Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT10ZM3MK4Z4KAAH7G19DXJ

Run Details

Model:
GPT-4.1
Duration:
39.1s
Cost:
$0.017480
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The second deadbolt slid free, echoing like a judge’s gavel crack. Aurora braced herself, left fist clenched behind the warped veneer of Eva’s front door, the faintest smudge of curry drifting up from the restaurant below. She’d barely managed to tug a loose strand of hair behind her ear before she unlocked the last bolt. The door swung back. Silhouette in the hall, face hidden by the shallow shadow cast by peeling fluorescents. The strange burn of amber and black stared down. Lucien’s mouth curled slow, half amusement, half something sharper. “Bonsoir, Malphora.” She almost slammed the door. Reflexes intervened. Her body blocked the entrance, posture squared, chin cocked, blue eyes narrowed until her scar pinched white on her wrist. “Did you forget how to use a phone, or is trespassing the Parisian hello these days?” He stepped close, danger and expensive cologne in equal measure. Impeccable suit tonight, pressed to an edge, pin perfect. Ivory-handled cane braced in his right hand. “You must grant me pardon, chérie. The phone loses its appeal after midnight, even for old friends.” “Didn’t realise we were still friends.” He laughed, brief and bitter. The scent of rain-wet stones, the echo of old Marseille alleys in the way he leaned near, eyes flickering over her face as if cataloguing the changes, new and old. No invitation needed. He nudged the threshold, ignored her arm, stepped inside with that loping confidence that never learned how to second-guess itself. Aurora let the door thud behind him, safety drowned in the scrape of her trainers against battered floorboards. “Where’s Eva?” His accent wrapped the name in velvet. “Out. Probably neck-deep in a folktale or translating another demon shopping list for some sod at the V&A.” He paused beside the sofa, gaze catching on the tabby sprawled affronted among papers, jazz records and an old cup filled with uncategorised coins. Ptolemy lifted his head, tail twitching. Lucien met the cat’s eyes, something respectful in his nod. “It appears we are alone, then.” “That was your plan?” “My plan.” He let the words settle, gaze softening on the edges. “No. I make no habit of ambushing women I left at railway stations, if that is your accusation.” “Not usually?” She kept her stance wide, set her rucksack on the table rather than the usual peg. Nothing here—no blanket, no half-finished mug, nothing to soften the angles. She felt ridiculous, bracing herself in her own friend’s living room. His eyes never left her. “I have work.” She pressed a crumpled receipt between her thumb and forefinger. “If you broke one of Eva’s wards, she’ll know. You could’ve at least sent a warning. Or a bribe, you’re fond of those.” A flicker passed through him—a wry admission, not quite apology. “I could have sent both. What is owed, Malphora, is not easily measured in flowers and apologies.” She stared at him, thumbing her scar absently. “Stop using my old name. You know I hate it.” A muscle ticked in his jaw. “Habit. And a failing one.” Pressure hung between them, unsaid histories blooming in shadow. The night Lucien disappeared played elastic in her memory—his hand on her shoulder at St Pancras, warm breath against her ear, promise strung tight and then snipped in one unclean motion. He eased onto the edge of the desk littered with Eva’s notes. Papers crinkled. He made no apology for the trespass. “You didn’t answer my letter.” He rolled one cuff, gaze fixing on her. “Or the parcel.” Her mouth tasted like burnt black tea. “You sent them to Silas’s bar. You think he gives me my post? Most of it ends up kindling. Or stashed behind the whisky, depending which mood he’s in.” Lucien’s features shifted—something pained, honest. “Should’ve come sooner,” he said at last. A draught whistled, set the window to rattling. Aurora folded her arms across her chest. “What are you after, Lucien? If it’s information—” “No bait.” He cut her off, voice lower. “Not tonight. I need your help.” “Mine.” She cocked an eyebrow. “London full of witches, and you pick me.” “You think yourself so small.” His left hand traced the etching of his cane’s handle, absently fondling the ivory wolf’s head. “You never were. Your mind is the sharpest tool in this warren of fools. I trust you, Aurora.” The flattery scraped raw over old wound. “I stopped trusting you when you vanished.” She stepped closer, shouldering aside a pile of journals. “Don’t tell me you just got lost. You’re not the sort.” His exhale came tight. “No. I ran. Not from you.” Liar. He pulled a black envelope from his inside pocket. Wax crest smoked and fractured. Demon sigil, Avaros—brutal, angular, unmistakable even in the low light. “I have made a mistake, chérie.” She plucked the envelope, careful to