Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQRV7QEA1AWP1YS7TYYW1B

Run Details

Duration:
56.0s
Cost:
$0.001058
Provider:
DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain pounded the pavement, filling the night air with a incessant drumming that echoed off the narrow streets of Soho. Detective Harlow Quinn sheltered beneath the inadequate canopy of a second-hand bookshop, her sharp jaw clenched tight as she watched the figure dart between puddles, gutters overflowing with the ceaseless downpour. Her gaze never left him, Tommy Herrera, one in a long line of leads in her pursuit of the mysterious clique that operated in the city's shadows. The detective's fingers instinctively found the familiar leather of her watchstrap, a subconscious search for the comfort of its presence against her wrist. The black market healer's movements were swift and purposeful, weaving through the tangled maze of alleys like a man pursued. Cursing under her breath, Quinn made to follow, her hand instinctively checking for her badge and gun; the tools of her trade. The alleyways narrowed, the walls brushing her shoulders, the stench of wet brick and overflowing bins filling her nostrils. The detective's footsteps were muffled by the rain, but she knew she couldn't risk losing Herrera now. Not after tailing him for months, never too close, always just on the periphery. What was he running from? Or to? Suddenly, the clip-clop of hurried footsteps echoed off the cobbles, the sound of the former paramedic's flight abruptly changing direction. Quinn rounded a corner, gun drawn, only to see the back of Herrera's head as he descended the stairs, disappearing into the underworld below. The nature of her pursuit had changed; now it was merely a chase. The detective hesitated. To follow would be to leave the familiar behind, to follow the suspect into the unknown. The steps led to an old, abandoned Tube station, its once vibrant advertisements faded and torn, memories of a long-forgotten war. At the bottom, the heavy steel door that marked the entrance to the Veil Market was flanked by two imposing guards. They didn't look like ordinary bouncers or mere muscle; their eyes flicked over the detective, assessing the threat level, bored and confident. "Just the token, sweetheart," one of them drawled, bored and dismissive. His words were barely audible over the pounding rain that threatened to drown out all other sound. Quinn's eyes narrowed, the rain dripping from the brim of her hat as she flicked up the collar of her coat. In her pocket, her fingers found the bone token she'd recovered from the body of a deceased informant, running her thumb over its cold, smooth surface. She'd known it would come in handy one day, and that day had finally arrived. She stepped forward, the chill of the metal door seeping through her clothes as she presented the token to the guard, his expression never changing, never a flicker of emotion passing across his features. His companion, however, was not so stoic, her eyes widening at the sight of the badge. "Detective Harlow Quinn," she stated, her voice the same monotone of the rain, drowning out everything else, "Metropolitan Police." The guard glanced at the token once more before stepping aside, the heavy door swinging open and revealing the bustling market within. The dripping of the rain, the pounding of the water against the pavement, had been replaced by the clamor of voices haggling, the clatter of coins changing hands, the hiss and pop of alchemy flasks. Quinn paused on the threshold, her grip tightening on her gun. To enter was to break every promise she'd made to herself, every vow of loyalty to the force that had taken her in all those years ago. She was an officer of the law, but the law had no sway down here. Down here, the only rule was survival. She thought of her partner, Morris, and what he'd say if he were there. She thought of the questions that had burned in her mind ever since she'd lost him, the answers she'd never find unless she took this final, fateful step. With a final, definitive click, Harlow Quinn holstered her weapon and crossed the threshold into the unknown. The heavy steel door slammed shut behind her. There was no turning back now. The detective's heart hammered in her chest, adrenaline and fear mingling to form a potent cocktail that threatened to overwhelm her. She'd gone over the edge, the line she'd always promised she'd never cross, and now there was no looking back. The market was shrouded in a smoky haze, the air thick with the cloying scent of incense and exotic spices. The detective's eyes watered, struggling to adjust to the sudden onslaught of sensations. She didn't have time to get her bearings before the sound of hurried footsteps echoed off the tiled walls, the same clip-clop of Herrera's heels she'd heard earlier. Instinct kicked in, the officer in her taking over as she plunged deeper into the throng, shoving past merchants and their customers alike, unaware of the squawks of indignation that followed in her wake. The only thing that mattered was keeping