Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0YGTGA79PNCH90QSVK1BM

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1m 3s
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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oaks parted like sentinels stepping aside. Rory noticed it first — the silence. Not the ordinary quiet of Richmond Park at dusk, where dog walkers called out and cyclists hummed along gravel paths. This was a silence with weight, a held breath, as if the world had pressed its lips together and refused to exhale. "The stones," Nyx murmured, their voice a thread of sound that barely disturbed the air. "We're at the boundary." She looked down. Moss-covered monoliths jutted from the earth in a rough semicircle, weathered into shapes that could almost pass for natural rock formations. Almost. But the spacing was too deliberate, the curve too precise. These weren't boulders dragged here by glaciers. Something had placed them, long ago, with purpose. "Don't step between them yet." Nyx pooled into solidity beside her, their form coalescing from the dim spaces beneath the canopy. Violet light flickered in the hollows where eyes should be. "Once we cross, the rules change." "You keep saying that." Rory shifted the strap of her bag higher on her shoulder. The Heartstone pendant rested against her collarbone, warm — warmer than it should have been this far from any Hel portal. She pressed her palm over it through her jacket. "What rules, specifically?" "Time," Nyx said. "Direction. The assumption that walking back the way you came will bring you to where you started." "Lovely." "The Seer chose this place for a reason. The Grove exists in a fold. Not fully Earth, not fully Fae. Something in between." Rory studied the gap between the two tallest stones. The air there looked wrongnot shimmering exactly, but thick, as though she were peering through antique glass. She'd read about the Veil in the scraps of lore Nyx had shared over the past three weeks, but reading about a metaphysical barrier and standing close enough to feel it hum against her teeth were different animals entirely. She stepped through. The change hit her like plunging into cold water. Every nerve fired at once, a full-body static charge that prickled across her scalp and down her arms. The pendant flared hot against her skin, then settled. Behind her, or what she assumed was behind her, the park vanished. No gradual fade, no dreamlike dissolve. One moment the London skyline crouched beyond the trees. The next — gone. Rory exhaled. Her breath misted, though the air wasn't cold. It wasn't warm either. It was nothing. Temperatureless. "Still with me?" Nyx slipped through the boundary as easily as smoke through a keyhole, their shadow-form rippling once before solidifying. "Define 'with you.'" She turned in a slow circle. The Grove opened before them like the interior of a cathedral designed by something that had never seen a cathedral but understood the concept of reverence. Massive oaks towered overhead, but their bark was the pale gray-white of birch, and their leaves — she squinted — their leaves were silver. Not metaphorically. The canopy caught light from no visible source and threw it back in cool metallic flashes, a thousand tiny mirrors swaying in a breeze she couldn't feel. Beneath her boots, the ground was soft. Not muddy. Not mossy. Just yielding, as if the earth itself had decided to be generous. Wildflowers carpeted every surface that wasn't path or root — bluebells and foxglove and things she had no name for, blossoms with too many petals in colors that sat strangely in her vision. A deep, luminous teal. A red so saturated it looked wet. Something between gold and green that made her eyes water if she stared too long. "Don't fixate on any single flower," Nyx warned. "Some of them are curious. They'll hold your attention longer than you'd like." Rory tore her gaze away from a cluster of spiraling white blooms that had been — she was nearly certain — rotating slowly on their stems. "Noted." They moved deeper. The path, such as it was, wound between the pale oaks in a pattern that felt deliberate without being straight. Rory's sense of direction, usually reliable, began to protest. She'd turned left twice and right once, but her inner compass insisted she'd been walking in a straight line. The pendant pulsed once, a low throb of heat, then went quiet. "Nyx." "Mm." "The flowers are following me." She wasn't imagining it. On either side of the path, blossoms turned on their stems as she passed, the way sunflowers tracked the sun. Except there was no sun here. Just that ambient sourceless glow filtering through the silver canopy. "They're reading you," Nyx said. "Fae flora responds to intent. To emotion. Right now you're a stranger in their space. They're deciding what you are." "And if they decide wrong?" "Then we'll know quickly." Rory gripped the strap of her bag and kept walking. The air smelled green — not like a garden or a forest, but green the way a color might smell if colors had scent. It sat on the back of her tongue, sharp and alive. A sound reached her. Not birdsong, though something in its cadence reminded her of it. A high, repeating note, almost melodic, threading through the trees from somewhere ahead. It rose and fell without pattern, without rhythm, and Rory felt it in her ribs more than her ears. "Is that her?" "No. That's the Grove itself. It sings when someone enters. A kind of announcement." Nyx's form flickered at the edges, their silhouette less defined than usual, as if the Grove's ambient light made it harder for them to hold their shape. "She'll know we're here." The path widened. The oaks drew back, their roots arching above the ground in great silver-gray waves that formed natural archways. Rory ducked under one and stopped. A clearing. Perfectly round. The wildflowers here grew waist-high, a dense meadow of impossible color that swayed in unison, all leaning toward the center as if drawn by a magnet. And at the center — a pool. No larger than a dining table, its surface so still it reflected the silver canopy above with a fidelity that bordered on unsettling. The reflection was sharper than the reality. Clearer. Rory could count individual leaves in the water's surface that she couldn't distinguish overhead. She knelt at its edge. The water — if it was