avoid his fingers. The wax crumbled at her touch, smearing red on her palm. She recognised the family crest; had traced it years ago with her tongue. “You brought trouble through Eva’s wards. If her cat so much as hisses at you, you’re feeding him for a week.” “Just open it.” She slid a nail under the seal. The paper felt old, smooth—luxurious, like nothing London ever produced. She scanned the looping, precise script. Saw the signature. Human ink gone rusty with ambition. “You made a pact,” she said, voice flat. “A binding one.” He nodded. “With the wrong heir. I attempted to do my duty. I failed. Now I follow their leash, and soon they’ll pull it tight. I need you, Aurora. You and your unique cleverness. Once more, for the devil’s sake.” She kept the letter high where he could not snatch it, heart pounding. The words blurred, shivering with the echo of memory. He straightened, every line in his suit sharpening. “Say you will. If not for me, then for the disaster to come.” “You don’t get to invoke disasters like that.” Her voice shook. Rage and longing tangled, left her breathless. “You left me holding the bag. Got me mixed up with all your Avaros business. Then vanished before the scarring.” The air seemed to pulse between them. He stepped forward, slow, dangerous. “I regret it. Every minute. Anything I had with you survives in that regret. But I require your help.” She stared at the fractured wax in her hand, then at his face—French bones, demon blood, London bitterness. Her skin smarted with the urge to touch him and the memory of doing just that. Lucien’s own cool carefully cracked, the glint of hope lost in a storm. He looked at her the way only men who have been forgiven hope to be despised. Ptolemy leapt from the sofa, tail bristling. A shadow passed over the frosted window pane. Slender hand. Nails too dark to belong to anyone living. Someone rattled the glass, then knocked—once, deliberate, like a summons. Lucien’s head snapped round. Aurora crossed the distance in three steps, snatched her phone, hissed at Ptolemy to run. Lucien reached his cane’s handle, eyes flickering with unholy gold. Someone began to chant in the corridor. Words slid cold down the hall, thick with a language and timbre that didn’t belong in East London. Lucien’s lips barely moved. “They found me.” Aurora jammed the letter in her pocket, body against his—old muscle memory, old comfort, old burning hurt and a spiral of longing. He shielded her just as the door buckled, wards hissing, Eva’s defences flaring neutral blue. Steel rasped. Shadows pressed near. He whispered — “Aurora, run.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1265
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1265
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"echo"
count2
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"eyebrow"
count1
7
word"traced"
count2
8
word"etching"
count1
9
word"fractured"
count2
10
word"scanned"
count1
11
word"pounding"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"glint"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"perfect"
2"echo"
3"velvet"
4"flicker"
5"measured"
6"eyebrow"
7"traced"
8"etching"
9"fractured"
10"scanned"
11"pounding"
12"pulse"
13"glint"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"fist clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
94.70% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences89
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"seemed to"
2"began to"
97.65% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0.008
matches
0"“Out. Probably neck-deep in a folktale or translating another demon shopping list for some sod at the V&A.”"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1252
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount849
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.94
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva3
Marseille1
Lucien8
St1
Pancras1
Avaros1
London3
Rage1
French1
Ptolemy3
East1
Aurora5
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Marseille"
1"St"
2"Pancras"
3"London"
4"East"
globalScore1
windowScore1
34.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if cataloguing the changes, new and old"
1"not quite apology"
2"tasted like burnt black tea"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1252
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean18.97
std13.4
cv0.707
sampleLengths
011
144
236
32
427
516
626
717
86
958
1018
119
1218
1340
146
154
1630
1740
185
1936
2010
2117
2218
236
245
2540
2621
2716
2836
295
307
3123
3214
3313
3439
357
3627
374
386
3925
406
4133
4221
433
4432
4511
462
4738
4822
498
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences89
matches
0"been forgiven"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs162
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences119
ratio0.092
matches
0"Nothing here—no blanket, no half-finished mug, nothing to soften the angles."
