Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0YK38FH5ZH71HCY8XCK9N

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1m 32s
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$0.005043
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The door opened and Lucien Moreau stepped into Eva’s Flat with the soft stutter of a cane tapping the boards. The ivory handle clicked against the dark floor as he paused, evaluating the room in a single, practiced glance. A plume of curry and ink drifted from the kitchen below, a scent that clung to the walls and the pages stacked like small, stubborn moons across the desk. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, arched his back and hissed once, a silk of menace in the air. Rory stood by the bookshelf, shoulder pressed straight, a silver knife tucked beneath a folded map she’d been tracing with a fingertip. Her eyes had sharpened to blue ice, her combativeness tucked away behind a calm exterior that never quite reached her shoulder-length black hair or the crescent scar on her wrist when she forgot to rein it in. She hadn’t planned on calling Lucien again, not after the night she’d walked away from him with a silence that stung more than any word. Yet here he was, as if the last months of distance had merely paused for a breath. Lucien’s gaze swept the room in its usual, precise sweep—books, scrolls, the cluster of mugs stained with tea and ink, the careful line of order she kept even when the world around her burned. He wore a charcoal suit that clung to every angle with the sort of certainty only a fixer could afford, and the cane he dragged behind him tapped a rhythm into the laminate floor, a metronome against the uncertainty in the room. “I found you,” he said, and the words sat between them like a gun’s barrel, cold and deliberate. Rory did not move. She looked at him as one would study a weapon they’d trained against, not a man they’d once trusted. “You’ve got nerve, Lucien. You didn’t come to talk, you came to tell me something I don’t want to hear.” “The word is practical,” he replied, stepping closer but never quite invading her space. He kept a measured distance, as if the room itself might decide the fate of their conversation. “We have a problem and you’re in a position to help solve it. I am kneecapped without your cooperation, and you are dangerously close to being the only person who can get the job done.” Her mouth quirked, a fraction of a smile that didn’t reach her eyes. “A job. How generous of you to remember I still exist for purposes other than being a convenient bridge between your clients.” He gave a short, dry laugh, the sound almost affectionate in a wry, dangerous way. “I’m not here to charm you into a favour, Rory. I’m here because you won’t survive what’s coming if you pretend we never crossed paths.” His tone held a grave sweetness, the sort of threat that whispers in a ballroom with a blade under the cuff. Ptolemy padded closer to sniff at the edge of Rory’s sleeve, then flicked his tail and settled on the arm of the sofa, eyes widening with cat-sleight and suspicion. The air thickened with the quiet of the room—the soft scribble of a pen, the distant hum of traffic from Brick Lane below, a clock that seemed to keep fair time with the beat of Rory’s heart. Rory inhaled, counting to three in a way that was part habit, part defiance. “You’re not here for small talk. What storm did you conjure this time, Frenchman?” “Storms travel fast in this city,” Lucien replied, his voice smooth, almost tender in its cadence, but edged with the metallic bite of truth. “There’s a man—someone you crossed in Marseille, someone who never forgot. He’s here, and he’s brought his friends for a conversation you’ll find very loud and very short.” Her eyebrows flicked up. “Explain slowly, or I’ll pretend I didn’t hear the first part.” Lucien shifted, the cane now angled into the crook of his arm. A subtle show of power, a reminder that the blade within the cane wasn’t just for show. “The man carries leverage you can’t anticipate. He knows your looped history with me and he means to use it against you. He thinks you’re soft.” “Hardly,” Rory said, and then let the words drop into the room like a blade into a sheath. “Tell me where the leverage sits and I’ll tell you if I care.” Lucien studied her a moment longer, measuring the breath she held. It was the same breath he’d had the night he’d walked away with a promise she hadn’t believed in him to keep. He didn’t push further with words; instead he allowed a silence to settle, the space between two people who knew each other’s fault lines too well. Ptolemy mewed, a soft sound that cut through the tension, and brushed a paw against Rory’s ankle as if urging her to reassess the scene through an animal’s instinct rather than a human mind. Rory bent slightly to stroke the cat’s head, her fingers light but sure, and then faced Lucien again. “Go on,” she said, steady as a drawn bow. “The man isn’t your typical hazard,” Lucien began, voice lowered, almost intimate in the narrow space. “He operates at the level of a whisper—though tonight the whisper grew loud enough to rattle your walls.” The way he spoke made it feel as if he could calibrate danger with a single sentence, like a watchmaker aligning a delicate gear. Rory’s jaw tightened. “You’re asking for help with something you won’t name. That’s the oldest trick in the book, and it never works on me.” “Then listen for once.” He paused, and the room absorbed the pause with a careful stillness. “There’s a job you and I once swapped in Marseille—something we thought was finished. It isn’t finished. He thinks you know where the ledger is, and he’s wrong. But he’ll make you tell him by force if he has to.” Rory’s lips pressed thin, a line of steel and stubborn heat. “If you’ve come to threaten, you’ve brought a mirror and stood before it too long. I don’t break for threats.” She straightened, the small crescent scar catching the light for a heartbeat. “What do you want from me, Lucien? Not your client’s make-believe safety. Not your pity. Tell me plainly.” Lucien’s eyes—one amber, one black—held hers, and he allowed a fraction of a smile to pass over the corners of his mouth, a look that said he understood how little either of