Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQQSNPD64DZX3CHSZCVYTR

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12.4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The door swung open before the first knock had fully landed, splintering the silence like a gunshot. The air inside hit her like a physical blow—warm, thick with the scent of spiced tea and something sharper, like old leather and gunpowder. Rory froze on the threshold, her fingers tightening around the worn leather satchel she’d been carrying, its edges digging into her palm. “Fuck’s sake, Eva,” she muttered, stepping back instinctively. The flat’s entrance was a mess of half-open books, scrolls tangled around a half-empty whiskey glass, and the faintest glow of a candle flickering somewhere in the back. “You *know* I don’t do unannounced.” A shadow detached itself from the chaos, moving with the lazy grace of a man who’d spent too long in rooms where the walls listened. Lucien Moreau stood there, his cane tapping once against the floorboards before he set it down with deliberate precision. The amber eye caught the candlelight first, then the black, like a living storm front. His suit was immaculate—charcoal, tailored to the point of being sculptural—and yet there was something about the way he held himself that made her think of a wolf in a tailored coat. “Rory.” His voice was smooth, but there was an edge to it, like a blade wrapped in silk. “I’m not here for tea.” She exhaled sharply, her shoulders tensing. “Then what the hell are you doing here?” Lucien didn’t answer right away. Instead, he reached into his jacket and pulled out a manila envelope, sliding it across the table with a flourish. The corner of it was slightly singed, as if he’d been holding it near a flame. “A little insurance,” he said. “Against your *enthusiastic* departure from my last job.” Rory’s stomach dropped. She knew that envelope. Knew the weight of it, the way the paper felt against her skin when she’d been forced to sign things she didn’t understand. “You’re threatening me.” “No.” His lips curled, just slightly. “I’m reminding you of our arrangement.” She grabbed the envelope, her fingers brushing against something inside—paper, thin and brittle. A contract, probably. The kind that had her name on it in ink that wasn’t hers to sign. “You’re late,” she said, her voice colder than she intended. “I thought you’d have forgotten by now.” Lucien’s gaze flicked to the scar on her wrist, the one she’d tried to hide beneath her sleeve. “Forgotten?” He chuckled, low and dark. “Darling, I never forget.” The air between them crackled. It wasn’t just the tension—it was something older, something that had been simmering beneath the surface since the last time they’d been this close. The last time she’d let herself believe he might actually care. “You’re bleeding,” he observed, nodding at the crescent-shaped scar. “Must’ve been a rough night.” Rory’s hand flew to her wrist, but it was too late. The movement was instinctive, a reflex born of years of flinching at the wrong touch. “It’s nothing.” “Mmm.” Lucien leaned against the table, his cane forgotten. “It looks like a bite.” Her breath hitched. “What the *fuck* are you—” “A demon’s,” he cut in, voice dropping to something that made her skin prickle. “Or something like one. You’ve got the marks.” She stared at him, her pulse hammering in her throat. “You’re insane.” “Am I?” He reached out, his fingers brushing the inside of her wrist—not touching, just hovering, like he was testing the air. “Or are you just *good* at hiding it?” Rory jerked back, but it was too late. The scent of copper filled the air, sharp and metallic. She’d cut herself—somehow, in the chaos of the moment, she’d torn the skin open. A thin line of blood welled up, dark and glistening. Lucien’s eyes darkened. “You’re lying to me, Rory.” “About what?” She swallowed hard, her voice shaking. “That I don’t know what the hell I’m doing half the time?” “No.” He stepped closer, his presence swallowing the space between them. “About *this*.” His hand shot out, fingers closing around her wrist before she could react. The touch was electric, searing through her skin like a brand. She gasped, her body arching away from him, but his grip was iron. “You’re not human,” he murmured, his breath hot against her ear. “Not entirely.” Rory’s vision swam. The flat tilted around her, the walls closing in. She could feel the weight of his gaze, the way it burned into her like a second skin. “Let go of me,” she whispered, her voice breaking. Lucien didn’t answer. Instead, he tilted her wrist, exposing the scar to the light. The skin around it was slightly raised, the color a little too pale, like it had been stretched too thin. “You’ve been hiding this for years,” he said, his voice a low rumble. “Why?” She didn’t answer. She couldn’t. The question hung between them, heavy and suffocating, like a noose tightening around her throat. Lucien’s grip loosened, just slightly. “Because you’re afraid,” he said softly. “Afraid of what it means. Afraid of what I might do to you.” Rory’s breath hitched. