Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0Y9J1KPYBRKFHYYGAMM5M

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The scent of decay threaded its way through the tunnels, aggressive in its urgency. Detective Harlow Quinn descended into the stale darkness, boots clanging against the iron steps. Drawn breaths disturbed the heavy dust hanging in the air; it settled on her tongue, along with the metallic taste of blood. "Harlow, I didn't take you for a treasure hunter." Detective Quinn's colleague, DI Penrose, leaned against a rusting pillar, examining papers by torchlight. "Hidden in plain sight, you said?" They were standing in the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, a space left largely untouched by time except for graffiti spectators, marking invisible boundaries of those who dared to venture down here. The echoes of distant laughter, footfalls, and wheezing trains served as reminders of its former life. "Hunting something more elusive than your standard pirate's gold," Quinn replied, her eyes adjusting to the dim glow. Her hand rested on the worn leather watch strapped on her wrist—a tangible connection to DS Morris, absent yet omnipresent. The watch felt heavier tonight, given the nature of the case she was about to unravel. Splatters of crimson adorned the concrete walls, angled in linear streaks like the impossible artwork that decorated certain artist squats she’d seen around East London. Unnatural smudged glyphs spilled out beneath the carnage, symbols carved with tortured precision. "A ritual gone wrong," Penrose mused, arching an eyebrow. Although skilled, he lacked the instinct for inconsistencies that others had—errors within the minutiae readily apparent to Quinn. "It's more than just botched enchantments. Check the compass," Quinn gestured to the medium-sized brass compass lying discarded amidst a mess of artefacts. The face was unfamiliar, etched with protective sigils. It caught the torchlight, bouncing reflections of a rift that had recently closed. DI Penrose kneeled, retrieving the Veil Compass and turning the worn brass casing over in curious examination. His eyes deliberated over its verdigris-coated symbolism. "Belongs to the Veil Market, right? Shame artisan crafted. Expensive mistake." "You'd think anyone clever enough to get their hands on such a compass wouldn't deliberately leave it behind." Quinn picked her path over debris. Her alertness heightened, absorbed in deciphering ancestral confusion. "Something intended for misdirection." The dim underpass tasted of mystery, the air stagnated with innumerable stories lurking within its walls. Quinn crouched beside what remained of the sacrificial circle—a haphazard collection of bones lay half-buried in sacred salt—a blatant error concealed under grubby blankets. A bone token jutted from the sediment; the entry to the elusive Veil Market hung precariously from her fingertips. Penrose stood, tapping his foot impatiently. "Explains how they could open the Market without troubling the station warmer than death, doesn't justify leaving evidence." "Impatience tarnished misdirection, I suspect. When arrogance meets erratic derailment." Quinn investigated the mess, reaching back. The atmosphere grew jittery, and the environment responded with whispers. Her memory refracted fragments of Morris. Bits and shreds of their investigations—where spectral liabilities deviated tangible disciplines. Quinn shrouded past hardship with determined restraint. "A clue left for the right start," she proposed, gesturing mysteriously toward the symbol—darkness transpose, reversed signifying clemency obligated in shortsightedness—a piece of moral play in concealing identity. "Explain how backwards signs equate magic," Penrose replied, his torch flaunting through generous beams. "The very absence of sincerity," Quinn replied, voice continual in its echo. "Theories devoid of substance." She rolled the compass gracefully, feeling its weight—privy to the details. A glance at the item spoke volumes of possibilities ripe beyond corridors. The station emitted brayings of spectral survivors displaced amongst sake drenched lore, forced in space emptied of missing resolutions. Quinn found truth vibrating at frequencies more compelling than soil-caked lies. Glowing arcs shimmered in their pull—a glimpse of spectral passage within current station evidence. The anticipated adventure stretched beyond conjecture. "So, what are we up against, exactly?" Penrose asked, a distinct jibe infused with skeptical authority. "A facade unravelled. Posing debts within layers beneath seen fraud,” Quinn replied. "Leading conscious towards unnerving continuity reached from gilded whispers, afraid of wakeful interception." "Shadow rifts?" his voice expressed gentle unwillingness—to comprehend surmounting flame masked in quelling mundanity. An air draped itself in confounded mystery. Quinn examined terrain under pinhole scrutiny, the compass surrendered motivation obscure, theories spilling divine zeal throughout remnants lying in shambles. Situated within veiled roots adapted from ordinary artefacts—familiar paradoxes shift. "You know Veil Market moves every full moon, etiquette for concealment cloaked in veils of perception," Penrose muttered, shifting towards misplaced relics beyond investigation. "Fierce linens hiding owner’s true involvement." "Observe the signs beyond mere composition," lisped Quinn tantalizing, lure brooding in deterministic language. "Bounce vectors beyond surviving dilemmas. Complex derivatives sifting beyond your protection, full moon visibility by calculated iteration. These unmistakable signs prove less ordinary.” “Haunted tunnels and old rituals,” Penrose uttered, distracted amidst spectre shouts she caught then released—like fragments lost leaping voids remaining to reveal between misdirection and truth. "Slumber inviting the rupture," Quinn reconciled. "Expressions returned to limitations, a tangible wrestle under disillusionment found tangible in fictive compass correlations too peculiar." Her eyes, vested in supernatural vortex wielding belief, series tangled within narrative intersection. "Now we devise further search, truths hidden beyond wound," echoed Harlow Quinn— Neither darkness remained nor mirrored candles obliterate rifts tautened through calculated motive, severing unsettling incident, truths revealing under narrative in ashes woven through intention.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.692
