Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQR7MZFSNQHD2AGD1DGW5M

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Duration:
39.6s
Cost:
$0.020096

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before I could even knock. Rory stood there, her bright blue eyes wide, a takeaway bag from Golden Empress clutched in one hand. The scent of soy sauce and five-spice powder curled into the hallway, mixing with the faint musk of old books and the curry spices seeping up from the restaurant below. Her black hair was pulled into a messy bun, a few strands escaping to frame her face. The crescent scar on her left wrist caught the light as she shifted her grip on the bag. "Lucien." My name came out flat, all the warmth of a court summons. "Rory." I leaned against the doorframe, my ivory-handled cane tapping lightly against the worn floorboards. "You're looking well." "Bullshit." She didn't step aside. "What do you want?" I held up a manila envelope, its edges frayed from too much handling. "Information. About Evan." Her fingers tightened around the takeaway bag. The paper crinkled, a sharp sound in the tense silence. "I don't need your help." "Don't you?" I tilted my head, letting my heterochromatic gaze—one amber, one black—linger on her face. "Because last I checked, he's still sending you letters. And not the romantic kind." Rory's jaw clenched. She didn't deny it. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, wound around my ankles, purring like a motorboat. I nudged him gently with my cane. "Mind if I come in? Or would you rather discuss this in the hallway where your neighbors can enjoy the show?" She hesitated, then stepped back, her shoulder brushing against the doorframe as she let me pass. The flat was exactly as I remembered—every surface buried under books, scrolls, and research notes. A half-empty mug of tea sat on the coffee table, next to a stack of case files. The air smelled of bergamot and old paper. Rory dumped the takeaway bag on the kitchen counter and turned to face me, arms crossed. "Talk. Then leave." I set the envelope on the table between us. "Evan's been making inquiries. About you. About your routine. About where you work." Her eyes flicked to the envelope, then back to me. "How do you know this?" "I have my sources." I tapped the envelope. "And they're not the kind that appreciate being ignored." She didn't reach for it. "Why now? Why bring this to me after all this time?" "Because he's escalating." I kept my voice even, but my fingers tightened around the handle of my cane. "He's not just sending letters anymore. He's asking questions. The wrong kind of questions." Rory exhaled sharply, her breath ruffling the loose strands of hair around her face. "I can handle Evan." "Can you?" I stepped closer, close enough to see the flecks of gold in her irises. "Because last time, you ran. And now you're hiding behind deadbolts and takeaway deliveries." Her chin lifted. "I'm not hiding." "No?" I gestured to the three deadbolts on the front door. "Then what do you call this?" She didn't answer. I sighed, running a hand through my slicked-back hair. "Rory, I'm not here to fight. I'm here because I can help. But you have to let me." She studied me for a long moment, her gaze searching. Then, without a word, she reached for the envelope. Her fingers brushed against mine as she took it, and I felt the jolt of it like a live wire. She opened the envelope and pulled out a stack of photographs. Surveillance shots. Rory at the Golden Empress, Rory walking home from the tube, Rory sitting in a café with Eva. The last one was a close-up of her scarred wrist, the crescent mark stark against her skin. Her breath hitched. I watched her face, the way her lips pressed into a thin line, the way her fingers trembled slightly as she flipped through the photos. "He's been watching you," I said quietly. "For weeks." She didn't look up. "Why didn't you tell me sooner?" "Would you have listened?" She finally met my eyes, and the hurt in them was like a punch to the gut. "No." I nodded, accepting the truth of it. "Then I'm telling you now." She set the photos down and turned away, her back rigid. "I don't need your protection, Lucien." "I know." I stepped closer, close enough to see the way her shoulders tensed. "But you have it anyway." She whirled around, her eyes flashing. "Why? After everything, why do you even care?" I didn't answer right away. Instead, I reached out, my fingers brushing against the scar on her wrist. She didn't pull away. "Because I made a mistake," I said softly. "And I don't intend to make it again." Her breath caught. "What mistake?" I cupped her face, my thumb tracing the line of her jaw. "Letting you go." She stared at me, her bright blue eyes wide and unguarded. For a moment, neither of us moved. Then she stepped back, breaking the contact. "You don't get to say that. Not after—" "Not after what?" I challenged, my voice low. "Not after I walked away? Not after I let you think you were alone in this?" "Yes!" Her voice cracked. "You left, Lucien. You left, and you didn't look back." I closed the distance between us again, my hands gripping her shoulders. "I looked back every damn day." She shook her head, her eyes glistening. "Don't." "I have to." My voice was rough. "Because I can't—" I cut myself off, my grip tightening. "I can't watch you get hurt. Not again." She swallowed hard, her gaze dropping to my chest. "What do you want from me?" "I want you to let me in." I tilted her chin up, forcing her to meet my eyes. "I want you to trust me." She let out a shaky breath. "Trust isn't something I give easily." "I know." I brushed a strand of hair away from her face. "But I'm asking for it anyway." She was quiet for a long moment, her eyes searching mine. Then, slowly, she nodded. "Fine. But I'm not some damsel in distress. If you're going to help, you do it on my terms." I smiled, just a little. "Wouldn't have it any other way." She stepped back, putting space between us. "Then start by telling me what you know. Everything." I nodded, pulling out a chair and sitting down. She followed suit, her movements stiff. I reached for the envelope, pulling out a few more documents—a list of Evan's recent purchases, a transcript of a phone call, a map with red pins marking Rory's usual routes. As I spread them out on the table, Rory leaned forward, her expression shifting from hurt to focus. "He bought a plane ticket," she said, pointing to one of the documents. I nodded. "To Cardiff. For tomorrow." Her eyes snapped to mine. "He's going after my family." "It looks that way." She stood abruptly, her chair scraping against the floor. "I have to warn them." I stood too, blocking her path. "Not alone, you don't." She glared at me. "I don't need a babysitter, Lucien." "I'm not offering to babysit." I stepped closer, my voice low. "I'm offering to go with you. As backup." She hesitated, her gaze flicking to the door, then back to me. "Why?" "Because I care about you, Rory." I reached out, my hand covering hers. "And because I'm not letting you face this alone." She looked down at our hands, then back up at me. "You really mean that, don't you?" I squeezed her hand. "Every word." She took a deep breath, then nodded. "Fine. But we leave tonight. Before he does." I smiled, just a little. "Tonight it is." She turned away, grabbing her coat from the back of the chair. As she pulled it on, I watched her, the way her hands shook just slightly as she buttoned it up. She was scared. And she had every right to be. But she wasn't alone. Not anymore. I grabbed my cane and followed her to the door. As she reached for the deadbolts, I put a hand on her shoulder. "Rory." She turned, her eyes meeting mine. "We'll get through this," I said quietly. "Together." She nodded, her expression softening just a little. Then she turned back to the door, unlocking it with quick, efficient movements. As we stepped out into the hallway, the door clicking shut behind us, I knew one thing for certain. This wasn't just about Evan. This was about us. And I wasn't letting her go again.
total_cost0.020096