them trusted the other, and how much they would both hate themselves if they didn’t at least acknowledge it. “Protection,” he said simply. “And perhaps a line drawn in ink where both of us can see it. We end this thing properly, or we end it with our names in the same obituary.” The cat stretched, then leapt down, as if on cue, and vanished beneath the clutter on the floor behind Rory’s chair. The room felt suddenly smaller, thinner, as if the very walls recognised the tension and chose to tighten around it. “Protection,” Rory echoed, testing the word on her tongue as if it might taste of rust and old blood. “Protection from what, exactly? From whom?” “From your past,” Lucien answered, taking a step closer, careful to keep a respectful distance that also served as a kind of boundary. “From the people who would use your history against you to force your hand. From me, if I’m being perfectly honest, because I’m not sure I’m the best judge of what you want or deserve anymore. But I am the only person who knows where some of the bones hide.” Her breath hitched in a way that did not feel like fear so much as a tremor of longing she would never admit aloud. Longing for what could have been, perhaps; longing for the truth she’d never spoken aloud to anyone, not even to herself. She pressed a knuckle to the scar at her wrist, a reflex born of habit and pain, and looked into his eyes as if trying to read the last five years of their lives in the shape of his irises. “No more secrets,” she said at last, her voice calm, but with a dangerous undertone. “Tell me you’ve found a clean way out. Tell me there’s a tunnel to walk through that doesn’t end in concrete and blood.” Lucien’s mouth twisted again—half grin, half grimace. “There’s a path,” he admitted, almost soft, as if to guard the truth from the room itself. “But it’s not entirely clean. It’s framed in debt and consequences—your debt, my consequences. We’d owe in ways we can’t yet foresee.” She studied him with a steady intensity that could bore through stone. “Then we’ll owe together.” The words came out with a surprising ease, as if she’d rehearsed them in the spaces between her ribs and the pulse of the city outside. A soft, almost affectionate sigh escaped him. “That’s the Rory I remember,” he muttered, as if to himself, the words a private confession that nevertheless found its way to the surface. He looked away for a moment, toward the small, dense collection of maps pinned to the corkboard, each one a possible route through the labyrinth of alliances and betrayals that defined their world. Rory moved a fraction, the chair’s leg scraping softly against the wooden floor. She kept her eyes on him, and the room—the desk, the scattered papers, the ink-stained towels—seemed to lean in closer, as if listening. Then the quiet shattered. A heavy knock—not a knock, more a demand—came from the hall, followed by the dull rasp of a key turning in a lock not far from the door. Three, then two, then one… the sound of something being forced, not opened. Lucien’s hand moved with impossible speed, the cane angling in a way that suggested it concealed far more than a weapon. He stepped between Rory and the doorway, perhaps to shield her, perhaps to prepare for what came next. Rory’s own fingers closed around the edge of the desk, grip tight enough to leave fine marks in the wood. The front door buckled, a violent, sudden tremor that shook the room and displaced the careful order of their carefully curated chaos. The hinges sang with the impact, and two masked figures surged into the flat. The first wore a coat that hung heavy with rain; the second, a blade of cold menace at their throats. Rory moved first, instinct overriding thought. She sprang backward, a half-turn that put the edge of the desk between her and the intruders, eyes flaring with the kind of cold fury that made even Lucien pause. The cat, startled, hissed again from beneath the table and then darted to a safer corner as though seeking the shadow of a familiar plan. Lucien stepped in a controlled, predatory stride, cane sweeping in a practiced arc that could disarm or wound. His voice lowered to a lethal calm. “I suggest you take a breath, gentlemen, and consider what you’re about to do. This isn’t Marseille and this isn’t a barroom brawl.” The man closest to Rory made a calculated move, a swing at the desk leg to topple Rory’s refuge. She ducked, the blade of danger singing in the air where she had been a moment before, and she struck with an economy of violence that did not seek spectacle, only result. The flat answered with the clatter of a mug and a book sliding from its shelf, the echo of metal on wood. The other intruder’s eyes found Rory’s, a mask of cold calculation. He wasn’t here for a conversation. He was here to end something. Rory’s breath steadied, her heartbeat a drum she’d learned to tune to in the quietest moments of a fight. Lucien’s cane flashed, the thin blade hidden within catching the light as he used it like a short spear, aiming for balance rather than blood if he could manage it. “Enough,” he told the men, his voice a cool whisper that carried a weight far heavier than his size. “You’ve made your point.” One of the masked men tried to exploit the moment of distraction, lunging toward Rory. She did not flinch. Her form sharpened, one hand slashing for balance, the other seeking the edge of the intruder’s arm and turning his momentum into a stumble that sent him crashing into the metal side of the desk with a thud. Ptolemy’s tail flicked in a warning whirl and the cat leapt to a higher vantage point, a safety perch near the ceiling, where the cat’s eyes tracked every movement with the precision of a seasoned observer. The room, once just a study of intellect and strategy, had become a battlefield—the narrow space a corridor through which two wills fought for dominion. The second intruder, a shadow with too much aggressive certainty, stepped forward with a hiss of contempt, as if the scene were nothing more than a minor inconvenience. He drew a hidden blade from beneath his coat and flicked it open with a practiced, almost casual ease. The metal sang a cold note in the air, and Rory’s eyes narrowed. Lucien moved again, slower this time, the cane’s blade catching