Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQRCEZ52KP7TDNYKBQDWGT

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Duration:
21.7s
Cost:
$0.024090
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Rory," Lucien said, his voice smooth as silk, yet sharp like the edge of the blade concealed in his cane. Aurora stood in her doorway, her heart paused mid-thud in her chest. The golden street lamp glowed behind him, casting a halo that played tricks with shadows, but it was undoubtedly him. The Frenchman, the enigma wrapped in tailored charcoal. "Lucien," she replied, crossing her arms defensively over her chest. Her bright blue eyes narrowed, assessing. It had been months since she'd seen him, and yet here he stood at Eva's flat like he casually dropped by old acquaintances every day. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby, darted between her feet, agitated at the sudden intrusion, unaware of the change in atmosphere. The flat behind her brimmed with the scent of curry from the kitchen below, mingling with the shredded papers and parchment; a permanent fixture of Eva's chaotic organisation. "I thought you'd gone back to Marseille," she said, trying to ignore the way he looked at her, each eye—one amber, one black—studying her as if he could see beneath whatever mask she wore, as if he knew the layers of emotion hidden beneath her calm facade. "Ah, but London holds its charms, non?" He smiled, one side of his mouth quirking up. His hand brushed the doorframe, fingers splaying out before retreating to his side. "May I come in?" Aurora hesitated, a dozen reasons to refuse caught on the tip of her tongue. But alongside those, a treacherous whisper—it’s Lucien, whispered her traitorous heart. Her hand, seemingly of its own volition, swung the door open wider, the invitation tacit, but clear. He stepped inside, the tap of his cane a rhythmic accompaniment to the muffled din from the street below. Immediately, the narrow space seemed to constrict, charged with the tension between the two. Aurora closed the door with a wary glance down the hallway, securing it with Eva’s three deadbolts, each click resonating in the silence that followed. "Quite the fortress," Lucien observed, ever observant, amusement playing at the edges of his features. Aurora allowed herself a breath she didn’t know she was holding. "Eva insists," Aurora said. "She’s taken to dabbling in matters that invite unwelcome guests." "Much like yourself, then." His words were a playful jab, though the truth of them was an undercurrent neither could deny. Aurora had her own dark dealings, tasks that required remaining unnoticed yet ever aware. They stood there, in the cramped entryway, the world holding its breath around them. Rory traced her fingers over her crescent-shaped scar absentmindedly, a touchstone to steady herself, recalling a time when things between them had been as uncomplicated as infatuation allowed, before London, before the chaos that followed them both. Lucien leaned on his cane, his body language casual despite the intensity crackling in the air. "You’ve changed, Rory. Life above Silas' bar seems to suit you." "And you’ve not," she countered. "Still the same well-dressed shadow. What brings you here really, Lucien?" "Business. There's always business." He waved a hand, dismissing it as if it were an afterthought to being in her presence. His heterochromatic gaze, however, betrayed him, lingered a fraction longer than necessary. "And perhaps," he added, almost as an afterthought, "a need to see what I've missed in my absence." "A social visit, from the fixer himself?" She arched an eyebrow, sceptical yet unavoidably intrigued. His presence was a challenge wrapped in temptation, one she wasn’t keen on, yet inexplicably drawn to. "Well, you've seen," she clipped, the bite in her voice softened by the underlying emotion they danced around. Lucien took a step closer, the proximity decreasing the formal air between them. The scent of his cologne, woody with a hint of citrus, filled her senses, awakening memories she had tried to bury—a stolen kiss, heated arguments, moments of innocent laughter. "When was the last time you allowed yourself to enjoy London, Rory—beyond deliveries and dealing with the supernatural riffraff?" His question curled around her like smoke, tangible yet ephemeral. Rory looked away, tracing the spine of a book nearby, the texture grounding her, reminding her of truths she had come to accept. "Fun is a luxury," she muttered, "when every day is survival." "Spoken like someone who's forgotten the thrill of the chase." His eyes danced with something undetermined, part challenge, part invitation. Aurora tilted her head, considering, grappling with the layers beneath his suave exterior. The years of shared experiences and dangerous alliances wrapped around them, a web of entanglements not easily untangled. "Perhaps I've changed," she conceded, reluctant but honest. "We've both had to adapt." He reached into his jacket, extracting something small and metallic, offering it with a subdued flourish. The object glinted dully in the dim light—a key of sorts, intricate and old. "A token of courtesy," he explained. "Consider it a way back to the maze, should you decide to wander." Her fingers grasped the cool metal, a moment of contact that sent a shiver down her spine, though she masked it with a neutrality she hoped was composed. "I'm no longer sure what paths I should take," she admitted, her voice softer, a crack in the armour she wore daily. Lucien chuckled, a low, resonant sound that stirred echoes of past conversations. "Paths are what you make them. Or unmake, should they no longer serve." Their eyes met then, an understanding that transcended words. A shared history, a mosaic of pride, fear, and the unspoken. Yet in that moment, amidst the tomes and lingering smell of curry, there was also a promise—a promise of what might be rebuilt, what old paths might be reform. He turned towards the door, his presence a magnetic pull she resisted with difficulty. "Think about it, Rory," he said, the handle of his cane tapping lightly against the laminated wood. His smile was gentle, layered with nuances only she could fully appreciate. "You know where to find me." Aurora nodded, each word unspoken forging a connection as he stepped back into the night, the door closing slowly behind him with finality. Alone, with the key still warm in her palm, she whispered to the space he'd occupied, "I always do." Their game had resumed, the chase bringing with it a thrill she’d long since buried but was unmistakably reborn.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.643