water — was perfectly transparent. She could see the bottom, smooth pale stone, and yet the reflection sat on its surface like paint on glass. Both things at once. Window and mirror. Her own face stared up at her. Blue eyes, black hair tucked behind her ears, the tired set of her jaw she'd been carrying since she left Cardiff. But the reflection's expression didn't quite match hers. It lagged by half a second. She frowned; the reflection frowned a beat later. She tilted her head; the reflection followed, sluggish, as if it were choosing to mirror her rather than compelled to. "Don't touch the water." Nyx's whisper carried a rare edge. Rory pulled her hand back. She hadn't realized she'd been reaching for it. Her fingers hovered an inch above the surface, and the reflection — her reflection — smiled. She hadn't smiled. She stood quickly. Her heart kicked against her ribs. "The pool is a border," Nyx said. "Fae realm on one side, what's left of Earth on ours. Things leak through. Reflections are just the beginning." "Right." Rory wiped her palms on her jeans. The pendant throbbed again, brief and insistent, like a second heartbeat reminding her it was there. She touched it through her jacket. "So where is she? Isolde." A sound behind them. Not a footstep — something lighter. The absence of a footstep. Rory turned. A woman stood at the edge of the clearing where no woman had been a moment before. Silver hair fell to her waist, catching the Grove's light and holding it. Pale lavender eyes regarded them with the calm, measured patience of someone who had been waiting for a very long time and had not found the wait especially inconvenient. She wore a dress the color of storm clouds, belted with something that looked like braided ivy, and her bare feet rested on the carpet of wildflowers without pressing a single stem flat. No impression. No disturbance. As if she weighed nothing at all, or as if the Grove itself chose to bear her up. "The Heartstone brought you." Not a question. Her voice carried the same quality as the Grove's singing — felt as much as heard, settling somewhere behind Rory's sternum. "And the Shadow, still wearing a shape that was never yours." Nyx said nothing. Their violet eyes dimmed slightly. "You're Isolde," Rory said. "I am what remains of her." The Seer's gaze dropped to Rory's chest, where the pendant hid beneath fabric. Something shifted in those lavender eyes — recognition, perhaps, or the echo of it. "You carry a gift from Dymas and you don't even know who gave it to you. That is either very brave or very unwise." "Hasn't been either yet. I'm still deciding." The barest twitch at the corner of Isolde's mouth. Not a smile. The suggestion that a smile had once been considered and declined. "Ask your question, Aurora Carter. But know this — in this Grove, every question answered is a thread pulled. And some tapestries unravel from a single thread." Rory reached into her jacket. Her fingers found the cold weight of the Fae blade — moonsilver, slender, the leaf-shaped dagger Isolde herself had sent through intermediaries two weeks ago. She drew it out and held it flat across both palms, an offering or a piece of evidence, she wasn't sure which. "You sent me this. You sent me the pendant before that, or someone did on your behalf. You've been arranging pieces around me since before I even knew the board existed." Rory met those ancient, lavender eyes. "My question isn't what's happening to the Veil. My question is why you chose me." The flowers leaned closer. The pool behind her rippled once, though nothing had touched it. In the silver canopy above, the sourceless light dimmed by a single, almost imperceptible degree. Isolde tilted her head, and the wildflowers tilted with her. "Now that," the Seer said, "is the first thread worth pulling."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
73.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1704
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count2
2
adverb"perfectly"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count3
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"quickly"
2"perfectly"
3"very"
4"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1704
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"sentinels"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count2
4
word"sense of"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"throb"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"throbbed"
count1
9
word"measured"
count1
10
word"echo"
count1
11
word"unravel"
count1
highlights
0"sentinels"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"flickered"
4"sense of"
5"pulsed"
6"throb"
7"whisper"
8"throbbed"
9"measured"
10"echo"
11"unravel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences130
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1717
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1396
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.29
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Violet1
Heartstone1
Hel1
Rory18
Veil1
Nyx11
London1
Grove5
Cardiff1
Seer2
Isolde3
Fae1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Grove"
3"Seer"
4"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore0.855
windowScore0.833
64.77% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"Something between gold and green that made her"
1"quite match hers"
2"looked like braided ivy, and her bare fee"
83.52% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.165
wordCount1717
matches
0"not shimmering exactly, but thick, as though she were peering through antique glass"
1"not like a garden or a forest, but green the way a color might smell if colors had scent"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences154
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean30.12
std23.46
cv0.779
sampleLengths
07
149
219
350
437
548
620
71
823
967
103
1167
1218
1321
143
156
1679
1782
1821
1927
2063
211
221
235
2440
2525
265
274
2845
2947
303
3145
3227
3382
3443
3570
3610
3732
389
3926
4035
4115
422
4359
4455
4539
468
474
4857
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences130
matches
0"been considered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs224
matches
0"were peering"
1"wasn't imagining"
2"were choosing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences154
ratio0.11
matches
0"Rory noticed it first — the silence."