a glint of lamplight. “Stand down,” he said, the word not a request but a command wrapped in a polite finish. He wasn’t bluffing. The first intruder tried a second assault, and this time Rory met his charge with a careful counterstrike, using footwork honed on empty streets and midnight rooftops, the kind of dance that made a person forget they were fighting for their life and remember only the rhythm of the street’s pulse. She drove the man back with a swift, decisive shove that sent him sprawling across the coffee table, papers scattering like startled birds. Lucien’s blade—concealed within the cane—swung with precise, vicious motion, a clean arc that would have ended the threat if he’d meant it to. Instead he knocked the blade from the man’s grip and pressed the cane’s end to the man’s shoulder, a pressure that spoke of containment rather than domination. The intruder’s accomplice hesitated, eyes narrow with the stubborn bravado of a man who knows he’s not quite in control. “Enough,” Rory snapped, voice cutting through the hiss of the struggle like a shard of glass. She grabbed a candleholder from the side table and used it to sweep the air between them, a blunt, practical tool that said, I won’t be a victim tonight. The two masked men paused, caught in the grey line between flight and fight, and for one breath the room thrummed with the possibility of an escape. Then the door itself seemed to snarl with a fresh gust of wind or perhaps the sudden intrusion of a second force—a warning more than a threat. The flat’s windows rattled as something banged against the external wall, a distant, purposeful sound that reminded Rory this was not simply a fight for pride or a scene to be staged for sport. It was a real encounter with real consequences. The larger of the two masked men—taller, with a broad chest that spoke of bulk rather than speed—glanced toward the door as if listening to the world outside. His jaw worked, and Rory could see the tension in the set of his shoulders—the same tension that haunted the underworld crowd over the years: the men who believed they owned nothing and feared nothing because they had nothing to lose. Lucien moved again, a blur of motion, his cane flashing, his voice steady as a held breath. “You do not want to do this here. Take your leave and we’ll part ways with fewer scars.” The other intruder, a man who clearly believed violence would solve the chessboard, took a step closer to Rory, a challenge in his eyes. “She’s not your concern, Frenchman. Move aside.” Rory’s stance shifted, a calculated balance of grace and danger. “He’s right, you know,” she said, addressing the intruders as if they were a pair of reckless apprentices who needed a firm hand. “This is my house, my space. You’re here for something of mine or you’re here to die in a way I don’t understand.” The taller intruder laughed, a cruel sound that rolled through the room. “Let’s test that theory.” Lucien’s gaze flickered to Rory’s—an unspoken exchange that passed between two people who knew all the angles of a game neither could afford to lose. The cane’s blade slipped away to his other hand, and he shifted into a stance that told the room he would not give ground, not even to protect Rory’s pride. Then came a blinding, tearing interruption from the hallway—a car door slam, footsteps pounding on the stairs, a voice shouting something in a language Rory didn’t recognise, muffled behind the door’s thick wood. The noise dragged their attention away from the intruders just long enough for a critical, brutal moment to pass. A rain of sudden movement—shoes scuffing on wood, the splinter of a chair leg—pushed the two masked men into a corner, and Rory found herself with a gloved hand pressing against the intruder’s chest, a casual, clinical control that said she was not here to be trifled with. Lucien’s cane flashed again, a quick flick that knocked the blade from the intruder’s grip and sent it clattering to the other side of the room. The cat hissed again from its perch, a sign of the animal’s awareness that the battle had shifted from human to something larger, something that demanded every ounce of cunning and power available. “Sort this, then,” Rory said, her voice low and dangerous, the calm before a storm. Lucien nodded, the small tilt of his head almost affectionate in its recognition of the fight’s reality. “Take the one on the left,” he advised, and he moved with a speed that belied his refined appearance, stepping to the left and sweeping with a rhythm that forced the intruder to retreat, the other two pressing their advantage, the space narrowing into a trap. For a second, the flat looked almost normal again—the cluttered desk, the maps pinned to the corkboard, the book-laden shelves, the hum of a city that never stopped breathing. Then the air stiffened with the possibility of something worse, as if the house itself held its breath, waiting for the wrong move. Rory used the moment to close the distance with the remaining intruder, her footwork precise, a quiet storm of motion that reminded Lucien of why she scared him a little—the way she could turn a room into a weapon with nothing more than cleverness and a will that wouldn’t bend to fear. “Enough,” a new voice cut through the chaos—clear, sharp, and perfectly layered with danger. The door’s frame trembled as a new figure pressed into the room’s threshold, a silhouette in shadow and intent. The intruders faltered, and Rory turned just as the new arrival stepped into the room’s reduced light, revealing a broad-shouldered form and a face that was as familiar as the back of her own hand, yet unrecognisable because it wore the face of someone who had never stopped moving through a crowd of lies. “Silence,” the new voice commanded, and Rory felt the air tilt—her own memory answering the call rather than the present. The door, which had not fully closed after the force of the last strike, rattled again as another force pressed in from the hallway. The shadow at the threshold shifted, and Rory’s hands tightened around the improvised weapons in reach, the room suddenly charged with a new, heavier charge—threats deeper than the ones she had faced that night, secrets that could burn. Two things happened in close succession: Lucien’s eyes