Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0XQW9SQEXJQF1QDM8JWVB

Run Details

Duration:
1m 20s
Cost:
$0.010366
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain rasped. The door swung open on the smell of old books and garam masala and something else—Lucien, cold as marble and twice as smooth, filling the threshold. He waited in the doorway like a portrait that had learned to move. The charcoal suit lay on him as if stitched to his skin. The ivory-knobbed cane tapped once against the hallway tile and the sound cut through the cramped room. One eye was black, the other amber. Both had the same unreadable patience. Rory's hand stayed on the knob. Her pulse thudded where the crescent scar sat beneath the cuff of her sleeve. The flat was smaller than she liked to admit when she was trying to be brave. Every surface held a note, a map, a stack of a thousand questions. Ptolemy leapt from the armchair and skidded across the rug, arching at the stranger. "You could have texted," she said. He stepped in as if the room had been waiting for him. He didn't actually cross the threshold until she moved aside, but his presence filled every square inch like smoke. "A text would have been polite," he said, and the amusement in his voice made the cat flatten into the bookpile. "Politeness has never been our strong suit, Rory." Her mouth sharpened. "Don't call me that here." He smiled without humour. "Laila wouldn't answer the door." She pushed it fully, the last deadbolt clicking in place behind her. Three locks. She didn't ask how he had got past them. "You shouldn't be here," she said. Not a question. "I thought you'd be pleased to see me," he said, and the cane tapped again, softer, as if testing the flat's rhythm. "I thought you might have a kettle." Ptolemy fluffed and nosed his ankle. Lucien's fingers moved as if of their own accord to brush the cat's head. He paused, then ignored the animal and scanned the room like a man reading a letter he had written in a different life. "You left," Rory said. The words were small, brittle. They had been rehearsed, prised out of herself over black coffee and midnight anger. "You left when I needed you." A flicker of something—regret, amusement, something older—passed across his face. He looked at her hand on the door, at the small crescent of white against skin. He had probably traced that scar once, for reasons he never offered. He moved closer as if compelled; proximity had become a kind of admission for both of them. "I had to go," he said. "There were obligations." She laughed because she didn't know how else to keep the corners of her mouth from breaking. Tears pressed hot behind her eyes, not for the man at the door but for the child who'd learned to lock three deadbolts and live by them. "Obligations," she scoffed. "To whom? To Avaros? To your father? To... what exactly, Lucien?" His amber eye glinted. "You made it sound like a crime scene when you left Cardiff. You made me feel guilty of something I hadn't done." "You did nothing," she said. "You did everything." He tilted his head, and his voice went low enough that the books on the shelf seemed to strain to hear. "Listen to yourself." "I am." "You were angry." He took a step into the room, the cane tapping out a metronome. "You stopped listening." Her laugh came out sharp as broken glass. "I listened while you slipped away. I listened while you told half-truths and left the rest as imagined sentences I would finish for you." She closed the door with her shoulder and let her hands drop to her sides. "I listened while I became somebody who didn't trust anyone." Lucien's jaw tightened. "You never asked me to stay." "You never offered to," she said. Her voice thinned. "You left a note, Lucien. Two sentences. 'Don't look for me. It's safer.' That's not a goodbye. It was a shove." He didn't reach for the books, didn't tidy the papers. He only stood there, the way he had at every intersection of her life: offering an impossible calm. "You left because you thought it would protect me," he said. "Because I thought you would be safer if I was nowhere in your orbit." Rory's laugh broke. "Safer? Is that your excuse now? Safer for who? For you to be convenient? For me to be quiet?" "You made choices," he said. "So did I." "Those choices hurt." She crossed the room as if to close the space between them and then stopped, arms folded. "You weren't here when the landlord tried to kick me out of the flat on Clare Street, when Evan—" She couldn't finish. The name scraped raw. Lucien's face went still. For a moment he looked younger, like someone who had been surprised by the rawness of a wound he'd never meant to touch. "I know about Evan," he said quietly. "I heard. I thought—" "You thought what?" She leaned forward until their faces were a breath apart. "That you could disappear and I would thank you later? That I'd sit and stitch my life back together with your absence like it was a ribbon?" He blinked. "I didn't think about ribbons." Ptolemy decided the conversation was boring and vaulted into Lucien's lap, curling into a warm knot against the velvet of his trouser leg. Lucien didn't move. He let the cat knead at him, eyes never leaving Rory. "You come here unannounced and you bring a cat," she said. The words were so small they might have been an attempt at weather. He didn't smile. "I come unannounced because I had to see you. I brought Ptolemy because he is the least complicated living thing on Brick