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” “Do I not?” He stepped back, his voice dropping to something that made her shiver. “I know you ran from me, Rory. I know you left London like it was on fire. I know you took a job delivering food for a restaurant that wasn’t yours, just to get away from *me*.” She flinched. “That’s not—” “Isn’t it?” He crossed his arms, his gaze never leaving hers. “You think I don’t know about the scar? The one you got from a childhood accident? The one that’s been bleeding for days now.” Rory’s stomach twisted. “You’re lying.” “Am I?” He reached into his jacket again, pulling out a small, leather-bound journal. The pages were filled with neat, precise handwriting—dates, times, observations. And at the bottom of one page, a single sentence: *“She’s been bitten. Again.”* Her breath caught. “You’ve been watching me.” “Of course I have.” His voice was calm, almost amused. “You’re mine to protect, remember?” Rory’s heart pounded in her chest. “You don’t *own* me.” “No.” He closed the journal, his gaze never leaving hers. “But I do know things about you that you don’t even know yourself.” She swallowed hard, her fingers curling into fists. “What do you want?” Lucien’s lips curled into a slow, dangerous smile. “The same thing I always want, Rory.” He reached out, his fingers brushing the scar on her wrist. “To make sure you’re safe.” She flinched away, but it was too late. The touch had already seared into her skin, leaving a mark that would never fade. “You’re delusional.” “Am I?” He stepped closer, his presence swallowing the space between them. “Or are you just *good* at hiding what you really want?” Rory’s breath hitched. She could feel the weight of his gaze, the way it burned into her like a second skin. “I don’t know what you’re talking about.” Lucien’s lips curled into a slow, dangerous smile. “Yes, you do.” And then he kissed her. It wasn’t gentle. It wasn’t soft. It was a storm, a hurricane of teeth and tongue and something wild and untamed. Rory gasped, her body arching into him, her fingers tangling in his hair. She could feel the heat of him, the way his body pressed against hers, demanding, claiming. And she let him. Because she’d been lying to herself for years. Because she’d been running from this for just as long. And because, deep down, she’d always known he was the only one who could make her feel alive. Lucien pulled back, his breath hot against her lips. “You’re mine, Rory,” he murmured, his voice rough with desire. “And I’m not letting you go this time.” She didn’t answer. She couldn’t. Because she knew he was right. And because she was already lost.
total_cost0.0006065

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"His lips curled just [just]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
2"He stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.371
leniency0.742
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.097
73.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1321
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count4
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slightly"
2"softly"
3"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1321
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count2
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"tension"
count1
6
word"simmering"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count1
9
word"electric"
count1
10
word"searing"
count1
11
word"could feel"
count3
12
word"desire"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"silk"
2"stomach"
3"weight"
4"flicked"
5"tension"
6"simmering"
7"pulse"
8"glistening"
9"electric"
10"searing"
11"could feel"
12"desire"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
98.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences97
filterMatches
0"think"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords12
totalWords1309
ratio0.009
matches
0"know"
1"enthusiastic"
2"fuck"
3"good"
4"this"
5"me"
6"“She’s been bitten. Again.”"
7"own"
8"good"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.39% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount988
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Rory10
Lucien10
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore0.994
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1309
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"knew that envelope"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean24.7
std18.02
cv0.73
sampleLengths
01
163
242
391
423
514
654
733
812
948
1028
1140
1214
1328
1414
158
1622
1712
1830
1942
208
2120
2213
2350
2439
2548
2620
2724
2810
2952
304
3135
325
3338
347
3515
3610
3723
3812
3931
4025
4123
4228
4311
445
4550
464
478
4810
4918
94.41% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences97
matches
0"been forced"
1"been stretched"
2"were filled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs186
matches
0"was testing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences134
ratio0.052
matches
0"The air inside hit her like a physical blow—warm, thick with the scent of spiced tea and something sharper, like old leather and gunpowder."
