Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQTKGSN2XESNZWJH4ZW8CX

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
22.1s
Cost:
$0.015557
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora wrenched open the glass door and the green neon fizzed against her cheek. Golden Empress bag slipped, clattering onto the stool. “Oi, careful with that.” She froze. At the bar, a woman in a charcoal suit lifted an untouched gimlet. Hair cropped close, sharp cheekbones, eyes narrowed. “Bethan?” Rory’s voice sounded foreign in her own throat. She hadn’t heard that name in seven years. Bethan set the glass down so precisely the ice shards rattled. “Aurora Carter. Or is it Laila now?” Aurora scrubbed her palm on her apron. “Just Aurora. Got off shift.” Bethan’s lips curved, half amusement, half something colder. “Thought you’d be knee-deep in briefs by twenty-five. Pre-Law star of Cardiff.” Rory glanced at the take-out bag, at her plastic-stained fingers. “I deliver dumplings these days.” Nobody moved. The bar hummed behind them—low music, muffled laughter, Silas’s muted shuffle as he topped up bottles. Bethan pressed her tongue to her front teeth, sizing Rory up. “You look… different.” She did. The shoulder-length black hair, once tamed in neat ponytails, now fell loose, unguarded. Her bright blue eyes had a sharpened light. The crescent scar on her wrist caught the neon glow. “I survived London,” Rory said. It tasted blunt, even to her ears. Bethan’s thumb stroked the rim of her glass. “You changed lanes fast. Last I heard, you bolted after… him.” Silence stretched. Rory traced the scar. “I left Evan behind.” “Brilliant barrister, that one.” Bethan shook her head. “Never understood why you ran.” Rory’s chest pinched. “He… wasn’t who we thought.” Bethan stared, unreadable. “And you never told me. I sent letters.” Rory bit her lip. “I never got them.” Bethan’s gaze flicked to the empty stool beside Rory. “Funny, I have every stamp.” She slid an envelope across the bar. Yellowed, thick. Rory lifted it like she feared it might burn. “I kept them,” Bethan said. “Didn’t want to lose you twice.” The corners of Rory’s vision tightened. “I had to disappear.” “You didn’t vanish. You resurfaced here.” Bethan pointed at the apron. “Delivering dumplings in Soho.” Rory exhaled. “Bills.” Bethan’s shoulders sagged. “I always imagined you in court robes, not… this.” Rory tore open the envelope. A stack of letters, eight or nine. Each sealed, addressed in Bethan’s neat copperplate. “I thought you hated my handwriting,” Bethan murmured. Rory’s fingers trembled as she flipped through one. The paper smelled faintly of bergamot, Bethan’s signature scent. I’m going to plead your case pro bono. I watched you in lectures, your hand shooting up. Laurie misses you. He still talks about that debate. The last page slipped free. Rory unfolded it, hands shaking. He’s back in town. Her breath hitched. Bethan leaned forward. “Clear?” Rory snapped the letter shut. “I’m fine.” “Evan Carter?” Bethan’s voice sharpened. “Ex.” Rory pushed to her feet. “I need air.” She snagged her bag and moved toward the door. Bethan’s voice trailed after her. “You owe me a proper explanation.” The door swung closed behind Rory’s retreat. The neon sign blinked green farewell. Outside, Soho pulsed. Patrons drifted between clubs and kebab shops. Acrid smoke curled from bins. Rory pressed her back against the brick, heart hammering. She fingered the letter. He’s back in town. Evan. The man who’d clipped her wrist with a whiskey bottle so perfectly it left that crescent scar. Inside, Bethan rose, smoothing her suit jacket. Silas materialised, leaning on the bar. “She’s shaken,” he said, voice low. Bethan nodded. “A letter she didn’t expect.” Silas cradled his signet ring. “You tread dangerous ground, sending personal mail.” “Would you rather I stayed silent?” Bethan’s eyes glinted. He tapped the ring. “Rory’s fragile.” She brushed a lock of hair behind her ear. “So’s truth.” Silas studied her. “You need an ally.” Bethan’s jaw tightened. “I came to find a friend.” Back on the pavement, Rory heard laughter around the corner. Cellar doors clanged. A group of late-night revellers spilled from a club. She inched past them, head low, heart wild. He’s back in town. She mouthed the words, taste metallic. The letter’s edge tore in her fist. At a lamppost, she lit a cigarette with trembling fingers. The flame revealed lines around her eyes she didn’t remember. She inhaled smoke, leaned back until her spine pressed the rough brick. The neon above the bar sputtered. A moment’s calm. A figure emerged from the shadows—Bethan. “You’re smoking.” Rory flicked ash. “Worried it’ll kill me faster.” Bethan stepped close, voice softer. “Why did you really leave?” Rory stubbed the cigarette, jaws clamped. “Because he said he’d find me.” Bethan’s breath hitched. “You think that letter came from him?” “Maybe.” Rory covered the envelope with one hand. “Or someone wants him to.” Bethan’s lashes fluttered. “You should have told me.” Rory looked away, pressed her forehead against the lamppost. “I was scared you’d judge me.” Bethan bent forward. Fingers hovered over Rory’s wrist. “I’d judge whoever hurt you.” Rory stared at the scar. Lines of memory flared—shards of glass, Evan’s rage, the hospital corridor. “Time’s a thief,” Bethan whispered. “It stole us.” Rory’s cheek twitched. “I lost more than time.” Bethan searched