Openings are not theory, Harlow. They’re openings,” Eva said, almost smiling. She opened the satchel and pulled out a stack of brittle parchment, a clipboard, and a small, sealed bottle that contained a swirling blue vapour. She uncapped it and let a drop fall onto the parchment. The symbols on the page sparked with pale light. I didn’t wince. I did note. The lights flickered as if something sharp passed just beyond the ceiling, and the Veil Compass warmed in my pocket, the seal of the brass ring now a whisper against my knuckles. “Explain,” I said, voice low. “The market moves locations every full moon,” Eva said, voice matter-of-fact, as if reciting a page from a book she knew by heart. “And every move, the energy shifts. The tokens are not simply for entry; they’re for exit, for guide rails. The buyer becomes the bait, the seeker becomes the tether. The killer wanted us to chase a ghost through a labyrinth and to forget the body’s simple truth: there was a choice made here, and it wasn’t for the victim.” I studied the corridor beyond the body. A door stood slightly ajar, panels carved with sigils that looked almost familiar—an echo of the sigils on the victim’s wrist, perhaps, or a ward from the Shade artisans who carved energy into brass and bone. The door led to a narrower passage, a stairway that descended into deeper darkness. The market’s heartbeat grew louder, or perhaps it was simply the cavernous echo swallowing sound. “Do you feel it?” Eva asked, her voice barely above a whisper, and she moved closer to the door, as if the shadow at the threshold would reveal the truth if she listened hard enough. “I feel a pocket of air where there shouldn’t be air,” I said, my eyes narrowing. The Veil Compass trembled in my grip, its needle quivering as though tugged by a thread threaded through a seam in reality. “The rift isn’t in this room. It’s in the next.” The chalky smell of stone grew stronger. The gate between rooms was a thin seam in the air, a draft of something older than the room’s own age. A silence existed between the two of us, spellbound and expectant. “Quinn,” Eva said, and her tone shifted, Marked by a professional caution, “if you follow that seam, you’ll find a corridor that doesn’t belong to Camden’s past or future. The signboards here are not for the living. They’re for the dead who are not yet dead enough to leave.” The corridor showed what the market hid from ordinary eyes: a tunnel that did not quite align with the tunnel the station used to be. The air tasted of copper and old rain. A whisper of leather and old parchment brushed my ear as Eva stepped closer and whispered, “This is where the inner circle would operate. They don’t just fear the market—they feed it.” I kept the body in sight and moved toward the door. The tokens beneath the vendor’s stall looked less like a collection and more like a map, the bones arranged to speak a language only the initiated understood. I bent down and studied the tokens. They had a rhythm, a pattern that suggested a sequence, a ritual to be performed or observed rather than merely collected. The Veil Compass tightened against my palm as if it recognised a familiar energy. The needle did more than point toward a rift; it nudged as if to say, this way, the thing you’re seeking lies beyond a boundary you’re not allowed to cross alone. “Stay with the body,” I told Eva, though I did not want to turn my back on the market’s living chorus. “I want to see that wall. If there’s a doorway, I’ll read the stones.” We pressed into the corridor where the light dimmed to the merest pulse, and the air grew cooler, as if we were walking into the heart of a memory the city would not confess. The sigils carved into the wall flared faintly as we passed, and I saw the marks mirror those on the victim’s wrist—perhaps a larger seal, perhaps the key to a larger puzzle. A figure stepped from the darkness, not a threat but a presence, the sort of thing you recognise before you see it: tall, hooded, with a cloak that seemed to drink the light rather than reflect it. The voice was not loud, but it carried a weight, a quiet in which harm could hide. “So you found us,” it said, and the words did not bounce so much as they slid along the tunnel’s damp stones, curling into the space between us. The figure’s face remained hidden, but the scent of old rain and hot brass rose from the cloak. Eva pressed closer to me, shoulders angled toward the unknown. “You’ve come far enough,” she said, her voice even, though the tremor she tried to mask was there, thin as a thread. “Who are you?” I asked, though I already knew. The market’s circle did not welcome strangers; you only knew their names when you needed them. The hood tilted, and a smile crept across the edge of the shadow. “A friend of necessity,” it answered, and reached out a gloved hand toward the Veil Compass, as if to claim it. The symbol on the glove—an outline of a sigil, not unfamiliar to me—made my