her quarry in sight, even as the shadows seemed to conspire against her, reaching out with grasping tendrils to ensnare her. The chase led her past stalls selling enchanted trinkets and cursed relics, past alchemists peddling their wares with a sly glint in their eye, their other hand always ready to snatch back their ingredients should a deal go sour. Quinn barely registered any of it, her focus solely on the man she pursued. For an underground market, the Veil Market was surprisingly well-lit, the flickering flames of oil lamps casting shifting shadows across the scene, illuminating everything in a sickly yellow glow. Still, the detective's eyes had to adjusted constantly, picking out details from the gloom with practiced ease. She saw the weak and the desperate, those who had turned to the black market in a last-ditch attempt to find a cure for what ailed them. She saw the predators and the corrupt, those who sought to exploit the misery and misfortune of others for their own gain. And she saw the innocent, those who'd had no choice but to turn to the Veil Market, either through poverty or persecution. As she finally burst through a curtain of beads that separated one section of the market from the next, Quinn glimpsed a fleeting shadow as it slipped through a door at the far end of the room. Her heart leaped into her throat, the thrill of the chase urging her onwards, her instinct to protect and serve warring with her desire to uncover the truth. With no regard for the merchants packing up their wares, the detective charged forward, oblivious to the protests of the market folk. Her hand found the worn leather of her holster, her fingertips brushing the grip of her gun as she kicked open the door, her eyes wide and wild, desperate to seize the final prize of her months-long game of cat and mouse. Only to find the room empty, save for a solitary figure standing at the far end, his back to her as he rummaged through a crate of old, dusty books. Quinn's heart sank, the adrenaline and fear giving way to bitter disappointment as she realized she'd lost her quarry. The figure turned, his face obscured by the dim light, but there was something familiar about the set of his shoulders, the way he held himself. As if sensing her presence, he looked up, meeting her gaze with a knowing smile that sent a shiver down the detective's spine. "I wondered when you'd finally catch up to me, Detective," he drawled, his voice seeming to come from the shadows themselves, wrapping around her like a suffocating embrace. "I'm afraid Tommy won't be joining us tonight, though. He's a little... tied up at the moment." Her gun was in her hand before she even realized she'd drawn it, the hammer clicking back as she leveled it at this mysterious figure, her every instinct screaming at her to shoot, to put an end to this nightmare once and for all. But something held her back, some deep-rooted sense of self-preservation that whispered caution, urging her to restraint. Even as her finger tightened on the trigger, she knew that she wouldn't – couldn't – shoot without good reason. "Who are you?" she asked, her voice trembling with the effort of keeping her emotions in check, the gun never wavering as she advanced on the shadowy figure. "What do you want from me?" "You've spent so long chasing the truth, Detective," the figure replied, his tone mocking, almost playful. "And now, here it is, staring you right in the face. Are you so afraid of it?" As he spoke, the light from the flickering lamp above them seemed to grow brighter, illuminating his features, casting away the shadows that had hidden his identity. He was, of course, the spitting image of Tommy Herrera, but there was something about him that made Quinn's skin crawl, some deep-seated wrongness that she couldn't place. "I'm not afraid of you," she lied, her heart hammering in her chest, her voice trying to maintain a facade of calm, professionalism she no longer felt. "I'm here to ask you questions about the clique, about what they're doing, about what they're planning." The figure laughed, a harsh, grating sound that echoed off the damp walls and seemed to bite at the detective's ears. "Oh, Detective, sweet, naïve Detective Quinn. You think you're here to ask questions, but you're not. You're here because I want you here, because I've been waiting for you, for a long, long time." Her mind reeled, the logic of his words feeling like a physical weight pressing against her skull, threatening to crush it. He seemed to sense her confusion, his smile widening as he took a step towards her, the chain wrapped around his wrist jangling softly with each movement. "You see, I know what you want, Detective, more than anything else in this world," he whispered, his voice seeming to come from the very walls themselves, wrapping around her, suffocating her. "You want answers. You want closure. And most of all, you want to find out what happened to your partner, don't you?" The breath caught in her throat, the words like a knife twisting in her gut, finding the one weakness she'd never been able to