Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT1187DBG77V08SYVWA97K4

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Nyx dragged us through the boundary by a thread of shadow; the world flipped, and we landed with a breathless thud among whispering trees. Aurora’s heartstone throbbed against her chest, a warm, stubborn pulse that refused to be ignored. The grove opened around us as if someone had torn a seam in the air and stitched it elsewhere. Light poured from inside the leaves, not folded through the sun so much as breathed from within them, a pale blue-green glow that shouldn’t have existed in a place meant for daylight or dark. The ground sounded like glass when we stepped, the surface singing softly under our boots, each footprint sending a tiny, ringing echo into the air. Fronds brushed my wrists with a chill that remembered winter and a sweetness that remembered summer; the air carried a scent that was at once like rain on iron and lilac petals pressed between old books. We were inside the The Fae Grove, Isolde’s grove, in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm. Time moved differently here. An hour inside could be minutes or days outside, and I could feel it in my bones—the way the pulses of the wildflowers seemed to beat with a patient, alien rhythm. Standing stones formed an almost ceremonial circle at the edge of a clearing, each stone carved with curves that weren’t runes so much as memories. They hummed faintly, not with sound but with potential, a low thrumming that threaded through my teeth and settled somewhere behind my eyes. Nyx moved first, a living silhouette that did not quite touch the ground. Their presence pressed against the air like a damp velvet curtain pulled back to reveal nothing but more shadow. Nyx’s glow—soft violet at the edge of perception—brightened enough to catch the iron-blue glint of Auror a Carter’s eyes as she scanned the surroundings. The fact that Nyx could slip between shadows, that they could become nothing more than a whisper on a breeze, made the grove a theatre of temptation and fear. “Stay close,” I said, careful not to let my voice sound like a command. Rory, my friends sometimes called me, Rory when I wasn’t being careful, and Auror a Carter when I needed to be precise. Tonight I wore the Fae-Forged Blade at my side, its moonsilver edge catching the glow and swallowing it into a pale, cold shimmer. Isolde stood a few paces behind us, an pale statue with silver hair brushing the edge of her waist, eyes pale lavender that seemed to see through to us and beyond. She was the Seer, but she spoke in riddles and kept her feet free of footprints. The grove did not like stalkers or liars, and Isolde had learned to walk without leaving a trace—an irony that did not go unnoticed by those of us who depended on her visions. “Three doors breathe as one breath,” she whispered, not to us but into the space between us, as if the grove itself could hear. “Choose the step that does not belong, and the path reveals its teeth.” Her voice sounded like wind rolling across a hollow bone, cold and ancient and a little amused. Aurora’s lips pressed into a thin line, as if the certainty of her own plan could be a shield. “We’re here to listen, Isolde. Not to barter with riddles.” Nyx turned to us, their voice a whisper that seemed to come from nowhere, everywhere, all at once. “Trust the shadows to tell you where not to tread. They remember the old bargains better than we do.” We moved forward, careful in the way you are when you know that one misstep could strip away your control of a single breath. The grove did not pretend to be normal. It flickered at the edges, like a cinema screen showing a film that refused to stay aligned with reality. A path wound between the trees, not a path so much as a suggestion, a whisper of direction that tugged us toward a tree whose bark looked like stained glass. The tree carried the scent of home and exile in equal measure, a paradox that pricked at the back of my neck. The ground changed beneath our feet, shifting from glass-slick to soil that felt almost alive, like a creature under our weight. Leaves rustled in a way that sounded almost like a conversation—the click of a twig here, the sigh of a gust there, a breath of wind that carried a syllable in it, a syllable I almost recognised as my own name spoken by a voice that wasn’t mine. The Heartstone Pendant warmed against my sternum, warm and patient, pulsing in a measured rhythm that matched the cadence of the grove itself. I knew the warmth wasn’t simply warmth; it carried a hint of Hel, a memory of fiery gates and battles won with a blade that carried more than frost. The pendant’s crimson gemstone glowed faintly, as if it understood that we were trespassers here, but would protect us if we walked with a careful heart. Nyx drifted closer to me, their form bending as if listening to something that lay just beyond perception. They spoke softly, almost in the same whisper that Isolde used, but their words had a different texture, more cut-glass and wind. “The stones remember, Rory. They remember the weight of the old oaths.” Isolde’s reply came in a riddle as usual, but I allowed myself to tilt my head and listen beyond her cadence. “What is between a truth and a lie? A breath. What breath holds the promise of what is to come?” “Silence?” I offered, trying to keep my voice even. “Perhaps,” she said, and a small smile flickered across her lips that didn’t quite belong on the face of a seer. “But silence is only a doorway if you are willing to step through with your eyes open.” We came to a glade where the air hummed with a fragrance that reminded me of honey and old copper. There, the trees stood a little farther apart, and between them ran a shallow stream that did not look like water but something closer to liquid light. The stream’s surface carried a reflection not of us but of something else—perhaps the Fae realm, perhaps some other world hidden just behind the veil. The reflection moved in ways the real world did not: the trees in the reflection breathed in the opposite tempo, the rocks glowed with a different hue, and the far bank showed a silhouette we did not recognise, a figure half shown and half suggested, as if it stood just beyond the border of vision. Nyx paused, stepping into a patch of light that did not feel entirely solid. Their form stretched along the ground until it nearly touched the stream’s surface, and then — with a whisper of air that suggested a sigh rather than sound — they drew back, as if afraid of what they had almost learned. “The boundary here is delicate, Rory. The Veil is thin enough to poke through if you press the wrong way,” Nyx murmured. “We should not press.” Isolde folded her hands, the bracelets on her wrists clinking softly. The sound was like rain