nerves prickle. I stepped back, hand going to the pocket where the compass lived. The needle shifted, no longer quivering but eager, and then pointed straight down the corridor, as if the compass itself commanded: go closer, go now. “Don’t touch the artefacts,” Eva hissed, her eyes wide. “Don’t feed the energy they offer.” The figure’s cloak rustled. “If you are meant to see the truth, you will, and if not, you will never learn to see.” The voice carried a curious calm, the calm of someone who knew the map better than the travellers. “How did you get in here?” I asked, keeping my voice low. The market’s walls held more than bricks and mortar; they held a history of narrow escapes and impossible bargains, a ledger of the lives that had threaded through this hidden place. The hooded figure lifted a hand and for a moment I glimpsed the glint of a ring on a pale finger, a sigil ring that might have been made by the Shade artisans—the kind of thing Eva might remark upon with a flutter of recognition. The ring’s design resembled a watermark I had seen in restricted archives, a symbol linked not just to magic but to someone’s family—someone who would not permit their secrets to be trivialised. “I have watched this market move,” the figure said, a soft murmur that did not quite rhyme with the market’s murmur around us. “I have seen what people will do to keep a door closed or to open one.” Eva lowered her gaze to the floor, whispering something that sounded like a prayer, a lattice of syllables the human mouth should have found difficult to form. The satchel’s leather creaked as she shifted her weight and pulled back a fraction, as if the act of moving could unstick a memory that clung to her. The Veil Compass felt hot in my hand, the verdigris patina growing warmer by the second, the needle a thread tugging at a seam of reality. I rapped the metal lightly against my palm, readouts of the city’s old stories humming in my ears: the Market moved, the tokens unlocked doors, the energy wrapped around the living like a second skin. The hooded figure stepped closer and spoke a piece that fit both a warning and a riddle. “The clique thinks it can own a ritual because it has learned to bargain with shadows. They mistake control for knowledge. They mistake permission for power. This is not a game you can win by suppressing truth.” A memory, sharp as a blade, flashed through my skull: a partner’s retreating step, a corridor of whispers, a door that should have opened but did not. I wasn’t sure if the memory came from Morris or from the market itself, but it tasted like something old and bitter on the tongue. “Who are you?” Eva asked again, voice steady but edged with something like awe. The figure lifted the hood a fraction, enough to reveal the glint of a pale eye in a socket that did not belong to the living or the dead. “Names aren’t the currency here,” it said. “What matters is what you intend to do with what you find.” The door the wall had become wavered, as if the air itself was a thing you could tug on. And in the faintest crack of the door, the blue vapour in Eva’s bottle responded, spiralling up in a small collar of light that crawled across the wall like a living thing. “Quinn—careful,” Eva warned, stepping between me and the door. “If we pass, we’re not merely observing a crime scene. We’re entering a portal, and portals do not abide by human rules.” The compass needle streaked toward the portal with an alarming speed, blazing a thin line of green light along the wall. The picture formed there felt wrong and right at once—a map of a dog-eared page from a book we did not own, showing a city I recognised only by its name and the ache of memory. “Move the body to the edge of the chamber,” I ordered, my voice low and precise. “I want to test a theory with the clockwork of this space.” The clockwork was not a machine as much as a living lattice of energy, a city within a city, a pulse beneath the pulse. We heaved the vendor’s body toward the stairwell, careful not to jolt the chain that still stretched toward air. When the corpse—if you could call a still form a corpse—approached the threshold, the sigils on its skin flared faintly, and the chest gave a sudden, tiny, almost ashamed gulp as if the person inside remembered breathing and forgot. Eva crouched again, setting the parchment on the floor and laying a finger on the blue-glow bottle. “If there’s a pathway here, it follows the energy of this cave—this market. The tokens are not merely ceremonial keys; they are instructions.” I crouched, too, and studied the tokens with renewed attention. The arrangement suggested a sequence: lay the token in the order of a name, draw a sigil in the air, chime a ward, and you would, perhaps, step through. The body’s line—the rope’s initial descent—matched a pattern I’d seen in a dozen cold cases where the killer’s signature included a rearrangement of space to trap a person in a moment of decision. “Do you