1"The Heartstone pendant rested against her collarbone, warm — warmer than it should have been this far from any Hel portal."
2"The air there looked wrong — not shimmering exactly, but thick, as though she were peering through antique glass."
3"The next — gone."
4"Massive oaks towered overhead, but their bark was the pale gray-white of birch, and their leaves — she squinted — their leaves were silver."
5"Wildflowers carpeted every surface that wasn't path or root — bluebells and foxglove and things she had no name for, blossoms with too many petals in colors that sat strangely in her vision."
6"Rory tore her gaze away from a cluster of spiraling white blooms that had been — she was nearly certain — rotating slowly on their stems."
7"The air smelled green — not like a garden or a forest, but green the way a color might smell if colors had scent."
8"And at the center — a pool."
9"The water — if it was water — was perfectly transparent."
10"She frowned; the reflection frowned a beat later."
11"She tilted her head; the reflection followed, sluggish, as if it were choosing to mirror her rather than compelled to."
12"Her fingers hovered an inch above the surface, and the reflection — her reflection — smiled."
13"Not a footstep — something lighter."
14"Her voice carried the same quality as the Grove's singing — felt as much as heard, settling somewhere behind Rory's sternum."
15"Something shifted in those lavender eyes — recognition, perhaps, or the echo of it."
16"Her fingers found the cold weight of the Fae blade — moonsilver, slender, the leaf-shaped dagger Isolde herself had sent through intermediaries two weeks ago."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1384
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"great silver-gray waves"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.03901734104046243
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.010115606936416185
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean11.15
std8.68
cv0.778
sampleLengths
07
17
220
322
415
54
63
721
81
910
107
118
1221
1310
146
1515
1621
179
183
193
2017
211
2223
239
2419
2539
263
279
2818
299
3012
316
329
334
342
358
364
373
381
3921
403
416
4226
4324
442
4527
467
472
482
4912
61.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4025974025974026
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners62
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Just yielding, as if the"
1"Just that ambient sourceless glow"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences113
matches
0"She looked down."
1"She pressed her palm over"
2"She'd read about the Veil"
3"She stepped through."
4"Her breath misted, though the"
5"It wasn't warm either."
6"It was nothing."
7"She turned in a slow"
8"They moved deeper."
9"She'd turned left twice and"
10"She wasn't imagining it."
11"It sat on the back"
12"It rose and fell without"
13"She knelt at its edge."
14"She could see the bottom,"
15"Her own face stared up"
16"It lagged by half a"
17"She frowned; the reflection frowned"
18"She tilted her head; the"
19"She hadn't realized she'd been"
ratio0.265
66.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount89
totalSentences113
matches
0"The oaks parted like sentinels"
1"Rory noticed it first —"
2"This was a silence with"
3"Nyx murmured, their voice a"
4"She looked down."
5"These weren't boulders dragged here"
6"Something had placed them, long"
7"Nyx pooled into solidity beside"
8"Violet light flickered in the"
9"Rory shifted the strap of"
10"The Heartstone pendant rested against"
11"She pressed her palm over"
12"Rory studied the gap between"
13"The air there looked wrong"
14"She'd read about the Veil"
15"She stepped through."
16"The change hit her like"
17"Every nerve fired at once,"
18"The pendant flared hot against"
19"The next — gone."
ratio0.788
44.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"As if she weighed nothing"
ratio0.009
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Moss-covered monoliths jutted from the earth in a rough semicircle, weathered into shapes that could almost pass for natural rock formations."
1"The air there looked wrong — not shimmering exactly, but thick, as though she were peering through antique glass."
2"Every nerve fired at once, a full-body static charge that prickled across her scalp and down her arms."
3"The Grove opened before them like the interior of a cathedral designed by something that had never seen a cathedral but understood the concept of reverence."
4"Wildflowers carpeted every surface that wasn't path or root — bluebells and foxglove and things she had no name for, blossoms with too many petals in colors tha…"
5"Rory tore her gaze away from a cluster of spiraling white blooms that had been — she was nearly certain — rotating slowly on their stems."
6"The path, such as it was, wound between the pale oaks in a pattern that felt deliberate without being straight."
7"The oaks drew back, their roots arching above the ground in great silver-gray waves that formed natural archways."
8"The wildflowers here grew waist-high, a dense meadow of impossible color that swayed in unison, all leaning toward the center as if drawn by a magnet."
9"No larger than a dining table, its surface so still it reflected the silver canopy above with a fidelity that bordered on unsettling."
10"She tilted her head; the reflection followed, sluggish, as if it were choosing to mirror her rather than compelled to."
11"Silver hair fell to her waist, catching the Grove's light and holding it."
12"Pale lavender eyes regarded them with the calm, measured patience of someone who had been waiting for a very long time and had not found the wait especially inc…"
13"She wore a dress the color of storm clouds, belted with something that looked like braided ivy, and her bare feet rested on the carpet of wildflowers without pr…"
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx pooled, their form coalescing from the dim spaces beneath the canopy"
1"Nyx slipped, their shadow-form rippling once before solidifying"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.175
leniency0.35
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.1
81.4743%