on a window, but inside the grove it felt like a delicate ornament being dropped into a helmet of bone. “The Veil is a membrane that breathes. It shifts with the season and the solstice. It weakens near the summer solstice and thins near winter’s breath. We should seek the watchpoints, not push through blindly.” “The Wardens,” I said, a name I had only heard in whispers from people who’d seen things they should not speak of aloud. The Wardens monitored rift points—the places where the Veil flickered or trembled. If we triggered a watcher’s attention, the grove might become hostile, and we might end up with more questions than answers and fewer limbs to carry them. The place felt ancient, older than any history I had learned. The standing stones appeared to glow from within, as if each was a tiny heart whose pulse kept the grove alive. Between two of the stones, there lay a crack of air that felt cooler than the rest of the grove, a doorway not yet open to us. The Heartstone Pendant grew brighter, and I realised it was responding to the crack, as if the Hel-bound warmth wanted to spill out into this world and show us what it guarded. “Something waits beyond the crack,” Isolde said, her voice quiet but clear. “Not a creature, but a vow, a pledge left behind by those who learned to walk between worlds without bringing their own baggage.” Aurora’s breath hitched, but she kept her stance. “We came here with a purpose. Not to trade in legends, but to find a path that might help Nyx—” She stopped herself, her gaze flicking to Nyx, who stood with arms loose at their sides, eyes half-lidded, listening to a sound that none of us could hear with our ears alone. A soft rustle rose from the undergrowth, and the grove shifted a fraction as if a hand had brushed across its surface. Nyx crouched, melding with a shadow along the ground, and then stepped forward again in the blink of an eye, their silhouette returning to a solid shape just in time to catch a glimpse of something pale and fleeting beyond the stream. “What was that?” I whispered, fear notching a new edge into my voice. “Illyrian moths,” Isolde said without looking away from the stream, her eyes shimmering with reflected light. “They feed on fear and dreams. They are not dangerous alone, but they herald movement in the Veil.” The moths did not look like moths. They looked like papers made of the thinnest glass, the edges soft and luminous. They drifted on the air, never resting, always moving, their wings whispering a soft ticking sound like the turning of a clock in a church. The clock-tick sound multiplied, and the grove seemed to listen with more intent. The Heartstone Pendant thrummed in my hand, a warmth that spread up my forearm and into my shoulder, as if my own blood pulsed along with it. “Careful with the heartstone near any Hel portal, Rory,” Nyx warned, their voice almost a thread in the air. “It reacts to heat and fear alike.” I kept the pendant pressed to my chest, letting the warmth anchor me as we stepped forward. The stream’s glow intensified, and the reflection in the water resolved into something else entirely—a corridor of arching trees that didn’t exist in the real world but existed in the space between. The grove’s reality wavered as if someone had tugged a thread, and the picture in the stream became a doorway to a room carved out of light, a space that hummed with songs old enough to have never been sung aloud. Isolde moved beside me, her eyes narrowing as she studied the doorway without crossing it. “The room is waiting to be spoken into existence,” she said in her riddling way. “And to do that, we must find the right word, the right moment to speak it true.” “Words can lie,” Aurora countered, though not angrily. “We need a plan, not poetry.” Nyx gave a soft, dry laugh that did not quite sound like laughter and yet carried a kind of approval. “Plans are for those who fear the unknown. We walk, we listen, we see what the grove chooses to show. Then we speak.” We stepped closer to the doorway in the stream’s reflected corridor. The trees there were taller, their branches knotted with a light that felt like a memory of sunlight trapped in resin. The air tasted of copper again, but with a sweetness that made my teeth tingle—a flavour of triumph and risk at the same time. The Blood-rose at my neck—well, the one I wore as a talisman—flickered in my peripheral vision, as if trying to decide whether to spring into life and save us or to stay quiet and let whatever happened happen. Isolde raised a hand, then paused. She spoke not to us but to the grove, to the air, to the memories that drifted through the space between the stones. “I call to you, not to command, but to ask you to show us a path that does not spill blood in a place that should be a memory of peace. We are not your enemy, but we are not blind.” Her words seemed to hang in the air, catch on the warm wind, and the grove’s glow rippled. I caught sight of something beyond the archway—a silhouette, pale and almost translucent, gliding between the trees as if it had no intention of staying, yet drawn by our presence. It paused at the edge of the reflected doorway, then melded back into the light, leaving behind a scent of lilac and old coin. “Do not seek the reward before the risk,” Isolde said, her voice almost a whisper now. “The grove grants truth in exchange for intent.” Aurora looked at me, then at Nyx, then at the archway again. “We came for information, perhaps a guide. But if the grove wants to test us, we will prove ourselves—together.” Nyx moved closer to Aurora’s side, their shadow pressing softly against her coat, a wordless pact of trust. “Together, then.” We stepped through the arching trees in a measured, careful rhythm, not rushing but not dawdling either. The air around us grew cooler, the glow brighter, and the ground beneath us changed again, becoming a layered mosaic of light and colour that felt not like ground at all but a living map. Each step left a faint afterglow on the stone of the standing circle, a line of warmth that traced the path we took. The grove watched in silence, a thousand unseen eyes watching three strangers who had the nerves to walk onward. We found a second doorway, a narrower channel of air next to the stream, smaller and almost shy compared to the arch of the first. It did not show itself in the real world; it existed only in the space the grove offered to those with courage enough to enter. The Heartstone Pendant grew warmer again, this time a warning and a beacon in one, and Isolde’s eyes glittered with the light of a plan forming behind her lids. “Here lies the other door,” she intoned. “Not open to the passers-by, but open to the seekers who can read the rhythm of the grove. We must place a word with a weight behind it, a reality strong enough to be believed.” “Words