see the pattern?” Eva asked, eyes bright behind her round lenses. I nodded once, sharply. “The killer isn’t hiding behind a closed door. They’re balancing the space itself, turning the room into a chain. We’re the chain-breakers.” I rose, studied the corridor again, and when I looked back at Eva, she was already packing away parchment and glass with careful, deliberate movements. The hooded figure spoke again, softer this time, almost a whisper meant for the air between us. “If you cross, you must know what you will see. The market does not forget a false move.” The Veil Compass’s dial caught the dim lamplight and threw a thin crescent of verdant glow across Eva’s cheek. “There’s more here than a single crime,” she said. “There’s a history—a history of a circle that has learned to feed on fear, and a ring that feeds on blood. The victim wasn’t an end. He was a message.” The corridor hummed, a growing chorus of voices that did not belong to any one person but to a dozen who had learned to live in the place between a story and a truth. The air grew heavier, the room colder as if the market itself exhaled a breath of caution. “Where does this lead?” I asked, addressing the hooded visitor not with threat but with the sharpness of a blade-weller asking a patient to reveal a hidden vein. The figure smiled again, just enough to reveal knowing teeth that did not belong to the living. “To the door you always hoped would exist,” came the quiet reply. “To the part of the city that is not a city—the part that lives in the pause between a breath and a decision.” A sudden crack of stone jolted through the floor, and the corridor’s outline blurred at the edges, as if the air itself were slipping. The crowd in the chamber outside gasped, a chorus of startled voices that rose and fell with no leader, no conductor, only a shared fear of what the Veil Market could become when a door was opened and misused. The Veil Compass shook in my grip, point-blank toward the corridor’s opening as though it wanted to fling me forward into a revelation I could scarcely bear to face. The hooded figure stepped back, hands raised in a non-threatening gesture that carried a threat anyway, a reminder of what lay beyond a threshold. “Quinn,” Eva breathed, grabbing my sleeve. “If you go through, you’ll be gone from here and into the other place—the place where the market’s heart lies. It isn’t a place a detective can simply walk back from.” I met Eva’s eyes, held them for a heartbeat, and then squared my shoulders. The clock on the wall—the market’s heart—ticked a little too loudly, as if counting the moment of truth. “Show me the door,” I said. The hooded figure’s smile vanished. In that instant, the light in the corridor brightened, as if a thousand tiny suns were being lit behind the wall. The door’s outline—no longer a seam but a real door—glowed with sigils that were not mere decoration but a map of the market’s power. The line of tokens lay in a neat, deliberate order at the door’s base, as if a ritual had insisted on proper sequencing to keep something chained within. “Quinn—don’t,” Eva said again, her voice a thread of warning. “If you step through, you won’t step back.” The door breathed softly, a sound not unlike a sigh from a creature long confined. And then the door opened a fraction, revealing a glimpse of something beyond—a hall of light that felt both welcoming and wrong, as if the rules of the world outside did not apply to this place. A breath of wind moved through the tunnel, carrying a whisper of old rain and new fear. The crowd behind us pressed forward, instinct and superstition coiling into a single, stubborn knot. “Not yet,” I told Eva, though my voice trembled, too small to hear over the market’s murmur. I stepped toward the doorway, letting the Veil Compass guide my pace, letting the needle decide when to halt and when to push forward. The corridor’s sigils burned brighter as I moved, the air warming with each step. The hooded figure raised a hand again, not in defence but in invitation. “If you want the truth, you’ll need to choose what truths you’ll leave behind.” I did not answer with words. The vendor’s body, the tokens, the wards, the door—each piece had spoken its part. I touched the sigil on the wall with the tip of a finger, coaxed by the memory of Morris’s last case, a memory that refused to stay buried. All at once the room shifted. The floor beneath us sank a fraction, the ceiling moved closer, and the light bloomed into a halo around the door. The market’s sounds rose into a chorus of alarm and awe, a chorus that sounded just as likely to belong to the city as to the people who walked its hidden halls. The figure beneath the hood stepped through the doorway and was swallowed by the glow, leaving only the door’s sigil-writ lines behind, a doorway no longer hidden but open, a doorway that did not end but began. “Quinn,” Eva whispered, her eyes wide, fingers still gripping the satchel, “the