Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQQSNNNKAWYP6E5TNXYHHC

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10.8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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--- The door swung shut behind him with a *thud* that echoed like a gunshot in the quiet of the Raven’s Nest. Silas Blackwood didn’t even glance back. He knew who it was before the scent of cheap whiskey and something sharper—like burnt copper—curled through the air, thick as regret. Then the barstool scraped against the floor. Silas exhaled through his nose, fingers tightening around his pint glass. The ice clinked against the sides, a slow, deliberate rhythm. He didn’t turn. Didn’t have to. The air between them had gone electric, the kind of charge that hummed in the bones. “You’re late,” he said, voice low. No greeting. No “how’ve you been?” Just the truth, stripped bare. A chair creaked as someone sat. The stool beside him. The scent of the other man—warm, familiar, like old leather and the faintest hint of something sweet, like honeyed tea—filled the space between them. “Took you long enough to notice.” Silas finally looked. And there he was. Evan Carter. No, not *Evan* anymore. The boy who’d once laughed too loud in the back of Brendan Carter’s taxi, the one who’d thrown a punch at Rory’s ex-boyfriend with the quiet confidence of a man who’d already learned how to disappear. This version of Evan had the same sharp jaw, the same dark eyes, but his hair was longer, streaked with premature silver, and his shoulders carried the weight of a man who’d spent too many nights counting the seconds until dawn. He was older. Harder. Silas’s signet ring caught the dim light from the neon sign outside, glinting like a blade. “You look like hell.” Evan’s lips twitched. Almost a smile. “And you look like you haven’t aged a day.” “That’s because I haven’t.” A beat. The kind that hung in the air like a suspended promise. Evan slid a folded envelope across the bar. Silas didn’t touch it. “What’s this?” “Insurance.” Evan’s voice was smooth, but there was a razor’s edge to it. “For the night I left you with a broken knee.” Silas’s fingers flexed. “You were seventeen.” “And you were a goddamn spy.” Evan’s eyes flicked to the hidden door, the one behind the bookshelf that led to the back room where Silas conducted business that didn’t involve ale or laughter. “Still are, aren’t you?” Silas didn’t deny it. He didn’t have to. The way Evan’s gaze darted to the shelves, the way his fingers twitched toward the envelope like he was considering burning it just to see Silas react—it was all the confirmation needed. “You always were good at reading people,” Evan said, softer now. “Even when you were too busy pretending you couldn’t.” Silas took a slow sip of his pint. The beer was warm, the kind of warmth that settled in the gut like a lead weight. “You look like you’ve been running from something.” Evan’s laugh was bitter. “Running’s all I know.” Silas studied him—the way Evan’s hands were clenched around the edge of the bar, the knuckles white, the way his breath hitched when he swallowed. “You’re not the same boy who stole my cigarettes in ’98.” “No.” Evan’s voice was a blade dragged across glass. “I’m not.” A silence settled between them, thick and suffocating. The kind that made Silas want to reach across the bar and throttle the life out of him. The kind that made Evan’s fingers tremble just a little. Then the door to the Raven’s Nest creaked open. Silas didn’t turn. He didn’t have to. He knew that scent too—the sharp tang of sweat and something sweeter, like vanilla and old books. The way the air shifted when she walked in. “Rory.” The name hung in the air like a curse. Evan’s head snapped up. His eyes locked onto the doorway, and for a second, Silas thought he’d see recognition. Hope. But all he saw was the same cold calculation that had always been there, buried beneath the boy’s laughter. Then she stepped into the light. Aurora Carter—Rory, Laila, whatever she called herself now—stood there in a fitted black dress that clung to her like a second skin, her straight black hair falling just past her shoulders. Her bright blue eyes scanned the room, sharp as a blade, before landing on Silas. Then on Evan. Her breath hitched. Silas watched her chest rise and fall, watched the way her fingers curled into the straps of her bag like she was considering throwing it at someone’s head. “What the hell are you doing here?” Evan didn’t move. Didn’t speak. He just stared at her, like he was trying to memorize every inch of her, like he was looking for something he’d lost years ago. Silas downed the rest of his pint in one swallow. “She’s been asking about you.” Evan’s gaze snapped to Silas’s. “Has she?” “Every damn day.” Rory’s fingers tightened around her bag. “You’re lying.” “Am I?” Silas leaned back against the bar, the wood groaning under his weight. “You think I’d let you walk in here without knowing you were coming?” Rory’s eyes flicked between the two of them, her breath coming faster now. “You’re both dead to me.” Evan’s lips curled into something that wasn’t quite a smile. “Good. Because we were never alive.” Silas pushed away from the bar, the stool scraping against the floor. “Come on, Rory. Let’s talk.” She didn’t move. Didn’t speak. She just stood there, her bright blue eyes locked onto Evan, like she was trying to burn a hole through him. Evan finally looked away. His gaze flicked to the envelope on the bar, then back to Rory. “You always did have a way with words.” Rory’s breath hitched. “What do you want?” Evan’s smile was slow, dangerous. “The same thing I always did.” Silas stepped between them, blocking Rory’s view of Evan. “Let’s go.” Rory didn’t argue. She didn’t have to. She followed Silas out of the bar, her heels clicking against the pavement like a metronome counting down to something she couldn’t escape. Evan watched them go, his fingers tracing the edge of the envelope like he was considering burning it. Then he looked up at the Raven’s Nest’s green neon sign, flickering like a dying heartbeat. He slid the envelope into his pocket. The door swung shut behind him. Silas didn’t turn around. He didn’t have to. He knew Evan was still there, watching. Waiting. Silas exhaled through his nose, the sound like a slow, deliberate sigh. He turned to Rory, his hazel eyes dark with something she couldn’t name. “You’re in trouble now.” Rory’s breath hitched. “What?” Silas’s gaze flicked to the hidden door, the one that led to the back room where he conducted business that didn’t involve ale or laughter. “He’s not the only one who’s been running.” Rory’s fingers curled into fists. “What does that mean?” Silas didn’t answer. He just reached for her hand, his grip firm, his fingers warm. “Come on. Let’s talk.” Rory followed him inside, her heart pounding like a drum in her chest. The hidden door swung shut behind them.
