Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQT5H2WNSVQE8M3QX0BPRS

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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In the dim glow of The Raven's Nest, the door creaked open, spilling a sliver of London's neon-lit night onto the worn floorboards. Aurora Carter, known to most as Rory, stepped in, the bell above the door tinkling softly. She paused, letting her eyes adjust to the smoky haze and the low hum of voices. The bar was a familiar old friend, its walls adorned with maps and photographs that whispered tales of adventures long past. Silas Blackwood, the bar's owner, was polishing a glass behind the counter. His hazel eyes flicked up, meeting Rory's gaze. A small smile tugged at the corners of his mouth, and he nodded, a silent greeting. She returned the gesture, her bright blue eyes reflecting the warm glow of the vintage lamps. Rory slid onto a stool, her straight black hair falling over her shoulders like a curtain. She pushed it back, revealing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a memento from a childhood adventure gone awry. "The usual, Silas," she said, her voice steady and cool, a testament to the years she'd spent honing her poker face. Silas poured her a pint of Guinness, the dark liquid settling into the glass with a soft sigh. He pushed it towards her, his neat beard framing a smile that didn't quite reach his eyes. "You're late," he said, his voice a low rumble, like distant thunder. Rory took a sip, the cool liquid sliding down her throat. "I had a delivery that ran late," she said, her eyes scanning the room, taking in the usual suspects. Her gaze landed on a familiar face, and she froze, the glass halfway to her lips. The man sat at a table in the corner, his auburn hair streaked with grey, a neat beard framing his jaw. He was hunched over a book, his fingers tracing the lines of text, his lips moving silently. It was a face she'd known as well as her own, once upon a time. A face she hadn't seen in years. Silas followed her gaze, his eyes narrowing slightly. "Evan," he said, his voice barely above a whisper. It was a name Rory hadn't heard in a long time. A name she'd tried to forget. Rory nodded, her grip tightening around the glass. "What's he doing here, Silas?" she asked, her voice steady despite the sudden pounding of her heart. Silas shrugged, his signet ring glinting in the light. "He moved back to London a few months ago. Said he wanted to reconnect with old friends." His eyes met hers, a silent question passing between them. Rory looked away, her gaze falling on the photograph of the two of them, taken on a long-ago holiday in Prague. They were laughing, their arms wrapped around each other, their faces flushed with sun and wine. It felt like a lifetime ago. She took a deep breath, steeling herself. "I'll be right back," she said, sliding off the stool. She walked towards Evan, her heels clicking on the wooden floor, each step echoing like a gunshot in the suddenly silent room. Evan looked up as she approached, his eyes widening in surprise. He stood, his chair scraping back with a harsh screech. "Rory," he said, his voice barely above a whisper. "I didn't think you'd be here." Rory stopped in front of him, her eyes searching his face. She saw the lines etched around his eyes, the silver threading through his hair. She saw the regret in his gaze, the apology in the set of his shoulders. But she also saw the old Evan, the one who had broken her heart into a thousand pieces. "What are you doing here, Evan?" she asked, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside her. Evan gestured to the table, a silent invitation. Rory hesitated for a moment before sitting down, her back stiff, her hands folded in her lap. Evan sat down opposite her, his eyes never leaving her face. "I moved back to London a few months ago," he said, his voice soft. "I wanted to see you, Rory. I wanted to apologize." Rory felt a bitter laugh rise in her throat. "Apologize?" she asked, her voice sharp. "For leaving me? For breaking my heart? For disappearing without a trace?" Evan flinched, his eyes dropping to the table. "I know I can't make up for what I did," he said, his voice barely above a whisper. "But I want to try. I want to explain." Rory leaned back in her chair, her eyes never leaving his face. "I'm listening," she said, her voice cold. Evan took a deep breath, his fingers tracing the edge of the table. "After Prague, things got... complicated," he said, his voice hesitant. "I got involved in something... dangerous. I had to leave, Rory. I had to disappear." Rory felt a chill run down her spine. She remembered the whispered conversations, the late-night phone calls, the sudden disappearances. She had always known there was more to Evan's work than he let on. She just hadn't realized how much more. "What were you involved in, Evan?" she asked, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her belly. Evan hesitated, his eyes meeting hers. "I can't tell you that, Rory," he said, his voice firm. "It's not safe. For either of us." Rory felt a surge of anger. "Not safe?" she asked, her voice rising. "You left me, Evan. You disappeared without a trace. Do you have any idea what that was like? How much it hurt?" Evan reached out, his hand covering hers. Rory stiffened, pulling away. Evan's hand fell back to the table, his eyes filled with regret. "I'm sorry, Rory," he said, his voice soft. "I'm so sorry." Rory felt the tears pricking at the corners of her eyes. She blinked them back, her jaw set. "I can't forgive you, Evan," she said, her voice steady. "I can't just forget what happened. But... I can listen. I can try to understand." Evan nodded, a small smile tugging at the corners of his mouth. "That's all I ask, Rory," he said, his voice soft. "That's all I ask." Rory stood up, her chair scraping back with a harsh screech. "I need some air," she said, her voice steady. "I'll be back in a minute." Evan nodded, his eyes never leaving her face. Rory walked away, her heels clicking on the wooden floor, each step echoing like a gunshot in the suddenly silent room. She pushed open the door, stepping out into the cool night air. She leaned against the wall, her eyes closed, her heart pounding in her chest. She took a deep breath, the cool air filling her lungs, steadying her nerves. She opened her eyes, looking out at the bustling street, the neon lights reflecting in the puddles on the pavement. She saw the years reflected in those puddles, the laughter and the tears, the love and the loss. She saw the weight of time, the unspoken regret, the ghosts of the past. She saw the face of the girl she had been, the one who had loved Evan with every fiber of her being. And she saw the face of the woman she had become, the one who had learned to stand on her own two feet, to face the world with her head held high. She took a deep breath, steeling herself. She turned back towards the bar, her heels clicking on the pavement, each step echoing like a gunshot in the night. She pushed open the door, stepping back into the warm glow of The Raven's Nest, ready to face the ghosts of the past, ready to face the weight of time and unspoken regret.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.656