killer is in the doorway. And the doorway is watching you.” I didn’t answer. I reached out and steadied the Veil Compass, letting its needle rest, not pointing anywhere, but listening. The room’s pulse steadied, then quickened again as if the market itself pressed its ear to the door, listening for every breath we took. “That is your choice,” the hooded figure said softly, their voice a thread in the air. “To stand at the threshold or to retreat. To see or to pretend you cannot.” The door’s glow intensified, painting the chamber in a pale, otherworldly green. The crowd behind us pressed closer, a living wall of witnesses waiting to see what would happen when a detective crossed from one world to another. I looked at Eva. Her jaw was set, eyes bright with a fear that meant she understood the stakes and would not abandon me. I looked back at the door. The Veil Compass in my hand seemed to pulse in time with my heart, as if it beat in tandem with something older than crime, older than fear, older than the city itself. “Then we go together,” I announced, though I wasn’t certain who I was talking to—the hooded figure, the market, or the memory of a partner who had died with the world pressing down on him. The door answered by swelling with light and warmth, a corridor of possibility that did not forgive the careless. The Veil Market’s breath slowed, and for a moment the crowd appeared to be nothing more than a chorus of anxious witnesses to a ceremony that would either sanctify or ruin us all. The moment stretched. The chain that had bound the dead vendor flickered, and the figure in the doorway stepped back, a single slow exhale escaping as if a door had opened in their own chest and something ancient slid out in their wake. The room’s air brightened, the blue vapour in Eva’s bottle spiralled into a tight column that hovered at chest height, and the compass’s needle hurtled, then steadied, then moved again as if tugged by an invisible thread tied to the doorway. There came a sigh—the market itself exhaling in relief or warning—and then a new sound, a low, cruel clap. A voice—thin, amused, and all the more dangerous for its calm—drifted from the doorway’s edge. “Welcome to the Veil,” it said, and the lights dimmed one last, decisive time. “We’ve been waiting for you, Harlow Quinn. And for you, Eva Kowalski. The rest of you, watch closely. The night is about to begin.” And with that, the corridor inside the door peeled back a new night—one where the evidence didn’t add up, where witnesses wore masks of intention and truth, and where Quinn knew she would be forced to split the difference between two worlds if she hoped to keep the other from swallowing London whole. The door pressed shut behind us with a soft, final hiss, sealing the choice. And in that instant, the market’s whisperings grew louder, sown with fear and daring and a promise that the case would not end until someone screamed. We stepped forward anyway. The heavy hush of the crowd behind us became a chorus of resolve, and the night—our night—stretched before us, bright with danger, thick with secrets, and just beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags40
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Eva asked again [again]"
1"Eva said again [again]"
2"figure said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.615
leniency1
rawRatio0.075
effectiveRatio0.075
93.16% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount4384
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"lightly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"lightly"
3"sharply"
4"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount4384
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"quivered"
count2
4
word"intricate"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count7
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"weight"
count3
8
word"whisper"
count7
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count2
11
word"familiar"
count2
12
word"echo"
count2
13
word"trembled"
count2
14
word"silence"
count1
15
word"glint"
count2
16
word"wavered"
count1
17
word"reminder"
count1
18
word"quickened"
count1
19
word"otherworldly"
count1
20
word"warmth"
count1
21
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"velvet"
2"etched"
3"quivered"
4"intricate"
5"pulse"
6"scanned"
7"weight"
8"whisper"
9"flicker"
10"flickered"
11"familiar"
12"echo"
13"trembled"
14"silence"
15"glint"
16"wavered"
17"reminder"
18"quickened"
19"otherworldly"
20"warmth"
21"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences187
matches
0"g in relief"
1"n with fear"
74.10% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences187
filterMatches
0"see"
1"decide"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences210
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen63
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords4327
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions51
