Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0WHTWHHSXRHVTRRB39HE9

Run Details

Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.009293
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Fog stung Aurora's lungs and tasted of iron. The standing stones loomed like old teeth around them, ringed in moss that hummed when she pressed her palm to cold oak. The pendant lay against her sternum, a tiny heart of crimson that pulsed in step with something deeper than her own pulse. Each beat sent a faint warmth along the silver chain and a tremor through the air, as if the world on the other side answered. Nyx shifted beside her, a silhouette that refused definition. The Shade's edges shimmered like oil on water. When they inhaled, the sound came from everywhere and nowhere, a hushed wind in the trees. "This is the fold you spoke of," Aurora said, fingers tightening around the dagger at her hip. The Fae-forged blade was chill through her coat, a coldness that steadied her bones. The moonsilver tasted of moonlight and regrets. Nyx's whisper braided with the wind. "The seam is thin. The taste is right. Step, and tastes change." Isolde stood with them, hair like harvest moonlight falling loose over shoulders that never seemed to catch dust. She rested her palm on a stone and left no mark. Her voice boiled like tea poured through glass—riddled and precise. "A boundary without a seam," she said. "You will find bellies and mouths at once. Count the grapes and you will miss the vine that eats you." Aurora met Isolde's pale-lavender eyes and tried to pin meaning to the words. She had no love for riddles, but she trusted the Seer the way she trusted her own pulse: because it rarely lied. The air between the stones thinned. Light bent and the trees folded; a pressure built behind Aurora's teeth until the world tilted, and the pendant snapped hotter against her chest. The warm thud in her palm became a drumbeat that matched an old rhythm—doors opening in the dark. They stepped. Dymas did not wait to be described. It announced itself with a sky the colour of the inside of a lantern, a suspended amber that breathed. Vines spun along invisible scaffolding and heavy fruit hung like promises. The scent hit first: honey, black pepper, stitched with something metallic that set Aurora's teeth on edge. Somewhere close, a kettle sang in a language of whistles and sighs. "Beautiful," Nyx breathed, voice sliding over her words so they felt like a touch. Shadows pooled and poured over their boots and then rose to trail along the roots. "Hungry beautiful." A path opened beneath their feet—soft soil threaded with crushed spice, tiny luminescent seeds that cracked like tiny bells when stepped on. The ground hummed with a softness that carried memory; Aurora almost felt the echo of hands that had picked these orchards long before she existed. They walked. The vineyards stretched on, but did not stretch like memory. Rows twisted in on themselves and reappeared in impossible angles; a trellis arched, broke, then looped into a ceiling like the ribs of some great sleeping beast. Light refracted from leaves that shimmered with oil-slick rainbows, showing them the reflection of faces that were not theirs—faces smiling while another part of them understood too late that the mouths did not belong to living things. "Feasts," Isolde said, and the single word came out like a bell toll. "Feasts feed more than hunger." A table lay across their path, impossibly long, strung with candelabras whose flames burned green. Platters rolled like tilted moons. Chefs moved around the table with surgical poise—hands that doubled as claws and as caresses, turning meat the size of a cartwheel, slicing fruit that bled a slow red juice into bowls. The sound of laughter threaded the air. The laughter did not reach the eyes. A woman at one of the stoves lifted a ladle and steam rose like a small cloud. Aurora caught the scent inside the steam and felt her memory tremble: her mother's bread, the hush of a kitchen at dawn, the sting of a memory she had tried to tuck away. The steam tasted of those things and then tasted of something else—of bargaining and a price. Aurora pressed the blade-idle against her palm until the metal bit cold into her skin. "Do not touch the food," she said, and the words came out flat, a command without melodrama. The pendant throbbed. Behind them, vines uncoiled, leaves scissoring the air. Somewhere laughter hummed and fell into the soil like rain. Nyx drifted forward, shadow sliding up one of the table legs as if testing the grain. A single grape on a plate rolled, split, and a tiny thing scuttled out from the centre—an insect the size of a fingernail, with eyes like pinpricks that reflected the lantern sky. It scuttled across Nyx's shadow and then melted into the darkness as if swallowed. Nyx extended a hand—no fingers, only suggestion—and plucked at the air. "You see how it eats itself," Nyx said. The voice wrapped around the scene, turning it a story. "Everything here tastes of last promises." Isolde knelt and let her palm hover over a bowl of fruits. The fruit gave no heat but hummed with a residual warmth, as if it had been held by a thousand palms. "Not all bargains are signed in ink," she murmured. "Some are sealed with salt and blood and the first bite." The chefs did not seem to notice them. The workers—thin, handsome people with collars of braided rope—moved with frantic tenderness. A man bashed a pestle into a mortar and the paste took the shape of a child's face for an instant before dissolving into glaze. The sight made Aurora's stomach flip. She found herself counting to three and then to three again, fingers digging into the hilt of the dagger until the