again,” Aurora said, though the corners of her mouth twitched with something that might have been a smile if she’d allowed it to show fully. “If it burns us, I’ll have to owe you a bigger debt than I can repay.” Nyx stepped between the two of us, their presence a cool and steady anchor. “Tell the grove your truth, Rory, and leave fear behind. The shade remembers what fear does to a heart that stands still.” I drew in a breath, tasting the strange mixture of fear and wonder that hung in the air like a particle in a bottle. Then I spoke, not loudly, not to the grove as a whole, but to the path beneath our feet, to the stones, to the memory of Hel above and the memory of Earth beneath— “Aurora Carter, with Nyx and Isolde by my side, we seek not victory but knowledge. We seek a path that does not bend the world, but teaches us how to walk with it.” The words came out as if spoken by someone else, a voice that was mine only in part, a voice that had learned to blend. The archway responded. The light pulsed in time with the pendant, once, twice, and the air stirred as though a door between rooms had suddenly opened. The second doorway sighed open, releasing a corridor of dream-threads that stretched into a space that had no end. We stepped through. Beyond the doorway lay an impossibility made into a room: a chamber lined with shelves of glass, each shelf containing a miniature sky—the colour of dusk in a dozen different hours, each sky turning and turning with its own gravity. In the centre stood a pedestal of carved wood and bone, upon which rested a single object: a small, crystalline key—like an icicle that remembered warmth—faintly humming with a tone that could have been a note from a harp or a memory from a long-forgotten choir. The key radiated a soft, pale blue light, not of ice, but of something colder than ice and warmer than starlight, a paradox that slid into my chest and hummed in time with my own pulse. Isolde moved closer to the pedestal, her gaze sweeping the room in a way that reminded me of looking into a well and seeing your own reflection multiplied in the depths ten thousand times. “A key to a door that has not yet learned its own name,” she murmured. “The room answers the truth of your purpose, not the fear of your questions.” Nyx slid to the edge of the glass shelf encircling the pedestal, their shadow rippling along its surface with a soft hiss. “This is a doorway to a memory the grove wants you to reclaim or to forget. Be careful what you choose to remember, Rory.” Aurora’S breath came out in a slow, measured exhale. “We came for a way forward, not a way back.” Her fingers tightened around the chain of the Heartstone Pendant, which pulsed again, brighter this time, almost as if to underscore her resolve. The three of us stood with the blue light threading through our sightlines, each breath a: I blinked once, twice, and saw in that moment the truth that Isolde’s riddling had been trying to tell us. The grove did not simply open doors; it offered choices and tested the integrity of intent by placing temptations in our path. The key’s glow intensified as if answering a question none of us had voiced aloud, and the room’s walls, made of glass and night, carried the whisper of countless other footsteps we would never hear again. “Choose,” Isolde said softly, the word hanging in the air like a bell just before the chime. “Choose the memory that will carry you forward, not the fear that binds you.” Nyx’s voice broke the tense expectancy, a mere whisper that nonetheless sliced through the heavy air. “We choose to walk out of here with the truth that makes us capable of acting, not with the memories that stop our hearts.” Aurora stepped forward, lifting her chin with a quiet intensity. “If there’s a memory worth keeping, it’s the memory of getting out alive with a plan that can save others.” She brushed a finger along the pendant, and it answered with a warm, firm glow that seemed to settle into the bones of her hand. We did not speak another word for a long moment. The door hummed once, a quiet, patient sound, and the blue glow thickened, wrapping around us in a kind of soft, living silk. We did not move to take the memory or to resist it; we let the grove’s suggestion settle in us, settle into the shapes our choices had carved out of our minds over the years. And then, at last, the door opened. A chill ran through the chamber, not a shock but a slow, creeping thing that crawled up the spine and into the shoulders. The corridor beyond—the memory-path—stood still as if awaiting a signal. The room’s air thickened, heavy with the scent of lilac and old copper again, but this time it carried a note of something sharper, something that tasted like rain on steel. From the corridor steps a figure not quite a silhouette, not quite a memory, but something between both. It moved with a grace that suggested centuries of practice. It wore garments that shift with the light, fabrics that did not belong to Earth or Hel or the Fae alone but seemed to belong to the memory of journeys no one should have taken. The figure halted at the threshold between the doorway and the room, watching us with eyes that burned like pale opals. They did not look afraid of us; they looked bored by the delay of our arrival and curious about what we would choose to do next. The moment stretched long enough for us to feel the quiet tremble of the grove’s heart, the ambient thrumming rising into a chorus that wanted to swallow our names and spit them back in a new order. “Who—” Isolde began, but the word halted in her throat as if the grove had pressed a hand across her mouth. The figure stepped into the room with an almost reckless ease, then halted three paces away from the pedestal. The light from their eyes grew brighter, and for a fleeting instant I saw a spark of recognition—like a memory brushing the edge of a dream. Nyx spoke first, their voice a breeze that moved through the leaves and never stopped. “Friend or foe, we have not invited you here.” The figure’s mouth curled into a half-smile. The voice that answered—low, clear, and distinctly amused—did not belong to a single body but to the room itself. “No need for defence. I am the keeper of the memoryless door, the watcher of choices best left unmade, the one who remembers what must be remembered and forgets what must be forgotten. You three stand at a hinge, and hinges swing in more than one direction.” Aurora’s grip tightened on the pendant again. “We want to leave with something useful. Not to be trapped in some reverie you think will salvage you, or worse, harm us for merely trespassing.” The keeper’s gaze slid to Aurora, then to Nyx, then to Isolde, and finally to the key on the pedestal. “The door’s name is not known because it is not a door of place but a door of self. You will take