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount3471
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.84
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Kowalski1
Show1
Veil17
Market5
Tube1
Camden1
Compass12
Morris3
Quinn2
Eva29
Shade2
Marked1
London1
persons
0"Kowalski"
1"Show"
2"Market"
3"Compass"
4"Morris"
5"Quinn"
6"Eva"
places
0"Veil"
1"Shade"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences163
glossingSentenceCount12
matches
0"lamp that seemed to breath with every breath I took"
1"as if peering toward an unseen doorway"
2"tock that seemed to belong to the wrong clock"
3"as if chasing a scent the air could not hold"
4"as if reciting a page from a book she knew by heart"
5"not quite align with the tunnel the station used to be"
6"cloak that seemed to drink the light rather than reflect it"
7"not quite rhyme with the market’s murmur around us"
8"sounded like a prayer, a lattice of syllab"
9"tasted like something old and bitter on t"
10"something like awe"
11"as if counting the moment of truth"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches11
per1kWords2.542
wordCount4327
matches
0"not in a way meant to sell the lie of life, but I saw the brief flutter of a breath in the edges of the man’"
1"not a threat but a presence, the sort of thing you recognise before you see i"
2"not loud, but it carried a weight, a quiet in"
3"no longer quivering but"
4"not just to magic but to someone’s family"
5"not with threat but with the sharpness of a blade-weller asking a patient to rev"
6"not mere decoration but a map of the market’s power"
7"no longer a seam but"
8"not in defence but in invitation"
9"no longer hidden but"
10"not pointing anywhere, but listening"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences210
matches(empty)
86.91% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs90
mean48.08
std21.84
cv0.454
sampleLengths
019
136
2106
367
468
562
6111
782
837
920
10114
1129
1254
1340
1477
1553
1617
1767
1812
1956
2038
215
2282
2372
2435
2548
2639
2749
2865
2966
3045
3135
3266
3354
3428
3550
3625
3750
3837
3915
4041
4143
4277
4339
4455
4561
4654
4752
4814
4948
97.76% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences187
matches
0"been made"
1"was opened"
2"being lit"
3"was swallowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs558
matches
0"were walking"
1"were slipping"
2"was talking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount33
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences29
totalSentences210
ratio0.138
matches
0"A vendor’s stall stood intact—tarnished coins, jars of unlabelled powders, a row of bone tokens arranged like tiny teeth on a velvet cloth."
1"There was a scent I could not name, half-cinnamon, half-metallic ozone, and a faint note of something sweet—like a trapped memory lingering in the air."
2"The sigil tattooed there—an intricate knot of circles and runes—seemed to pulse, as if it remembered someone’s touch."
3"Supernatural origins, the others had said, and I’d believed them until I learned to count the days by the clock in my own left wrist—heavy, reliable, and always there even when the world decided not to be."
4"The body’s blood had dried in odd rings around the mouth and wrists, but no obvious wound—no stab, no cut, no blunt force that would pin this to a single killer."
5"The vendor’s merchandise rustled; something small—perhaps a trinket or a talisman—skittered across a crate, answering the pulse of the room with a tick-tock that seemed to belong to the wrong clock."
6"“What I see is ritual. Blood focuses the circle; the tokens are the keys; the wards safeguard what lies beyond. The question isn’t who killed him—the question is who invited the ritual into this space.”"
7"“And every move, the energy shifts. The tokens are not simply for entry; they’re for exit, for guide rails. The buyer becomes the bait, the seeker becomes the tether. The killer wanted us to chase a ghost through a labyrinth and to forget the body’s simple truth: there was a choice made here, and it wasn’t for the victim.”"
8"A door stood slightly ajar, panels carved with sigils that looked almost familiar—an echo of the sigils on the victim’s wrist, perhaps, or a ward from the Shade artisans who carved energy into brass and bone."
9"The needle did more than point toward a rift; it nudged as if to say, this way, the thing you’re seeking lies beyond a boundary you’re not allowed to cross alone."
10"The sigils carved into the wall flared faintly as we passed, and I saw the marks mirror those on the victim’s wrist—perhaps a larger seal, perhaps the key to a larger puzzle."
11"The market’s circle did not welcome strangers; you only knew their names when you needed them."
12"The symbol on the glove—an outline of a sigil, not unfamiliar to me—made my nerves prickle."
13"The market’s walls held more than bricks and mortar; they held a history of narrow escapes and impossible bargains, a ledger of the lives that had threaded through this hidden place."
