Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0YPSQ1855RGSE39VB79G9

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39.1s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open, and Rory’s breath caught in her throat. There he stood, golden hair slicked back, a tailored charcoal suit clinging to his tall frame like a guardian of his scattered secrets. Lucien Moreau. “What are you doing here?” She managed, though her pulse quickened, a traitorous flutter stirring in her chest. The last time she had seen him, words had been exchanged like blades—sharp, unforgiving. “Dramatic, as always.” Lucien’s voice dripped with amusement, but the intensity of his mismatched eyes—one amber, one black—belied his playful tone. He remained at the threshold, framed by the grime smeared on the corridor wall and the cacophony of muffled laughter from the curry house below. Stepping aside, Rory felt the surge of memories claw at her resolve, an uncomfortable reminder of their shared past. Inviting him in felt like admitting defeat, but she knew denying him entry would only ignite their unfinished business into flames once more. “I didn’t invite you in,” she said, forcing confidence into her words as he shifted slightly, his stance relaxed but dangerous, like a coiled serpent. “I’ll take my chances.” He stepped over the threshold, his movements fluid and assured. Immediately, Rory’s modest flat felt smaller, filled with an unwelcome tension that crackled in the air between them. The book-lined walls—cluttered with research notes and half-finished drinks—felt like eavesdroppers, privy to the emotional storm brewing in the cramped space. The warm smell of spices from below melded with the more pungent aromas of her late-night experiments: sugar and flour, the remnants of stubborn baking trials. “Is this a good time, or should I come back later?” he quipped, lips twitching in a smirk that once made her stomach flutter, now only ignited irritation. She folded her arms, trying to mask her racing heart. “You don’t just drop by unannounced. You know that.” “And why do you think I’m here?” His voice lowered, probing her caution with that enticing French lilt. Rory narrowed her gaze. “To make a point? To toy with my misery?” “Perhaps it’s for my own amusement.” He stepped closer, crossing the tiny room and inching toward her workspace, his cane clicking against the floorboards with each purposeful stride. “Your books, your notes… they always fascinated me. Probably more than you.” “Just as you fascinated me,” she returned, challenging his gaze. “But then you chose to play the hero all on your own, didn’t you?” “Such bitterness.” The flicker of genuine pain cut through his amusement, but he quickly masked it, a faint smile recovering its place on his lips. “Can’t a man see a friend?” “Friend?” She scoffed, disbelief lacing the word. “We were never just friends, Lucien.” “No, we were not,” he conceded, an edge creeping back into his tone, the air thick with unspoken desires and past regrets. “The date you cancelled... It was my mistake to assume—” “Stop.” Rory held her palm up, cutting off the ensuing spiral of repurposed resentments, each word escalating the tension. She backed away, her heart fluttering in rhythm with the rapid clatter from below, a taxi honking somewhere in the distorted reality of Brick Lane. “Why are you really here?” “Honestly?” he leaned against a stack of books, the casual posture belying the seriousness of his intent. “I need your insight on a situation.” “Insight? You came to me for insight?” Sharp incredulity punctured her voice. “Regarding what? Your next dubious business venture? Or perhaps another of your supernatural escapades?” “Look, I wouldn’t be here if I had others to trust,” he said, his tone hardening. “You know I deal with unsavoury people, Rory. I wouldn’t have come if—” “—if you had a choice?” He took a step closer, the distance closing as he leaned forward, like gravity drawing them together. “If it were easy, you wouldn’t be so defensive.” Rory exhaled, frustration battling with the magnetic pull she felt every time he lingered close. She prided herself on her cool-headedness, but the warmth that radiated from him encircled her, tightening its grip. “Why would I trust you after everything?” “Because I came here,” he shot back, his voice dropping further. “I came here to ask for your help. To keep you safe.” A bitter laugh escaped her lips. “You think after your—” “After my what?” He interrupted, fury edging into his voice, mismatched eyes flashing with intensity. “After my failure to protect you? Or to stay silent, as I should have? What do you want me to say?” They stood mere inches apart now, a palpable charge blanketing the space between them, echoing with longing and hurt. Rory ached for distance yet yearned for him—to understand the man behind the facade of confidence, to see through his ambitions, past the mask of a well-dressed fixer. “Just….” Her voice wavered, softened against the biting reality of their history. “Why did you wait so long to come?” “Perhaps I was a coward.” His shoulders slumped slightly, vulnerability slipping through the cracks of his elegance. “I thought giving you space was the right move.” “Space?” Disbelief laced her tone again. “You don’t get to decide what I needed.” “Maybe I should have asked first.” Rory glanced away, fighting the rush of emotion that threatened to overcome her. The memories crashed in—first dates filled with sparks, heated arguments laced with yearning, nights tangled in sheets. It all felt so vivid, almost cruel against the tension now hanging like a fog. “Why should I help you now?” “Because you’re the best person for it.” A note of urgency