Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQQSNT6KBB4DHCY053157G

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18.0s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Aurora Carter, as I live and breathe." Silas Blackwood leaned against the varnished oak bar, the familiar scent of whisky mingling with a hint of aftershave. His eyes glinted beneath the soft glow of the overhead lamps, reflecting the old maps and photographs lining the walls. Rory, or Aurora as Silas insisted on calling her in his formal manner, hadn't noticed him at first. She was wrapped in the comforting anonymity of Soho's hustle and bustle—until his voice cut through the din. She turned slowly, her bright blue eyes locking onto his hazel ones with a mix of surprise and familiarity. "Silas," she said, a smile formed across her lips. Her voice carried the lilting rhythm of Cardiff, a trace of her roots not quite washed away by London life. "It's been ages," Silas remarked, his auburn hair now flecked with more grey than Rory remembered. He stood with the same dignity as always, a testament to years spent in the shadows of espionage. The slight limp betrayed his past, a walking memento from Prague. But time had etched deeper lines on his face than before, carving stories no one dared ask about. "Time has its way, doesn’t it?" Rory replied, folding her arms over her chest. She casually brushed a lock of straight, black hair behind her ear. They were standing in the heart of The Raven’s Nest, a sanctuary amid swirling smoke and murmured secrets. The bar seemed unchanged, its neon sign gleaming defiantly above the entrance. "Did you get lost on your way back, or is someone from your past playing tricks?" Silas chuckled, waving a hand down the length of the bar. "Yu-Fei over at Golden Empress still keeping you busy?" Rory shrugged. "London's hectic but it keeps me moving forward. Better than looking back." Silas nodded, watching as Rory scanned the room with practiced eyes. She seemed different—tougher, more resolved. The small crescent scar on her wrist was barely visible, yet it was a silent reminder of things she'd left behind. "It's curious, seeing you here today. What brings you back to the Nest?" "A whim," Rory admitted, laughing lightly. "You know how nights are. Thought I'd check in on old friends." She had once sought solace in this dimly lit sanctuary, escaping Evan’s shadows—each corner of this place whispered a story she hardly dared touch upon. "Care for a drink?" Silas gestured, motioning to Ethan, the bartender who nodded knowingly. "I’ll have whatever’s strong," Rory said, glancing around. Patrons sat in small knots, mingling over whispered conversations. Her flats trod softly on the wooden floor, years of London life refined every movement. Silas watched, contemplating the changes in Rory. "I remember your penchant for drinks with umbrellas. Guess those days are gone?" "Life's stripped a lot of frills away," Rory absently traced the rim of the glass Ethan handed over. "The basics are what matter now." "Heard anything from Eva these days?" Silas asked, cautiously broaching the topic. Eva—a link to Rory's past—had coaxed Rory to London, offering refuge when escape seemed impossible. "Occasional texts," Rory replied. She hesitated, glancing at her glass but then away again. Memories of lost laughter clung to the edge of her consciousness. "She's doing well, living her life." Silas nodded, keeping the conversation rolling effortlessly. "Have you thought about returning to Cardiff?" Rory shook her head firmly. "There’s nothing left for me there except ghosts." But as the words slipped through her lips, she wasn't so sure anymore. London had given her streets to run on and paths to tread, yet shadows found a way of catching up. "You can't outrun everything, you know," Silas' voice was softer, edged with understanding. Rory met his gaze, something unsaid flickering between them. "You tried once. Didn’t last forever, did it?" Silas smiled ruefully. "No, it didn't. Prague taught me that when the bell tolls, it tolls for thee." A silence settled between them, heavy yet not wholly uncomfortable. Old friendship held it there, like lead weighted down by time—and the undeniable understanding that neither could entirely escape the past. While people might wear different skins, circumstances sometimes unwittingly unravel what they endeavored to keep hidden. As the night deepened, patrons moved around them in familiar patterns—the ebb and flow seemed almost orchestrated. Rory felt herself drawn into the rhythm, though she stood on the threshold of choices unmade. Silas spoke, "So what now, Aurora? What’s next in this maze of yours?" Rory pondered, her gaze drifting from Silas to the patrons inhabiting The Raven’s Nest. "Nothing's set in stone. Shoulders to the wheel, see where the wind takes me." "Sounds risky," Silas commented. Yet admiration shone in his eyes—perhaps for the freedom Rory pursued in her own quiet rebellion against life’s binds. "And here you are," Rory replied gently, "carrying keys to locks on your shelf." Her eyes flickered towards the secret room, where whispers met intent and nothing was ever truly as it seemed. Silas grinned. "A place for everything, and everything in its place." Their conversation lapsed into a comfortable silence, interrupted only by the low hum of bar banter and clinking glasses. The Raven's Nest stood resonant with echoes of lives experienced and promises abandoned. Rory's thoughts drifted, contemplating paths taken—choices that looped back like circling birds over forgotten shores. Finally, Rory took a deep breath, sealing away half-spoken regrets. "Perhaps I'll take a stroll through the city later. Seems like it's the only peace I get." Silas eyed her thoughtfully. "London's a sprawling old friend. Just watch your back as you walk its streets." Rory nodded, sipping her drink as the warmth spread, sealing the promise in a quiet camaraderie. The night was theirs, shared over the uneasy bond of memory and the ties of unspoken understanding—two lives converging briefly in the tangled threads of history.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She had once [once]"
1"Rory replied gently [gently]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.133
64.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount982