Lane." She considered the cat's contented purr and the way his tail wrapped around Lucien's wrist. The sight pulled at something that wasn't entirely hardened into resentment. "Why now?" she asked. The question ached with all the nights she'd rewritten their last months into scenarios where he'd stayed, where he'd been honest, where there had been no absence. "Because I found something," he said. "Because I couldn't stop thinking about a map and a name and you on the other end of it." "You always sounded like you were speaking in riddles." She set her face like flint. "Why would I trust anything you say now?" He moved closer until the cane tapped the bottom shelf and a bundle of scrolls slipped and thudded to the floor. Papers fanned like injured birds. Lucien made a small, impatient noise and bent to gather them up. His hand brushed hers when he passed a sheet across to reorder it. For the briefest second the world narrowed to the scrape of paper and the warmth of his palm. "Because I needed answers," he said simply. "Because I was tired of not knowing. Because—" He stopped. The rest of the sentence hovered and withered. Rory reached down to help him, fingers tracing a margin filled with cramped ink. The touch was lightning. She didn't pull away. She also didn't close the distance she wanted in that moment. "You left a lot of things unsaid," she said. "You left me with half-truths and a taste for explanations that never came. You left because you thought it would keep me safe. And now you say you needed answers. How is that my problem?" "Because," he said, and the word was a bridge that trembled underfoot, "you were the only person who ever cared to look at the other side of those answers." "You sound magnanimous." She threw down a page that proved nothing and meant everything. "You left. You didn't give me the chance to forgive anything." He stared at the page on the floor as if the ink had betrayed him. "Forgiveness is not something I can demand," he said. "But I can tell you why I left." She could have slammed the door then. She could have bolted every lock and pretended she hadn't heard. Instead she stayed. "Say it then." He inhaled. It was a deliberate movement, and it came with the faint hint of old tobacco mixed with something sharp—citrus and iron. "My father made me an offer. Leaving was part of the bargain. Staying would have made you..." He didn't finish. The sentence folded like paper inside his mouth. "Would have made me what?" Rory asked. "Collateral?" He closed his eyes for a beat, lashes resting like shutters. When they opened his amber eye had the look of a man who had been fighting sleep and destiny in equal measure for a decade. "Vulnerable," he said. "Exposed. A lever." "Always the lever," she whispered. "You can't go ten minutes without someone trying to make you useful." "Not everyone wanted to make me useful." He took a step that dissolved all the space between them. "Some people wanted me to stay." "Which camp are you in now?" she asked. The question was sharper than any knife she had imagined Evan would own. Lucien's fingers curled around the cane until the knucklebone whitened. He didn't move the few inches that kept him distant. "I came back because I couldn't decide which camp I belonged to without you in the picture." The admission landed like a stone. It made a sound inside her ribs. She could have refused it. She could have hurled the stone back in the shape of a thousand practiced lines. "That's convenient," she said instead, and the resentment tasted like copper. "You came back when it suited your narrative?" "Convenient is a neat word for cowardice," he said. "Or for survival. I don't know." "Don't you?" She let humour edge the sentence, brittle as glass. "You always were evasive. It kept people thinking you were clever." He lifted his hand as if to put it to her face and then stopped. His fingers hovered near her wrist, above the crescent scar. "You don't have to keep all of it to yourself," he said. She swallowed. The scar, the memory of hospital lights, of being small and brave and patched up—she'd lived with it like a secret talisman. He had the temerity to look at it without making it a confession. "You know what will happen if you touch me," she said. He didn't touch. "Then what are you here for, Lucien?" she asked. "To be complicated? To apologise for being complicated that last time? To walk back into my life with a cat and a cane and expect the room to rearrange itself around you?" He looked at her with a kind of tired clarity that cut deeper than any sharp retort. "No," he said simply. "I am here because I owe you better than I already gave you. I am here because the alternative—never trying to fix the thing between us—was worse than any bargain I ever made." Ptolemy began to purr, a low engine that filled the room. Outside, someone hammered a metal shutter and laughter echoed, bright and ordinary. The flat smelled of spice and paper and some vanished kindness. "I don't know if I'm ready to be fixed," Rory said. "I don't know if that's even possible." "Neither do I," Lucien breathed. "But I'd like to find out." She studied him—the even line of his mouth, the way one corner pulled like a promise. The past opened and closed between them like a trapdoor. Her chest hurt with the memory of him leaving and the relief of him returning. She thought of the nights she had spent convincing herself that she didn't need anyone who ghosted out of her life when