crept into his voice. “Rory, I know you better than most. I trust your instincts. This isn’t just business; it’s dangerous. And you’re the only one I can trust.” “You barely trusted me then.” She crossed her arms tighter, shielding herself from the intensity of his gaze. “What makes this different?” He stepped closer still, filling the space until they almost touched, igniting sparks of anticipation that left her breathless. “What if I said it’s different because I cannot shake the feeling of what we could have been? Or what we still could be?” The weight of those words hung heavy between them. Rory’s heart thundered, a chaotic cacophony that threatened to drown the reason lurking in the recesses of her mind. Could they be anything but a tangle of hurt? “You can’t come here and throw that at me,” she whispered, a mix of desperation and guilt twisting in her gut. “Not when you still haven’t owned up to your decisions.” “I know I’ve made mistakes,” he replied, his voice calm but insistent. “But I’m trying to rectify them. Please. I need you. We need to discuss this.” The door behind him caught the breath of an unseen breeze, a reminder of the world outside, of choices and consequences. She didn’t see an escape route ahead; all she could focus on was the tempest unfurling before her, swirling with unsaid emotions. “Fine,” she finally said, voice barely above a whisper. “But this doesn’t mean I forgive you.” “Forgiveness isn’t my goal.” His smile faded, sincerity woven into his plea. “Let’s just get through this together. Please.” Before she could answer, an abrupt crash echoed from the hallway, followed by an angry shout. “Oi! Market’s closed!” A guard’s voice barked through the cracks in the thin walls, unwittingly interrupting the charged atmosphere between them. Rory shifted, her heart racing anew. Danger loomed larger than it had moments ago, and the world outside her flat stirred, reminding her life never paused for broken hearts or neglected promises. “I suppose we should—” “We should see what that's about,” Lucien finished, straightening, the guarded air returning to his features. But before they could move, a figure shoved into the doorway behind him, eyes corrupt with fury. “Moreau! You don’t get to hide from me!” Tension erupted anew, a storm unfurling right in Rory’s cramped space, leaving her breathless and at the edge of conflict. “Shit,” Lucien muttered, shifting into a protective stance before Rory. “This just went sideways.” And right then, she realised—this was only the beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"His shoulders slumped slightly [slightly]"
1"she finally said [finally]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.459
leniency0.918
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.066
81.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1358
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"really"
3"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1358
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"quickened"
count1
2
word"intensity"
count3
3
word"cacophony"
count2
4
word"resolve"
count1
5
word"reminder"
count2
6
word"tension"
count4
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"racing"
count2
9
word"lilt"
count1
10
word"flicker"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count1
12
word"magnetic"
count1
13
word"warmth"
count1
14
word"palpable"
count1
15
word"echoing"
count1
16
word"facade"
count1
17
word"wavered"
count1
18
word"yearning"
count1
19
word"anticipation"
count1
20
word"weight"
count1
21
word"thundered"
count1
22
word"chaotic"
count1
23
word"whisper"
count1
24
word"echoed"
count1
25
word"charged"
count1
26
word"loomed"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"quickened"
2"intensity"
3"cacophony"
4"resolve"
5"reminder"
6"tension"
7"stomach"
8"racing"
9"lilt"
10"flicker"
11"unspoken"
12"magnetic"
13"warmth"
14"palpable"
15"echoing"
16"facade"
17"wavered"
18"yearning"
19"anticipation"
20"weight"
21"thundered"
22"chaotic"
23"whisper"
24"echoed"
25"charged"
26"loomed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"The weight of those words"
98.54% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences63
matches
0"g with longing"
1"t with fury"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences63
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences95
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1345
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.99% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount909
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.32
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory12
Moreau1
Immediately1
French1
Brick1
Lane1
Sharp1
Disbelief1
Lucien4
persons
0"Rory"
1"Moreau"
2"Disbelief"
3"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore0.84
windowScore1
62.28% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like admitting defeat, but she kne"
1"felt like eavesdroppers, privy to the e"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1345
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
91.79% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean26.37
std12.43
cv0.471
sampleLengths
036
132
246
342
425
532
647
728
819
918
1013
1140
1224
1331
1413
1532
1649
1724
1826
1929
205
2126
2240
2323
2410
2536
2647
2720
2826
2914
306
3145
326
3340
3422
3543
3637
3731
3827
3943
4016
4119
4216
4321
4432
454
4633
478
4820
4914
99.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences63
matches
0"been exchanged"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs169
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences95
ratio0.084
matches
0"The last time she had seen him, words had been exchanged like blades—sharp, unforgiving."
