Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0WWPCJVJJD7HA5ZGT92CS

Run Details

Duration:
23.7s
Cost:
$0.009104
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Water dripped from a rusted pipe overhead, the rhythm uneven against the hollow silence of the York Road ghost station. Harlow Quinn stepped over a coil of rotted cables, her boots crunching on a carpet of calcified dust. Red emergency flares bathed the curved tile walls in a rhythmic, bloody pulse. The air tasted of ozone and wet limestone. She stopped at the edge of the platform where the subway tracks vanished into a throat of absolute black. A body lay sprawled across the rusted steel rail, twisted at an angle that defied the natural limits of a human spine. "Three minutes after the last maintenance car passed," Miller said. He stood near the edge, his breath frosting in the subterranean chill. He gestured at the corpse with a gloved hand. "Struck by the chassis, dragged twenty feet, neck snapped on impact. Clean and shut, Quinn." Harlow pulled a penlight from her coat. She crouched, the movement fluid and disciplined. The beam cut through the gloom, illuminating the victim’s face. It was a man, mid-forties, wearing an expensive wool overcoat that looked absurd against the filth of the abandoned Tube station. "Look at the coat, Miller." "Spattered with grease. Just like the tracks." Harlow leaned closer, the light dancing over the fabric. She didn't touch the body. She watched the way the crimson flare light hit the friction marks. "The fibers are pulled upward. If a train hit him, the kinetic energy would shove the fabric into the wound or shred it downward toward the ties. These threads are standing up, reaching for the ceiling." She shifted the light to the man’s hands. His fingernails were broken, dark earth packed under the beds. "He was digging." Miller scoffed, his shadow dancing long and distorted against the grime-streaked tiles. "Digging into solid concrete? He’s a jumper, Harlow. Or a wanderer who took a wrong turn at King’s Cross and met the midnight freight. Forensics will find the blunt force trauma matches the plow of the engine." Harlow ignored him. She stood and pivoted in a slow circle, her gaze cataloging the oddities of the environment. The station had been closed since 1932, yet the dust on this specific section of the platform was disturbed in concentric circles. Not footprints. Patterns. She reached into her pocket and checked her worn leather watch. The second hand stuttered, then spun backward three seconds before resuming its march. A dull ache throbbed behind her eyes, a phantom twin to the night DS Morris vanished into a London fog that refused to lift for three days. "There’s no blood on the tracks, Miller." The other detective stepped forward, his brow furrowed. "It’s dark, Quinn. It soaked into the ballast." "I see the grease. I see the rust. I see the victim's leaked spinal fluid. But there isn't a single drop of arterial spray on the rail under his neck." She walked ten paces down the platform, away from the body, toward a bricked-up archway. Her light flickered. A faint, metallic scent wafted from the wall—not the copper of blood, but the sharp, acidic tang of burnt sage and soldering tin. "He didn't die here," Harlow said. Her voice carried a low, dangerous resonance. "He was dumped here after the train passed. Someone wanted the 'unfortunate accident' narrative to stick." "To what end?" Miller shadowed her, his skepticism molding into a defensive posture. "The man is a nobody. Name’s Arthur Penhaligon. An antiques dealer from Camden. Probably looking for scrap silver." Harlow stopped at the bricked archway. She traced a finger along the mortar. It was damp, shimmering with a faint, iridescent residue that looked like crushed beetle wings. "Camden is three miles north by the tunnels. If he wanted scrap, he wouldn't come to a station haunted by the memory of transit." She knelt again, spotting a small object half-buried in the silt near the wall. Using a pair of tweezers from her kit, she extracted a heavy brass disc. It wasn't a coin. One side was smooth, the other carved with the likeness of a fractured femur. A bone token. The weight of the item felt wrong in her hand, vibrating with a frequency that set her teeth on edge. "He wasn't a wanderer," Harlow whispered. "He was a customer." "A customer of what?" "The Veil Market. They move every full moon. Tonight the moon is at its zenith, and the York Road station aligns with the old ley branches." Miller stepped back, his face hardening. "Don't start with that, Quinn. That’s the kind of talk that got the Internal Affairs hounds sniffing around your desk after Morris went missing. Stick to the physics." "The physics say this man’s lungs are collapsed from the inside out, as if the air was sucked out by a vacuum, not a train impact." Harlow moved back to the body and pulled the victim's collar aside. There, nestled against the carotid artery, sat a faint bruise. Not a handprint. It was