Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQRRK52EWCEAV52QAEK4JP

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Duration:
32.7s
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$0.001655
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DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The moon peered through the branches of ancient oaks, casting long shadows across the loamy earth of the hidden grove. Rory's boots sank slightly into the damp soil with each step, as she picked her way carefully along the path. Her gaze flitted from one gnarled trunk to the next, trying to make out the faces that seemed to peer from the knots and whorls of the wood. An owl hooted somewhere in the canopy above, a mournful sound that echoed through the stillness of the night. You shouldn't be here, a small voice in her mind whispered. This place wasn't meant for the likes of her, a mere delivery driver from London who had stumbled upon the entrance to this secret glade quite by accident. But the glowing pendant that hung around her neck, pulsing softly with an inner light, had drawn her here, like a lodestone enticing her closer. Rory pulled her jacket tighter around her shoulders, as if the worn leather could ward off the growing unease that skittered down her spine. The darkness seemed to thicken around her, and though she knew it was only her imagination playing tricks on her, she couldn't shake the feeling that eyes watched her from the shadows between the trees. She walked faster, boots squelching in the soft earth, desperate now to find the source of the strange energy that called to her from the heart of the grove. A sudden gust of chill wind made her shiver, and she turned up her collar, wishing she'd thought to bring a scarf. The temperature dropped sharply as she delved deeper into the woods, and her breath came in pale clouds that dissipated quickly in the dark air. The overhead canopy began to thin out, allowing more and more moonlight to filter through, and soon she found herself in a small clearing, bathed in silver light. In the center of the open space stood a great stone altar, its surface scarred and pitted by the passage of time. Moss and lichen clung to the cracks, and small tendrils of ivy had begun to creep up its sides, seeking purchase. But it was the marks upon the stone that drew Rory's eye – strange symbols carved deep into the rock, their lines worn but still distinct. She approached slowly, wary of disturbing whatever power this place held. As she drew closer, Rory noticed that the symbols seemed to grow more intricate, forming intertwining patterns that spiraled out from the center of the altar. It was then that she saw it – a small slot in the heart of the design, just large enough to accommodate the crystal that nestled in her pendant. With trembling hands, she reached up to unclasp the chain from around her neck, hesitating only a moment before she slipped the stone into place. Nothing happened. She held her breath, waiting for some sign, some indication that she had done the right thing, but there was only the soft whisper of the wind through the leaves and the far-off cry of that same owl. Disappointment flooded through her, and she turned away from the altar, feeling foolish for thinking that she could have some part to play in whatever ancient magic this place held. But as she made her way back toward the path that would lead her out of the grove, a sound stopped her in her tracks. It was the faintest of whispers, barely audible over the soughing of the wind, but it set her heart racing. Slowly, she turned to face the altar once more, and gasped. The air above and around the stone had begun to shimmer and twist, like heat haze on a summer's day. But this was no natural phenomenon – the air was being torn asunder, ripped open to reveal a glimpse of another world beyond. Colors flashed and swirled within the rift, colors that Rory knew should not exist in any sane reality. She staggered back, her hand pressed to her mouth to hold in a scream, as the hole in the fabric of space-time grew ever larger. A figure stepped through the rift, emerging from the chaos of clashing color and light – a figure that bore only a vague resemblance to the human form. It moved with an easy, liquid grace that spoke of a body not constrained by the demands of bone and muscle, but its shape was mutable, shifting and changing with each passing moment. One moment it seemed tall and gangly, the next squat and bulbous, as if it could not decide what form it wished to wear. Rory cried out in fear, her back pressed against the nearest oak as she sought to put as much distance between herself and the apparition as possible. She knew that she should run, should flee this place and never return, but her limbs would not obey her, and she remained rooted to the spot, unable to look away from the terrifying spectacle before her. The figure drifted closer, its edges blurring and merging with the shadows that clung to the trees. It reached out a hand – though whether it had five fingers or six, Rory could not say – and beckoned to her. She felt a sudden tug deep within her chest, as if the strange being had laid claim to her very soul, and she knew with sick certainty that she had no choice but to obey. As she stumbled forward, drawn inexorably toward the figure, she saw the rift begin to widen once more, revealing a dark, swirling vortex that led to who knew where. The creature's hand closed around hers, and though its touch was icy cold, she felt a burning heat begin to spread up her arm, as if her very flesh were being consumed by some inner fire. Rory screamed, but her voice was lost in the surging rush of wind that tore past her ears. She closed her eyes against the blinding light that spilled from the rift, feeling the world drop away beneath her feet as she was drawn into the void beyond. And then, just as suddenly as it had begun, it was over. Silence fell, and the only sound Rory could hear was the ragged gasp of her own breath tearing through the still night air. Her heart pounded in her chest, and her body was slick with sweat beneath her clothes. It took a long moment for her to realize that she was no longer in the grove – that she stood instead in a place far removed from the world she knew. Slowly, she opened her eyes, and looked around at the new reality that surrounded her. But that is for another story, and another time. For now, it is enough to say that Aurora Carter's fate had been sealed, and the dark forces at work within the heart of the Fae Grove had claimed their latest victim. Another soul lost to the shadows between worlds, never to be seen again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
48.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
5
adverb"slowly"
count3
6
adverb"very"
count2
7
adverb"inexorably"
count1
8
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"carefully"
2"softly"
3"sharply"
4"quickly"
5"slowly"
6"very"
7"inexorably"
8"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"down her spine"
count1
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"delved"
count1
4
word"intricate"
count1
5
word"crystal"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"racing"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"down her spine"
2"chill"
3"delved"
4"intricate"
5"crystal"
6"whisper"
7"racing"
8"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences50
matches
0"t in fear"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences50
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences50
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1174
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions14
wordCount1174
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.77
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London1
Rory9
Aurora1
Carter1
Fae1
Grove1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Aurora"
2"Carter"
places
0"London"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
47.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"faces that seemed to peer from the knots and whorls of the wood"
1"seemed tall and gangly, the next squat and bulbous, as if it could not decide what form it wished to wear"
29.64% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.704
wordCount1174
matches
0"not constrained by the demands of bone and muscle, but its shape was mutable, shifting"
1"no choice but"
0.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences50
matches
0"noticed that the"
1"knew that she"
2"realize that she"
3"say that Aurora"
0.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs16
mean73.38
std9.93
cv0.135
sampleLengths
087
164
288
375
480
580
670
756
886
985
1064
1175
1265
1359
1471
1569
70.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences50
matches
0"being torn"
1"being consumed"
2"was lost"
3"was drawn"
4"been sealed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs198
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences50
ratio0.12
matches
0"But it was the marks upon the stone that drew Rory's eye – strange symbols carved deep into the rock, their lines worn but still distinct."