narrowed to amber slits as he assessed the new threat, and Rory’s lips pressed into a thin line as she assessed the situation with a cool, exacting clarity. They could not fight their past and their present at once, but the moment demanded a choice: hold the line or bend it. The new arrival stepped fully into the room, and the intruders, realising who stood behind Rory, hesitated. The taller of the two masked men swallowed, his bravado faltering under the sight of the newcomer—someone who carried not only power but a history that made even the bravest think twice. “Enough,” the newcomer said again, and the room obeyed for a heartbeat longer. Then the tension snapped. The moment stretched. And then Rory acted with a velocity that surprised even her: she grabbed a heavy mug from the edge of the desk and hurled it—not at the intruders, but at the ceiling light, smashing glass and sending a cascade of bright shards raining down, momentarily blinding the attackers. The glare forced them to stumble back, splinters catching in their hair and on the coarse fabric of their jackets. Lucien moved with lethal elegance, his cane sweeping low to trip the taller intruder’s ankle, sending him down into a tangle of limbs and cloth. Another strike—careful, precise—cracked the air between them and sent the blade skittering across the wooden floor, away from reach. The new arrival spoke again, a voice that made Rory’s blood purl with caution and something else, something almost like relief. “Get the door,” they commanded the masked men. The men, smart enough to know when they’d overstayed their welcome, began to retreat, shoving past Lucien and Rory in a desperate, clumsy rout that sent papers fluttering and the cat scattering toward the far corner. In a heartbeat the room was quiet again, save for the soft ticking of the clock and the distant hum of Brick Lane’s life pressing against the thin walls. The intruders’ boots thudded on the stairs, and the air settled into a heavy, sullen stillness that made the room feel suddenly too small for what had just happened. Rory stood very still, listening to their breathing in the hall—one breath, two breaths, a tempo that matched the storm in her chest. She faced the newcomer, who stepped from the shadows with a careful, knowing air, as if every grate and hinge in the flat were a part of an invisible, intimate map they all shared. Lucien lowered the cane and tensed, ready to spring if needed. The newcomer extended a gloved hand in a cautious, almost courtly gesture, then nodded toward Rory with a gravity that demanded respect. “Rory,” the new arrival said, voice calm, deliberate, and more than a little tired. “We were not meant to meet like this, not under these circumstances.” Rory, still catching her breath, her pulse loud in her ears, kept her stance firm and her eyes on the newcomer. “Speak plainly,” she commanded, voice clear, no tremor. “What now?” The newcomer’s eyes flicked to Lucien and then back to Rory. “Now we finish what you started,” they said, a line that carried years of history in its syllables. Then they glanced at the two intruders, who lay still in the room’s scattered shadows, and added, almost as an afterthought, “If you want that ledger, you’ll need all three of us to survive the morning.” A brittle silence settled again, the kind that follows a near-miss that could have turned the page of their lives forever. Rory looked from Lucien’s stern, guarded face to the newcomer’s steady, honest gravity, and then to Ptolemy, who watched from the safety of a high chair by the kitchen counter, tail flicking in a measured, uneasy rhythm. Lucien spoke first, his tone a careful compromise. “We could walk away,” he said, weighing the odds with the cold certainty of someone who had learned to calculate risk in blood and ash. “We could pretend we never heard the name and pretend the night never happened. But we know better. We are not meant to pretend anything.” The newcomer’s smile was small, almost wry, and carried a truth Rory recognised all too well. “No,” they said softly. “We are meant to finish this. All of us. The ledger, the debt, the future. It’s all tangled. The only way out is through.” Rory let the breath she’d been holding slip out, slow and steady. She moved, not toward the door, but toward the desk again, gathering up the scattered papers with a careful, deliberate speed. She snapped a lock of dark hair behind her ear and looked up at Lucien and the newcomer with a fierce, unspoken question in her gaze: Were they all in this together now? Lucien met her look with something like a vow in his amber eye and nodded once, short and precise. The newcomer stepped closer, close enough to feel the weight of their decision pressing into the air between them, then inclined their head just a fraction, a sign of respect and a warning all at once. Ptolemy emerged from his corner, eyes wary but curious, and brushed against Rory’s leg the way a conspirator would brush against a friend, offering a kind of silent reassurance. “We don’t have much choice,” Rory finally said, the words roughened by the night’s violence but clear as a bell. “If this is the path, we walk it together. No more secrets. No more games. We finish this, here, now.” The newcomer’s expression softened just a touch, as if the gravity of the moment finally broke through their armor. “Agreed,” they said, and the word carried with it a weight that meant more than agreement. It meant partnership, even if their pasts burned like brand marks on their souls. Silence settled again, heavy and deliberate, as the three of them reconfigured the room into something that resembled a plan rather than a battlefield. The intruders had fled, the immediate threat dissipating into the night’s murk, but the night still held its own sharp edge, ready to cut if not watched. The cat, tucked beneath the table now, stirred and then settled, ears twitching in time with the soft, uncertain tremor of the old building’s foundations. The city’s distant murmur crept back through the walls like a patient, patient river, and Eva’s Flat, with its books and scrolls and the scent of long nights spent seeking truths others would not touch, breathed a sigh and steadied itself for the next move. Rory took a breath, the air