a geometric shape—three interlocking circles with a needle-thin puncture at the center. "See this? This is the signature of a harvest." "You're seeing ghosts because you're looking for them." Miller’s voice echoed off the tunnel walls, sounding thinner than before. Harlow didn't blink. She stood up, her 5'9" frame casting a sharp, uncompromising silhouette. She adjusted her grip on the flashlight, her eyes narrowing as she looked past the body, deeper into the dark of the bypass tunnel. "I'm seeing a man who paid for entry into a place that doesn't exist on our maps. He bought something, or he tried to sell something he didn't own. The Market doesn't appreciate thieves." She walked toward a pile of discarded crates near the platform's edge. Tucked between the wood slats was a small brass object, its casing tarnished with a thick patina of verdigris. She picked it up. A compass. But the needle didn't point North. It hummed, the tip vibrating toward the bricked-up wall where the iridescent residue clung to the mortar. "This is the shadow compass," Harlow said, the brass cool against her palm. "It traces rifts. It’s pointing right at that wall, Miller." "It’s a broken toy." "Then why are the bricks smoking?" A whisper of grey vapor began to seep from the gaps in the masonry. The temperature in the station plummeted. The red flares flickered and died, leaving them in the fragile, pale white cone of Harlow's flashlight. The needle on the compass spun frantically. Harlow felt the familiar, cold dread crawling up her neck—the same sensation she had felt three years ago on the docks. "The evidence doesn't add up because we're looking at the wrong set of laws," Harlow said. She stepped toward the wall, her boots silent on the stone. "The train didn't kill him. The transition did. His body couldn't handle the pressure of the Veil closing." She reached out, her hand hovering inches from the brickwork. The air there felt thick, like pushing through invisible syrup. "Quinn, back away from the masonry. We need to call in the CSIs and get this body to the morgue. You’re overcomplicating a simple tragedy." Harlow turned her head slightly, her sharp jawline caught in the light. "Did you notice his shoes, Miller?" "What about them?" "They’re bone dry. It’s raining cats and dogs on the surface. If he walked down the access stairs or through the Camden tunnels, he’d be soaked. He didn't walk here. He wasn't hit here." She turned the compass toward Miller. The needle swung violently away from the wall and pointed directly at her colleague’s chest. "And he didn't drop this compass. It was tucked into the crates, hidden from the sightline of anyone standing on the platform. Only someone standing exactly where you were when I arrived would have seen it." Miller’s hand drifted toward his belt. The air between them hummed with a sudden, violent static. "You always had a sharp eye, Harlow. It’s a shame it’s so focused on the things that should stay buried." "The bone token in my pocket is warm, Miller. It only gets warm when it's near its twin." Harlow shifted her weight, her military bearing tightening into a coiled spring. She watched his eyes—green, reflective, and suddenly devoid of the boredom he’d worn like a mask since they’d climbed down the manhole. "Show me your pockets, Miller. Or do we wait for the shadow compass to stop screaming?" The station groaned, the sound of phantom wheels grinding against phantom tracks echoing from the deep dark. The mist from the wall began to take shape, swirling into the silhouette of a door. "The Market is moving," Harlow said, her voice a low obsidian edge. "And you’re going to tell me who Arthur Penhaligon was supposed to meet before you let him die." Miller moved, but Harlow was faster. She dropped the flashlight, the beam rolling across the floor and illuminating a third party standing in the shadows of the bypass—a woman with curly red hair and round glasses, clutching a worn leather satchel. "Detective Quinn!" the woman shouted. Harlow didn't turn. She kept her eyes locked on Miller. "Eva? Stay back. This crime scene just got a lot more crowded." "He has to have the ledger," Eva hurried forward, her boots splashing through a puddle of ancient grime. She ignored the body on the tracks. Her eyes were fixed on the compass in Harlow’s hand. "The man on the tracks—he was my contact. He was bringing me the Morris file." The name hit Harlow like a physical blow. The salt-and-pepper hair at her temples seemed to bristled. She didn't let her guard down, her gaze still pinning Miller to the spot, but the air in the station grew heavy with the weight of the past. "He's not answering, Eva," Harlow said. "Because Detective Miller here is wondering if he can clear the scene before the archives come looking for their property." Miller let out a short, sharp breath that wasn't a laugh. "You think this is a conspiracy, Quinn? It's just business. Some things are worth more than a detective’s pension." He reached for the heavy iron tool