1"“Dramatic, as always.” Lucien’s voice dripped with amusement, but the intensity of his mismatched eyes—one amber, one black—belied his playful tone."
2"The book-lined walls—cluttered with research notes and half-finished drinks—felt like eavesdroppers, privy to the emotional storm brewing in the cramped space."
3"Rory ached for distance yet yearned for him—to understand the man behind the facade of confidence, to see through his ambitions, past the mask of a well-dressed fixer."
4"The memories crashed in—first dates filled with sparks, heated arguments laced with yearning, nights tangled in sheets."
5"“Rory, I know you better than most. I trust your instincts. This isn’t just business; it’s dangerous. And you’re the only one I can trust.”"
6"She didn’t see an escape route ahead; all she could focus on was the tempest unfurling before her, swirling with unsaid emotions."
7"And right then, she realised—this was only the beginning."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount922
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.0368763557483731
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.010845986984815618
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences95
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences95
mean14.16
std6.8
cv0.481
sampleLengths
011
123
22
318
414
521
625
719
823
925
1014
1118
1221
1326
1428
1510
169
1718
184
199
2028
2112
2210
2314
2425
256
267
276
2822
2910
3019
3125
325
3317
347
3512
3614
3716
3813
395
4017
419
4215
4318
447
4511
4612
476
484
4915
86.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5368421052631579
totalSentences95
uniqueOpeners51
53.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"Immediately, Rory’s modest flat felt"
ratio0.016
32.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences62
matches
0"She managed, though her pulse"
1"He remained at the threshold,"
2"she said, forcing confidence into"
3"He stepped over the threshold,"
4"he quipped, lips twitching in"
5"She folded her arms, trying"
6"His voice lowered, probing her"
7"He stepped closer, crossing the"
8"she returned, challenging his gaze"
9"She scoffed, disbelief lacing the"
10"he conceded, an edge creeping"
11"She backed away, her heart"
12"he leaned against a stack"
13"he said, his tone hardening"
14"He took a step closer,"
15"She prided herself on her"
16"he shot back, his voice"
17"He interrupted, fury edging into"
18"They stood mere inches apart"
19"Her voice wavered, softened against"
ratio0.468
24.52% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences62
matches
0"The door swung open, and"
1"There he stood, golden hair"
2"She managed, though her pulse"
3"The last time she had"
4"Lucien’s voice dripped with amusement,"
5"He remained at the threshold,"
6"she said, forcing confidence into"
7"He stepped over the threshold,"
8"The book-lined walls—cluttered with research"
9"The warm smell of spices"
10"he quipped, lips twitching in"
11"She folded her arms, trying"
12"His voice lowered, probing her"
13"Rory narrowed her gaze."
14"He stepped closer, crossing the"
15"she returned, challenging his gaze"
16"The flicker of genuine pain"
17"She scoffed, disbelief lacing the"
18"he conceded, an edge creeping"
19"Rory held her palm up,"
ratio0.871
80.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"Before she could answer, an"
ratio0.016
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Immediately, Rory’s modest flat felt smaller, filled with an unwelcome tension that crackled in the air between them."
1"She folded her arms, trying to mask her racing heart."
2"She backed away, her heart fluttering in rhythm with the rapid clatter from below, a taxi honking somewhere in the distorted reality of Brick Lane."
3"She prided herself on her cool-headedness, but the warmth that radiated from him encircled her, tightening its grip."
4"He stepped closer still, filling the space until they almost touched, igniting sparks of anticipation that left her breathless."
5"Rory’s heart thundered, a chaotic cacophony that threatened to drown the reason lurking in the recesses of her mind."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"She managed, though her pulse quickened, a traitorous flutter stirring in her chest"
1"She scoffed, disbelief lacing the word"
2"he leaned, the casual posture belying the seriousness of his intent"
3"he said, his tone hardening"
4"he shot back, his voice dropping further"
5"He interrupted, fury edging into his voice, mismatched eyes flashing with intensity"
6"His shoulders slumped slightly, vulnerability slipping through the cracks of his elegance"
7"she whispered, a mix of desperation and guilt twisting in her gut"
8"he replied, his voice calm but insistent"
9"she finally said, voice barely above a whisper"
51.64% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"he quipped (quip)"
1"he conceded (concede)"
2"He interrupted (interrupt)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
4"A guard’s voice barked (bark)"
5"Lucien muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.164
leniency0.328
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.197
74.9226%