Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQTPW63ZP2ATX9MV24TBZH

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Smith? Smith, is that you?” Aurora's voice sliced through the low hum of conversation at The Raven's Nest, coaxing the man in the corner to lift his head. The subtle green glow of the neon sign outside cast eerie shadows over his face. His features sharpened, recognition dawning as a slow smile tugged at the corner of his lips. “Rory.” He blinked, as if he couldn’t believe his eyes. “Rory Carter. It’s... been a while.” She had her arms folded, but there was no mistaking the tremor in her voice. “Smith Weller. Unbelievable. What rock have you been hiding under?” Rory crossed the room in a few long strides, her straight black hair swinging like a curtain around her face. The sharp scent of the beer-laden air mixed with her perfume—a hint of jasmine, unmistakable. “Mind if I join you?” She didn't wait for an answer, pulling out the wooden chair opposite him. Smith rubbed a hand through his beard, now partially streaked with grey. His hazel eyes, once sharp with mischief, now carried a weight she hadn’t seen before. “Be my guest,” he murmured, lifting his glass of whiskey in false toast. They sat in silence for a moment. Rory’s eyes wandered to the dimly lit bar, its walls lined with old maps and black-and-white photographs. The mingling conversations around them created a faint cacophony, a familiar hum that nearly swallowed the meaning of her words. “I missed this place.” She broke the silence, her gaze still directed at the artifacts. “Even the smell. Old leather and dust. Stale beer.” “Some things never change,” Smith said with a dry chuckle. “So, what have you been doing? Did you ever leave London?” Smith’s smile faded. He took a slow sip of his whiskey before replying. “I did. For a while.” Aurora waited, expecting more, but was met with silence. “That’s it? Vanished for years and now you’re back with nothing but a suitcase of mystery?” “Maybe.” His eyes flickered to the signet ring on Silas Blackwood’s finger as the older man limped past, subtly reminding him of unwelcome memories. Silas paused, offering a nod of acknowledgment before disappearing into the hidden back room behind a bookshelf. Rory watched the door close behind Silas and left it at that. “You know, I could’ve used a friend back then. After... You know. Evan.” Smith tensed, his knuckles whitening around the glass. “I heard. I’m sorry, Rory. If I’d known...” “You’d what?” The words came out harsher than intended. She took a breath. “Sorry, it’s just... A lot has happened.” “Yeah.” He leaned back, eyes scanning her features. “You look different. Stronger. Like you’ve been through hell and back.” “Funny, because you look like you’re just starting your trip there, mate.” She smiled, a thin, strained line. “Wanna tell me about it, or shall we pretend to catch up like the old days?” Smith’s laugh was more of a bark, humorless. “Let’s skip the pretense, then. I left for rehab. Twice. Got clean the second time. But coming back here...” He glanced around the bar. “It’s like nothing’s changed, except me.” “That bad, huh?” Rory’s voice softened. “I’m glad you made it through. Sorry I wasn’t there.” “Aurora Carter, apologising?” Smith raised an eyebrow. “Hell must’ve frozen over.” She snorted. “Figures you’d deflect with humour. Always did that when things got heavy.” “Look who’s talking,” he shot back smoothly, but his defensive mask had slipped. “And you? How’s life above Silas’s lair of secrets?” “Exhausting.” Rory shrugged. “But it pays the bills. Eva drags me out to socialise now and then. She keeps me sane.” “Eva? That tiny firecracker still keeps you straight?” “If only. She’s gone through her trials too.” Smith glanced at the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a fleeting symbol of a past burden shared. “Seems we’ve both got more than our fair share.” An awkward silence descended, pregnant with the weight of unspoken regrets and missed opportunities. The walls of the bar seemed to close in. The echo of laughter and distant clinking glasses draped a blanket of familiar sounds over their uneasy conversation. “We were idiots,” Smith admitted, his voice barely above a whisper. “Hindsight’s 20/20, isn’t it?” Rory stared into her glass, the amber liquid reflecting a fractured version of herself. “But we’re still here, aren’t we? How about a fresh start?” He hesitated, then nodded. “I’d like that. But no more running away. From anything.” “Deal.” She raised her glass, and he clinked his against it. Their eyes met, a silent vow passing between them. Whatever future lay ahead, uncertain but undeniably intertwined, it no longer felt as daunting. The night stretched on, woven with threads of memories, regrets and hopes for