hanging from the wall—a long-handled tunnel wrench. Harlow stepped into his reach, her movements calculated and swift. She didn't use a weapon. She used the momentum of his own panic. She caught his wrist, her thumb pressing into the nerve cluster with a precision born of two decades on the force. "The tracks are waiting, Miller. Do you want to see if the midnight freight is real, or just a ghost?" In the flickering light, the brick wall behind them began to vibrate. The iridescent sheen turned into a blinding silver light. The Veil Market was opening its throat. "The ledger," Eva pleaded, her voice high and desperate. "Check his inner pocket. The one sewn into the lining. If it's not there, it's already inside the Market." Harlow didn't look away from Miller’s eyes. "Check him, Eva. And if you find a drop of blood on that book, tell me immediately." The station felt like it was breathing now—a rhythmic, heavy respiration that pulled the mist toward the opening rift. The shadow compass in Harlow’s hand began to glow a dull, rhythmic gold. "It's here," Eva whispered, pulling a thin, vellum-bound book from the corpse’s coat. "But it's cold. So cold." Harlow tightened her grip on Miller. "Explain the cold, Miller. Explain why my partner's name is in a dead man's pocket in a station that doesn't exist." Miller’s face went pale, his eyes darting toward the silver light of the rift. "You don't want to know where that book came from, Quinn. And you certainly don't want to meet the people who are coming to collect the debt." A low whistle sounded from the depths of the tunnel—not a train, but something biological, ancient, and hungry. The compass needle snapped off its pivot. Harlow kicked Miller’s legs out from under him, forcing him to his knees near the edge of the tracks. "I've been waiting three years for a lead this cold," Harlow said. She looked at the shimmering wall, the bone token in her hand pulsing like a second heart. "I think it’s time we did some shopping." The silver light expanded, swallowing the red flares, the dust, and the broken body of Arthur Penhaligon. Harlow Quinn stood her ground as the York Road station dissolved into the impossible geometry of the Veil.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"someone standing exactly [exactly]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.309
leniency0.618
rawRatio0.048
effectiveRatio0.029
95.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2101
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.50% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2101
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"rhythmic"
count3
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"dancing"
count2
6
word"throbbed"
count1
7
word"furrowed"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count2
9
word"resonance"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"fractured"
count1
12
word"weight"
count3
13
word"echoed"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"familiar"
count1
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"calculated"
count1
18
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"rhythmic"
2"pulse"
3"chill"
4"gloom"
5"dancing"
6"throbbed"
7"furrowed"
8"flickered"
9"resonance"
10"traced"
11"fractured"
12"weight"
13"echoed"
14"whisper"
15"familiar"
16"echoing"
17"calculated"
18"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
53.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences112
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2082
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1482
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
York2
Road2
Quinn2
Tube1
Morris2
London1
Harlow28
Miller15
Market2
North1
Veil3
Camden1
Eva3
Arthur1
Penhaligon1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Harlow"
3"Miller"
4"Market"
5"Eva"
6"Arthur"
7"Penhaligon"
places
0"York"
1"Road"
2"London"
globalScore0.555
windowScore0.5
93.82% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like crushed beetle wings"
1"felt like it was breathing now—a rhythm"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.961
wordCount2082
matches
0"not the copper of blood, but the sharp, acidic tang of burnt sage"
1"not a train, but something biological, ancient"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs84
mean24.79
std14.2
cv0.573
sampleLengths
059
141
246
345
45
57
626
736
818
93
1012
1137
1244
1351
147
158
168
1730
1841
1929
2031
2128
2224
2349
2420
2510
264
2726
286
2928
3026
3139
329
3319
3438
3534
3660
3723
384
396
4037
4128
4245
4320
4425
4512
466
473
4834
4921
95.86% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences112
matches
0"been closed"
1"was disturbed"
2"was tucked"
3"were fixed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs250
matches
0"was bringing"
1"was opening"
2"was breathing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences147
ratio0.054
matches
0"A faint, metallic scent wafted from the wall—not the copper of blood, but the sharp, acidic tang of burnt sage and soldering tin."
