Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQTJK2F3A5PZS4QXXB2KJ5

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Duration:
34.5s
Cost:
$0.018346

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from her fingers before she could catch it. Ice clinked against the bar’s brass rail, whiskey sloshing over the rim in a dark amber arc. Across the room, a man turned at the sound—hazel eyes locking onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope. Silas. His beard had more grey than she remembered. The signet ring on his right hand glinted under the dim green neon as he lifted his glass in a silent toast. No smile. No surprise. Just that quiet assessment, the kind that used to make assets squirm in interrogation chairs. Rory’s pulse hammered in her throat. Three years. Three years since she’d walked out of that Prague safehouse with a bullet graze and a promise to herself: *Never look back.* The bartender’s voice cut through the fog. "You alright, love?" She nodded, pressing a five-pound note into his palm. "Keep the change." Silas hadn’t moved. Not an inch. Just watched as she crossed the room, his gaze tracking her like she was a classified file he’d memorised decades ago. The limp was new—or maybe she’d just never noticed it before. His left knee gave a barely perceptible hitch as he shifted his weight. "You’re still terrible at holding drinks," he said. The words landed like a punch. Not the greeting she’d expected. Not the anger, either. Just that dry, familiar amusement, the kind that used to make her feel like the only person in the room who got his jokes. "Still terrible at not being a condescending arse," she shot back. A ghost of a smile touched his lips. "Touché." She slid onto the stool beside him. The leather creaked, worn smooth by decades of secrets and bad decisions. The Raven’s Nest smelled the same—aged whiskey, polished wood, the faint metallic tang of old blood beneath the varnish. Some things never changed. Silas signalled the bartender without looking away from her. "Another Glenfiddich. Neat." A pause. "And whatever she’s having." "Just water," Rory said. The bartender raised an eyebrow but didn’t comment. Silas, however, let out a low chuckle. "Water. Right. Because Rory Carter, the girl who once drank a Russian oligarch under the table for intel, now orders water in a bar." "I grew up." "Did you?" The question hung between them, sharp as a blade. She could feel the weight of it, the unspoken *or did you just get better at running?* The bartender returned with their drinks. Silas lifted his glass, swirling the amber liquid before taking a slow sip. Rory wrapped her fingers around her water glass, the condensation cool against her skin. "You look different," she said. "Older." "Not just that." She studied him—the lines around his eyes deeper, the set of his jaw harder. "You look... settled." He barked out a laugh. "Settled. That’s one word for it." His fingers tapped against the glass, a restless rhythm. "What about you? Still delivering takeaway for Yu-Fei?" The way he said her name—like he’d been keeping tabs. Like he’d known exactly where to find her if he’d wanted to. "Among other things," she said carefully. "Ah." He took another sip. "The mysterious ‘other things.’ Always so vague, Rory." She bristled. "Not everything’s a debrief, Silas." "No," he agreed. "But most things are." The air between them crackled with something unspoken. Regret, maybe. Or the ghost of choices made and paths not taken. She changed the subject. "What happened to your knee?" His fingers stilled on the glass. For a moment, she thought he wouldn’t answer. Then, quietly: "Prague." The word hit like a physical blow. *Prague.* The op that had gone sideways. The one that had left her with a scar on her wrist and him—what? Retired? Broken? "I didn’t know," she said. "You weren’t supposed to." The subtext was clear: *You weren’t there.* She swallowed. "I had to leave." "Did you?" The question again. This time, it wasn’t just about Prague. It was about everything—the way she’d vanished in the night, the way she’d cut ties with everyone from that life. The way she’d let him think she was dead for six months before he’d tracked down a single text: *I’m alive. Don’t look for me.* Silas set his glass down with deliberate care. "You know, I always wondered what would’ve happened if you’d stayed." She looked away, her gaze landing on the black-and-white photographs lining the walls. Grainy images of spies and informants, most of them long dead. "We both know what would’ve happened. I would’ve ended up like the rest of them." "Or," he said softly, "you would’ve ended up like me." The words settled over her like a shroud. *Like me.* Retired. Washed up. Running a bar as a front for ghosts. She picked at the label on her water bottle. "Is that what this is? You, retired?" His laugh was bitter. "Hardly. The Nest isn’t just a bar, Rory. It’s a hub. A way to keep my finger on the pulse without getting my hands dirty." "Sounds exhausting." "It is." He drained the last of his whiskey. "But it’s better than the alternative." She knew what he meant. The alternative was irrelevance. The alternative was being the kind of man who sat at home, staring at the walls, wondering where it all went wrong. She traced the rim of her glass with her thumb. "Do you ever miss it? The field?" He was quiet for a long moment. Then: "Every damn day." The admission hung between them, raw and unguarded. For the first time since she’d walked in, she saw the man beneath the carefully constructed facade—the one who missed the thrill of the chase, the weight of a gun in his hand, the rush of outsmarting an enemy at their own game. She understood that ache. Because despite everything—despite the fear, the scars, the way her hands still shook when she heard a car backfire—she missed it too. Silas leaned forward, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper. "You ever think about coming back?" The question caught her off guard. "What?" "To the life. To the work." His eyes gleamed in the dim light. "I’ve got a job. Something that needs your particular... skill set." She should’ve said no. Should’ve walked out the door and never looked back. But the way he was looking at her—like she was still that sharp, quick-thinking asset he’d trained, like she hadn’t spent the last three years delivering dumplings and pretending she was normal—made her hesitate. "What kind of job?" His lips curved into a slow, dangerous smile. "The kind that reminds you why you were good at this in the first place." Before she could respond, the door to the bar swung open. A gust of cold air rushed in, carrying with it the distant wail of sirens. Silas’s head snapped toward the entrance, his body tensing like a coiled spring. Rory followed his gaze. A man stood in the doorway, his face obscured by the hood of his jacket. But it wasn’t the hood that made her blood run cold—it was the gun in his hand. Silas’s voice was a low growl. "Rory. Down. Now."
total_cost0.018346