14"The hooded figure lifted a hand and for a moment I glimpsed the glint of a ring on a pale finger, a sigil ring that might have been made by the Shade artisans—the kind of thing Eva might remark upon with a flutter of recognition."
15"The ring’s design resembled a watermark I had seen in restricted archives, a symbol linked not just to magic but to someone’s family—someone who would not permit their secrets to be trivialised."
16"The picture formed there felt wrong and right at once—a map of a dog-eared page from a book we did not own, showing a city I recognised only by its name and the ache of memory."
17"When the corpse—if you could call a still form a corpse—approached the threshold, the sigils on its skin flared faintly, and the chest gave a sudden, tiny, almost ashamed gulp as if the person inside remembered breathing and forgot."
18"“If there’s a pathway here, it follows the energy of this cave—this market. The tokens are not merely ceremonial keys; they are instructions.”"
19"The body’s line—the rope’s initial descent—matched a pattern I’d seen in a dozen cold cases where the killer’s signature included a rearrangement of space to trap a person in a moment of decision."
20"The clock on the wall—the market’s heart—ticked a little too loudly, as if counting the moment of truth."
21"The door’s outline—no longer a seam but a real door—glowed with sigils that were not mere decoration but a map of the market’s power."
22"And then the door opened a fraction, revealing a glimpse of something beyond—a hall of light that felt both welcoming and wrong, as if the rules of the world outside did not apply to this place."
23"The vendor’s body, the tokens, the wards, the door—each piece had spoken its part."
24"“Then we go together,” I announced, though I wasn’t certain who I was talking to—the hooded figure, the market, or the memory of a partner who had died with the world pressing down on him."
25"There came a sigh—the market itself exhaling in relief or warning—and then a new sound, a low, cruel clap."
26"A voice—thin, amused, and all the more dangerous for its calm—drifted from the doorway’s edge."
27"And with that, the corridor inside the door peeled back a new night—one where the evidence didn’t add up, where witnesses wore masks of intention and truth, and where Quinn knew she would be forced to split the difference between two worlds if she hoped to keep the other from swallowing London whole."
28"The heavy hush of the crowd behind us became a chorus of resolve, and the night—our night—stretched before us, bright with danger, thick with secrets, and just beginning."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3515
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount102
adverbRatio0.029018492176386912
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.007396870554765292
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences210
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences210
mean20.6
std11.59
cv0.562
sampleLengths
019
136
212
324
415
523
632
725
821
921
1010
1138
1220
1313
1415
1518
1616
1746
1828
1937
2031
2121
224
2326
2437
2514
266
2713
2862
2939
3010
317
327
335
3423
3531
3620
3720
3811
3923
4043
4118
4235
4311
441
451
462
472
4812
4917
30.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats40
diversityRatio0.21428571428571427
totalSentences210
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences180
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences180
matches
0"Its face etched with sigils"
1"I rasped, and the crowd"
2"I angled my head and"
3"My partner had been DS"
4"It didn’t make sense."
5"She straightened, adjusting the round"
6"She slid a gloved finger"
7"I swallowed, not letting the"
8"It rewarded the patient and"
9"I flashed a glance at"
10"Its verdigris patina gleamed with"
11"We stepped past the vendor’s"
12"I said, letting the words"
13"She opened the satchel and"
14"She uncapped it and let"
15"I didn’t wince."
16"I did note."
17"I said, voice low"
18"I studied the corridor beyond"
19"I said, my eyes narrowing"
ratio0.289
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount168
totalSentences180
matches
0"The chain hissed as it"
1"Eva Kowalski whispered, voice steady"
2"The Veil Market had collapsed"
3"Lanterns swung from black wires,"
4"A vendor’s stall stood intact—tarnished"
5"The market’s current host lay"
6"The Veil Compass in my"
7"Its face etched with sigils"
8"I rasped, and the crowd"
9"The body’s chest did not"
10"A doctor would have called"
11"Eva breathed, stepping closer with"
12"The leather squeaked as she"
13"The sigil tattooed there—an intricate"
14"I angled my head and"
15"My partner had been DS"
16"The body’s blood had dried"
17"The chain tied to the"
18"It didn’t make sense."