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"knowingly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"cautiously"
count1
5
adverb"gently"
count1
6
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"lightly"
2"knowingly"
3"softly"
4"cautiously"
5"gently"
6"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount982
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"comforting"
count1
2
word"testament"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"sanctuary"
count2
5
word"gleaming"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"resolved"
count1
8
word"reminder"
count1
9
word"solace"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"firmly"
count1
12
word"silence"
count2
13
word"unravel"
count1
14
word"flickered"
count1
15
word"comfortable"
count1
16
word"echoes"
count1
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"comforting"
2"testament"
3"etched"
4"sanctuary"
5"gleaming"
6"scanned"
7"resolved"
8"reminder"
9"solace"
10"traced"
11"firmly"
12"silence"
13"unravel"
14"flickered"
15"comfortable"
16"echoes"
17"warmth"
18"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences72
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords970
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount712
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.95
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Blackwood1
Aurora1
Silas15
Soho1
Cardiff1
London4
Rory21
Prague1
Raven3
Nest3
Evan1
Ethan2
Patrons1
Eva1
persons
0"Blackwood"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Evan"
6"Ethan"
7"Patrons"
8"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Prague"
globalScore0.025
windowScore0
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"not quite washed away by London life"
1"seemed unchanged its neon sign gleaming defiantly above the entrance"
2"seemed impossible"
3"seemed almost orchestrated"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount970
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
96.30% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean30.31
std14.76
cv0.487
sampleLengths
07
139
255
329
463
556
636
714
850
943
1014
1132
1220
1324
1427
1531
1614
1746
1813
1917
2018
2147
2233
2313
2428
2523
2633
2711
2847
2927
3018
3142
99.11% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"was wrapped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs134
matches
0"were standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences72
ratio0.125
matches
0"She was wrapped in the comforting anonymity of Soho's hustle and bustle—until his voice cut through the din."
1"She seemed different—tougher, more resolved."
2"\"You know how nights are. Thought I'd check in on old friends.\" She had once sought solace in this dimly lit sanctuary, escaping Evan’s shadows—each corner of this place whispered a story she hardly dared touch upon."
3"Eva—a link to Rory's past—had coaxed Rory to London, offering refuge when escape seemed impossible."
4"Old friendship held it there, like lead weighted down by time—and the undeniable understanding that neither could entirely escape the past."
5"As the night deepened, patrons moved around them in familiar patterns—the ebb and flow seemed almost orchestrated."
6"Yet admiration shone in his eyes—perhaps for the freedom Rory pursued in her own quiet rebellion against life’s binds."
7"Rory's thoughts drifted, contemplating paths taken—choices that looped back like circling birds over forgotten shores."
8"The night was theirs, shared over the uneasy bond of memory and the ties of unspoken understanding—two lives converging briefly in the tangled threads of history."
81.71% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount542
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.055350553505535055
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.025830258302583026
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences72
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences72
mean13.47
std6.69
cv0.497
sampleLengths
07
119
220
318
418
519
69
720
816
918
1011
1118
1214
1312
1418
1512
1627
179
182
1912
2011
215
2221
2313
246
2537
2614
278
289
2915
307
3113
3218
336
3412
3515
364
3710
3811
396
407
417
425
4321
4420
4513
469
478
483
4915
86.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5277777777777778
totalSentences72
uniqueOpeners38
64.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"Finally, Rory took a deep"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences52
matches
0"His eyes glinted beneath the"
1"She was wrapped in the"
2"She turned slowly, her bright"
3"she said, a smile formed"
4"Her voice carried the lilting"
5"He stood with the same"
6"She casually brushed a lock"
7"They were standing in the"
8"She seemed different—tougher, more resolved."
9"She had once sought solace"
10"Her flats trod softly on"
11"She hesitated, glancing at her"
12"Their conversation lapsed into a"
ratio0.25
27.31% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences52
matches
0"Silas Blackwood leaned against the"
1"His eyes glinted beneath the"
2"Rory, or Aurora as Silas"
3"She was wrapped in the"
4"She turned slowly, her bright"
5"she said, a smile formed"
6"Her voice carried the lilting"
7"Silas remarked, his auburn hair"
8"He stood with the same"
9"The slight limp betrayed his"
10"Rory replied, folding her arms"
11"She casually brushed a lock"
12"They were standing in the"
13"The bar seemed unchanged, its"
14"Silas chuckled, waving a hand"
15"Silas nodded, watching as Rory"
16"She seemed different—tougher, more resolved."
17"The small crescent scar on"
18"Rory admitted, laughing lightly"
19"She had once sought solace"
ratio0.865
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"While people might wear different"
ratio0.019
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory pondered, her gaze drifting from Silas to the patrons inhabiting The Raven’s Nest."
1"Rory's thoughts drifted, contemplating paths taken—choices that looped back like circling birds over forgotten shores."
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, a smile formed across her lips"
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Silas chuckled (chuckle)"
1"Rory admitted (admit)"
2"Silas spoke (speak)"
3"Silas commented (comment)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.267
76.2942%