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
72.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1292
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count3
3
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"softly"
1"slightly"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
10.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1292
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"testament"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count2
5
word"whisper"
count3
6
word"pounding"
count2
7
word"glinting"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count3
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"down her spine"
count1
12
word"weight"
count2
13
word"unspoken"
count2
highlights
0"familiar"
1"flicked"
2"testament"
3"scanning"
4"tracing"
5"whisper"
6"pounding"
7"glinting"
8"echoing"
9"etched"
10"chill"
11"down her spine"
12"weight"
13"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
77.65% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells5
narrationSentences88
matches
0"g in surprise"
1"felt a chill"
2"a surge of anger"
3"filled with regret"
4"d with regret"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences88
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1288
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1075
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.58
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
London1
Carter1
Rory17
Blackwood1
Silas4
Guinness1
Prague1
Evan14
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Rory"
3"Blackwood"
4"Silas"
5"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Prague"
globalScore0.709
windowScore0.333
85.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite reach his eyes"
1"felt like a lifetime ago"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1288
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
70.68% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean40.25
std15.99
cv0.397
sampleLengths
076
152
258
347
446
560
634
725
836
943
1039
1136
1258
1316
1436
1524
1627
1735
1819
1938
2041
2118
2224
2335
2434
2543
2626
2726
2841
2948
3086
3161
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"was hunched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs182
matches
0"was polishing"
1"were laughing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences99
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1079
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.028730305838739572
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.008341056533827619
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean13.01
std5.89
cv0.453
sampleLengths
023
116
216
321
412
58
616
716
816
921
1021
1118
1217
1312
1411
1519
1616
1721
1817
1915
207
218
229
2311
246
258
2617
279
2827
2921
3016
316
327
3310
3422
3511
3610
379
386
3911
4014
4115
4218
4316
448
4517
4611
4714
4810
499
33.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.23232323232323232
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners23
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount51
totalSentences88
matches
0"She paused, letting her eyes"
1"His hazel eyes flicked up,"
2"She returned the gesture, her"
3"She pushed it back, revealing"
4"she said, her voice steady"
5"He pushed it towards her,"
6"he said, his voice a"
7"she said, her eyes scanning"
8"Her gaze landed on a"
9"He was hunched over a"
10"It was a face she'd"
11"he said, his voice barely"
12"It was a name Rory"
13"she asked, her voice steady"
14"His eyes met hers, a"
15"They were laughing, their arms"
16"It felt like a lifetime"
17"She took a deep breath,"
18"she said, sliding off the"
19"She walked towards Evan, her"
ratio0.58
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences88
matches
0"Aurora Carter, known to most"
1"She paused, letting her eyes"
2"The bar was a familiar"
3"Silas Blackwood, the bar's owner,"
4"His hazel eyes flicked up,"
5"A small smile tugged at"
6"She returned the gesture, her"
7"Rory slid onto a stool,"
8"She pushed it back, revealing"
9"she said, her voice steady"
10"Silas poured her a pint"
11"He pushed it towards her,"
12"he said, his voice a"
13"Rory took a sip, the"
14"she said, her eyes scanning"
15"Her gaze landed on a"
16"The man sat at a"
17"He was hunched over a"
18"It was a face she'd"
19"A face she hadn't seen"
ratio0.966
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
36.47% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"He pushed it towards her, his neat beard framing a smile that didn't quite reach his eyes."
1"He was hunched over a book, his fingers tracing the lines of text, his lips moving silently."
2"She walked towards Evan, her heels clicking on the wooden floor, each step echoing like a gunshot in the suddenly silent room."
3"Rory walked away, her heels clicking on the wooden floor, each step echoing like a gunshot in the suddenly silent room."
4"She took a deep breath, the cool air filling her lungs, steadying her nerves."
5"She opened her eyes, looking out at the bustling street, the neon lights reflecting in the puddles on the pavement."
6"She turned back towards the bar, her heels clicking on the pavement, each step echoing like a gunshot in the night."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount19
matches
0"he said, his voice a low rumble, like distant thunder"
1"she said, her eyes scanning the room, taking in the usual suspects"
2"he said, his voice barely above a whisper"
3"she asked, her voice steady despite the sudden pounding of her heart"
4"His eyes met, a silent question passing between them"
5"he said, his voice barely above a whisper"
6"she asked, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside her"
7"he said, his voice soft"
8"she asked, her voice sharp"
9"he said, his voice barely above a whisper"
10"she said, her voice cold"
11"he said, his voice hesitant"
12"she asked, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her belly"
13"he said, his voice firm"
14"she asked, her voice rising"
15"he said, his voice soft"
16"she said, her voice steady"
17"he said, his voice soft"
18"she said, her voice steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags20
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
70.4980%