Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT113F8VAM4MW0GTY73TXHR

Run Details

Duration:
16.1s
Cost:
$0.040480
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora's eyes widened as she swung open the door to find Lucien poised on the threshold, his heterochromatic gaze drilling into her. "Miss me, ma chérie?" he purred, his lips curling into that familiar smirk that had once sent her pulse racing — and still did. Rory suppressed the urge to slam the door in his face. "What are you doing here, Luc?" Her voice cracked a little. Bloody hell, she thought. She had sworn to herself she wouldn't let him get to her again. "Is that any way to greet an old... friend?" Lucien's tone was oily smooth, but there was an unmistakable edge to it. He leaned casually on his ivory-handled cane, though Rory knew he could move with lethal speed if he wanted to. "You lost the right to call yourself my friend when you walked out." Rory crossed her arms, the small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist — a remnant of more innocent times — catching the light. "Walked out?" His amber eye flared with irritation. "If I recall correctly, ma chérie, you told me to leave." "And you didn't argue!" Rory shot back, stepping aside to let him in. Maybe it was sheer curiosity — or the masochistic part of her — but she wanted to hear what he had to say. Lucien stepped into the flat, eyes scanning the room, noting the piles of books, scrolls, and arcane notes that cluttered every surface. "Still knee-deep in your research, I see." "Cut the small talk. What do you want?" Rory’s words were harsh, but a traitorous part of her relished his presence. It was like being near a live wire — dangerous, exhilarating. Lucien shrugged off his tailored charcoal coat and draped it over a chair. His suit beneath was immaculate, as always. He fixed his gaze on her, trapping her in place with those bewitching eyes. "I need your help." Rory almost laughed. "After all this time? What makes you think I'd ever help you?" "Information, Rory." He stepped closer, the air around him seeming to grow warmer. "I know about Evan." Her heart skipped a beat. Evan was a name she had banished from her vocabulary, an old wound that still festered. "That's none of your business." "He’s made it my business," Lucien said, each word weighted with gravity. "He's dipped his toes into our world — the supernatural underworld — and he's asking the wrong questions of the wrong people." Rory's blood ran cold. Her ex with his violent streak and obsessive tendencies, entangled with the dark supernatural layers of London? "What's he after?" "Aurora, he’s looking for power. The kind of power that makes men, and demons alike, do foolish things." Lucien gestured—a fluid motion that drew her eye to the blade concealed in his cane. "I believe he has a particular artefact in mind. An amulet of considerable potency." Rory couldn't keep up the hard façade. Not with the dangerous game Evan was playing. "And you can't handle this on your own because...?" "Because he's got help from entities that even a half-demon would prefer not to cross," Lucien admitted, a rare glint of vulnerability in his eyes. "But you, Laila, you can navigate the human side of it better than anyone. He trusts you still." "Don't call me that." Rory’s voice was barely above a whisper, her resolve crumbling. It was the name he used to whisper in the dark, shared between them and nobody else. "Help me, Rory," Lucien implored, and for a moment, his suave detachment faltered, replaced by what appeared to be genuine concern. Rory considered it for a heartbeat before her conviction solidified. She marched to her cluttered desk and began rifling through papers. "What do we know about this amulet?" "An ancient artefact from Avaros, imbued with a spell that can amplify one's innate powers tenfold," Lucien said, moving to stand beside her. She flinched as his fingers brushed hers while helping her search, both charged through with residual electricity. "And why would Evan want that?" Rory pondered aloud, but the answer horrified her as it dawned. "Oh no, he wants to come after me." Lucien’s silence was an affirmation. She had refused to be the damsel in distress ever again. "Alright," she said, turning to face him fully. "We're going to stop him, and you're going to tell me everything." A lip twitched on Lucien’s lips, a ghost of his old, confident smirk. "I wouldn't expect any less from you, ma chérie." He delved into a detailed recount, bringing out maps and recent reports, the two huddled over the table, engrossed. Rory noticed how he filtered out unnecessary details, a precision she remembered well. Hours ticked by, filled with plans, strategies, and revisited memories that made the air between them thick and laden with unspoken words. At one point, Rory reached for a particular scroll at the same time as Lucien, their fingers brushing. She quickly withdrew her hand as if burnt, but the moment lingered, sparking old dynamics between them. "So, we gather a small team, infiltrate his base, retrieve the amulet, and neutralise his power grab." Rory summarised their joint effort, leaning back, satisfied but exhausted. Lucien’s eyes held hers, intense and searching. "We make a good team, you and I." She felt a pang in her chest. "We did." The implication was clear—they were no longer a team, only forcefully reunited by the shadows of their pasts. This fragile alliance was built on necessity, not trust. Finally, Lucien straightened, adding a definitive close to their planning. "I should go. There's much to prepare." Rory nodded, escorting him to the door. Before stepping out, Lucien paused and turned back to her, studying her face one last time. "Stay safe, Aurora." Her heart ached as she watched him disappear down the hallway. She locked the door but knew no number of deadbolts could keep out the ghosts of the past or the looming threat of Evan’s return. They had set a dangerous plan in motion, and ready or not, Rory had to face whatever followed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory pondered aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.056
