Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQTEYVXFJSRS496RQ27SEP

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Duration:
3.7s
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$0.000210

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon glow of the Raven’s Nest pulsed like a slow, deliberate heartbeat, casting jagged shadows across the polished wooden floor. Silas leaned against the bar, his signet ring catching the light as he swirled a glass of amber liquid. The air smelled of aged whiskey and something faintly metallic—old blood, maybe, or the scent of a man who’d spent too many nights nursing wounds he didn’t want to name. Aurora Carter—Rory, as she preferred—stood just inside the door, her boots scuffing against the worn tiles. She hadn’t come for the drink. She’d come for the man who’d once been her closest friend, the one who’d pulled her out of Evan’s grip with nothing but a promise and a knife. The one who’d let her think she could still be the girl she’d been in Cardiff, before the world had gnawed her down to nothing. Silas didn’t look up. "You’re late." She exhaled through her nose, the breath curling around her scarred wrist. "Traffic." "Always." The words were a punch. Rory had forgotten how sharp he could be. "You’re not the same man I left here." Silas finally turned, his hazel eyes sharp as a blade. "No. I’m not." A silence settled between them, thick as the smoke curling from the pipes in the corner. The kind of silence that didn’t need words to speak volumes. "Eva mentioned you were back," Rory said, her voice quieter than she intended. "Said you’d been running a bar in Soho." Silas tilted his head, studying her. "You still work for Yu-Fei?" She nodded. "Same shift. Same delivery route." A beat of silence. Then, quietly: "You’ve changed." Rory’s fingers tightened around the edge of the bar. "So have you." Silas didn’t deny it. "The Nest’s quieter now. Fewer faces I recognise." "I remember that." The bar’s walls—painted with old maps and black-and-white photos of men in suits and women in dresses—seemed to breathe. The air hummed with something unspoken, the kind of tension that settled over a place when secrets were buried too deep. Rory had spent years burying hers. Now, here she was, standing in the same room where she’d once thought she could still be in control. Silas reached into his pocket and pulled out a folded piece of paper. He slid it across the bar toward her. The moment it touched her palm, she knew what it was before she looked. Her name, scrawled in ink that had seen too many hands. A list of names. Rory’s breath hitched. "What is this?" Silas didn’t answer. He just watched her, his gaze unyielding. She unfolded the paper, the ink smudging slightly where her fingers brushed it. The list was short. Four names. All women. All missing. All with connections to the same occult supply shop in Camden. Her stomach twisted. "You’re not—" "I’m not what?" Silas cut her off, his voice low. "The man who saved your ass? The one who taught you how to lie when you needed to? The one who still remembers every scar you’ve ever earned?" Rory’s throat tightened. "You’re not—" "Blackwood," she breathed, the name a prayer. "Silas Blackwood. The Spymaster." The bar’s neon sign flickered, casting the two of them in a sickly green glow. The weight of years pressed down on her like a physical force, pressing her against the bar, against the truth she’d spent so long running from. Silas didn’t speak again. He just waited. And in that waiting, something inside her snapped. The girl who’d once thought she could outrun her past was gone. All that remained was the woman who’d been left behind, and the man who’d finally shown her the truth she’d been too afraid to face. The paper slipped from her fingers. It hit the bar with a dull *thud*, and for a moment, the only sound was the distant clink of glasses and the murmur of voices in the background. Silas reached for it. Rory’s hands were steady. "Leave it." His fingers brushed hers. "You’re not the only one who’s changed." She swallowed hard. "Then let me go." Silas didn’t move. The bar was still. The neon pulsed. And somewhere, in the quiet between them, the past caught up with them, heavier than ever. The game had changed. And she wasn’t sure she wanted to play.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.13
leniency0.261
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount726
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount726
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"unspoken"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"silence"
2"unspoken"
3"tension"
4"stomach"
5"flickered"
6"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences62
matches(empty)
96.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences62
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences81
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords718
ratio0.001
matches
0"thud"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
59.54% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount608
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.81
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Carter1
Rory8
Evan1
Cardiff1
Silas11
Camden1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Rory"
3"Evan"
4"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Camden"
globalScore0.595
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount718
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean21.12
std19.64
cv0.93
sampleLengths
070
175
26
313
41
521
613
727
821
911
107
118
1212
1312
143
1565
1635
1715
186
1910
2034
215
2238
235
2411
2541
2652
2735
284
296
3011
317
3226
3312
88.29% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences62
matches
0"were buried"
1"was gone"
2"been left"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs103
matches
0"was, standing"
37.04% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences81
ratio0.037
matches
0"The air smelled of aged whiskey and something faintly metallic—old blood, maybe, or the scent of a man who’d spent too many nights nursing wounds he didn’t want to name."
1"Aurora Carter—Rory, as she preferred—stood just inside the door, her boots scuffing against the worn tiles."
2"The bar’s walls—painted with old maps and black-and-white photos of men in suits and women in dresses—seemed to breathe."
92.32% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount615
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.04878048780487805
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.013008130081300813
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences81
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences81
mean8.86
std7.57
cv0.854
sampleLengths
021
119
230
316
46
528
625
74
82
912
101
111
125
138
148
1510
163
1716
1811
1913
208
216
225
232
245
254
264
279
283
294
308
313
3219
3321
346
3519
3613
378
3814
3911
404
413
423
433
447
4513
464
472
482
492
48.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3333333333333333
totalSentences81
uniqueOpeners27
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"All that remained was the"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences57
matches
0"She hadn’t come for the"
1"She’d come for the man"
2"She exhaled through her nose,"
3"He slid it across the"
4"Her name, scrawled in ink"
5"He just watched her, his"
6"She unfolded the paper, the"
7"Her stomach twisted."
8"she breathed, the name a"
9"He just waited."
10"It hit the bar with"
11"His fingers brushed hers."
12"She swallowed hard."
ratio0.228
12.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences57
matches
0"The neon glow of the"
1"Silas leaned against the bar,"
2"The air smelled of aged"
3"Aurora Carter—Rory, as she preferred—stood"
4"She hadn’t come for the"
5"She’d come for the man"
6"The one who’d let her"
7"Silas didn’t look up."
8"She exhaled through her nose,"
9"The words were a punch."
10"Rory had forgotten how sharp"
11"Silas finally turned, his hazel"
12"A silence settled between them,"
13"The kind of silence that"
14"Rory said, her voice quieter"
15"Silas tilted his head, studying"
16"A beat of silence."
17"Rory’s fingers tightened around the"
18"Silas didn’t deny it."
19"The bar’s walls—painted with old"
ratio0.895
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Now, here she was, standing"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The air smelled of aged whiskey and something faintly metallic—old blood, maybe, or the scent of a man who’d spent too many nights nursing wounds he didn’t want…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Rory said, her voice quieter than she intended"
1"Silas cut, his voice low"
2"she breathed, the name a prayer"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.087
leniency0.174
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.087
83.5058%