Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0WAJ8K2XJZ4FVC64TKGQC

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Duration:
40.2s
Cost:
$0.009820
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The three deadbolts on Eva’s door were supposed to be a comfort. A physical barrier against the world, against the past. So the sharp, precise knock that cut through the flat's muffled silence felt less like a visitor and more like an accusation. Rory paused, a half-eaten slice of toast halfway to her mouth. Ptolemy, Eva’s fat tabby cat, lifted his head from a pile of what looked like medieval tax records, his green eyes wide. The knock came again, three perfectly spaced raps. Confident. Patient. The kind of knock that belonged to someone who knew you were home and would wait all night. She placed the toast back on the plate, wiping her fingers on her jeans. The floorboards creaked under her bare feet as she crossed the cramped living room, navigating towers of books that threatened to topple with the slightest tremor. The air smelled of old paper, dust, and the faint, lingering scent of spice from the curry house below. She peered through the peephole, a distorted fisheye view of the landing. A charcoal-grey suit. A flash of platinum blond hair. An ivory-handled cane. Her breath hitched. Of all the ghosts to haunt her doorstep. Her fingers fumbled with the deadbolts, the metal sliding home with a series of loud, definitive thunks. She pulled the door open just enough to see him, to block his entry with her body. Lucien Moreau stood in the dim hallway, a picture of unnerving perfection. His suit was immaculate, his platinum hair slicked back from a face that was all sharp angles and cruel beauty. One eye, the colour of polished amber, held a warmth that had once undone her. The other, a pit of absolute black, promised nothing but cold, hard truths. "Aurora." His voice was a low, cultured purr, the French accent wrapping around her name like silk. "A pleasure, as always." Rory leaned against the doorframe, her expression carefully neutral. "Lucien. What do you want?" "Is that any way to greet an old friend?" He smiled, a slight, mocking curve of his lips. He tapped his cane on the worn linoleum, the sound a sharp, rhythmic counterpoint to her heartbeat. "May I come in? The landing is rather draughty." "No." The word was flat, final. "You can't. We're done." "'Done' is such a permanent word." His amber eye drifted past her, scanning the chaos of the flat behind her. "Still burying yourself in other people's histories, I see. Some things never change." "Some things do," she shot back. "Like the locks. Eva's very security-conscious." "Yet here I am." He took a step forward, invading her personal space, forcing her to either retreat or hold her ground. She held it, her chin lifting. The scent of his cologne, something expensive and vaguely metallic, filled her senses. It was the same scent she’d woken up to once, a lifetime ago in a hotel room in Brussels, the morning after everything had fallen apart. "You're not here to discuss my reading habits," she said, her voice low. "Get to it. I have a delivery job I'm already late for." "Ah, yes. The intrepid courier for the Golden Empress." He leaned his weight on his cane, the picture of casual indifference. "Such a waste of a truly formidable mind, Rory. Delivering noodles instead of solving puzzles." "I like puzzles," she said, her gaze unwavering. "I just don't like the ones that come with a body count. Which is why we're done." "The Bristol affair was... unfortunate." He dismissed their last, disastrous case with a wave of his hand. "A miscalculation. I admit it. But this is different. This isn't about a stolen grimoire or a renegade sorcerer." "Then what is it about?" She could feel Ptolemy brush against her ankle, a low rumble starting in his chest. The cat, usually a lazy lump, was bristling. Lucien’s smile faded. His mismatched eyes, one fire and one void, locked onto hers. "It's about you." A cold knot formed in her stomach. "I'm not a puzzle, Lucien." "Aren't you?" He reached out with his free hand, his fingers brushing a stray lock of black hair from her cheek. His touch was cold, electric. She flinched but didn't pull away. "You left Cardiff in a hurry. Something about an abusive ex. A mundane, tragic story." He leaned closer, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper. "But what if the story's a lie? Not your lie, perhaps. But a lie you've been told." Her mind raced. Evan. Her ex. The reason she’d fled, the reason she was hiding in this cramped flat above a curry house, working a dead-end job. It had all felt so real, the fear, the desperation. "What are you talking about?" "Evan Rutherford." Lucien said the name like it was a piece of spoiled meat he'd found on the pavement. "He wasn't just a nasty little man with a temper, was he? He was looking for something. Something he believed you had." "He was possessive and controlling. He didn't want me to leave." The words sounded hollow even to her own ears. "He was a low-level diviner," Lucien corrected her gently. "Hired by people far more dangerous than he could ever hope to be. He wasn't trying to keep you, Aurora. He was trying to mark you. To put a beacon on you." The cold knot in her stomach turned to ice. She remembered the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. A childhood accident, she’d always thought. A fall from a tree in the park. Evan had been fascinated by that scar, tracing it with his fingers in the dark. "Why?" she whispered. "Because they're looking for you. They have been for a very long time." Lucien straightened up, his hand falling away from her face. The brief, intimate moment was over, replaced by a chilling gravity. "Your parents. Your father, the barrister. Your mother, the teacher. Did you ever find it odd that a man of his apparent passion for the law had no living family to speak of? No siblings, no cousins? That your mother's history was a meticulously curated blank slate?" "That's insane. They're my parents." "Are they?" Lucien's black eye seemed to swallow the light in the hallway. "Or were they your custodians? Your keepers?" He let the question hang in the air, a poison dart. "Evan wasn't the first. He was just the latest in a long line of people sent to find you. The difference is, he failed. And now, his employers are getting impatient." Rory’s hand tightened on the doorframe, the painted wood digging into her palm. Her entire life, the carefully constructed narrative of her past, was crumbling. Cardiff, her parents, Evan—it was all just a prologue to a story she didn't know she was in. "Who?" she managed to ask, her voice cracking. "Who are they?" Lucien gave her a look that was almost pitying. He tapped his cane on the floor once, a final, decisive sound. "They're calling you Malphora. And they are coming to collect."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.452