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said carefully [carefully]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.261
leniency0.522
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.087
87.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1207
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1207
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"could feel"
count1
5
word"unspoken"
count2
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"constructed"
count1
8
word"facade"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"weight"
2"familiar"
3"eyebrow"
4"could feel"
5"unspoken"
6"traced"
7"constructed"
8"facade"
9"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences105
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"look"
1"feel"
2"think"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords23
totalWords1191
ratio0.019
matches
0"Never look back."
1"or did you just get better at running?"
2"Prague."
3"You weren’t there."
4"I’m alive. Don’t look for me."
5"Like me."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount936
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.96
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Prague3
Raven1
Nest1
Rory4
Silas9
Retired2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
places
0"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1191
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"understood that ache"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean19.85
std15.14
cv0.763
sampleLengths
048
11
249
330
410
512
651
78
839
911
109
1142
1218
134
1439
153
162
1726
1833
195
201
2120
2228
2322
246
2513
267
277
2820
299
3017
3130
325
334
347
356
362
3755
3819
3939
4010
4121
4216
4329
442
4515
4631
4717
4811
4951
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs162
matches
0"was being"
1"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences135
ratio0.081
matches
0"Across the room, a man turned at the sound—hazel eyes locking onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope."
1"The limp was new—or maybe she’d just never noticed it before."
2"The Raven’s Nest smelled the same—aged whiskey, polished wood, the faint metallic tang of old blood beneath the varnish."
3"\"Not just that.\" She studied him—the lines around his eyes deeper, the set of his jaw harder."
4"The way he said her name—like he’d been keeping tabs."
5"The one that had left her with a scar on her wrist and him—what?"
6"It was about everything—the way she’d vanished in the night, the way she’d cut ties with everyone from that life."
7"For the first time since she’d walked in, she saw the man beneath the carefully constructed facade—the one who missed the thrill of the chase, the weight of a gun in his hand, the rush of outsmarting an enemy at their own game."
8"Because despite everything—despite the fear, the scars, the way her hands still shook when she heard a car backfire—she missed it too."
9"But the way he was looking at her—like she was still that sharp, quick-thinking asset he’d trained, like she hadn’t spent the last three years delivering dumplings and pretending she was normal—made her hesitate."
10"But it wasn’t the hood that made her blood run cold—it was the gun in his hand."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount951
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.029442691903259727
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.007360672975814932
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean8.82
std6.88
cv0.78
sampleLengths
011
117
220
31
48
522
62
72
815
96
102
1122
127
133
149
153
163
173
1821
1911
2013
218
226
235
244
2524
2611
278
281
297
3012
3119
324
339
345
354
364
378
387
3924
403
412
429
4317
446
4513
4614
475
481
4917
60.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3851851851851852
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners52
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences87
matches
0"Just that quiet assessment, the"
1"Just watched as she crossed"
2"Just that dry, familiar amusement,"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences87
matches
0"His beard had more grey"
1"She nodded, pressing a five-pound"
2"His left knee gave a"
3"she shot back"
4"She slid onto the stool"
5"She could feel the weight"
6"She studied him—the lines around"
7"He barked out a laugh."
8"His fingers tapped against the"
9"she said carefully"
10"He took another sip"
11"She changed the subject."
12"His fingers stilled on the"
13"It was about everything—the way"
14"She looked away, her gaze"
15"he said softly"
16"She picked at the label"
17"His laugh was bitter."
18"He drained the last of"
19"She knew what he meant."
ratio0.299
74.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences87
matches
0"The glass slipped from her"
1"Ice clinked against the bar’s"
2"His beard had more grey"
3"The signet ring on his"
4"Rory’s pulse hammered in her"
5"The bartender’s voice cut through"
6"She nodded, pressing a five-pound"
7"Silas hadn’t moved."
8"The limp was new—or maybe"
9"His left knee gave a"
10"The words landed like a"
11"she shot back"
12"A ghost of a smile"
13"She slid onto the stool"
14"The leather creaked, worn smooth"
15"The Raven’s Nest smelled the"
16"Some things never changed."
17"Silas signalled the bartender without"
18"The bartender raised an eyebrow"
19"Silas, however, let out a"
ratio0.77
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"Because despite everything—despite the fear,"
1"Before she could respond, the"
ratio0.023
61.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Silas lifted his glass, swirling the amber liquid before taking a slow sip."
1"She looked away, her gaze landing on the black-and-white photographs lining the walls."
2"The alternative was being the kind of man who sat at home, staring at the walls, wondering where it all went wrong."
3"But it wasn’t the hood that made her blood run cold—it was the gun in his hand."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She studied, the set of his jaw harder"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.152
leniency0.304
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.043
90.3191%