from this room what you already have—the courage to act—and you will lose what you think you do not need—the fear that binds you to what you fear you cannot change.” The words tasted like a dare and a warning all at once. Isolde, who had never been good with direct answers, met the keeper’s gaze with a calm that felt almost defiant. “And if we refuse? If we walk away now?” The keeper turned a fraction, as if listening to a distant choir that only they could hear. “Then you will forget the grove’s existence, each of you in your own measure, and you will wake with the memory intact but the fear of it gone, as if you had learned nothing.” The keeper’s voice softened. “Or you can take the memory and the memory will change you. It will give you strength or it will take something you loved away. The grove does not take kindly to those who treat it as a playground.” Nyx took a step forward, their silhouette shifting with the movement, a living shadow that refused to retreat. “We do not play. We seek a way to survive a threat that follows us from the Veil. We need a path forward, not a memory shamed into obedience.” The keeper looked at me, and for a moment I thought I saw the trace of something like a smile in their expression—a smile that suggested both acknowledgment and caution. Then they raised a hand, not in greeting but in gesture. The doorway hummed again, and the room’s glass shelves rattled as if in approval. The blue light thickened around the pedestal, and the little icy key began to vibrate with a tiny, staccato rhythm. “Take it or leave it,” the keeper said, their voice lowering to a whisper that did not touch the ears so much as the bones themselves. “The door that may yet save or doom will not wait for you to decide twice.” Aurora stepped closer to the pedestal, the blade’s cold sweetness brushing against her fingertips as she reached for the icy key. Her other hand pressed the pendant harder to her chest, grounding the decision in her own stubborn heart. She looked at Isolde then Nyx, a silent question passing between them that did not need words to be understood. Isolde’s answer came in the form of a riddle again, but this time its surface was almost inviting. “If the path you walk is a blade, what will you cut to keep yourself whole?” Nyx did not smile, but their eyes glittered with something like fierce humour. “We cut only what would cut us first. We cut away fear, not truth.” Rory’s breath hitched, and she nodded once, sharply. Then she moved forward with a smooth, decisive motion, drawing the Fae-Forged Blade from its sheath with a sound that spoke of old promises and new decisions. The blade’s breath of cold touched my cheek; the air around us sang, a thin string of music that threaded through the grove and seemed to tie our fates to its ancient will. The key hummed and glowed even brighter as Aurora's fingers closed around it. She did not pull; she simply gripped, and with a methodical, deliberate motion she pressed the key into a small lockwork indent hidden within the pedestal's base. The lock, if that was what it was, answered with a soft click that sounded like a sigh of relief from the chamber itself. The memory door did not swing wide; instead, it slid aside, revealing a corridor made not of air but of potential—the same corridor shown in the reflection, but now manifesting as actual passage. The keeper stepped back, their presence receding into the light in the distance, as if the grove itself had just exhaled after a held breath. The three of us moved as one, the Heartstone Pendant thrumming with a brighter warmth, the blade lying still at Rory’s side, a reminder of the stakes and the power we carried. We crossed the threshold into the corridor, a place that did not belong to any map, a place that tasted of old rain and the sweetness of fear acknowledged and named. The walls were not walls but a continuous tapestry of remembered moments—ours, theirs, and those that had never occurred but could have—woven by the grove and the will of the memory’s door. The air shifted again, cooler now, and I heard a new, softer sound—a cadence, like a soft chant echoing from somewhere far away that we could not quite place. It grew louder as we walked, and with each step the corridor narrowed a fraction as if the grove were choosing how close to bring us to the heart of this memory. Then the chant resolved into a word spoken by a voice that was not a voice at all but a memory unlocked: a single syllable with a weight that pressed down on our chests and traveled up into our throats. I felt the syllable land in my mind as clearly as if I had spoken it aloud, and I knew the grove had chosen us: Isolde’s truths would guide us, Nyx’s shadows would shield us, and Aurora’s heart would drive us to use what we learned. The corridor opened into a chamber that looked nothing like the room of memory. Here the walls pulsed with a living light, and the floor bore lines of shifting sigils that rearranged themselves under our feet as we walked. The sigils did not form words but intentions—goals we had never dared to name aloud. And at the far end stood a final door, double doors carved from a single piece of glass that looked like water frozen in place. Behind them, a faint glow—like dawn caught in the teeth of a blade. The keeper’s voice came again, this time softer, almost affectionate in a way that did not suit their role. “Choose, and carry what you choose out of the grove’s memory safe and intact. Or forget, and lose the memory that would have given you a new tool for the battle to come.” Aurora stepped forward, the blade in her hand and the pendant warm against her chest. Nyx remained close, their shadow sliding along the floor like a second skin. Isolde remained a few steps behind, eyes bright with a mixture of caution and curiosity. “Show us the path that lets us walk away with something stronger, not something that will break us,” Aurora said, her voice steady, a line drawn in the air between fear and resolve. The door shifted, the glass bending as if water were bending to the gravity of the grove’s will. Then it opened with a sigh of cooling wind, revealing a final, pale corridor that stretched into a glimmering distance. Not a path to victory or defeat, but a corridor of choices—the kind of corridor that would only reveal itself to those who were ready to bear the weight of what they chose. We stepped through the final doors into that corridor, into the unknown that promised to test us to our very cores. The moment the doors closed behind us—quiet, inexorable, and final—the grove’s heartbeat rose to a triumphant, dangerous crescendo. The corridor brightened, the light painting our faces with a soft, reflective glow that made our eyes seem to belong to someone else, something other. A crack of silence fell, and then a sudden, sharp sound split the air—a low thrum followed by the crack of a branch as if something unseen pressed against the boundary from the other side, something powerful and hungry for what we carried now. