Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQRSSYWC4C2ZN4QFJZJ82K

Run Details

Duration:
24.4s
Cost:
$0.018433
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter drew a sharp breath as the undergrowth crunched beneath her boots. The Fae Grove closed around her in unsettling silence, save for the distant rustling that seemed to echo deeper between the ancient oaks. Her heart skipped a beat as she pressed deeper into the clearing, the faint glow of the Heartstone Pendant tucked beneath her jacket pulsing against her skin. The world felt suspended in a strange, tense quiet, as though the grove itself held its breath. Her eyes, bright blue and wary, scanned the grove cautiously. An air of anticipation hung about the place, heavy and tangible. Aurora had entered here on a mission, a promise made to herself when that pendant first found its way into her possession. She longed for answers. About the artefact, about who might have gifted it to her — perhaps even more about herself. But the timeless nature of the Fae Grove added a disruptive layer to each ticking second. She halted, listening. There it was again — a soft whispering that seemed to seep from the shadows of the ancient standing stones at the clearing's edge. A disquieting symphony of words beyond her comprehension. It started in her ears but drifted to her spine, crawling its way along her nerves until every hair on her body stood on end. Her scarred wrist tingled under her jacket's sleeve. "Stop that," she muttered to herself, forcing the dread back down as she gingerly moved forward. Each step felt more laborious than the last. Her worn jeans snagged against the tangling brambles, which clung to her resolute form like tentative fingers seeking purchase. Aurora fought against the urge to turn and run, to flee back to the safety of the park's mundane paths. Instead, she squared her shoulders and pushed onward, ears straining for any sound outside of her own tentative footfalls. Tension coiled within the grove, quiet but unmistakable, like static before a lightning strike. Aurora wasn't sure if it was magic in the air or her imagination running wild in the darkness. She knew one thing for certain — she was no longer alone. The grove played games with perception, shadows stretching and morphing in the periphery of her vision just beyond recognition. Out of instinct, she twisted, her breath catching in her throat. Vacant elm trees shifted slightly in the whispering winds, but nothing else moved in her sight. Yet, the feeling gnawing at her gut refused to dissipate. She calmed her nerves and reached beneath her jacket, pulling the Heartstone free. A warm, undeniable light emitted from its crimson depth, casting an unearthly glow across her pale face. With the pendant's comforting heat pressed to her palm, she felt a renewed conviction to unravel the truth. Whatever hid here in the Fae Grove, it felt ancient, eternal, but also desperate and waiting. A flicker of movement ahead caught the edge of her vision again — airier now, like drifting smoke. Her voice trembled as she spoke, "Who's there?" Nothing answered but the forlorn call of a distant owl, reverberating through the grove like a taunt. She exhaled sharply, fragile threads of courage knotting within her. Aurora was about to turn away when those same soft whispers returned, clearer than ever. The language was lilting, melodic, and distinctly non-human. It filled the air dense with secrets and unanswered mysteries. Aurora knew tales of those who strayed too deep into such realms, only to be lost to time. Yet, she carried on, perhaps more foolishly brave than intentionally wise. The pendant's warmth seemed to pulse rhythmically now, a beat in response to the deeper enchantments of the night. Taking another step, Aurora paused. The forest floor beneath her suddenly felt unsubstantial, like dew-swollen wood softened underfoot. The bindings between reality and the Fae magic gaped wider. She should leave now. Every nerve screaming, she turned to retreat, but those ineffable whispers deepened into laughter — a chilling chorus that beckoned her further in rather than out. Aurora hesitated. Entranced, she teetered on the precipice between indecision and determination. Whatever was here — her rational mind warned her to avoid but curiosity urged forth. The pull was magnetic, a sensation defined not by sound or sight but instinct. Finally, she wrenched herself away, tugging the stubborn pendant back beneath the cotton of her shirt. She could smell the metallic tang of magic lingering thick as fog as she made her way back through the underbrush. Unease accompanied her retreating steps, but the laughter stayed faint and followed, an echo locked hard in her mind. Exhaustion swiftly enfolded her like a weighted cloak as she stumbled onto the familiar paths of Richmond Park. Her pulse steadied as she leaned against a lamp post, harsh light indifferent to whatever unknown enchantment was now left behind in the grove. She unclenched her fingers from around the Heartstone, palm print still tinged red from its rest. Perhaps she had learned nothing from the grove tonight beyond the boundaries of sanity and magic. Perhaps she had learned more than she'd wanted about curiosity and its dangerous seduction. Even so, despite the empty answers the grove offered, her determination for deeper understanding only kindled stronger. Aurora pulled herself upright and began the walk back to her small flat. It would be hours before the charm of the Heartstone's warmth subsided, or the frigid unease in her bones dissipated entirely. The city stretched out familiar, safe but shadowed. Yet, comfort notwithstanding, she held onto the belief that one day she'd return to the grove and master its riddles. Until then, she carried the chill of that haunting laughter with her, a tethered whisper she could scarce escape — a reminder that the secrets of the grove remained cradled in shadow, timeless and patient, waiting for her inevitable return.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount965
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"cautiously"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"cautiously"
1"slightly"
2"sharply"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount965