tasting of rain and iron and something else—someone else’s decision, perhaps. She studied the newcomer and then looked at Lucien, who’d remained the calm centre of the storm, the eye in the cyclone of past mistakes they all faced. “Tell me,” Rory said, her voice low but direct, the edge of steel back in it now, “what ledger are we talking about, and who wants it enough to send men with blades into a woman’s flat in the middle of the night?” The newcomer met her gaze, not flinching. “The Marseille ledger,” they said bluntly, as if naming it would make it less real. “It contains every payment, every debt, every betrayal we’ve ever made in this city. And it’s not merely money. It’s leverage. It’s power. It’s the one thing that can force us to the table, whether we want to sit there or not.” Lucien stepped forward, the cane lowering to his side. “Then we’ll find it first.” Rory angled her head, a slow, dangerous smile tugging at the corner of her mouth. “Then we’ll find it first, and we’ll guard it with our lives if we must.” She glanced at the cat again, who observed with a cool intelligence, as if deciding whether to trust these two legged predators or to retreat to the warmth of a corner and wait for morning. The room shifted again as the plan formed, hesitant but necessary. The three of them—two human, one half-demon, all wearing the marks of battles fought in shadowy corridors and on rain-slick streets—breathed as one. The city outside continued to breathe too, a low, perpetual murmur like distant waves against a cliff. And then, in a moment that hung like a held breath, the door shuddered once more, not with the tremor of an intruder but with the certainty that someone, somewhere, would soon push back. The first hint of dawn barely touched the room, but its pale light fell on their faces, revealing the tremor of nerves and the stubborn set of their jaws. The door’s outline hardened. Footsteps paused in the hall. A voice—soft, dangerous, undeniably intimate—drifted through the doorway, as if the house itself wanted to remind them of what they’d chosen to do. “Time’s up,” the voice said, and the words coiled like a snake in the quiet. Then the door gave way with a final, decisive crash, and the hall beyond spilled into the room in a rush of metal, cloth, and a presence that meant violence and consequence all at once. The scene left them with their nerves high and their decisions written in the air, a map of danger and desire, of debts owed and loyalties forged. The others moved with a single breath, the kind of unity that comes only after years of breaking apart and putting back together again. The room buckled into a new rhythm, and Rory, Lucien, and the newcomer stood shoulder to shoulder as the night finally began to tilt toward day, and the ledger—ancient, inevitable, and heavy with consequence—loomed at the centre of their uneasy alliance. Then the world shifted again, a sudden, hard truth that no one had wished to admit aloud: they were in this together now, for better or worse, and whatever came next would be carved into the walls of Eva’s Flat and into the souls they wore like masks. The moment’s tension crackled and stung, and as the first pale streaks of dawn threaded through the blinds, the three of them faced the room as one, waiting not for mercy but for the next move, the next answer, the next breath of air that might save them—or send them all tumbling into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
68.42% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags38
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"he said simply [simply]"
1"the newcomer said again [again]"
2"they said softly [softly]"
3"Rory finally said [finally]"
4"they said bluntly [bluntly]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.559
leniency1
rawRatio0.132
effectiveRatio0.132
86.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount5061
totalAiIsmAdverbs14
found
0
adverb"very"
count4
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count3
4
adverb"perfectly"
count2
5
adverb"softly"
count2
6
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
3"suddenly"
4"perfectly"
5"softly"
6"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
45.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount5061
totalAiIsms55
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"silence"
count5
3
word"measured"
count2
4
word"charm"
count1
5
word"grave"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count5
7
word"reminder"
count1
8
word"tension"
count6
9
word"whisper"
count3
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"intensity"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count3
13
word"shattered"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count2
15
word"calculated"
count2
16
word"echo"
count1
17
word"weight"
count3
18
word"glint"
count1
19
word"dance"
count1
20
word"encounter"
count1
21
word"flickered"
count1
22
word"unspoken"
count2
23
word"footsteps"
count2
24
word"pounding"
count1
25
word"trembled"
count1
26
word"charged"
count1
27
word"calculate"
count1
28
word"warmth"
count1
29
word"desire"
count1
30
word"loomed"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"tracing"
2"silence"
3"measured"
4"charm"
5"grave"
6"flicked"
7"reminder"
8"tension"
9"whisper"
10"echoed"
11"intensity"
12"pulse"
13"shattered"
14"familiar"
15"calculated"
16"echo"
17"weight"
18"glint"
19"dance"
20"encounter"
21"flickered"
22"unspoken"
23"footsteps"
24"pounding"
25"trembled"
26"charged"
27"calculate"
28"warmth"
29"desire"
30"loomed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences198
matches
0"a tremor of longing"
85.14% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences198
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences227
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5010
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions58
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions108
wordCount4178
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.32
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Lucien34
Moreau1
Eva3
Flat3
Rory55
Ptolemy6
Brick2
Lane2
One1
Were1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
4"Ptolemy"
5"One"
6"Were"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore0.842
windowScore0.667