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed in a frantic rhythm, a warning and a beacon all in one. The corridor widened again, the light blooming into a fierce clarity, and we froze, listening for what would come next. The corridor grew crowded with the quiet presence of the grove itself, as if the trees leaned closer to listen to our breathing. Then the sound came again, closer this time—a soft, measured rustle beyond the door, a whisper that promised something terrible and necessary in equal measure. The three of us pressed closer, shoulder to shoulder, letting the cadence of the pendant guide us, letting the memory’s door decide what we would become. And then the room beyond the corridor erupted into action. From the far end of the corridor—where the double doors stood open not by fate but by choice—a figure stepped into view. It moved with a calm, predatory grace, a demonstration that the grove was not finished with us yet. The figure wore garments that glowed with a spectrum of pale light, and in their eyes burned a pale, patient intelligence that looked upon us as an observer might look upon a moving spectacle—the kind of gaze that could see every thread of a tapestry and know which one would unravel us. The doors seemed to hum with a new energy as the figure advanced. The air thickened with the sense of something ancient awakening, something that had waited long enough for us to prove ourselves to the grove. The figure’s mouth curved into a small, almost amused smile, and they lifted a hand in a quiet gesture that suggested both welcome and warning. The three of us stood together, not as three separate people but as a single unit of intent. Our breath steadied. The Heartstone Pendant’s warmth steadied with it. The blade in Aurora’s hand no longer felt like a mere weapon; it felt like a promise. The chapter ends here, with the grove alive around us and the stranger—the keeper of memory, perhaps, perhaps simply another traveller drawn by our arrival—standing at the threshold of the memory’s door and the door to whatever future we might claim. The corridor ahead glowed with a pale certainty, the kind that says, without words, that we are about to walk into something that will change us forever. And as the figure stepped closer, the first true note of danger rang clear: we were not merely walking into a dream; we were stepping into a bargain, one that would demand everything we had and leave us with something we could not put a name to yet. The air crackled with possibility, and the grove held its breath, waiting to see which of us would speak the next word.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Her fingers tightened around [around]"
1"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.426
leniency0.852
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.066
91.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount5506
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"softly"
count5
1
adverb"angrily"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"angrily"
2"suddenly"
3"sharply"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount5506
totalAiIsms80
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"chill"
count2
4
word"could feel"
count1
5
word"potential"
count2
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"glint"
count1
8
word"scanned"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count10
10
word"flickered"
count4
11
word"aligned"
count1
12
word"almost alive"
count1
13
word"weight"
count5
14
word"measured"
count4
15
word"warmth"
count9
16
word"silence"
count4
17
word"trembled"
count1
18
word"fleeting"
count2
19
word"pulsed"
count5
20
word"resolved"
count2
21
word"wavered"
count1
22
word"mosaic"
count1
23
word"traced"
count1
24
word"beacon"
count2
25
word"crystalline"
count1
26
word"depths"
count1
27
word"resolve"
count2
28
word"footsteps"
count1
29
word"intensity"
count1
30
word"silk"
count1
31
word"methodical"
count1
32
word"reminder"
count1
33
word"tapestry"
count2
34
word"echoing"
count1
35
word"unravel"
count1
36
word"sense of"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"echo"
3"chill"
4"could feel"
5"potential"
6"velvet"
7"glint"
8"scanned"
9"whisper"
10"flickered"
11"aligned"
12"almost alive"
13"weight"
14"measured"
15"warmth"
16"silence"
17"trembled"
18"fleeting"
19"pulsed"
20"resolved"
21"wavered"
22"mosaic"
23"traced"
24"beacon"
25"crystalline"
26"depths"
27"resolve"
28"footsteps"
29"intensity"
30"silk"
31"methodical"
32"reminder"
33"tapestry"
34"echoing"
35"unravel"
36"sense of"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blink of an eye"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
2
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"in the blink of an eye"
1"hung in the air"
2"a spark of recognition"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences209
matches(empty)
40.33% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount13
narrationSentences209
filterMatches
0"know"
1"decide"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tend to"
2"appeared to"
3"began to"
4"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences244
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5455
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions47
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions110
wordCount4488
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.53
worstName"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Fae6
Grove1
Isolde22
Earth3
Auror2
Carter2
Nyx24
Rory4
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Seer1
Aurora17
Heartstone8
Pendant8
Hel4
Wardens1
Veil1
Hel-bound1
Blood-rose1
persons
0"Grove"
1"Isolde"
2"Carter"
3"Nyx"
4"Rory"
5"Aurora"
6"Heartstone"
7"Pendant"
8"Wardens"
9"Veil"
places
0"Fae"
1"Earth"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences200
glossingSentenceCount26
matches
0"sounded like glass when we stepped, the su"
1"not quite touch the ground"
2"lavender that seemed to see through to us and beyond"
3"sounded like wind rolling across a hollow"
4"whisper that seemed to come from nowhere, everywhere, all at once"
5"looked like stained glass"
6"as if listening to something that lay just beyond perception"
7"quite belong on the face of a seer"
8"felt like a delicate ornament being dro"
9"looked like papers made of the thinnest g"
10"not quite sound like laughter and yet carried a kind of approval"
11"felt like a memory of sunlight trapped"
12"as if trying to decide whether to spring into life and save us or to stay quiet and let whatever happened happen"
13"as if answering a question none of us had voiced aloud, and the room’s walls, made of glass and night, carried the whisper of countless other footsteps we would never hear again"