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1059
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"lightly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1059
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"enigma"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"facade"
count1
4
word"treacherous"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"tension"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"intensity"
count1
12
word"eyebrow"
count1
13
word"tangible"
count1
14
word"ephemeral"
count1
15
word"tracing"
count1
16
word"grappling"
count1
17
word"intricate"
count1
18
word"down her spine"
count1
19
word"echoes"
count1
20
word"mosaic"
count1
21
word"unspoken"
count2
22
word"amidst"
count1
23
word"magnetic"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"enigma"
2"chaotic"
3"facade"
4"treacherous"
5"whisper"
6"rhythmic"
7"charged"
8"tension"
9"silence"
10"traced"
11"intensity"
12"eyebrow"
13"tangible"
14"ephemeral"
15"tracing"
16"grappling"
17"intricate"
18"down her spine"
19"echoes"
20"mosaic"
21"unspoken"
22"amidst"
23"magnetic"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences56
matches(empty)
91.84% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences56
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences65
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1049
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount861
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.93
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora8
Frenchman1
Eva4
Lucien6
London1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"Her hand, seemingly of its own volition"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1049
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
60.33% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean40.35
std14.57
cv0.361
sampleLengths
060
141
246
347
433
542
658
726
814
935
1051
1127
1216
1351
1450
1561
1644
1720
1831
1913
2049
2150
2225
2349
2449
2561
99.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"was composed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs153
matches
0"was holding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences65
ratio0.092
matches
0"The flat behind her brimmed with the scent of curry from the kitchen below, mingling with the shredded papers and parchment; a permanent fixture of Eva's chaotic organisation."
1"\"I thought you'd gone back to Marseille,\" she said, trying to ignore the way he looked at her, each eye—one amber, one black—studying her as if he could see beneath whatever mask she wore, as if he knew the layers of emotion hidden beneath her calm facade."
2"But alongside those, a treacherous whisper—it’s Lucien, whispered her traitorous heart."
3"The scent of his cologne, woody with a hint of citrus, filled her senses, awakening memories she had tried to bury—a stolen kiss, heated arguments, moments of innocent laughter."
4"The object glinted dully in the dim light—a key of sorts, intricate and old."
5"Yet in that moment, amidst the tomes and lingering smell of curry, there was also a promise—a promise of what might be rebuilt, what old paths might be reform."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount869
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.0333716915995397
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.018411967779056387
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences65
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences65
mean16.14
std8.17
cv0.506
sampleLengths
020
112
220
38
410
56
625
718
828
947
1016
1113
124
1314
1411
1517
1619
1714
1825
1915
2011
214
2210
2321
2414
2514
2637
2716
2811
295
3011
3121
3212
3318
3415
3517
3618
3713
3829
3919
4010
4123
4211
4320
4413
4518
468
475
4816
4914
90.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5538461538461539
totalSentences65
uniqueOpeners36
64.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"Immediately, the narrow space seemed"
ratio0.019
20.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences52
matches
0"she replied, crossing her arms"
1"Her bright blue eyes narrowed,"
2"It had been months since"
3"she said, trying to ignore"
4"He smiled, one side of"
5"His hand brushed the doorframe,"
6"Her hand, seemingly of its"
7"He stepped inside, the tap"
8"His words were a playful"
9"They stood there, in the"
10"He waved a hand, dismissing"
11"His heterochromatic gaze, however, betrayed"
12"he added, almost as an"
13"She arched an eyebrow, sceptical"
14"His presence was a challenge"
15"she clipped, the bite in"
16"His question curled around her"
17"His eyes danced with something"
18"she conceded, reluctant but honest"
19"He reached into his jacket,"
ratio0.5
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences52
matches
0"Lucien said, his voice smooth"
1"Aurora stood in her doorway,"
2"The golden street lamp glowed"
3"The Frenchman, the enigma wrapped"
4"she replied, crossing her arms"
5"Her bright blue eyes narrowed,"
6"It had been months since"
7"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby, darted between"
8"The flat behind her brimmed"
9"she said, trying to ignore"
10"He smiled, one side of"
11"His hand brushed the doorframe,"
12"Aurora hesitated, a dozen reasons"
13"Her hand, seemingly of its"
14"He stepped inside, the tap"
15"Aurora closed the door with"
16"Lucien observed, ever observant, amusement"
17"Aurora allowed herself a breath"
18"His words were a playful"
19"Aurora had her own dark"
ratio0.923
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The golden street lamp glowed behind him, casting a halo that played tricks with shadows, but it was undoubtedly him."
1"Aurora closed the door with a wary glance down the hallway, securing it with Eva’s three deadbolts, each click resonating in the silence that followed."
2"Rory traced her fingers over her crescent-shaped scar absentmindedly, a touchstone to steady herself, recalling a time when things between them had been as unco…"
3"Aurora tilted her head, considering, grappling with the layers beneath his suave exterior."
4"Her fingers grasped the cool metal, a moment of contact that sent a shiver down her spine, though she masked it with a neutrality she hoped was composed."
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she conceded, reluctant but honest"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Lucien observed (observe)"
1"he added (add)"
2"she muttered (mutter)"
3"she conceded (concede)"
4"he explained (explain)"
5"she admitted (admit)"
6"her palm she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.583
effectiveRatio0.5
73.2302%