the storm hit. "So why here?" she asked, softer. "Why Brick Lane? Why this flat, above a curry house and under a thousand pages of other people's mysteries?" He looked around with something like fondness, the angle of a man who preferred maps to maps of feeling because at least maps offered destinations. "Because you were here," he said. "Because Eva said you liked it. Because Ptolemy is a much better judge of character than most people." She couldn't help the bark of a laugh that escaped. It was a short, ugly sound that nevertheless broke the tension like a fault line. "You always had a second tongue for flattery," she muttered. "Flattery or observation," he replied. "One keeps you alive, the other keeps you coming back." She let the words fold between them. They didn't resolve anything. They didn't even attempt to. The air hummed with possibilities they hadn't drafted into words. A sudden knock at the door made both of them start. Eva's flat was small; every sound reverberated. Rory glanced at the locks and felt the instinct to put every bolt back into place. She did not move her hand. "Don't," Lucien said quietly, and his hand covered hers, surrendering the urge to act like a man who could fix doors with a flick of his wrist. "If it is trouble, we deal with it together." She looked at his hand over hers. The gesture was simple and terrible and offered nothing more than its truth. The knock came again, insistent. "Open the door," a voice called from the hallway, familiar and fragrant with curry. "Rory? You in there? I brought extra naan!" Rory's mouth tipped into something like a smile. She loosened her grip on the bolt but didn't release it. Lucien's thumb brushed her knuckles and left a heat like a brand. "Tell her I'll be here in five minutes," Rory said. Her voice was steadier than she felt. "Five minutes," Lucien said. "And then?" "And then we talk," she said. She didn't promise forgiveness. She didn't promise anything else. She only offered the tenuous truth of presence: five minutes, a cat, a man with a cane and impossible eyes, and a room full of books that smelled like other people's lives. He nodded. The motion was small. Ptolemy migrated to his shoulder, claiming him like a small, furry accolade. "Good," Lucien said. "Because I'm not leaving again." Rory laughed, the sound ragged but not empty, and for a breath the flat felt less like a fortress and more like a place where something might happen, though she did not pretend to know what. The front door stood between them and the world. The deadbolts gleamed in the light. Outside, Brick Lane hummed with ordinary life. Inside, two people who had parted on complicated terms watched the door and waited the thin, thawing minutes of their own choosing.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags50
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"he said simply [simply]"
2"she said instead [instead]"
3"he said simply [simply]"
4"Lucien said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences99
tagDensity0.505
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2439
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2439
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"marble"
count1
1
word"unreadable"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"tension"
count1
12
word"resolve"
count1
13
word"reverberated"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"marble"
1"unreadable"
2"pulse"
3"scanned"
4"flicker"
5"traced"
6"velvet"
7"warmth"
8"tracing"
9"trembled"
10"echoed"
11"tension"
12"resolve"
13"reverberated"
14"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences172
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences172
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tend to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences221
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2428
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions54
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount1620
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.86
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien14
Ptolemy5
Rory11
Evan1
Brick1
Lane1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Rory"
3"Evan"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
29.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if testing the flat's rhythm"
1"tasted like copper"
2"something like fondness, the angle of a man"
3"something like a smile"
4"smelled like other people's lives"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.412
wordCount2428
matches
0"not for the man at the door but for the child who'd learned to lock three deadbolts"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences221
matches
0"traced that scar"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs91
mean26.68
std14.97
cv0.561
sampleLengths
029
155
263
36
431
529
68
79
823
99
1029
1143
1229
1355
149
1544
1614
1726
188
1924
202
2119
2257
239
2430
2528
2625
2722
288
2939
307
3127
3211
3340
347
3537
3624
3726
3826
3931
4025
4123
4269
4325
4433
4544
4629
4725
4832
4924
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences172
matches
0"been rehearsed"
1"been surprised"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs321
matches
0"was trying"
52.36% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences221
ratio0.032
matches
0"The door swung open on the smell of old books and garam masala and something else—Lucien, cold as marble and twice as smooth, filling the threshold."