14"glow that seemed to settle into the bones of her hand"
15"as if awaiting a signal"
16"tasted like rain on steel"
17"something between both"
18"not quite a silhouette, not quite a memory, but something between both"
19"tasted like a dare and a warning all at o"
20"as if listening to a distant choir that only they could hear"
21"something like a smile in their expression—a"
22"something like fierce humour"
23"sounded like a sigh of relief from the cha"
24"not quite place"
25"looked like water frozen in place"
26"felt like a mere weapon; it felt like a"
27"felt like a promise"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches30
per1kWords5.5
wordCount5455
matches
0"not with sound but with potential, a low thrumming"
1"not to us but into the space between us, as if the grove itself could hear"
2"not look like water but something closer to liquid light"
3"not of us but of something else"
4"Not a creature, but a vow, a pledge left behind by those who learned to walk bet"
5"Not to trade in legends, but to find a path"
6"not dangerous alone, but they herald movement in the Veil"
7"not to us but to the grove, to the air, to the memories"
8"not to command, but to ask you to show us a path"
9"not your enemy, but we are not blind"
10"not rushing but not dawdling either"
11"not like ground at all but a living map"
12"Not open to the passers-by, but open to the seekers who can read the rhythm of the grove"
13"not loudly, not to the grove as a whole, but to the path beneath our feet, to the stones, to the memory o"
14"not to the grove as a whole, but to the path beneath our feet, to the stones, to the memory o"
15"not victory but knowledge"
16"not of ice, but of something colder than ice"
17"not a shock but a slow, creeping thing"
18"not quite a silhouette, not quite a memory, but something between both"
19"not quite a memory, but something between both"
20"not known because it is not a door of place but a door of self"
21"not a door of place but a door of self"
22"not in greeting but in gesture"
23"not of air but of potential"
24"not walls but a continuous tapestry of remembered moments"
25"not a voice at all but a memory unlocked: a single syllable with a weight"
26"not form words but intentions"
27"Not a path to victory or defeat, but a corridor of choices"
28"not by fate but by choice"
29"not as three separate people but as a single unit of intent"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences244
matches
0"understood that we"
97.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs95
mean57.42
std28.14
cv0.49
sampleLengths
039
1114
2101
385
459
580
654
729
837
9103
1069
1178
1240
1312
1441
159
1638
17127
1855
1926
2071
2162
2291
2335
2460
2564
2613
2734
2886
2926
3090
3147
3214
3343
3494
3570
3672
3724
3831
3920
4094
4179
4242
4342
4436
4558
4658
4748
48122
4963
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences209
matches
0"being dropped"
1"been sung"
2"was, answered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs676
matches
0"wasn’t being"
1"was responding"
2"were choosing"
3"were bending"
4"were stepping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount39
semicolonCount12
flaggedSentences41
totalSentences244
ratio0.168
matches
0"Nyx dragged us through the boundary by a thread of shadow; the world flipped, and we landed with a breathless thud among whispering trees."
1"Fronds brushed my wrists with a chill that remembered winter and a sweetness that remembered summer; the air carried a scent that was at once like rain on iron and lilac petals pressed between old books."
2"An hour inside could be minutes or days outside, and I could feel it in my bones—the way the pulses of the wildflowers seemed to beat with a patient, alien rhythm."
3"Nyx’s glow—soft violet at the edge of perception—brightened enough to catch the iron-blue glint of Auror a Carter’s eyes as she scanned the surroundings."
4"The grove did not like stalkers or liars, and Isolde had learned to walk without leaving a trace—an irony that did not go unnoticed by those of us who depended on her visions."
5"Leaves rustled in a way that sounded almost like a conversation—the click of a twig here, the sigh of a gust there, a breath of wind that carried a syllable in it, a syllable I almost recognised as my own name spoken by a voice that wasn’t mine."
6"I knew the warmth wasn’t simply warmth; it carried a hint of Hel, a memory of fiery gates and battles won with a blade that carried more than frost."
7"The stream’s surface carried a reflection not of us but of something else—perhaps the Fae realm, perhaps some other world hidden just behind the veil."
8"Their form stretched along the ground until it nearly touched the stream’s surface, and then — with a whisper of air that suggested a sigh rather than sound — they drew back, as if afraid of what they had almost learned."
9"The Wardens monitored rift points—the places where the Veil flickered or trembled."
10"The stream’s glow intensified, and the reflection in the water resolved into something else entirely—a corridor of arching trees that didn’t exist in the real world but existed in the space between."
11"The air tasted of copper again, but with a sweetness that made my teeth tingle—a flavour of triumph and risk at the same time."
12"The Blood-rose at my neck—well, the one I wore as a talisman—flickered in my peripheral vision, as if trying to decide whether to spring into life and save us or to stay quiet and let whatever happened happen."
13"I caught sight of something beyond the archway—a silhouette, pale and almost translucent, gliding between the trees as if it had no intention of staying, yet drawn by our presence."
14"It did not show itself in the real world; it existed only in the space the grove offered to those with courage enough to enter."
15"Then I spoke, not loudly, not to the grove as a whole, but to the path beneath our feet, to the stones, to the memory of Hel above and the memory of Earth beneath—"
16"Beyond the doorway lay an impossibility made into a room: a chamber lined with shelves of glass, each shelf containing a miniature sky—the colour of dusk in a dozen different hours, each sky turning and turning with its own gravity."
17"In the centre stood a pedestal of carved wood and bone, upon which rested a single object: a small, crystalline key—like an icicle that remembered warmth—faintly humming with a tone that could have been a note from a harp or a memory from a long-forgotten choir."
18"The grove did not simply open doors; it offered choices and tested the integrity of intent by placing temptations in our path."
19"We did not move to take the memory or to resist it; we let the grove’s suggestion settle in us, settle into the shapes our choices had carved out of our minds over the years."