1"A flicker passed through him—a wry admission, not quite apology."
2"The night Lucien disappeared played elastic in her memory—his hand on her shoulder at St Pancras, warm breath against her ear, promise strung tight and then snipped in one unclean motion."
3"Lucien’s features shifted—something pained, honest."
4"Demon sigil, Avaros—brutal, angular, unmistakable even in the low light."
5"She recognised the family crest; had traced it years ago with her tongue."
6"The paper felt old, smooth—luxurious, like nothing London ever produced."
7"She stared at the fractured wax in her hand, then at his face—French bones, demon blood, London bitterness."
8"Someone rattled the glass, then knocked—once, deliberate, like a summons."
9"Aurora jammed the letter in her pocket, body against his—old muscle memory, old comfort, old burning hurt and a spiral of longing."
10"He whispered —"
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount861
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"raw over old wound."
1"old, smooth—luxurious, like"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.024390243902439025
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009291521486643438
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean10.52
std6.98
cv0.664
sampleLengths
011
125
219
34
414
59
69
72
85
92
1020
1116
1210
139
147
1517
166
175
1830
193
2020
2118
229
2318
2424
256
2610
276
284
2912
3018
3118
3211
3311
345
3513
3623
3710
3817
398
4010
416
425
439
4431
4512
462
477
4813
493
73.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.44537815126050423
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners53
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences83
matches
0"She’d barely managed to tug"
1"She almost slammed the door."
2"Her body blocked the entrance,"
3"He stepped close, danger and"
4"He laughed, brief and bitter."
5"He nudged the threshold, ignored"
6"His accent wrapped the name"
7"He paused beside the sofa,"
8"He let the words settle,"
9"She kept her stance wide,"
10"She felt ridiculous, bracing herself"
11"His eyes never left her."
12"She pressed a crumpled receipt"
13"She stared at him, thumbing"
14"He eased onto the edge"
15"He made no apology for"
16"He rolled one cuff, gaze"
17"Her mouth tasted like burnt"
18"he said at last"
19"He cut her off, voice"
ratio0.47
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences83
matches
0"The second deadbolt slid free,"
1"Aurora braced herself, left fist"
2"She’d barely managed to tug"
3"The door swung back."
4"Silhouette in the hall, face"
5"The strange burn of amber"
6"Lucien’s mouth curled slow, half"
7"She almost slammed the door."
8"Her body blocked the entrance,"
9"He stepped close, danger and"
10"He laughed, brief and bitter."
11"The scent of rain-wet stones,"
12"He nudged the threshold, ignored"
13"Aurora let the door thud"
14"His accent wrapped the name"
15"He paused beside the sofa,"
16"Ptolemy lifted his head, tail"
17"Lucien met the cat’s eyes,"
18"He let the words settle,"
19"She kept her stance wide,"
ratio0.928
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The scent of rain-wet stones, the echo of old Marseille alleys in the way he leaned near, eyes flickering over her face as if cataloguing the changes, new and o…"
1"He shielded her just as the door buckled, wards hissing, Eva’s defences flaring neutral blue."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"He let, gaze softening on the edges"
1"He rolled, gaze fixing on her"
2"He cut, voice lower"
3"she said, voice flat"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.071
leniency0.143
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.048
73.7568%