Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0VZ6ASGP3WGPXK0FP7242

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.1
Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.047490
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air changed first. One moment Aurora stood in the narrow brick service tunnel under Golden Empress, fluorescent light humming over damp concrete. The next, the space in front of her folded like heat over tarmac. The faint distortion thickened, caught on the edge of her sight, and her Heartstone pendant pressed hot against her sternum. “You feel that?” Her hand closed around the little crimson gem through her T‑shirt. Nyx’s shadow stretched up from the floor drain and drew itself together. Limbs formed, then the suggestion of a face, violet eyes kindling inside the umbra. “The Veil thins here,” their voice brushed along her ear, barely sound, more a draught of chill breath. “Dymas waits behind it.” Rory blew out through her nose, short and sharp. “Right. Hel vineyard holiday. Sounds charming.” “You chose Gluttony.” Their outline shrugged, the motion like smoke disturbed. “Complaints should go to the Prince.” The distortion ahead thickened again. The corridor seemed to narrow toward it, bricks bending inward. The fluorescent hum dropped to a low drone, then to a single throbbing note that matched the rhythm pulsing from the pendant. Rory stepped forward before her nerves had time to reform. The Fae-forged blade hung under her jacket, its cold presence along her spine steadier than any pep talk. Her trainer crossed the shimmer. The world turned inside out. Every sense clenched. Light splintered white, then orange, then a soft molten gold that slid behind her eyes. Sound smeared. The hum stretched into choirs and clatter and the wet churn of a hundred mouths. Her skin pinpricked; for a breath she felt every grain of dust on her clothes, every loose hair against her cheek. Then gravity caught her ankles again. The tunnel had gone. She stood on a stone terrace that clung to the side of a vast gorge. Terraces stepped down and up in every direction, like the shelves of a titanic amphitheatre, each crammed with life. Vines crawled along the balustrades, fat clusters of grapes drooping over the edge, skins so taut they seemed ready to split. Orchards spread below, trees bowed under fruits she had no name for: star-shaped pods that exhaled steam, translucent melons with hearts that glowed like banked coals. Above, the sky burned amber. Not sunset; no sun, only a warm, diffuse light that poured from the whole dome like thickened honey. Clouds drifted in slow curls, a deeper orange threaded with rich wine-red, as if some careless god had swirled a glass. Rory lifted a hand against the glow. Her palm looked too sharp here, every creased line etched darker, veins faintly lit from within, as if the light tried to seep into her. “Welcome to Dymas.” Nyx’s shape rose from her shadow and solidified beside her. Here, their form gained weight. The edges of the silhouette sharpened; those violet eyes brightened until they almost threw their own light. Smell rolled in next. Heat, ripe and heavy, wrapped around her. It carried caramel and seared meat, citrus oil, fresh bread, yeast, spices she’d only ever found in the back kitchen when Yu‑Fei experimented. Cardamom, clove, cinnamon, pepper, and behind it all a salt-sour note of overripe fruit and old wine left overnight in glasses. Rory swallowed. Her tongue tingled as if she’d already eaten. “Is the air... seasoned?” “Breath is the first course here.” Nyx drifted to the terrace rail. Their hand, if it could be called that, rested against the carved stone baluster. “Try not to fill your lungs all at once.” She joined them and looked over. The gorge yawned vast and layered. Terraces like the one they stood on looped around its circumference, all the way down into a haze she could not see through. Every level held some revel. Great banquet tables stretched out, carved from stone so polished it reflected the amber sky. Figures sprawled at them, eating. Hundreds, thousands, in silks and leathers and rags, all bent over plates. A man in a tailcoat crammed fistfuls of grapes into his mouth, juice running down his beard, eyes glassy. A woman in a hospital gown gnawed meat from a bone already scraped clean, teeth squeaking over the smooth surface. Between the terraces, spiral stairways wound, narrow as threads in places, broad elsewhere, all choked with movement: servers in neutral grey, arms piled high with platters; creatures that wore shapes almost human but wrong in angle or proportion, bearing trays that steamed and smoked. Music floated up on the air. Not quite a tune, more an endless sequence of flourishes from unseen stringed instruments, punctuated by clatter, the crack of breaking shells, the wet smack of chewing. Rory’s stomach clenched. Hunger rose, sharp and unreasonable. She had eaten an hour ago upstairs, stolen dumplings between deliveries, but right now a stale crust of bread sounded perfect. Her fingers clenched harder around the pendant. The gem burned against her palm, its inner light pulsing in time with something beneath her feet. “Don’t inhale,” Nyx’s whisper brushed her. “Taste it, and you’ll want more.” “I already want more,” she muttered, and forced herself to breathe shallow through her mouth. The flavours lessened, but some part of her stayed keyed to the scents, like a dog outside a butcher’s shop. A bell rang from a lower terrace, deep and sonorous. The sound shivered through the stone under her soles. With it came a flicker at