leniency0.905
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
70.39% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1182
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count2
3
adverb"truly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"carefully"
2"very"
3"truly"
4"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
19.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1182
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"navigating"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"casual indifference"
count1
8
word"unwavering"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count2
11
word"electric"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"beacon"
count1
15
word"tracing"
count1
16
word"chilling"
count1
17
word"constructed"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"navigating"
2"warmth"
3"silk"
4"rhythmic"
5"scanning"
6"weight"
7"casual indifference"
8"unwavering"
9"could feel"
10"stomach"
11"electric"
12"whisper"
13"raced"
14"beacon"
15"tracing"
16"chilling"
17"constructed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences72
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences72
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences93
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1174
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount777
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva2
Moreau1
French1
Rory3
Brussels1
Ptolemy2
Lucien7
Evan3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
4"Evan"
places
0"Brussels"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like medieval tax records, his gre"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1174
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean33.54
std21.36
cv0.637
sampleLengths
043
161
271
312
411
534
660
721
814
944
1010
1133
1212
1367
1425
1536
1625
1736
1828
1917
2012
2174
2242
2341
2420
2541
2648
273
2881
295
3062
3143
3211
3321
3410
95.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"were supposed"
1"been fascinated"
24.56% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs114
matches
0"was bristling"
1"was hiding"
2"was crumbling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences93
ratio0.011
matches
0"Cardiff, her parents, Evan—it was all just a prologue to a story she didn't know she was in."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount783
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.03065134099616858
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.007662835249042145
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences93
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences93
mean12.62
std8.01
cv0.634
sampleLengths
012
19
222
311
422
58
61
71
818
914
1026
1119
1212
133
146
153
163
178
1817
1917
2012
2120
2215
2313
2417
254
269
275
2818
2917
309
316
324
3320
3413
356
366
3722
386
3913
4026
4113
4212
4321
4415
458
4617
4717
4819
4920
73.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4838709677419355
totalSentences93
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
34.93% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences67
matches
0"She placed the toast back"
1"She peered through the peephole,"
2"Her breath hitched."
3"Her fingers fumbled with the"
4"She pulled the door open"
5"His suit was immaculate, his"
6"His voice was a low,"
7"He smiled, a slight, mocking"
8"He tapped his cane on"
9"His amber eye drifted past"
10"she shot back"
11"He took a step forward,"
12"She held it, her chin"
13"It was the same scent"
14"she said, her voice low"
15"He leaned his weight on"
16"she said, her gaze unwavering"
17"He dismissed their last, disastrous"
18"She could feel Ptolemy brush"
19"His mismatched eyes, one fire"
ratio0.463
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences67
matches
0"The three deadbolts on Eva’s"
1"A physical barrier against the"
2"Rory paused, a half-eaten slice"
3"Ptolemy, Eva’s fat tabby cat,"
4"The knock came again, three"
5"The kind of knock that"
6"She placed the toast back"
7"The floorboards creaked under her"
8"The air smelled of old"
9"She peered through the peephole,"
10"A charcoal-grey suit."
11"A flash of platinum blond"
12"An ivory-handled cane."
13"Her breath hitched."
14"Her fingers fumbled with the"
15"She pulled the door open"
16"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
17"His suit was immaculate, his"
18"The other, a pit of"
19"His voice was a low,"
ratio0.955
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The floorboards creaked under her bare feet as she crossed the cramped living room, navigating towers of books that threatened to topple with the slightest trem…"
1"His suit was immaculate, his platinum hair slicked back from a face that was all sharp angles and cruel beauty."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"she said, her voice low"
1"He leaned, the picture of casual indifference"
2"she said, her gaze unwavering"
3"She could, a low rumble starting in his chest"
4"He leaned, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper"
5"Lucien straightened up, his hand falling away from her face"
6"she managed, her voice cracking"
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Lucien corrected (correct)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she managed (manage)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.143
75.5293%