overcome, the one question she'd never been able to answer. "I—" The gun wavered in her hand, her resolve crumbling as she stared into the face of the one person she'd always feared finding, the one person she'd always dreaded confronting. "I—" The figure's smile never wavered as he advanced on her, his hand outstretched, beckoning her to lay down her arms, to give in to the despair that threatened to overwhelm her. "Give up, Detective," he murmured, his voice soothing, almost hypnotic, his eyes seeming to bore into hers, to see the depths of her soul, the darkness that lay at the heart of her being. "Just give up, and I promise you, I will tell you everything." A part of her, the part that had always clung to the belief that she was on the side of the angels, screamed in protest, urging her to fight, to resist, to not give in to the temptations of the darkness. But there was another part of her, the part that had been broken by the loss of her partner, the part that had been corrupted by her own need to know, that silence that scream, that forced the gun to lower, to let the darkness enfold her. She had come so far, fought so hard, but in the end, the truth won out. She gave in, surrendering to the figure before her, letting him lead her deeper into the heart of the Veil Market, deeper into the heart of her own darkness. And as she followed him into the shadows, all she could think of was her partner, Morris, and the questions she'd never been able to answer for him. Now, finally, she would find those answers, even if it cost her everything. Even if it cost her her soul.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.529
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.62% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2032
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"softly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
13.88% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2032
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"echoed"
count4
1
word"jaw clenched"
count1
2
word"ceaseless"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count3
4
word"footsteps"
count3
5
word"imposing"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count2
7
word"pounding"
count2
8
word"chill"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"glint"
count1
11
word"gloom"
count1
12
word"practiced ease"
count1
13
word"fleeting"
count1
14
word"desire"
count1
15
word"charged"
count1
16
word"solitary"
count1
17
word"sense of"
count1
18
word"wavering"
count1
19
word"facade"
count1
20
word"weight"
count1
21
word"wavered"
count2
22
word"resolve"
count1
23
word"depths"
count1
24
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"jaw clenched"
2"ceaseless"
3"familiar"
4"footsteps"
5"imposing"
6"flicked"
7"pounding"
8"chill"
9"flicker"
10"glint"
11"gloom"
12"practiced ease"
13"fleeting"
14"desire"
15"charged"
16"solitary"
17"sense of"
18"wavering"
19"facade"
20"weight"
21"wavered"
22"resolve"
23"depths"
24"silence"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
2
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
3
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"heart hammered in her chest"
1"eyes narrowed"
2"jaw clenched"
3"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
74.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences84
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2024
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount1844
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.54
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow2
Quinn10
Tommy2
Herrera5
Tube1
Veil4
Market4
Morris2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tommy"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
places
0"Soho"
1"Veil"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"As if sensing her presence, he looked up, meeting her gaze with a knowing smile that sent a shiver down the detective's spine"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.494
wordCount2024
matches
0"no choice but"
94.20% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"knew that she"
1"know, that silence"
44.56% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean48.19
std14.74
cv0.306
sampleLengths
079
165
257
376
464
528
662
750
819
957
1060
1142
1231
1341
1461
1562
1653
1746
1871
1965
2064
2149
2249
2345
2444
2537
2634
2733
2855
2944
3055
3148
3254
3334
3432
3531
3646
3741
3847
3945
4041
417
84.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences84
matches
0"were muffled"
1"was flanked"
2"been replaced"
3"was shrouded"
4"been broken"
5"been corrupted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs303
matches
0"was keeping"
18.63% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences92
ratio0.043
matches
0"Cursing under her breath, Quinn made to follow, her hand instinctively checking for her badge and gun; the tools of her trade."
1"The nature of her pursuit had changed; now it was merely a chase."
2"They didn't look like ordinary bouncers or mere muscle; their eyes flicked over the detective, assessing the threat level, bored and confident."