the edge of her sight—a ripple in the amber light, a faint dark haze that overlaid the revels, like grease on the surface of broth. Nyx turned their half-formed face that way. “Belphegor’s kitchens wake. We should move before the courses change.” Rory tore her eyes from the nearest table. Up close, its dishes seemed even more indecent. A silver platter bore a roast bird the size of a dog, feathers plucked but head intact, beak stained with its own juices. A tureen brimmed with something like stew, except the chunks within shifted on their own, pulsing with slow, blind life. She stepped back. “You didn’t mention the food moves.” “It wants to be eaten.” Nyx’s tone held no humour. “This realm feeds on the act, not the matter. Come.” A stairway led down from their terrace, its risers made of ivory slats, polished so smooth they reflected warped shards of her face. Each step gave under her weight with a little squeak. She frowned. “Bone?” “Not always human.” Nyx flowed ahead of her, their feet never quite touching. “Mostly.” “That helps.” They passed close to one of the terraces. A man at the table glanced up, eyes meeting Rory’s for a fraction. He wore a restaurant uniform, sleeves rolled, hands blistered raw. A server’s apron stained the same red as the pendant against her chest. His gaze slid past her without focus. His hand reached for a dish with practised motion, found a bowl, lifted it, poured its contents into his own open mouth. Thick white sauce streamed over his chin. He chewed, expression empty, then passed the now-empty bowl back to a waiting shape with too many fingers. He never paused. Rory shivered. “Can they see us?” “Only if you want them to.” Nyx’s edges thinned, and shadows from the stacked platters stretched longer across the stair, swallowing their lower half. “For now, we are decoration.” “Comforting.” “It should be. Decoration often survives the first fire.” The stair turned. As they descended, the scent shifted. Less sugar, more char. Smoke threaded the rooftops of the terraces below. Inset into the wall opposite, great ovens gaped, mouths glowing. Inside, whole carcasses rotated on spits the size of lamp-posts. Sparks leapt out, drifted like fireflies, and coalesced for an instant into small, humanoid shapes that raced along the wall before breaking back into embers. They passed one of the ovens. Heat slapped her skin. Grease spat from the roasting flesh, but instead of falling, the droplets curved back inward, drawn to the turning meat as if by gravity. None hit the stone below. “That’s not physics,” Rory murmured. “Hel keeps its own laws.” Nyx reached toward the heat. Their shadow-hand did not burn, but it shuddered as if charred. “Nothing wasted. Nothing shared.“ The stairs opened onto a narrow path that cut between two orchards. The trees here grew closer together. Branches tangled overhead, forming a canopy that filtered the amber light into shifting bars. Fruit brushed her shoulders as she walked: plums swollen to the size of cabbages, pears that bled clear juice from jagged cracks in their skins. One cluster of something like cherries hung within reach, each cherry containing a tiny, perfect eye that swivelled to follow her. She kept her hands tight at her sides. A sound reached them through the leaves. Not the distant din of the banqueters, but a rougher rhythm: cleavers on wood, the staccato slap of dough on a table, knives tapping. “Prep kitchen.” Nyx angled toward it. “We can cross faster that way.” “Will they—” “We are not on their menu.” Bright light spilled ahead where the trees ended. Rory stepped out into an enormous courtyard roofed with heat and noise. Rows of tables cut the space into lanes. At each one, figures worked. Some looked human, some anything but. A woman with skin the colour of cocoa and four arms worked two chopping boards at once, blades flashing, sending diced vegetables into one bucket and meat into another without seeming to glance. Beside her, a figure with a goat’s head scored pastries with careful precision, each perfect cut in a repeating delicate pattern. No one spoke. The silence of it unnerved her more than the feasts. Mouths clamped shut, faces drained of expression, all focus bent on their tasks. Only the tools made sound. As she and Nyx slipped along the edge of the nearest lane, a thin boy at the end of the table hiccupped. His hands never stopped moving over the mound of dough he kneaded. Tears tracked through flour on his cheeks, leaving pale streaks. His apron bore the logo of a high street bakery Rory recognised from Camden. Her chest tightened. “He’s—” “A contract honoured.” Nyx’s voice rasped softer. “Hel loves a chef. They arrive with recipes ready.” “How do you know that?” “I remember recruitment.” Their gaze brushed over the workers. “Once, I tried to bargain my way past these fires. Different sin. Same kitchen.” She glanced at them, but their face already closed again, just suggestion and shadow. They emerged from the far side of the courtyard onto a balcony that jutted out over the gorge, higher than before. From here, the terraces formed spirals below. At the centre, directly across from them, a palace rose. If the kitchens and tables were grand, the palace dwarfed them. Its lowest levels fused with the rock of the gorge, carved out of it and into it at once. Above, towers climbed, each shaped differently: one like an enormous wine bottle, glass walls tinted deep green, bubbles forever climbing within; another flared at the top like the bowl of a goblet; a third spiralled like smoke from a chimney. Between them, bridges arched, thin as