1"His suit was immaculate—charcoal, tailored to the point of being sculptural—and yet there was something about the way he held himself that made her think of a wolf in a tailored coat."
2"She grabbed the envelope, her fingers brushing against something inside—paper, thin and brittle."
3"It wasn’t just the tension—it was something older, something that had been simmering beneath the surface since the last time they’d been this close."
4"“Am I?” He reached out, his fingers brushing the inside of her wrist—not touching, just hovering, like he was testing the air."
5"She’d cut herself—somehow, in the chaos of the moment, she’d torn the skin open."
6"The pages were filled with neat, precise handwriting—dates, times, observations."
86.17% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1001
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, leather-bound journal."
adverbCount49
adverbRatio0.04895104895104895
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.01098901098901099
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean9.76
std6.78
cv0.694
sampleLengths
017
124
222
38
428
56
625
719
815
932
1018
115
126
138
145
1520
1616
175
188
193
204
2123
223
236
246
2513
263
2715
2810
297
3018
316
324
335
3424
3511
369
375
3811
3915
402
419
425
433
445
4514
468
4710
482
4922
45.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.27611940298507465
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners37
71.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"Instead, he reached into his"
1"Instead, he tilted her wrist,"
ratio0.022
35.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences93
matches
0"she muttered, stepping back instinctively"
1"His suit was immaculate—charcoal, tailored"
2"His voice was smooth, but"
3"She exhaled sharply, her shoulders"
4"She knew that envelope."
5"His lips curled, just slightly"
6"She grabbed the envelope, her"
7"she said, her voice colder"
8"He chuckled, low and dark"
9"It wasn’t just the tension—it"
10"he observed, nodding at the"
11"Her breath hitched."
12"he cut in, voice dropping"
13"She stared at him, her"
14"He reached out, his fingers"
15"She’d cut herself—somehow, in the"
16"She swallowed hard, her voice"
17"He stepped closer, his presence"
18"His hand shot out, fingers"
19"She gasped, her body arching"
ratio0.462
19.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount82
totalSentences93
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"The air inside hit her"
2"Rory froze on the threshold,"
3"she muttered, stepping back instinctively"
4"The flat’s entrance was a"
5"A shadow detached itself from"
6"Lucien Moreau stood there, his"
7"The amber eye caught the"
8"His suit was immaculate—charcoal, tailored"
9"His voice was smooth, but"
10"She exhaled sharply, her shoulders"
11"Lucien didn’t answer right away."
12"The corner of it was"
13"Rory’s stomach dropped."
14"She knew that envelope."
15"His lips curled, just slightly"
16"She grabbed the envelope, her"
17"A contract, probably."
18"The kind that had her"
19"she said, her voice colder"
ratio0.882
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences93
matches
0"Because she’d been lying to"
1"Because she’d been running from"
2"Because she knew he was"
ratio0.032
65.64% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Rory froze on the threshold, her fingers tightening around the worn leather satchel she’d been carrying, its edges digging into her palm."
1"His suit was immaculate—charcoal, tailored to the point of being sculptural—and yet there was something about the way he held himself that made her think of a w…"
2"It wasn’t just the tension—it was something older, something that had been simmering beneath the surface since the last time they’d been this close."
3"Rory gasped, her body arching into him, her fingers tangling in his hair."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount12
matches
0"she said, her voice colder than she intended"
1"Lucien leaned, his cane forgotten"
2"he cut in, voice dropping to something that made her skin prickle"
3"She swallowed, her voice shaking"
4"He stepped, his presence swallowing the space between them"
5"he murmured, his breath hot against her ear"
6"she whispered, her voice breaking"
7"he said, his voice a low rumble"
8"He stepped back, his voice dropping to something that made her shiver"
9"He reached out, his fingers brushing the scar on her wrist"
10"He stepped, his presence swallowing the space between them"
11"he murmured, his voice rough with desire"
53.23% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"He chuckled (chuckle)"
2"he observed (observe)"
3"he murmured (murmur)"
4"she whispered (whisper)"
5"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.161
leniency0.323
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.194
78.0317%