90.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1011
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
15.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1011
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"racing"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"skipped a beat"
count1
5
word"glint"
count1
6
word"navigate"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count2
8
word"resolve"
count1
9
word"charged"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"delved"
count1
12
word"unspoken"
count1
13
word"pang"
count1
14
word"implication"
count1
15
word"looming"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"pulse"
2"racing"
3"scanning"
4"skipped a beat"
5"glint"
6"navigate"
7"whisper"
8"resolve"
9"charged"
10"silence"
11"delved"
12"unspoken"
13"pang"
14"implication"
15"looming"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences76
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1013
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
38.11% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount715
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity2.24
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien15
Rory16
Bloody1
London1
Evan3
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Rory"
2"Evan"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.381
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1013
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"notes that cluttered"
69.97% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean28.94
std11.43
cv0.395
sampleLengths
022
124
239
342
435
519
636
729
832
938
1015
1117
1226
1334
1424
1547
1624
1743
1831
1921
2028
2140
2225
235
2431
2522
2632
2757
2827
2915
309
3127
3217
3326
3454
99.11% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"was built"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs137
matches
0"was playing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences76
ratio0.079
matches
0"\"Miss me, ma chérie?\" he purred, his lips curling into that familiar smirk that had once sent her pulse racing — and still did."
1"\"You lost the right to call yourself my friend when you walked out.\" Rory crossed her arms, the small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist — a remnant of more innocent times — catching the light."
2"Maybe it was sheer curiosity — or the masochistic part of her — but she wanted to hear what he had to say."
3"It was like being near a live wire — dangerous, exhilarating."
4"\"Aurora, he’s looking for power. The kind of power that makes men, and demons alike, do foolish things.\" Lucien gestured—a fluid motion that drew her eye to the blade concealed in his cane."
5"The implication was clear—they were no longer a team, only forcefully reunited by the shadows of their pasts."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount713
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.033660589060308554
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011220196353436185
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences76
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences76
mean13.33
std7.21
cv0.541
sampleLengths
022
124
211
311
44
513
622
720
835
98
1011
1113
1223
1322
147
1521
1611
1713
187
1914
204
213
2212
2313
244
255
2616
275
2812
2922
304
3117
323
3333
3414
357
368
379
3825
3918
4014
4117
4221
4310
4411
457
4623
4717
4817
498
92.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5657894736842105
totalSentences76
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences57
matches
0"Maybe it was sheer curiosity"
1"Finally, Lucien straightened, adding a"
ratio0.035
65.61% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences57
matches
0"he purred, his lips curling"
1"Her voice cracked a little"
2"She had sworn to herself"
3"He leaned casually on his"
4"His amber eye flared with"
5"It was like being near"
6"His suit beneath was immaculate,"
7"He fixed his gaze on"
8"He stepped closer, the air"
9"Her heart skipped a beat."
10"Her ex with his violent"
11"It was the name he"
12"She marched to her cluttered"
13"She flinched as his fingers"
14"She had refused to be"
15"she said, turning to face"
16"He delved into a detailed"
17"She quickly withdrew her hand"
18"She felt a pang in"
19"Her heart ached as she"
ratio0.386
12.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences57
matches
0"Aurora's eyes widened as she"
1"he purred, his lips curling"
2"Rory suppressed the urge to"
3"Her voice cracked a little"
4"She had sworn to herself"
5"Lucien's tone was oily smooth,"
6"He leaned casually on his"
7"Rory crossed her arms, the"
8"His amber eye flared with"
9"Rory shot back, stepping aside"
10"Lucien stepped into the flat,"
11"Rory’s words were harsh, but"
12"It was like being near"
13"Lucien shrugged off his tailored"
14"His suit beneath was immaculate,"
15"He fixed his gaze on"
16"Rory almost laughed."
17"He stepped closer, the air"
18"Her heart skipped a beat."
19"Evan was a name she"
ratio0.895
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Before stepping out, Lucien paused"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Hours ticked by, filled with plans, strategies, and revisited memories that made the air between them thick and laden with unspoken words."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Lucien said, each word weighted with gravity"
1"Lucien said, moving to stand beside her"
2"Rory pondered aloud, but the answer horrified her as it dawned"
3"she said, turning to face him fully"
66.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Lucien admitted (admit)"
1"Lucien implored (implore)"
2"Rory summarised (summarise)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.167
79.9834%