pain built a ladder back to the present. They pressed on, past trees whose bark was veined with gold and eyes that blinked open when they passed. Shadows lengthened and shifted even without sun; they worried at corners and whispered names in a language that felt like a bruise. "Why would such a place exist?" Aurora asked, more to steady the sound of her own voice than to ask for an answer. She had read about older things, about bargains etched in margins of history. Seeing them was different. Seeing them made history smell like spice and rot. Isolde straightened and smiled, a tilt of lips that was both amused and terrible. "Because someone was always hungry," she said. "Hunger makes rooms where rooms are not needed. Hunger is a patient architect." A breeze carried the clink of glass. They reached a courtyard where fountains did not pour water but a syrup so thick it held coins and the glint of teeth. People gathered around the fountains and cupped the syrup in their hands like water, tasting, and when they swallowed, their faces would wet with something else—tears or sweat or joy, Aurora could not tell. One man laughed until his shoulders jumped and then he placed his palm over a small wound at his throat and cradled a memory there like a bird. "These souls look human," Nyx said. "They were. Not now." "No," Isolde said. She looked into the fountain and saw, for a heartbeat, a reflection of someone she had known, then someone else—faces braided into a single mirror. "Traded themselves into a recipe. Contracts can be clever." Something moved beneath their boots. Roots, shaped like fingers, tangled and then uncoiled. One of them brushed Aurora's ankle. It left behind a sheen that tasted of cinnamon and iron. The pendant burned; the Heartstone's pulse quickened until Aurora could feel it against her tongue. She unclasped the chain and let the pendant dangle over the syrup in the fountain. The metal warmed, and the gem's inner light flared a little brighter. The syrup's surface tightened and trembled as if listening. From within the sticky pool a voice rose, not loud but intimate, like someone whispering through the silk of a curtain. "Who dips the red into gold?" it said, and the syllables combed the air. Isolde's smile thinned, and her palm lifted without touching the pendant. "It will speak to what it knows," she said. "Answers are never free. They want your hands." Aurora recoiled so fast a vine snapped. The pendant pulsed and sank back into warmth in her palm, as if deciding the safer course was her skin. "We asked for directions," she said. "Not company." A figure detached itself from the far end of the courtyard. Not one of the cooks. Not exactly a cook at all. It wore a coat stitched from plates and silverware, each clinking with an argument of its own. The figure rested one gloved hand on the hilt of a knife enormous enough to split a tree and smiled in a way that made ribbons of light curl out from under its teeth. Nyx's shadow leaned into the figure like a seeker leaning into the dark. "Host," they breathed. "Or host's echo." The figure inclined its head with exaggerated politeness. "Guests should be welcomed properly," it announced, and the voice bled into the room like wine. "We have chairs. We have a plate. Come, taste our welcome." Isolde's laugh came then—little and brittle. "Welcomes are the first mouth," she said. "Ever so courteous." Aurora remembered the blade in her hand. She felt its cold resolve and the way it bit when she thought of using it, the way it had sliced through the last ward that tried to keep her from what she wanted. The Fae-forged metal hummed with a subtle knowledge, as if it remembered the feel of faerie court airs and silvered songs. She slid the dagger free so its blade caught the green candlelight. "How do we leave when we've had the first bite?" she asked, voice dry, an attempt to hold the balance. Isolde's lavender eyes shifted. "You will remember the way you came," she said. "But remember comes with stains." The host of the courtyard spread its hands like a conductor. Around the table, plates turned and showed them scenes—cities swallowed by vines, children trading their lullabies for glossy fruit, lovers bartering promises for a last taste. The plates turned toward Aurora and held a mirror of her own life: the break in her wrist where the crescent scar lay; Eva's laugh echoing from kitchen tiles in a Cardiff flat. The plates whispered. The whispers sidled close to memory and tried to burrow. Nyx moved without formality, shadow uncoiling to slip a tendril between two plates. The tendril touched the ceramic and retracted loaded with a sliver of sound—a lullaby that had once soothed a tiny child in a room with lavender curtains. Nyx fed that sound back into the air like bread crumbs and the courtyard chewed and then swallowed. "Not everything here swallows meat," Nyx murmured. "Sometimes it eats what you remember you want." A chair scraped. The host gestured gracefully, so all their fingers flashed like knives. "Sit. Witness the festival. Take. Give. There are courses for every craving." Aurora felt a calculus in her bones, a ledger flipping pages she could not stop seeing. The pendant pulsed against her palm, urgent and small. She had come here because the Heartstone had tugged at something she could not refuse. She had come because Isolde had pronounced a riddle and because Nyx's presence made edges softer. Now the ledger opened in full. She took a breath and the air inside her became something heavy and sweet. Her mouth flooded with salt. "No," she said, because words could still be weapons. She lifted her chin. The dagger gleamed. "We are looking. Not supping." The host's smile sharpened. Around