13.39% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences183
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"clock that seemed to keep fair time with the beat of Rory’s heart"
1"as if urging her to reassess the scene through an animal’s instinct rather than a human mind"
2"as if trying to read the last five years of their lives in the shape of his irises"
3"as if listening"
4"as though seeking the shadow of a familiar plan"
5"not quite in control"
6"as if listening to the world outside"
7"something like a vow in his amber eye and no"
8"as if naming it would make it less real"
9"as if deciding whether to trust these two legged predators or to retreat to the warmth of a corner and wait for morning"
80.24% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords1.198
wordCount5010
matches
0"not a request but a command wrapped in a polite finish"
1"not only power but a history"
2"not at the intruders, but at the ceiling light, smashing glass"
3"not toward the door, but toward the desk again, gathering up the scattered papers wit"
4"not with the tremor of an intruder but with the certainty"
5"not for mercy but for the next move, the next answer, the next breath of air"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences227
matches
0"threat that whispers"
1"faced that night"
67.11% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs100
mean50.1
std19.28
cv0.385
sampleLengths
085
1101
276
318
443
566
635
761
866
928
1052
1115
1255
1331
1459
1552
169
1758
1825
1956
2061
2185
2241
2325
2473
2585
2638
2746
2842
2964
3036
314
3241
3359
3456
3561
3648
3773
3842
3953
4057
4161
4260
4334
4474
4570
4645
4754
4842
4969
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences198
matches
0"being forced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs628
matches
0"wasn’t bluffing"
1"were fighting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount38
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences31
totalSentences227
ratio0.137
matches
0"Lucien’s gaze swept the room in its usual, precise sweep—books, scrolls, the cluster of mugs stained with tea and ink, the careful line of order she kept even when the world around her burned."
1"The air thickened with the quiet of the room—the soft scribble of a pen, the distant hum of traffic from Brick Lane below, a clock that seemed to keep fair time with the beat of Rory’s heart."
2"He didn’t push further with words; instead he allowed a silence to settle, the space between two people who knew each other’s fault lines too well."
3"Lucien’s eyes—one amber, one black—held hers, and he allowed a fraction of a smile to pass over the corners of his mouth, a look that said he understood how little either of them trusted the other, and how much they would both hate themselves if they didn’t at least acknowledge it."
4"Longing for what could have been, perhaps; longing for the truth she’d never spoken aloud to anyone, not even to herself."
5"Lucien’s mouth twisted again—half grin, half grimace."
6"She kept her eyes on him, and the room—the desk, the scattered papers, the ink-stained towels—seemed to lean in closer, as if listening."
7"A heavy knock—not a knock, more a demand—came from the hall, followed by the dull rasp of a key turning in a lock not far from the door."
8"The first wore a coat that hung heavy with rain; the second, a blade of cold menace at their throats."
9"The room, once just a study of intellect and strategy, had become a battlefield—the narrow space a corridor through which two wills fought for dominion."
10"Lucien’s blade—concealed within the cane—swung with precise, vicious motion, a clean arc that would have ended the threat if he’d meant it to."
11"Then the door itself seemed to snarl with a fresh gust of wind or perhaps the sudden intrusion of a second force—a warning more than a threat."
12"The larger of the two masked men—taller, with a broad chest that spoke of bulk rather than speed—glanced toward the door as if listening to the world outside."
13"His jaw worked, and Rory could see the tension in the set of his shoulders—the same tension that haunted the underworld crowd over the years: the men who believed they owned nothing and feared nothing because they had nothing to lose."
14"Lucien’s gaze flickered to Rory’s—an unspoken exchange that passed between two people who knew all the angles of a game neither could afford to lose."
15"Then came a blinding, tearing interruption from the hallway—a car door slam, footsteps pounding on the stairs, a voice shouting something in a language Rory didn’t recognise, muffled behind the door’s thick wood."
16"A rain of sudden movement—shoes scuffing on wood, the splinter of a chair leg—pushed the two masked men into a corner, and Rory found herself with a gloved hand pressing against the intruder’s chest, a casual, clinical control that said she was not here to be trifled with."
17"For a second, the flat looked almost normal again—the cluttered desk, the maps pinned to the corkboard, the book-laden shelves, the hum of a city that never stopped breathing."
18"Rory used the moment to close the distance with the remaining intruder, her footwork precise, a quiet storm of motion that reminded Lucien of why she scared him a little—the way she could turn a room into a weapon with nothing more than cleverness and a will that wouldn’t bend to fear."
19"“Enough,” a new voice cut through the chaos—clear, sharp, and perfectly layered with danger."
20"“Silence,” the new voice commanded, and Rory felt the air tilt—her own memory answering the call rather than the present."
21"The shadow at the threshold shifted, and Rory’s hands tightened around the improvised weapons in reach, the room suddenly charged with a new, heavier charge—threats deeper than the ones she had faced that night, secrets that could burn."
22"The taller of the two masked men swallowed, his bravado faltering under the sight of the newcomer—someone who carried not only power but a history that made even the bravest think twice."
23"And then Rory acted with a velocity that surprised even her: she grabbed a heavy mug from the edge of the desk and hurled it—not at the intruders, but at the ceiling light, smashing glass and sending a cascade of bright shards raining down, momentarily blinding the attackers."