knives, strung with what at first looked like lanterns. Rory squinted. The ‘lanterns’ pulsed faintly. They weren’t glass. Each one held a writhing, translucent shape, mouths distended in mute screams as some syrupous liquid poured into them from above. Her stomach rolled. “Let me guess. VIP section.” “Prince Belphegor’s palace.” Nyx inclined their head. “Seat of Gluttony. The contracts live there.” “And the Heartstone?” As if in answer, the pendant flared. Heat seared through fabric and skin. She hissed and yanked it out. The gem no longer glowed faintly; it burned with a thick, inner light, as if a coal had lodged inside. Nyx’s eyes fixed on it. “It likes this place.” “It can like it from a distance.” She blew cool air over her reddened fingers. The stone dimmed a shade but stayed warm, pulling, as if some invisible thread ran from it to the palace’s heart. A shiver crept up the back of her neck. The gorge had felt vast from above. From here, with the palace looming opposite and the terraces stacked beneath, it pressed in. The amber light pooled thicker. Voices carried up, distorted, a stew of praise and pleading and the wet, repetitive sounds of eating. “You feel that?” She watched the distant towers, the twitching lantern-souls. “Dymas notices us now.” Nyx’s outline thinned, as if something tasted at their edges. “We step deeper, it will press back.” “You mean this wasn’t deep.” “This was the appetiser.” Rory stared across the gulf. The palace windows glittered, hundreds of hungry eyes cut into stone and glass. The pull from the Heartstone answered in her palm, steady, insistent. “Path?” She scanned the terraces below, the stairs, the bridges. None led straight to the palace; they curled aside, diverted, looped back. Nyx lifted their chin toward a lower level. “Service bridge. There.” She followed their line of sight. Half hidden behind a smoking column, a narrow bridge clung to the gorge wall. Its surface shone metallic, strewn with dull glints. “How do we get down without becoming the main?” Her eyes tracked the nearest stair, already filling with a troop of servers hauling spit-roasted creatures between them. Nyx turned to her, their features carved clearer for a breath. “You brought a Fae blade,” their whisper thinned to almost nothing. “Time to cut through more than wards.” Her hand went to the dagger at her back. The moonsilver metal breathed cold into her palm, eager and patient both. She stepped closer to the stone balustrade and looked down, measuring the drop, the reach to the next terrace, the way the rock face indented. “All right.” She drew the blade. It caught the amber light and threw it back pale and sharp, an alien moon against a devouring sky. “Let’s see what this place does when something refuses to be eaten.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her hand closed around [around]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.386
leniency0.772
rawRatio0.045
effectiveRatio0.035
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2340
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2340
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"churn"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"perfect"
count3
6
word"whisper"
count2
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"comforting"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
12
word"looming"
count1
13
word"scanned"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"churn"
2"etched"
3"weight"
4"stomach"
5"perfect"
6"whisper"
7"flicker"
8"comforting"
9"raced"
10"silence"
11"pulsed"
12"looming"
13"scanned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences175
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences175
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences209
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2329
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount2049
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.83
worstName"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Nyx"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Golden1
Empress1
Heartstone2
Nyx17
Rory13
Fae-forged1
Bright1
Camden1
Heat3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Heat"
places
0"Camden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
56.02% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences133
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"seemed ready to split"
1"Not quite a tune, more an endless sequence of flourishes from unseen stringed instruments, punctuated by clatter, the crack of breaking shells, the wet smack of chewing"
2"something like stew, except the chunks withi"
3"something like cherries hung within reach, e"
4"looked like lanterns"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.429
wordCount2329
matches
0"Not the distant din of the banqueters, but a rougher rhythm: cleavers on wood, the staccato slap of dou"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences209
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs90
mean25.88
std22.26
cv0.86
sampleLengths
04
152
214
326
422
515
617
737
828
95
105
1156
126
134
1481
1544
1632
1735
1855
1910
204
2135
226
23105
2444
2533
2629
2724
2812
2935
3050
3117
3259
339
3420
3533
363
3714
382
3944
4054
413
426
4329
441
459
4666
4739
485
4925
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences175
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs339
matches(empty)
33.49% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences209
ratio0.038
matches
0"Her skin pinpricked; for a breath she felt every grain of dust on her clothes, every loose hair against her cheek."