19"The room smelled of incense"
ratio0.933
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences180
matches(empty)
ratio0
5.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences120
technicalSentenceCount23
matches
0"The market’s current host lay in the space beyond, suspended from a rusted beam by copper cable, wrists bound tight as if to remind the living that some deals n…"
1"The sigil tattooed there—an intricate knot of circles and runes—seemed to pulse, as if it remembered someone’s touch."
2"The body’s blood had dried in odd rings around the mouth and wrists, but no obvious wound—no stab, no cut, no blunt force that would pin this to a single killer…"
3"She straightened, adjusting the round glasses that sat too far down her nose."
4"The vendor’s merchandise rustled; something small—perhaps a trinket or a talisman—skittered across a crate, answering the pulse of the room with a tick-tock tha…"
5"Its verdigris patina gleamed with a sickly green light, and the needle quivered as if chasing a scent the air could not hold."
6"She opened the satchel and pulled out a stack of brittle parchment, a clipboard, and a small, sealed bottle that contained a swirling blue vapour."
7"The lights flickered as if something sharp passed just beyond the ceiling, and the Veil Compass warmed in my pocket, the seal of the brass ring now a whisper ag…"
8"The Veil Compass tightened against my palm as if it recognised a familiar energy."
9"The needle shifted, no longer quivering but eager, and then pointed straight down the corridor, as if the compass itself commanded: go closer, go now."
10"The hooded figure lifted a hand and for a moment I glimpsed the glint of a ring on a pale finger, a sigil ring that might have been made by the Shade artisans—t…"
11"The ring’s design resembled a watermark I had seen in restricted archives, a symbol linked not just to magic but to someone’s family—someone who would not permi…"
12"A memory, sharp as a blade, flashed through my skull: a partner’s retreating step, a corridor of whispers, a door that should have opened but did not."
13"And in the faintest crack of the door, the blue vapour in Eva’s bottle responded, spiralling up in a small collar of light that crawled across the wall like a l…"
14"When the corpse—if you could call a still form a corpse—approached the threshold, the sigils on its skin flared faintly, and the chest gave a sudden, tiny, almo…"
15"The hooded figure stepped back, hands raised in a non-threatening gesture that carried a threat anyway, a reminder of what lay beyond a threshold."
16"The line of tokens lay in a neat, deliberate order at the door’s base, as if a ritual had insisted on proper sequencing to keep something chained within."
17"And then the door opened a fraction, revealing a glimpse of something beyond—a hall of light that felt both welcoming and wrong, as if the rules of the world ou…"
18"I stepped toward the doorway, letting the Veil Compass guide my pace, letting the needle decide when to halt and when to push forward."
19"The figure beneath the hood stepped through the doorway and was swallowed by the glow, leaving only the door’s sigil-writ lines behind, a doorway no longer hidd…"
20"The Veil Compass in my hand seemed to pulse in time with my heart, as if it beat in tandem with something older than crime, older than fear, older than the city…"
21"The chain that had bound the dead vendor flickered, and the figure in the doorway stepped back, a single slow exhale escaping as if a door had opened in their o…"
22"The room’s air brightened, the blue vapour in Eva’s bottle spiralled into a tight column that hovered at chest height, and the compass’s needle hurtled, then st…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags40
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"I said, voice low"
1"I said, my eyes narrowing"
2"Eva hissed, her eyes wide"
3"Eva asked again, voice steady but edged with something like awe"
4"I ordered, my voice low and precise"
5"Eva asked, eyes bright behind her round lenses"
6"Eva said again, her voice a thread of warning"
7"I told, though my voice trembled, too small to hear over the market’s murmur"
8"Eva whispered, her eyes wide, fingers still gripping the satchel,"
9"figure said softly, their voice a thread in the air"
10"it said, and the lights dimmed one last, decisive time"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags36
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"Eva Kowalski whispered (whisper)"
1"Eva breathed (breathe)"
2"old parchment brushed (brush)"
3"Eva hissed (hiss)"
4"Eva warned (warn)"
5"I ordered (order)"
6"Eva breathed (breathe)"
7"Eva whispered (whisper)"
8"I announced (announce)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.554
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
65.5311%