them, someone laughed—soft and delighted—and the servants with their rope collars looked up, their expressions split between servile and feral. One of them stepped forward, holding a tray. On it lay a single thing: a small tart, its crust perfect, its filling bubbling with an opalescent glow. Isolde tilted her head and let a leaf fall from her hair. "Even a single tart can be a treaty," she said. "You understand the terms when the sugar sticks to your teeth." Aurora's fingers twitched near the dagger. The pendant's light hummed through the chain. Nyx's shadow poured itself into the space between them like a shield and then like a hand, waiting. At the edge of the courtyard a door opened, and cool air breathed out, carrying a sound like pages being turned. From that doorway something came toward them—boots on cobblestones, steady, not the chirp of a host. Footsteps that did not belong to servers, nor to cooks, nor to the bound. The host gestured as if presenting a new course. "Ah," it said. "Now the real company arrives." Aurora did not have to be told. She tightened the grip on the dagger. The Fae blade hummed against expectation. The pendant pressed hot to her chest and pulsed like a second heart. They had crossed for the first time. They had not yet decided what to hand over. And someone else had arrived who might decide for them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.535
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2218
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2218
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count4
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"shimmered"
count2
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"echo"
count2
8
word"throbbed"
count1
9
word"tenderness"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"glint"
count1
13
word"quickened"
count1
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"silk"
count1
17
word"resolve"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count1
19
word"perfect"
count1
20
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"pulsed"
2"pulse"
3"warmth"
4"shimmered"
5"chill"
6"whisper"
7"echo"
8"throbbed"
9"tenderness"
10"stomach"
11"etched"
12"glint"
13"quickened"
14"could feel"
15"trembled"
16"silk"
17"resolve"
18"echoing"
19"perfect"
20"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences152
matches(empty)
86.47% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences152
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences172
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2194
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions26
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1931
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.98
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora19
Shade1
Fae-forged2
Isolde11
Seer1
Shadows2
Nyx14
Heartstone2
Eva1
Cardiff1
Fae3
One3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Shade"
2"Isolde"
3"Shadows"
4"Nyx"
5"Heartstone"
6"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
29.03% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"felt like a touch"
1"as if testing the grain"
2"felt like a bruise"
3"as if listening"
4"as if deciding the safer course was her skin"
5"as if presenting a new course"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.912
wordCount2194
matches
0"no heat but"
1"not loud but intimate, like someone whispering through the silk of a curt"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences172
matches
0"fed that sound"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean40.63
std21.8
cv0.537
sampleLengths
077
133
238
318
439
527
635
748
82
966
1031
1147
1276
1318
1466
1566
1635
1718
1873
1924
2053
2180
2241
2349
2434
2592
2610
2737
2845
2957
3014
3128
3235
3373
3419
3535
3616
3774
3820
3918
4083
4158
4215
4326
4462
4519
4621
4752
4833
4931
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences152
matches
0"been held"
1"was veined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs346
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences172
ratio0.128
matches
0"Her voice boiled like tea poured through glass—riddled and precise."
1"Light bent and the trees folded; a pressure built behind Aurora's teeth until the world tilted, and the pendant snapped hotter against her chest."
2"The warm thud in her palm became a drumbeat that matched an old rhythm—doors opening in the dark."
3"A path opened beneath their feet—soft soil threaded with crushed spice, tiny luminescent seeds that cracked like tiny bells when stepped on."
4"The ground hummed with a softness that carried memory; Aurora almost felt the echo of hands that had picked these orchards long before she existed."
5"Rows twisted in on themselves and reappeared in impossible angles; a trellis arched, broke, then looped into a ceiling like the ribs of some great sleeping beast."
6"Light refracted from leaves that shimmered with oil-slick rainbows, showing them the reflection of faces that were not theirs—faces smiling while another part of them understood too late that the mouths did not belong to living things."
7"Chefs moved around the table with surgical poise—hands that doubled as claws and as caresses, turning meat the size of a cartwheel, slicing fruit that bled a slow red juice into bowls."
8"The steam tasted of those things and then tasted of something else—of bargaining and a price."
9"A single grape on a plate rolled, split, and a tiny thing scuttled out from the centre—an insect the size of a fingernail, with eyes like pinpricks that reflected the lantern sky."
10"Nyx extended a hand—no fingers, only suggestion—and plucked at the air."
11"The workers—thin, handsome people with collars of braided rope—moved with frantic tenderness."