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"I said quietly [quietly]"
1"I said softly [softly]"
2"I said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.26
leniency0.519
rawRatio0.15
effectiveRatio0.078
72.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count2
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
6
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"gently"
2"sharply"
3"slightly"
4"softly"
5"slowly"
6"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.64% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"jaw clenched"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"stark"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count1
6
word"tracing"
count1
7
word"glistening"
count1
8
word"efficient"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"jaw clenched"
3"flicked"
4"stark"
5"trembled"
6"tracing"
7"glistening"
8"efficient"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences104
matches
0"felt the jolt"
1"was scared"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences104
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences160
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1426
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount987
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.91
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden2
Empress2
Rory9
Eva2
Evan2
persons
0"Empress"
1"Rory"
2"Eva"
3"Evan"
places
0"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1426
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences160
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs76
mean18.76
std13.83
cv0.737
sampleLengths
09
183
213
318
49
516
622
730
87
940
1056
1119
1222
1315
1417
1516
1632
1718
1830
196
2017
213
2227
2339
2448
253
2634
2710
284
2918
3012
3117
3219
3314
3438
355
3615
3733
3824
3914
4018
418
4225
4315
4424
4512
4618
4734
4811
4916
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"was pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs188
matches
0"wasn't letting"
89.29% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences160
ratio0.019
matches
0"\"Don't you?\" I tilted my head, letting my heterochromatic gaze—one amber, one black—linger on her face."
1"The flat was exactly as I remembered—every surface buried under books, scrolls, and research notes."
2"I reached for the envelope, pulling out a few more documents—a list of Evan's recent purchases, a transcript of a phone call, a map with red pins marking Rory's usual routes."
82.29% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount996
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount60
adverbRatio0.060240963855421686
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.012048192771084338
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences160
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences160
mean8.91
std5.64
cv0.633
sampleLengths
09
118
230
317
418
513
615
73
85
94
1013
113
127
1310
145
1516
1614
173
184
1912
207
2121
2216
2315
2417
258
2616
273
289
2913
3010
315
328
339
345
3511
3618
3714
3814
394
4016
4114
423
433
4411
456
463
479
4818
4910
45.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.26875
totalSentences160
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences101
matches
0"Then, without a word, she"
1"Instead, I reached out, my"
2"Then she stepped back, breaking"
3"Then, slowly, she nodded."
4"Then she turned back to"
ratio0.05
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount72
totalSentences101
matches
0"Her black hair was pulled"
1"My name came out flat,"
2"I leaned against the doorframe,"
3"She didn't step aside"
4"I held up a manila"
5"Her fingers tightened around the"
6"I tilted my head, letting"
7"She didn't deny it."
8"I nudged him gently with"
9"She hesitated, then stepped back,"
10"I set the envelope on"
11"Her eyes flicked to the"
12"I tapped the envelope"
13"She didn't reach for it."
14"I kept my voice even,"
15"I stepped closer, close enough"
16"Her chin lifted."
17"I gestured to the three"
18"She didn't answer."
19"I sighed, running a hand"
ratio0.713
24.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences101
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Rory stood there, her bright"
2"The scent of soy sauce"
3"Her black hair was pulled"
4"The crescent scar on her"
5"My name came out flat,"
6"I leaned against the doorframe,"
7"She didn't step aside"
8"I held up a manila"
9"Her fingers tightened around the"
10"The paper crinkled, a sharp"
11"I tilted my head, letting"
12"Rory's jaw clenched."
13"She didn't deny it."
14"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, wound"
15"I nudged him gently with"
16"She hesitated, then stepped back,"
17"The flat was exactly as"
18"A half-empty mug of tea"
19"The air smelled of bergamot"
ratio0.871
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"I kept, but my fingers tightened around the handle of my cane"
1"I challenged, my voice low"
2"I cut, my grip tightening"
3"I stepped, my voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I challenged (challenge)"
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.065
leniency0.13
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.026
83.0010%