1"It was a geometric shape—three interlocking circles with a needle-thin puncture at the center."
2"The needle on the compass spun frantically. Harlow felt the familiar, cold dread crawling up her neck—the same sensation she had felt three years ago on the docks."
3"Harlow shifted her weight, her military bearing tightening into a coiled spring. She watched his eyes—green, reflective, and suddenly devoid of the boredom he’d worn like a mask since they’d climbed down the manhole."
4"Miller moved, but Harlow was faster. She dropped the flashlight, the beam rolling across the floor and illuminating a third party standing in the shadows of the bypass—a woman with curly red hair and round glasses, clutching a worn leather satchel."
5"He reached for the heavy iron tool hanging from the wall—a long-handled tunnel wrench."
6"The station felt like it was breathing now—a rhythmic, heavy respiration that pulled the mist toward the opening rift. The shadow compass in Harlow’s hand began to glow a dull, rhythmic gold."
7"A low whistle sounded from the depths of the tunnel—not a train, but something biological, ancient, and hungry. The compass needle snapped off its pivot."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount969
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.022703818369453045
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0041279669762641896
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean14.16
std10.91
cv0.77
sampleLengths
020
118
213
38
419
522
610
712
89
915
107
117
1210
1321
145
157
169
175
1812
1936
208
2110
223
2312
2437
253
2616
2722
282
291
3011
3113
3227
337
348
358
3630
3715
383
3923
406
417
4216
4313
4418
456
467
4715
4824
4914
46.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.32653061224489793
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners48
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Only someone standing exactly where"
ratio0.01
77.69% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences104
matches
0"She stopped at the edge"
1"He stood near the edge,"
2"He gestured at the corpse"
3"She crouched, the movement fluid"
4"It was a man, mid-forties,"
5"She didn't touch the body."
6"She watched the way the"
7"She shifted the light to"
8"His fingernails were broken, dark"
9"She stood and pivoted in"
10"She reached into her pocket"
11"She walked ten paces down"
12"Her light flickered."
13"Her voice carried a low,"
14"She traced a finger along"
15"It was damp, shimmering with"
16"She knelt again, spotting a"
17"It wasn't a coin."
18"It was a geometric shape—three"
19"She stood up, her"
ratio0.356
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences104
matches
0"Water dripped from a rusted"
1"Harlow Quinn stepped over a"
2"The air tasted of ozone"
3"She stopped at the edge"
4"A body lay sprawled across"
5"He stood near the edge,"
6"He gestured at the corpse"
7"Harlow pulled a penlight from"
8"She crouched, the movement fluid"
9"The beam cut through the"
10"It was a man, mid-forties,"
11"Harlow leaned closer, the light"
12"She didn't touch the body."
13"She watched the way the"
14"She shifted the light to"
15"His fingernails were broken, dark"
16"Miller scoffed, his shadow dancing"
17"Harlow ignored him."
18"She stood and pivoted in"
19"The station had been closed"
ratio0.875
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"If he walked down the"
1"If it's not there, it's"
ratio0.019
72.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"It was a man, mid-forties, wearing an expensive wool overcoat that looked absurd against the filth of the abandoned Tube station."
1"It was damp, shimmering with a faint, iridescent residue that looked like crushed beetle wings."
2"The weight of the item felt wrong in her hand, vibrating with a frequency that set her teeth on edge."
3"She reached out, her hand hovering inches from the brickwork. The air there felt thick, like pushing through invisible syrup."
4"The station felt like it was breathing now—a rhythmic, heavy respiration that pulled the mist toward the opening rift. The shadow compass in Harlow’s hand began…"
29.76% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Miller shadowed, his skepticism molding into a defensive posture"
1"Harlow said, her voice a low obsidian edge"
2"Eva hurried, her boots splashing through a puddle of ancient grime"
3"Eva pleaded, her voice high and desperate"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Harlow whispered (whisper)"
1"the woman shouted (shout)"
2"Eva pleaded (plead)"
3"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.162
leniency0.324
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.118
79.9368%