12"Shadows lengthened and shifted even without sun; they worried at corners and whispered names in a language that felt like a bruise."
13"People gathered around the fountains and cupped the syrup in their hands like water, tasting, and when they swallowed, their faces would wet with something else—tears or sweat or joy, Aurora could not tell."
14"She looked into the fountain and saw, for a heartbeat, a reflection of someone she had known, then someone else—faces braided into a single mirror."
15"The pendant burned; the Heartstone's pulse quickened until Aurora could feel it against her tongue."
16"Isolde's laugh came then—little and brittle."
17"Around the table, plates turned and showed them scenes—cities swallowed by vines, children trading their lullabies for glossy fruit, lovers bartering promises for a last taste."
18"The plates turned toward Aurora and held a mirror of her own life: the break in her wrist where the crescent scar lay; Eva's laugh echoing from kitchen tiles in a Cardiff flat."
19"The tendril touched the ceramic and retracted loaded with a sliver of sound—a lullaby that had once soothed a tiny child in a room with lavender curtains."
20"Around them, someone laughed—soft and delighted—and the servants with their rope collars looked up, their expressions split between servile and feral."
21"From that doorway something came toward them—boots on cobblestones, steady, not the chirp of a host."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1955
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"blade-idle against her"
adverbCount49
adverbRatio0.02506393861892583
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0025575447570332483
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences172
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences172
mean12.76
std7.84
cv0.615
sampleLengths
08
122
222
325
49
58
616
717
814
97
106
1112
1218
1311
1410
157
1620
1713
1822
196
2024
2118
222
237
2419
2511
2617
2712
2814
2915
302
3122
3225
332
3410
3527
3637
3713
385
3915
405
4132
427
437
4417
4533
4616
4715
4817
493
52.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.36046511627906974
totalSentences172
uniqueOpeners62
73.53% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences136
matches
0"Light bent and the trees"
1"Somewhere close, a kettle sang"
2"Somewhere laughter hummed and fell"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences136
matches
0"She rested her palm on"
1"Her voice boiled like tea"
2"She had no love for"
3"It announced itself with a"
4"she said, and the words"
5"It scuttled across Nyx's shadow"
6"She found herself counting to"
7"They pressed on, past trees"
8"She had read about older"
9"They reached a courtyard where"
10"She looked into the fountain"
11"It left behind a sheen"
12"She unclasped the chain and"
13"it said, and the syllables"
14"It wore a coat stitched"
15"it announced, and the voice"
16"She felt its cold resolve"
17"She slid the dagger free"
18"she asked, voice dry, an"
19"She had come here because"
ratio0.206
37.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount115
totalSentences136
matches
0"Fog stung Aurora's lungs and"
1"The standing stones loomed like"
2"The pendant lay against her"
3"Each beat sent a faint"
4"Nyx shifted beside her, a"
5"The Shade's edges shimmered like"
6"Aurora said, fingers tightening around"
7"The Fae-forged blade was chill"
8"The moonsilver tasted of moonlight"
9"Nyx's whisper braided with the"
10"Isolde stood with them, hair"
11"She rested her palm on"
12"Her voice boiled like tea"
13"Aurora met Isolde's pale-lavender eyes"
14"She had no love for"
15"The air between the stones"
16"The warm thud in her"
17"Dymas did not wait to"
18"It announced itself with a"
19"Vines spun along invisible scaffolding"
ratio0.846
36.76% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences136
matches
0"Now the ledger opened in"
ratio0.007
81.88% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences82
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The Fae-forged blade was chill through her coat, a coldness that steadied her bones."
1"The warm thud in her palm became a drumbeat that matched an old rhythm—doors opening in the dark."
2"It announced itself with a sky the colour of the inside of a lantern, a suspended amber that breathed."
3"Light refracted from leaves that shimmered with oil-slick rainbows, showing them the reflection of faces that were not theirs—faces smiling while another part o…"
4"Chefs moved around the table with surgical poise—hands that doubled as claws and as caresses, turning meat the size of a cartwheel, slicing fruit that bled a sl…"
5"A single grape on a plate rolled, split, and a tiny thing scuttled out from the centre—an insect the size of a fingernail, with eyes like pinpricks that reflect…"
6"The Fae-forged metal hummed with a subtle knowledge, as if it remembered the feel of faerie court airs and silvered songs."
38.04% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Aurora said, fingers tightening around the dagger at her hip"
1"she said, and the words came out flat, a command without melodrama"
2"it said, and the syllables combed the air"
3"it announced, and the voice bled into the room like wine"
41.30% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"they breathed (breathe)"
3"it announced (announce)"
4"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.535
leniency1
rawRatio0.217
effectiveRatio0.217
80.1040%