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"echo"
count2
2
word"skipped a beat"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"anticipation"
count1
5
word"tangible"
count1
6
word"symphony"
count1
7
word"tension"
count1
8
word"comforting"
count1
9
word"unravel"
count1
10
word"flicker"
count1
11
word"trembled"
count1
12
word"warmth"
count2
13
word"pulse"
count2
14
word"chilling"
count1
15
word"magnetic"
count1
16
word"familiar"
count2
17
word"tinged"
count1
18
word"charm"
count1
19
word"chill"
count1
20
word"whisper"
count1
21
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"echo"
2"skipped a beat"
3"scanned"
4"anticipation"
5"tangible"
6"symphony"
7"tension"
8"comforting"
9"unravel"
10"flicker"
11"trembled"
12"warmth"
13"pulse"
14"chilling"
15"magnetic"
16"familiar"
17"tinged"
18"charm"
19"chill"
20"whisper"
21"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
75.89% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences64
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords970
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount966
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.93
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Fae4
Grove3
Heartstone4
Pendant1
Aurora9
Richmond1
Park1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
65.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"rustling that seemed to echo deeper between the ancient oaks"
1"whispering that seemed to seep from the shadows of the ancient standing stones at the clearing's edge"
96.91% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.031
wordCount970
matches
0"not by sound or sight but instinct"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
55.90% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs18
mean53.89
std18.63
cv0.346
sampleLengths
080
180
268
316
466
574
656
752
88
960
1048
1158
1241
1356
1458
1547
1662
1740
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs152
matches
0"was lilting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences64
ratio0.109
matches
0"About the artefact, about who might have gifted it to her — perhaps even more about herself."
1"There it was again — a soft whispering that seemed to seep from the shadows of the ancient standing stones at the clearing's edge."
2"She knew one thing for certain — she was no longer alone."
3"A flicker of movement ahead caught the edge of her vision again — airier now, like drifting smoke."
4"Every nerve screaming, she turned to retreat, but those ineffable whispers deepened into laughter — a chilling chorus that beckoned her further in rather than out."
5"Whatever was here — her rational mind warned her to avoid but curiosity urged forth."
6"Until then, she carried the chill of that haunting laughter with her, a tethered whisper she could scarce escape — a reminder that the secrets of the grove remained cradled in shadow, timeless and patient, waiting for her inevitable return."
95.85% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount961
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.044745057232049947
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.015608740894901144
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences64
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences64
mean15.16
std6.51
cv0.43
sampleLengths
013
123
227
317
410
511
622
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817
916
103
1124
128
1325
148
1516
168
1719
1820
1919
2014
2118
2212
2319
2411
2516
2610
2713
2817
2918
3016
3118
328
3317
3410
3515
368
3710
3818
3911
4019
415
4213
4310
444
4526
462
4710
4815
4914
72.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.453125
totalSentences64
uniqueOpeners29
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences63
matches
0"Instead, she squared her shoulders"
1"Finally, she wrenched herself away,"
2"Perhaps she had learned nothing"
3"Perhaps she had learned more"
ratio0.063
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences63
matches
0"Her heart skipped a beat"
1"Her eyes, bright blue and"
2"She longed for answers."
3"She halted, listening."
4"It started in her ears"
5"Her scarred wrist tingled under"
6"she muttered to herself, forcing"
7"Her worn jeans snagged against"
8"She knew one thing for"
9"She calmed her nerves and"
10"Her voice trembled as she"
11"She exhaled sharply, fragile threads"
12"It filled the air dense"
13"She should leave now."
14"She could smell the metallic"
15"Her pulse steadied as she"
16"She unclenched her fingers from"
17"It would be hours before"
ratio0.286
94.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount46
totalSentences63
matches
0"Aurora Carter drew a sharp"
1"The Fae Grove closed around"
2"Her heart skipped a beat"
3"The world felt suspended in"
4"Her eyes, bright blue and"
5"An air of anticipation hung"
6"Aurora had entered here on"
7"She longed for answers."
8"She halted, listening."
9"A disquieting symphony of words"
10"It started in her ears"
11"Her scarred wrist tingled under"
12"she muttered to herself, forcing"
13"Each step felt more laborious"
14"Her worn jeans snagged against"
15"Aurora fought against the urge"
16"Tension coiled within the grove,"
17"Aurora wasn't sure if it"
18"She knew one thing for"
19"The grove played games with"
ratio0.73
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences63
matches
0"Yet, the feeling gnawing at"
1"Yet, she carried on, perhaps"
2"Even so, despite the empty"
3"Yet, comfort notwithstanding, she held"
ratio0.063
74.18% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The Fae Grove closed around her in unsettling silence, save for the distant rustling that seemed to echo deeper between the ancient oaks."
1"The world felt suspended in a strange, tense quiet, as though the grove itself held its breath."
2"There it was again — a soft whispering that seemed to seep from the shadows of the ancient standing stones at the clearing's edge."
3"Her worn jeans snagged against the tangling brambles, which clung to her resolute form like tentative fingers seeking purchase."
4"Every nerve screaming, she turned to retreat, but those ineffable whispers deepened into laughter — a chilling chorus that beckoned her further in rather than o…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Her voice trembled (tremble)"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
83.6858%