24"Another strike—careful, precise—cracked the air between them and sent the blade skittering across the wooden floor, away from reach."
25"Rory stood very still, listening to their breathing in the hall—one breath, two breaths, a tempo that matched the storm in her chest."
26"Rory took a breath, the air tasting of rain and iron and something else—someone else’s decision, perhaps."
27"The three of them—two human, one half-demon, all wearing the marks of battles fought in shadowy corridors and on rain-slick streets—breathed as one."
28"A voice—soft, dangerous, undeniably intimate—drifted through the doorway, as if the house itself wanted to remind them of what they’d chosen to do."
29"The room buckled into a new rhythm, and Rory, Lucien, and the newcomer stood shoulder to shoulder as the night finally began to tilt toward day, and the ledger—ancient, inevitable, and heavy with consequence—loomed at the centre of their uneasy alliance."
30"The moment’s tension crackled and stung, and as the first pale streaks of dawn threaded through the blinds, the three of them faced the room as one, waiting not for mercy but for the next move, the next answer, the next breath of air that might save them—or send them all tumbling into the dark."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3247
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount120
adverbRatio0.036957191253464736
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.005851555281798583
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences227
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences227
mean22.07
std11.63
cv0.527
sampleLengths
020
119
229
317
422
537
625
717
834
942
1018
114
1219
1320
1414
1517
1635
1713
1822
1915
2046
2129
2237
2314
2414
2524
2628
274
2811
2912
3017
3126
3218
3313
3411
3522
3626
3734
3818
399
4016
4142
423
4322
4416
4540
4611
4732
4818
4951
40.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.22466960352422907
totalSentences227
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences197
matches
0"Then the quiet shattered."
1"Instead he knocked the blade"
2"Then the door itself seemed"
3"Then came a blinding, tearing"
4"Then the air stiffened with"
5"Then the tension snapped."
6"Then they glanced at the"
7"Then the door gave way"
8"Then the world shifted again,"
ratio0.046
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount57
totalSentences197
matches
0"Her eyes had sharpened to"
1"She hadn’t planned on calling"
2"He wore a charcoal suit"
3"he said, and the words"
4"She looked at him as"
5"he replied, stepping closer but"
6"He kept a measured distance,"
7"Her mouth quirked, a fraction"
8"He gave a short, dry"
9"His tone held a grave"
10"Her eyebrows flicked up."
11"It was the same breath"
12"He didn’t push further with"
13"she said, steady as a"
14"He paused, and the room"
15"She straightened, the small crescent"
16"he said simply"
17"Her breath hitched in a"
18"She pressed a knuckle to"
19"she said at last, her"
ratio0.289
8.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount178
totalSentences197
matches
0"The door opened and Lucien"
1"The ivory handle clicked against"
2"A plume of curry and"
3"Ptolemy, the tabby cat, arched"
4"Rory stood by the bookshelf,"
5"Her eyes had sharpened to"
6"She hadn’t planned on calling"
7"Lucien’s gaze swept the room"
8"He wore a charcoal suit"
9"he said, and the words"
10"Rory did not move."
11"She looked at him as"
12"he replied, stepping closer but"
13"He kept a measured distance,"
14"Her mouth quirked, a fraction"
15"He gave a short, dry"
16"His tone held a grave"
17"Ptolemy padded closer to sniff"
18"The air thickened with the"
19"Rory inhaled, counting to three"
ratio0.904
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences197
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences136
technicalSentenceCount44
matches
0"He wore a charcoal suit that clung to every angle with the sort of certainty only a fixer could afford, and the cane he dragged behind him tapped a rhythm into …"
1"Her mouth quirked, a fraction of a smile that didn’t reach her eyes."
2"The air thickened with the quiet of the room—the soft scribble of a pen, the distant hum of traffic from Brick Lane below, a clock that seemed to keep fair time…"
3"Rory inhaled, counting to three in a way that was part habit, part defiance."
4"Lucien’s eyes—one amber, one black—held hers, and he allowed a fraction of a smile to pass over the corners of his mouth, a look that said he understood how lit…"
5"The room felt suddenly smaller, thinner, as if the very walls recognised the tension and chose to tighten around it."
6"She pressed a knuckle to the scar at her wrist, a reflex born of habit and pain, and looked into his eyes as if trying to read the last five years of their live…"
7"He looked away for a moment, toward the small, dense collection of maps pinned to the corkboard, each one a possible route through the labyrinth of alliances an…"
8"She kept her eyes on him, and the room—the desk, the scattered papers, the ink-stained towels—seemed to lean in closer, as if listening."
9"The front door buckled, a violent, sudden tremor that shook the room and displaced the careful order of their carefully curated chaos."
10"She sprang backward, a half-turn that put the edge of the desk between her and the intruders, eyes flaring with the kind of cold fury that made even Lucien paus…"
11"The cat, startled, hissed again from beneath the table and then darted to a safer corner as though seeking the shadow of a familiar plan."
12"Lucien stepped in a controlled, predatory stride, cane sweeping in a practiced arc that could disarm or wound."