total_cost0.0005885

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Silas leaned back [back]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.051
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1188
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1188
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"electric"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"carried the weight"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count4
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"scanned"
count1
10
word"tracing"
count1
11
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"electric"
2"familiar"
3"carried the weight"
4"glinting"
5"flicked"
6"warmth"
7"weight"
8"silence"
9"scanned"
10"tracing"
11"pounding"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count2
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences99
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1180
ratio0.002
matches
0"thud"
1"Evan"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions77
wordCount991
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.62
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Raven3
Nest3
Blackwood1
Carter3
Brendan1
Rory12
Evan24
Silas26
Laila1
Didn3
persons
0"Nest"
1"Blackwood"
2"Carter"
3"Brendan"
4"Rory"
5"Evan"
6"Silas"
7"Laila"
places(empty)
globalScore0.188
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite a smile"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1180
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences131
matches
0"knew that scent"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean18.44
std15.34
cv0.832
sampleLengths
01
149
27
343
417
534
66
77
82
981
104
1120
1215
134
1413
1514
1623
176
1838
1940
2020
2133
228
2336
2411
2536
269
2733
281
299
3039
316
3249
333
3435
3530
3615
377
383
398
4027
4118
4216
4317
4426
4525
467
4711
4811
4930
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"were clenched"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs180
matches
0"was considering"
1"was considering"
2"was trying was looking"
3"was trying"
4"was considering"
12.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences131
ratio0.046
matches
0"He knew who it was before the scent of cheap whiskey and something sharper—like burnt copper—curled through the air, thick as regret."
1"The scent of the other man—warm, familiar, like old leather and the faintest hint of something sweet, like honeyed tea—filled the space between them."
2"The way Evan’s gaze darted to the shelves, the way his fingers twitched toward the envelope like he was considering burning it just to see Silas react—it was all the confirmation needed."
3"Silas studied him—the way Evan’s hands were clenched around the edge of the bar, the knuckles white, the way his breath hitched when he swallowed."
4"He knew that scent too—the sharp tang of sweat and something sweeter, like vanilla and old books."
5"Aurora Carter—Rory, Laila, whatever she called herself now—stood there in a fitted black dress that clung to her like a second skin, her straight black hair falling just past her shoulders."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1000
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.036
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean9
std7.99
cv0.888
sampleLengths
021
16
222
37
411
510
63
73
816
96
102
119
126
134
1424
156
163
174
182
194
2036
2141
223
231
2416
254
263
273
289
294
302
3111
328
334
342
3513
3610
373
383
3934
404
414
424
4332
4411
459
468
4717
488
494
45.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.2748091603053435
totalSentences131
uniqueOpeners36
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences91
matches
0"Then the barstool scraped against"
1"Almost a smile."
2"Then the door to the"
3"Then she stepped into the"
4"Then on Evan."
5"Then he looked up at"
ratio0.066
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences91
matches
0"He knew who it was"
1"He didn’t turn."
2"he said, voice low"
3"He was older."
4"He didn’t have to."
5"He didn’t have to."
6"He knew that scent too—the"
7"His eyes locked onto the"
8"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
9"Her breath hitched."
10"He just stared at her,"
11"She didn’t move."
12"She just stood there, her"
13"His gaze flicked to the"
14"She didn’t have to."
15"She followed Silas out of"
16"He slid the envelope into"
17"He didn’t have to."
18"He knew Evan was still"
19"He turned to Rory, his"
ratio0.231
20.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences91
matches
0"The door swung shut behind"
1"Silas Blackwood didn’t even glance"
2"He knew who it was"
3"Silas exhaled through his nose,"
4"The ice clinked against the"
5"He didn’t turn."
6"The air between them had"
7"he said, voice low"
8"A chair creaked as someone"
9"The stool beside him."
10"The scent of the other"
11"Silas finally looked."
12"The boy who’d once laughed"
13"This version of Evan had"
14"He was older."
15"Silas’s signet ring caught the"
16"Evan’s lips twitched."
17"The kind that hung in"
18"Evan slid a folded envelope"
19"Silas didn’t touch it."
ratio0.879
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
ratio0
3.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The boy who’d once laughed too loud in the back of Brendan Carter’s taxi, the one who’d thrown a punch at Rory’s ex-boyfriend with the quiet confidence of a man…"
1"This version of Evan had the same sharp jaw, the same dark eyes, but his hair was longer, streaked with premature silver, and his shoulders carried the weight o…"
2"The kind that made Evan’s fingers tremble just a little."
3"But all he saw was the same cold calculation that had always been there, buried beneath the boy’s laughter."
4"Aurora Carter—Rory, Laila, whatever she called herself now—stood there in a fitted black dress that clung to her like a second skin, her straight black hair fal…"
5"She followed Silas out of the bar, her heels clicking against the pavement like a metronome counting down to something she couldn’t escape."
6"Evan watched them go, his fingers tracing the edge of the envelope like he was considering burning it."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, voice low"
1"Silas leaned back, the wood groaning under his weight"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.051
leniency0.103
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
73.2606%