20"The corridor beyond—the memory-path—stood still as if awaiting a signal."
21"They did not look afraid of us; they looked bored by the delay of our arrival and curious about what we would choose to do next."
22"The light from their eyes grew brighter, and for a fleeting instant I saw a spark of recognition—like a memory brushing the edge of a dream."
23"The voice that answered—low, clear, and distinctly amused—did not belong to a single body but to the room itself."
24"The keeper looked at me, and for a moment I thought I saw the trace of something like a smile in their expression—a smile that suggested both acknowledgment and caution."
25"The blade’s breath of cold touched my cheek; the air around us sang, a thin string of music that threaded through the grove and seemed to tie our fates to its ancient will."
26"She did not pull; she simply gripped, and with a methodical, deliberate motion she pressed the key into a small lockwork indent hidden within the pedestal's base."
27"The memory door did not swing wide; instead, it slid aside, revealing a corridor made not of air but of potential—the same corridor shown in the reflection, but now manifesting as actual passage."
28"The walls were not walls but a continuous tapestry of remembered moments—ours, theirs, and those that had never occurred but could have—woven by the grove and the will of the memory’s door."
29"The air shifted again, cooler now, and I heard a new, softer sound—a cadence, like a soft chant echoing from somewhere far away that we could not quite place."
30"The sigils did not form words but intentions—goals we had never dared to name aloud."
31"Behind them, a faint glow—like dawn caught in the teeth of a blade."
32"Not a path to victory or defeat, but a corridor of choices—the kind of corridor that would only reveal itself to those who were ready to bear the weight of what they chose."
33"The moment the doors closed behind us—quiet, inexorable, and final—the grove’s heartbeat rose to a triumphant, dangerous crescendo."
34"A crack of silence fell, and then a sudden, sharp sound split the air—a low thrum followed by the crack of a branch as if something unseen pressed against the boundary from the other side, something powerful and hungry for what we carried now."
35"Then the sound came again, closer this time—a soft, measured rustle beyond the door, a whisper that promised something terrible and necessary in equal measure."
36"From the far end of the corridor—where the double doors stood open not by fate but by choice—a figure stepped into view."
37"The figure wore garments that glowed with a spectrum of pale light, and in their eyes burned a pale, patient intelligence that looked upon us as an observer might look upon a moving spectacle—the kind of gaze that could see every thread of a tapestry and know which one would unravel us."
38"The blade in Aurora’s hand no longer felt like a mere weapon; it felt like a promise."
39"The chapter ends here, with the grove alive around us and the stranger—the keeper of memory, perhaps, perhaps simply another traveller drawn by our arrival—standing at the threshold of the memory’s door and the door to whatever future we might claim."
40"And as the figure stepped closer, the first true note of danger rang clear: we were not merely walking into a dream; we were stepping into a bargain, one that would demand everything we had and leave us with something we could not put a name to yet."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount4534
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount175
adverbRatio0.03859726510807234
lyAdverbCount31
lyAdverbRatio0.006837229819144243
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences244
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences244
mean22.36
std10.61
cv0.475
sampleLengths
024
115
219
334
425
536
618
74
831
925
1023
1113
1219
1324
1429
1514
1622
1723
1831
1916
2033
2124
2230
2319
2410
2518
2619
2724
288
2919
3030
3122
3221
3348
3423
3529
3626
3718
3822
3912
4021
4120
429
4321
4417
4520
4627
4725
4855
4914
34.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats37
diversityRatio0.22950819672131148
totalSentences244
uniqueOpeners56
97.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences206
matches
0"Then I spoke, not loudly,"
1"Then they raised a hand,"
2"Then she moved forward with"
3"Then the chant resolved into"
4"Then it opened with a"
5"Then the sound came again,"
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences206
matches
0"We were inside the The"
1"They hummed faintly, not with"
2"Their presence pressed against the"
3"I said, careful not to"
4"She was the Seer, but"
5"she whispered, not to us"
6"Her voice sounded like wind"
7"We moved forward, careful in"
8"It flickered at the edges,"
9"I knew the warmth wasn’t"
10"They spoke softly, almost in"
11"I offered, trying to keep"
12"she said, and a small"
13"We came to a glade"
14"Their form stretched along the"
15"I said, a name I"
16"She stopped herself, her gaze"
17"I whispered, fear notching a"
18"They looked like papers made"
19"They drifted on the air,"
ratio0.238
6.12% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount187
totalSentences206
matches
0"Nyx dragged us through the"
1"Aurora’s heartstone throbbed against her"
2"The grove opened around us"
3"Light poured from inside the"
4"The ground sounded like glass"
5"Fronds brushed my wrists with"
6"We were inside the The"
7"Time moved differently here."
8"An hour inside could be"
9"They hummed faintly, not with"
10"Nyx moved first, a living"
11"Their presence pressed against the"
12"Nyx’s glow—soft violet at the"
13"The fact that Nyx could"
14"I said, careful not to"
15"Rory, my friends sometimes called"
16"Tonight I wore the Fae-Forged"
17"Isolde stood a few paces"
18"She was the Seer, but"
19"The grove did not like"
ratio0.908
24.27% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences206
matches
0"If we triggered a watcher’s"
ratio0.005
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences169
technicalSentenceCount43
matches
0"Aurora’s heartstone throbbed against her chest, a warm, stubborn pulse that refused to be ignored."
1"Light poured from inside the leaves, not folded through the sun so much as breathed from within them, a pale blue-green glow that shouldn’t have existed in a pl…"
2"Fronds brushed my wrists with a chill that remembered winter and a sweetness that remembered summer; the air carried a scent that was at once like rain on iron …"
3"They hummed faintly, not with sound but with potential, a low thrumming that threaded through my teeth and settled somewhere behind my eyes."