1"Not sunset; no sun, only a warm, diffuse light that poured from the whole dome like thickened honey."
2"The edges of the silhouette sharpened; those violet eyes brightened until they almost threw their own light."
3"Between the terraces, spiral stairways wound, narrow as threads in places, broad elsewhere, all choked with movement: servers in neutral grey, arms piled high with platters; creatures that wore shapes almost human but wrong in angle or proportion, bearing trays that steamed and smoked."
4"With it came a flicker at the edge of her sight—a ripple in the amber light, a faint dark haze that overlaid the revels, like grease on the surface of broth."
5"Above, towers climbed, each shaped differently: one like an enormous wine bottle, glass walls tinted deep green, bubbles forever climbing within; another flared at the top like the bowl of a goblet; a third spiralled like smoke from a chimney."
6"The gem no longer glowed faintly; it burned with a thick, inner light, as if a coal had lodged inside."
7"None led straight to the palace; they curled aside, diverted, looped back."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1325
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.03320754716981132
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0030188679245283017
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences209
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences209
mean11.14
std7.54
cv0.676
sampleLengths
04
119
213
320
414
512
614
718
84
99
106
1111
126
135
1410
1522
1610
1718
185
195
203
2115
222
2315
2421
256
264
2715
2819
2921
3026
315
3218
3321
347
3525
3613
375
3817
394
407
4123
4221
432
448
454
4612
4714
489
496
70.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences209
uniqueOpeners95
39.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences168
matches
0"Then gravity caught her ankles"
1"Only the tools made sound."
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences168
matches
0"Her hand closed around the"
1"their voice brushed along her"
2"Their outline shrugged, the motion"
3"Her trainer crossed the shimmer."
4"Her skin pinpricked; for a"
5"She stood on a stone"
6"Her palm looked too sharp"
7"It carried caramel and seared"
8"Her tongue tingled as if"
9"Their hand, if it could"
10"She joined them and looked"
11"She had eaten an hour"
12"Her fingers clenched harder around"
13"she muttered, and forced herself"
14"She stepped back."
15"They passed close to one"
16"He wore a restaurant uniform,"
17"His gaze slid past her"
18"His hand reached for a"
19"He chewed, expression empty, then"
ratio0.268
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount140
totalSentences168
matches
0"The air changed first."
1"The next, the space in"
2"The faint distortion thickened, caught"
3"Her hand closed around the"
4"Nyx’s shadow stretched up from"
5"Limbs formed, then the suggestion"
6"their voice brushed along her"
7"Rory blew out through her"
8"Their outline shrugged, the motion"
9"The distortion ahead thickened again."
10"The corridor seemed to narrow"
11"The fluorescent hum dropped to"
12"Rory stepped forward before her"
13"The Fae-forged blade hung under"
14"Her trainer crossed the shimmer."
15"The world turned inside out."
16"Every sense clenched."
17"Light splintered white, then orange,"
18"The hum stretched into choirs"
19"Her skin pinpricked; for a"
ratio0.833
59.52% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences168
matches
0"If the kitchens and tables"
1"As if in answer, the"
ratio0.012
39.59% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences83
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The fluorescent hum dropped to a low drone, then to a single throbbing note that matched the rhythm pulsing from the pendant."
1"Light splintered white, then orange, then a soft molten gold that slid behind her eyes."
2"Orchards spread below, trees bowed under fruits she had no name for: star-shaped pods that exhaled steam, translucent melons with hearts that glowed like banked…"
3"Not sunset; no sun, only a warm, diffuse light that poured from the whole dome like thickened honey."
4"Clouds drifted in slow curls, a deeper orange threaded with rich wine-red, as if some careless god had swirled a glass."
5"Between the terraces, spiral stairways wound, narrow as threads in places, broad elsewhere, all choked with movement: servers in neutral grey, arms piled high w…"
6"With it came a flicker at the edge of her sight—a ripple in the amber light, a faint dark haze that overlaid the revels, like grease on the surface of broth."
7"Branches tangled overhead, forming a canopy that filtered the amber light into shifting bars."
8"Fruit brushed her shoulders as she walked: plums swollen to the size of cabbages, pears that bled clear juice from jagged cracks in their skins."
9"One cluster of something like cherries hung within reach, each cherry containing a tiny, perfect eye that swivelled to follow her."
10"They emerged from the far side of the courtyard onto a balcony that jutted out over the gorge, higher than before."
11"The gem no longer glowed faintly; it burned with a thick, inner light, as if a coal had lodged inside."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx’s outline thinned, as if something tasted at their edges"
1"She scanned, the stairs, the bridges"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Rory murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.035
leniency0.07
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.07
86.0518%