her face. “I’m here now.” She reached out, touched Rory’s arm. Rory inhaled, the skin under Bethan’s fingers warm, real. For a heartbeat she considered letting go. Then headlights cut through the night. A black Mercedes rolled up. Glass snagged on the wheel arch, whispering metal. Rory snapped upright. “Shit.” The passenger window slid down. A man’s face filled the frame. Sharp jaw, pale eyes. Recognition slammed into Rory’s chest. “Miss Carter?” His voice was smooth, deliberate. Rory’s breath stuttered. Bethan’s hand flew to her mouth. The man’s smile sharpened. “Long time.” Rory stared. Letters fell from her hand, fluttered onto the pavement. Bethan swallowed. “Aurora—” Rory didn’t hear. The Mercedes door clicked open. The man stepped toward her, eyes unreadable. The neon sign behind them winked green. Silence stretched, heavy with everything unsaid, as Rory faced the man she never thought she’d see again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.214
leniency0.429
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1007
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"perfectly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
45.38% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1007
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"unreadable"
count2
3
word"flicked"
count2
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"fluttered"
count2
highlights
0"silence"
1"traced"
2"unreadable"
3"flicked"
4"trembled"
5"pulsed"
6"fluttered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences126
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences169
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen17
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords998
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount757
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity4.49
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity7.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Empress1
Silas4
Rory34
Bethan30
Soho1
Evan2
Mercedes2
persons
0"Silas"
1"Rory"
2"Bethan"
3"Evan"
4"Mercedes"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount998
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences169
matches
0"heard that name"
1"left that crescent"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean12.79
std7.08
cv0.553
sampleLengths
022
14
222
39
48
518
612
720
815
918
1014
1133
1212
1319
1410
1513
168
1711
188
1914
2018
2111
2210
2315
243
2512
2619
278
2817
2926
3014
313
324
337
345
359
3614
376
3813
3924
4026
4113
426
437
4412
459
466
4711
487
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs159
matches(empty)
92.14% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences169
ratio0.018
matches
0"The bar hummed behind them—low music, muffled laughter, Silas’s muted shuffle as he topped up bottles."
1"A figure emerged from the shadows—Bethan."
2"Lines of memory flared—shards of glass, Evan’s rage, the hospital corridor."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount764
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.017015706806282723
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.003926701570680628
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences169
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences169
mean5.91
std3.1
cv0.525
sampleLengths
014
18
24
32
413
57
69
78
811
97
107
115
128
1312
1410
155
162
1716
1811
193
202
2113
228
2310
245
257
268
2711
282
294
304
318
325
333
345
353
368
374
384
399
405
417
422
439
445
456
466
474
4811
494
53.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3431952662721893
totalSentences169
uniqueOpeners58
29.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"Then headlights cut through the"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences112
matches
0"She hadn’t heard that name"
1"Her bright blue eyes had"
2"It tasted blunt, even to"
3"She slid an envelope across"
4"I’m going to plead your"
5"I watched you in lectures,"
6"He still talks about that"
7"He’s back in town."
8"Her breath hitched."
9"She snagged her bag and"
10"She fingered the letter."
11"He’s back in town."
12"he said, voice low"
13"He tapped the ring."
14"She brushed a lock of"
15"She inched past them, head"
16"He’s back in town."
17"She mouthed the words, taste"
18"She inhaled smoke, leaned back"
19"She reached out, touched Rory’s"
ratio0.188
4.64% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences112
matches
0"Aurora wrenched open the glass"
1"Hair cropped close, sharp cheekbones,"
2"Rory’s voice sounded foreign in"
3"She hadn’t heard that name"
4"Bethan set the glass down"
5"Aurora scrubbed her palm on"
6"Bethan’s lips curved, half amusement,"
7"Rory glanced at the take-out"
8"The bar hummed behind them—low"
9"Bethan pressed her tongue to"
10"The shoulder-length black hair, once"
11"Her bright blue eyes had"
12"The crescent scar on her"
13"It tasted blunt, even to"
14"Bethan’s thumb stroked the rim"
15"Rory traced the scar."
16"Bethan shook her head"
17"Rory’s chest pinched."
18"Bethan stared, unreadable."
19"Rory bit her lip."
ratio0.911
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The man who’d clipped her wrist with a whiskey bottle so perfectly it left that crescent scar."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Bethan murmured (murmur)"
1"Bethan whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.089
leniency0.179
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.071
83.0742%