4"Isolde stood a few paces behind us, an pale statue with silver hair brushing the edge of her waist, eyes pale lavender that seemed to see through to us and beyo…"
5"The tree carried the scent of home and exile in equal measure, a paradox that pricked at the back of my neck."
6"The ground changed beneath our feet, shifting from glass-slick to soil that felt almost alive, like a creature under our weight."
7"The Heartstone Pendant warmed against my sternum, warm and patient, pulsing in a measured rhythm that matched the cadence of the grove itself."
8"The pendant’s crimson gemstone glowed faintly, as if it understood that we were trespassers here, but would protect us if we walked with a careful heart."
9"Nyx drifted closer to me, their form bending as if listening to something that lay just beyond perception."
10"There, the trees stood a little farther apart, and between them ran a shallow stream that did not look like water but something closer to liquid light."
11"The reflection moved in ways the real world did not: the trees in the reflection breathed in the opposite tempo, the rocks glowed with a different hue, and the …"
12"The Heartstone Pendant grew brighter, and I realised it was responding to the crack, as if the Hel-bound warmth wanted to spill out into this world and show us …"
13"Nyx crouched, melding with a shadow along the ground, and then stepped forward again in the blink of an eye, their silhouette returning to a solid shape just in…"
14"The Heartstone Pendant thrummed in my hand, a warmth that spread up my forearm and into my shoulder, as if my own blood pulsed along with it."
15"The stream’s glow intensified, and the reflection in the water resolved into something else entirely—a corridor of arching trees that didn’t exist in the real w…"
16"Isolde moved beside me, her eyes narrowing as she studied the doorway without crossing it."
17"The Blood-rose at my neck—well, the one I wore as a talisman—flickered in my peripheral vision, as if trying to decide whether to spring into life and save us o…"
18"I caught sight of something beyond the archway—a silhouette, pale and almost translucent, gliding between the trees as if it had no intention of staying, yet dr…"
19"The air around us grew cooler, the glow brighter, and the ground beneath us changed again, becoming a layered mosaic of light and colour that felt not like grou…"
20"The second doorway sighed open, releasing a corridor of dream-threads that stretched into a space that had no end."
21"In the centre stood a pedestal of carved wood and bone, upon which rested a single object: a small, crystalline key—like an icicle that remembered warmth—faintl…"
22"The key radiated a soft, pale blue light, not of ice, but of something colder than ice and warmer than starlight, a paradox that slid into my chest and hummed i…"
23"Isolde moved closer to the pedestal, her gaze sweeping the room in a way that reminded me of looking into a well and seeing your own reflection multiplied in th…"
24"Nyx slid to the edge of the glass shelf encircling the pedestal, their shadow rippling along its surface with a soft hiss."
25"The key’s glow intensified as if answering a question none of us had voiced aloud, and the room’s walls, made of glass and night, carried the whisper of countle…"
26"The corridor beyond—the memory-path—stood still as if awaiting a signal."
27"The room’s air thickened, heavy with the scent of lilac and old copper again, but this time it carried a note of something sharper, something that tasted like r…"
28"The moment stretched long enough for us to feel the quiet tremble of the grove’s heart, the ambient thrumming rising into a chorus that wanted to swallow our na…"
29"The voice that answered—low, clear, and distinctly amused—did not belong to a single body but to the room itself."
30"Then she moved forward with a smooth, decisive motion, drawing the Fae-Forged Blade from its sheath with a sound that spoke of old promises and new decisions."
31"We crossed the threshold into the corridor, a place that did not belong to any map, a place that tasted of old rain and the sweetness of fear acknowledged and n…"
32"I felt the syllable land in my mind as clearly as if I had spoken it aloud, and I knew the grove had chosen us: Isolde’s truths would guide us, Nyx’s shadows wo…"
33"Here the walls pulsed with a living light, and the floor bore lines of shifting sigils that rearranged themselves under our feet as we walked."
34"And at the far end stood a final door, double doors carved from a single piece of glass that looked like water frozen in place."
35"Then it opened with a sigh of cooling wind, revealing a final, pale corridor that stretched into a glimmering distance."
36"Not a path to victory or defeat, but a corridor of choices—the kind of corridor that would only reveal itself to those who were ready to bear the weight of what…"
37"The corridor brightened, the light painting our faces with a soft, reflective glow that made our eyes seem to belong to someone else, something other."
38"A crack of silence fell, and then a sudden, sharp sound split the air—a low thrum followed by the crack of a branch as if something unseen pressed against the b…"
39"Then the sound came again, closer this time—a soft, measured rustle beyond the door, a whisper that promised something terrible and necessary in equal measure."
40"The figure wore garments that glowed with a spectrum of pale light, and in their eyes burned a pale, patient intelligence that looked upon us as an observer mig…"
41"The air thickened with the sense of something ancient awakening, something that had waited long enough for us to prove ourselves to the grove."
42"The corridor ahead glowed with a pale certainty, the kind that says, without words, that we are about to walk into something that will change us forever."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"I offered, trying to keep my voice even"
1"Isolde said, her voice quiet but clear"
2"Isolde said, her eyes shimmering with reflected light"
3"Nyx warned, their voice almost a thread in the air"
4"Isolde said, her voice almost a whisper now"
5"Isolde began, but the word halted in her throat as if the grove had pressed a hand across her mouth"
51.64% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
3"Nyx warned (warn)"
4"The words came out (come out)"
5"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.279
leniency0.557
rawRatio0.353
effectiveRatio0.197
69.3419%