3"Even as her finger tightened on the trigger, she knew that she wouldn't – couldn't – shoot without good reason."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1852
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.029157667386609073
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.01079913606911447
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean22
std9.43
cv0.429
sampleLengths
021
131
227
323
420
522
619
717
814
95
102
1120
1224
1313
143
1516
1621
1721
1822
1911
2017
2121
2226
2315
2434
2516
2619
2722
2835
2911
3027
3115
327
3314
3428
3517
368
376
3821
3920
4020
4113
4228
4334
4428
4539
4614
4729
4817
4927
48.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.3804347826086957
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners35
80.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences83
matches
0"Suddenly, the clip-clop of hurried"
1"Only to find the room"
ratio0.024
89.88% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences83
matches
0"Her gaze never left him,"
1"They didn't look like ordinary"
2"His words were barely audible"
3"She'd known it would come"
4"She stepped forward, the chill"
5"His companion, however, was not"
6"she stated, her voice the"
7"She was an officer of"
8"She thought of her partner,"
9"She thought of the questions"
10"She'd gone over the edge,"
11"She didn't have time to"
12"She saw the weak and"
13"She saw the predators and"
14"Her heart leaped into her"
15"Her hand found the worn"
16"he drawled, his voice seeming"
17"Her gun was in her"
18"she asked, her voice trembling"
19"He was, of course, the"
ratio0.325
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences83
matches
0"The rain pounded the pavement,"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn sheltered beneath"
2"Her gaze never left him,"
3"The detective's fingers instinctively found"
4"The black market healer's movements"
5"The alleyways narrowed, the walls"
6"The detective's footsteps were muffled"
7"Quinn rounded a corner, gun"
8"The nature of her pursuit"
9"The detective hesitated."
10"The steps led to an"
11"They didn't look like ordinary"
12"His words were barely audible"
13"Quinn's eyes narrowed, the rain"
14"She'd known it would come"
15"She stepped forward, the chill"
16"His companion, however, was not"
17"she stated, her voice the"
18"The guard glanced at the"
19"The dripping of the rain,"
ratio0.687
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences83
matches
0"To follow would be to"
1"To enter was to break"
2"As if sensing her presence,"
3"Even as her finger tightened"
4"Now, finally, she would find"
5"Even if it cost her"
ratio0.072
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Her gaze never left him, Tommy Herrera, one in a long line of leads in her pursuit of the mysterious clique that operated in the city's shadows."
1"His words were barely audible over the pounding rain that threatened to drown out all other sound."
2"The detective's heart hammered in her chest, adrenaline and fear mingling to form a potent cocktail that threatened to overwhelm her."
3"Instinct kicked in, the officer in her taking over as she plunged deeper into the throng, shoving past merchants and their customers alike, unaware of the squaw…"
4"As she finally burst through a curtain of beads that separated one section of the market from the next, Quinn glimpsed a fleeting shadow as it slipped through a…"
5"As if sensing her presence, he looked up, meeting her gaze with a knowing smile that sent a shiver down the detective's spine."
6"But something held her back, some deep-rooted sense of self-preservation that whispered caution, urging her to restraint."
7"As he spoke, the light from the flickering lamp above them seemed to grow brighter, illuminating his features, casting away the shadows that had hidden his iden…"
8"He was, of course, the spitting image of Tommy Herrera, but there was something about him that made Quinn's skin crawl, some deep-seated wrongness that she coul…"
9"The figure laughed, a harsh, grating sound that echoed off the damp walls and seemed to bite at the detective's ears."
10"He seemed to sense her confusion, his smile widening as he took a step towards her, the chain wrapped around his wrist jangling softly with each movement."
11"The breath caught in her throat, the words like a knife twisting in her gut, finding the one weakness she'd never been able to overcome, the one question she'd …"
12"The figure's smile never wavered as he advanced on her, his hand outstretched, beckoning her to lay down her arms, to give in to the despair that threatened to …"
13"But there was another part of her, the part that had been broken by the loss of her partner, the part that had been corrupted by her own need to know, that sile…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"the figure replied, his tone mocking, almost playful"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"them drawled (drawl)"
1"she stated (state)"
2"he drawled (drawl)"
3"she lied (lie)"
4"he whispered (whisper)"
5"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.471
leniency0.941
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.706
78.1422%