13"She ducked, the blade of danger singing in the air where she had been a moment before, and she struck with an economy of violence that did not seek spectacle, o…"
14"Her form sharpened, one hand slashing for balance, the other seeking the edge of the intruder’s arm and turning his momentum into a stumble that sent him crashi…"
15"The second intruder, a shadow with too much aggressive certainty, stepped forward with a hiss of contempt, as if the scene were nothing more than a minor inconv…"
16"The first intruder tried a second assault, and this time Rory met his charge with a careful counterstrike, using footwork honed on empty streets and midnight ro…"
17"She drove the man back with a swift, decisive shove that sent him sprawling across the coffee table, papers scattering like startled birds."
18"Lucien’s blade—concealed within the cane—swung with precise, vicious motion, a clean arc that would have ended the threat if he’d meant it to."
19"The intruder’s accomplice hesitated, eyes narrow with the stubborn bravado of a man who knows he’s not quite in control."
20"She grabbed a candleholder from the side table and used it to sweep the air between them, a blunt, practical tool that said, I won’t be a victim tonight."
21"The flat’s windows rattled as something banged against the external wall, a distant, purposeful sound that reminded Rory this was not simply a fight for pride o…"
22"The larger of the two masked men—taller, with a broad chest that spoke of bulk rather than speed—glanced toward the door as if listening to the world outside."
23"His jaw worked, and Rory could see the tension in the set of his shoulders—the same tension that haunted the underworld crowd over the years: the men who believ…"
24"A rain of sudden movement—shoes scuffing on wood, the splinter of a chair leg—pushed the two masked men into a corner, and Rory found herself with a gloved hand…"
25"Lucien’s cane flashed again, a quick flick that knocked the blade from the intruder’s grip and sent it clattering to the other side of the room."
26"The cat hissed again from its perch, a sign of the animal’s awareness that the battle had shifted from human to something larger, something that demanded every …"
27"Then the air stiffened with the possibility of something worse, as if the house itself held its breath, waiting for the wrong move."
28"Rory used the moment to close the distance with the remaining intruder, her footwork precise, a quiet storm of motion that reminded Lucien of why she scared him…"
29"The intruders faltered, and Rory turned just as the new arrival stepped into the room’s reduced light, revealing a broad-shouldered form and a face that was as …"
30"The shadow at the threshold shifted, and Rory’s hands tightened around the improvised weapons in reach, the room suddenly charged with a new, heavier charge—thr…"
31"The taller of the two masked men swallowed, his bravado faltering under the sight of the newcomer—someone who carried not only power but a history that made eve…"
32"And then Rory acted with a velocity that surprised even her: she grabbed a heavy mug from the edge of the desk and hurled it—not at the intruders, but at the ce…"
33"The new arrival spoke again, a voice that made Rory’s blood purl with caution and something else, something almost like relief."
34"The men, smart enough to know when they’d overstayed their welcome, began to retreat, shoving past Lucien and Rory in a desperate, clumsy rout that sent papers …"
35"Rory stood very still, listening to their breathing in the hall—one breath, two breaths, a tempo that matched the storm in her chest."
36"She faced the newcomer, who stepped from the shadows with a careful, knowing air, as if every grate and hinge in the flat were a part of an invisible, intimate …"
37"Rory looked from Lucien’s stern, guarded face to the newcomer’s steady, honest gravity, and then to Ptolemy, who watched from the safety of a high chair by the …"
38"Silence settled again, heavy and deliberate, as the three of them reconfigured the room into something that resembled a plan rather than a battlefield."
39"And then, in a moment that hung like a held breath, the door shuddered once more, not with the tremor of an intruder but with the certainty that someone, somewh…"
40"A voice—soft, dangerous, undeniably intimate—drifted through the doorway, as if the house itself wanted to remind them of what they’d chosen to do."
41"Then the door gave way with a final, decisive crash, and the hall beyond spilled into the room in a rush of metal, cloth, and a presence that meant violence and…"
42"The others moved with a single breath, the kind of unity that comes only after years of breaking apart and putting back together again."
43"The moment’s tension crackled and stung, and as the first pale streaks of dawn threaded through the blinds, the three of them faced the room as one, waiting not…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags38
uselessAdditionCount13
matches
0"he said, and the words sat between them like a gun’s barrel, cold and deliberate"
1"Lucien began, voice lowered, almost intimate in the narrow space"
2"He paused, and the room absorbed the pause with a careful stillness"
3"she said, her voice calm, but with a dangerous undertone"
4"The words came out, as if she’d rehearsed them in the spaces between her ribs and the pulse of the city outside"
5"he muttered, as if to himself, the words a private confession that nevertheless found its way to the surface"
6"Rory said, her voice low and dangerous, the calm before a storm"
7"the newcomer said again, and the room obeyed for a heartbeat longer"
8"the new arrival said, voice calm, deliberate, and more than a little tired"
9"she commanded, voice clear, no tremor"
10"they said, and the word carried with it a weight that meant more than agreement"
11"they said bluntly, as if naming it would make it less real"
12"the voice said, and the words coiled like a snake in the quiet"
76.47% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags27
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"The way he spoke (speak)"
1"he admitted (admit)"
2"he muttered (mutter)"
3"Rory snapped (snap)"
4"he advised (advise)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.397
leniency0.794
rawRatio0.185
effectiveRatio0.147
71.2600%