1"It was then that she saw it – a small slot in the heart of the design, just large enough to accommodate the crystal that nestled in her pendant."
2"But this was no natural phenomenon – the air was being torn asunder, ripped open to reveal a glimpse of another world beyond."
3"A figure stepped through the rift, emerging from the chaos of clashing color and light – a figure that bore only a vague resemblance to the human form."
4"It reached out a hand – though whether it had five fingers or six, Rory could not say – and beckoned to her."
5"It took a long moment for her to realize that she was no longer in the grove – that she stood instead in a place far removed from the world she knew."
99.82% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1169
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.04020530367835757
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.01454234388366125
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences50
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
72.50% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences50
mean23.48
std7.78
cv0.331
sampleLengths
020
120
228
319
411
528
625
724
835
929
1022
1125
1228
1322
1421
1526
1611
1726
1829
1925
202
2138
2230
2325
2420
2511
2620
2723
2818
2925
3028
3133
3224
3327
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3517
3623
3735
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4129
4212
4323
4416
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4615
479
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4913
74.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.46
totalSentences50
uniqueOpeners23
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences49
matches
0"Slowly, she turned to face"
1"Slowly, she opened her eyes,"
ratio0.041
97.55% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences49
matches
0"Her gaze flitted from one"
1"You shouldn't be here, a"
2"She walked faster, boots squelching"
3"She approached slowly, wary of"
4"It was then that she"
5"She held her breath, waiting"
6"It was the faintest of"
7"She staggered back, her hand"
8"It moved with an easy,"
9"She knew that she should"
10"It reached out a hand"
11"She felt a sudden tug"
12"She closed her eyes against"
13"Her heart pounded in her"
14"It took a long moment"
ratio0.306
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount35
totalSentences49
matches
0"The moon peered through the"
1"Rory's boots sank slightly into"
2"Her gaze flitted from one"
3"An owl hooted somewhere in"
4"You shouldn't be here, a"
5"This place wasn't meant for"
6"Rory pulled her jacket tighter"
7"The darkness seemed to thicken"
8"She walked faster, boots squelching"
9"A sudden gust of chill"
10"The temperature dropped sharply as"
11"The overhead canopy began to"
12"Moss and lichen clung to"
13"She approached slowly, wary of"
14"It was then that she"
15"She held her breath, waiting"
16"Disappointment flooded through her, and"
17"It was the faintest of"
18"The air above and around"
19"Colors flashed and swirled within"
ratio0.714
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"An owl hooted somewhere in the canopy above, a mournful sound that echoed through the stillness of the night."
1"But the glowing pendant that hung around her neck, pulsing softly with an inner light, had drawn her here, like a lodestone enticing her closer."
2"Rory pulled her jacket tighter around her shoulders, as if the worn leather could ward off the growing unease that skittered down her spine."
3"She walked faster, boots squelching in the soft earth, desperate now to find the source of the strange energy that called to her from the heart of the grove."
4"The temperature dropped sharply as she delved deeper into the woods, and her breath came in pale clouds that dissipated quickly in the dark air."
5"As she drew closer, Rory noticed that the symbols seemed to grow more intricate, forming intertwining patterns that spiraled out from the center of the altar."
6"But as she made her way back toward the path that would lead her out of the grove, a sound stopped her in her tracks."
7"A figure stepped through the rift, emerging from the chaos of clashing color and light – a figure that bore only a vague resemblance to the human form."
8"It moved with an easy, liquid grace that spoke of a body not constrained by the demands of bone and muscle, but its shape was mutable, shifting and changing wit…"
9"The figure drifted closer, its edges blurring and merging with the shadows that clung to the trees."
10"She felt a sudden tug deep within her chest, as if the strange being had laid claim to her very soul, and she knew with sick certainty that she had no choice bu…"
11"As she stumbled forward, drawn inexorably toward the figure, she saw the rift begin to widen once more, revealing a dark, swirling vortex that led to who knew w…"
12"The creature's hand closed around hers, and though its touch was icy cold, she felt a burning heat begin to spread up her arm, as if her very flesh were being c…"
13"Rory screamed, but her voice was lost in the surging rush of wind that tore past her ears."
14"She closed her eyes against the blinding light that spilled from the rift, feeling the world drop away beneath her feet as she was drawn into the void beyond."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
70.0830%