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount897
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount897
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"echoes"
count1
1
word"standard"
count1
2
word"tangible"
count4
3
word"unravel"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"amidst"
count2
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"spectral"
count3
8
word"determined"
count1
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"shimmered"
count1
12
word"facade"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count1
14
word"tantalizing"
count1
15
word"complex"
count1
16
word"calculated"
count2
17
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"echoes"
1"standard"
2"tangible"
3"unravel"
4"eyebrow"
5"amidst"
6"etched"
7"spectral"
8"determined"
9"echo"
10"weight"
11"shimmered"
12"facade"
13"familiar"
14"tantalizing"
15"complex"
16"calculated"
17"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences51
matches(empty)
86.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences51
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences58
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords882
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
25.78% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount644
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.48
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn16
Penrose8
Tube1
Camden1
Morris2
East1
London1
Veil2
Compass1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Penrose"
3"Morris"
4"Compass"
5"Market"
places
0"East"
1"London"
globalScore0.258
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
86.62% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.134
wordCount882
matches
0"Neither darkness remained nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
61.76% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean33.92
std12.42
cv0.366
sampleLengths
050
129
248
354
438
527
644
735
836
959
1024
1150
1228
1314
1439
1550
1616
1725
1821
1930
2030
2137
2226
2336
2412
2524
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs131
matches
0"were standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences58
ratio0.207
matches
0"Drawn breaths disturbed the heavy dust hanging in the air; it settled on her tongue, along with the metallic taste of blood."
1"Her hand rested on the worn leather watch strapped on her wrist—a tangible connection to DS Morris, absent yet omnipresent."
2"Although skilled, he lacked the instinct for inconsistencies that others had—errors within the minutiae readily apparent to Quinn."
3"Quinn crouched beside what remained of the sacrificial circle—a haphazard collection of bones lay half-buried in sacred salt—a blatant error concealed under grubby blankets."
4"A bone token jutted from the sediment; the entry to the elusive Veil Market hung precariously from her fingertips."
5"Bits and shreds of their investigations—where spectral liabilities deviated tangible disciplines."
6"\"A clue left for the right start,\" she proposed, gesturing mysteriously toward the symbol—darkness transpose, reversed signifying clemency obligated in shortsightedness—a piece of moral play in concealing identity."
7"\"Theories devoid of substance.\" She rolled the compass gracefully, feeling its weight—privy to the details."
8"Glowing arcs shimmered in their pull—a glimpse of spectral passage within current station evidence."
9"\"Shadow rifts?\" his voice expressed gentle unwillingness—to comprehend surmounting flame masked in quelling mundanity."
10"Situated within veiled roots adapted from ordinary artefacts—familiar paradoxes shift."
11"“Haunted tunnels and old rituals,” Penrose uttered, distracted amidst spectre shouts she caught then released—like fragments lost leaping voids remaining to reveal between misdirection and truth."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount659
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount10
adverbRatio0.015174506828528073
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.010622154779969651
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences58
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences58
mean15.21
std6.78
cv0.446
sampleLengths
014
114
222
323
46
532
616
718
820
916
1025
1113
129
1318
1423
158
1613
1717
187
1911
2024
218
224
2316
2424
2519
266
2718
2816
2910
306
3111
327
3328
3414
3512
3615
3712
3819
3911
4014
416
4216
4312
4413
4514
467
4720
4810
4924
100.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.6724137931034483
totalSentences58
uniqueOpeners39
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences49
matches
0"They were standing in the"
1"Her hand rested on the"
2"It caught the torchlight, bouncing"
3"His eyes deliberated over its"
4"Her alertness heightened, absorbed in"
5"Her memory refracted fragments of"
6"she proposed, gesturing mysteriously toward"
7"She rolled the compass gracefully,"
8"his voice expressed gentle unwillingness—to"
9"Her eyes, vested in supernatural"
ratio0.204
41.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount41
totalSentences49
matches
0"The scent of decay threaded"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn descended into"
2"Detective Quinn's colleague, DI Penrose,"
3"They were standing in the"
4"The echoes of distant laughter,"
5"Quinn replied, her eyes adjusting"
6"Her hand rested on the"
7"The watch felt heavier tonight,"
8"Splatters of crimson adorned the"
9"Penrose mused, arching an eyebrow"
10"Quinn gestured to the medium-sized"
11"The face was unfamiliar, etched"
12"It caught the torchlight, bouncing"
13"His eyes deliberated over its"
14"Quinn picked her path over"
15"Her alertness heightened, absorbed in"
16"The dim underpass tasted of"
17"Quinn crouched beside what remained"
18"A bone token jutted from"
19"Penrose stood, tapping his foot"
ratio0.837
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences49
matches
0"Although skilled, he lacked the"
ratio0.02
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Quinn replied, her eyes adjusting to the dim glow"
1"Penrose replied, his torch flaunting through generous beams"
2"Quinn replied, voice continual in its echo"
34.62% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she proposed (propose)"
1"his voice expressed (express)"
2"Penrose muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.231
78.9255%