1"A flicker of something—regret, amusement, something older—passed across his face."
2"He moved closer as if compelled; proximity had become a kind of admission for both of them."
3"It was a deliberate movement, and it came with the faint hint of old tobacco mixed with something sharp—citrus and iron."
4"The scar, the memory of hospital lights, of being small and brave and patched up—she'd lived with it like a secret talisman."
5"She studied him—the even line of his mouth, the way one corner pulled like a promise."
6"Eva's flat was small; every sound reverberated."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1627
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.02581438229870928
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.006760909649661954
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences221
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences221
mean10.99
std7.48
cv0.68
sampleLengths
03
126
213
312
417
57
66
76
814
916
1013
1114
126
1312
1419
1521
168
173
185
194
205
2112
222
239
246
253
2622
277
286
2914
3023
314
325
3314
346
3510
3616
3712
3817
396
403
4117
4227
433
4411
454
4622
475
483
4921
36.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats29
diversityRatio0.28054298642533937
totalSentences221
uniqueOpeners62
24.69% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"Instead she stayed."
ratio0.007
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount75
totalSentences135
matches
0"He waited in the doorway"
1"Her pulse thudded where the"
2"He stepped in as if"
3"He didn't actually cross the"
4"he said, and the amusement"
5"Her mouth sharpened."
6"He smiled without humour."
7"She pushed it fully, the"
8"She didn't ask how he"
9"he said, and the cane"
10"He paused, then ignored the"
11"They had been rehearsed, prised"
12"He looked at her hand"
13"He had probably traced that"
14"He moved closer as if"
15"She laughed because she didn't"
16"His amber eye glinted."
17"He tilted his head, and"
18"He took a step into"
19"Her laugh came out sharp"
ratio0.556
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount126
totalSentences135
matches
0"The chain rasped."
1"The door swung open on"
2"He waited in the doorway"
3"The charcoal suit lay on"
4"The ivory-knobbed cane tapped once"
5"Both had the same unreadable"
6"Rory's hand stayed on the"
7"Her pulse thudded where the"
8"The flat was smaller than"
9"Every surface held a note,"
10"Ptolemy leapt from the armchair"
11"He stepped in as if"
12"He didn't actually cross the"
13"he said, and the amusement"
14"Her mouth sharpened."
15"He smiled without humour."
16"She pushed it fully, the"
17"She didn't ask how he"
18"he said, and the cane"
19"Ptolemy fluffed and nosed his"
ratio0.933
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Lucien's fingers moved as if of their own accord to brush the cat's head."
1"He moved closer as if compelled; proximity had become a kind of admission for both of them."
2"She only offered the tenuous truth of presence: five minutes, a cat, a man with a cane and impossible eyes, and a room full of books that smelled like other peo…"
3"Inside, two people who had parted on complicated terms watched the door and waited the thin, thawing minutes of their own choosing."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags50
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"he said, and the cane tapped again, softer, as if testing the flat's rhythm"
1"He took, the cane tapping out a metronome"
2"he said, and the word was a bridge that trembled underfoot,"
3"she said instead, and the resentment tasted like copper"
4"she asked, softer"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags40
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"Lucien breathed (breathe)"
2"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences99
tagDensity0.404
leniency0.808
rawRatio0.075
effectiveRatio0.061
79.0440%