renewal. Recollections of shared laughter mixed with the ghost of past pains. And in the background, life at The Raven's Nest continued, indifferent to the reunion it had witnessed. Aurora leaned back, sighing. "So, what’s next for you? Planning to stick around?” “Maybe.” Smith’s gaze strayed to the door Silas had disappeared behind. “Got an offer on the table. Security work. Something low profile” “Seedy underbelly kind of stuff?” Rory’s mouth twitched into a smirk. “Can’t imagine you as a bouncer.” “Maybe not the bouncer, but... something along those lines.” He traced the rim of his glass. “Silas thinks I’ve got potential.” “Silas would.” She snorted, but there was warmth in her tone. “He’s brutally honest and terribly optimistic. You could do worse.” Smith leaned in, lowering his voice. “Honestly? I’m scared, Rory. Last time I was here, everything fell apart. You ever feel like that?” She met his eyes squarely. “Every damn day. But you learn to pick up the pieces, one at a time.” “Hm.” His smile returned, faint but genuine. “Guess I’ll have to stick around then. See how it’s done.” “Good.” Aurora stood, the chair scraping loudly on the wooden floor. “Let's get out of here. This place is getting too crowded for old friends.” As they left, the green neon sign flickered above their heads, casting their shadows on the cobblestone street. London’s night buzzed around them, full of secrets and possibilities. For the first time in years, neither felt lost. Instead, they faced the weight of time together, stepping back into the labyrinth of the city with a new, tentative thread between them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He leaned back [back]"
1"He glanced around [around]"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.418
leniency0.836
rawRatio0.087
effectiveRatio0.073
95.29% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1062
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1062
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"weight"
count3
1
word"silence"
count4
2
word"cacophony"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count2
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"eyebrow"
count1
7
word"fleeting"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"fractured"
count1
12
word"traced"
count1
13
word"potential"
count1
14
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"silence"
2"cacophony"
3"familiar"
4"flickered"
5"scanning"
6"eyebrow"
7"fleeting"
8"unspoken"
9"echo"
10"whisper"
11"fractured"
12"traced"
13"potential"
14"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences60
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences60
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1057
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount648
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Smith"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Smith"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Smith10
Silas4
Blackwood1
Rory7
Aurora4
persons
0"Nest"
1"Smith"
2"Silas"
3"Blackwood"
4"Rory"
5"Aurora"
places
0"Raven"
globalScore0.728
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.946
wordCount1057
matches
0"not the bouncer, but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean23.49
std12.21
cv0.52
sampleLengths
05
154
216
325
435
518
640
744
824
910
1011
1118
1225
1341
1425
1516
1620
1719
1834
1938
2016
2111
2214
2322
2421
258
268
2728
2841
2911
3029
3114
3211
3323
3442
3513
3622
3717
3821
3921
4023
4120
4218
4325
4460
99.42% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences60
matches
0"was met"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs107
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences92
ratio0.011
matches
0"The sharp scent of the beer-laden air mixed with her perfume—a hint of jasmine, unmistakable."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount653
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.03828483920367534
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.013782542113323124
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean11.49
std5.06
cv0.44
sampleLengths
05
123
215
316
410
56
615
710
820
915
1018
1112
1215
1313
147
1517
1620
1715
189
1910
2011
213
2210
235
249
2516
2624
2717
2812
2913
308
318
329
334
347
358
3611
3718
3816
398
4024
416
426
4310
447
454
462
4712
4813
499
90.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5652173913043478
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners52
57.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"Instead, they faced the weight"
ratio0.017
68.28% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences58
matches
0"His features sharpened, recognition dawning"
1"He blinked, as if he"
2"She had her arms folded,"
3"She didn't wait for an"
4"His hazel eyes, once sharp"
5"he murmured, lifting his glass"
6"They sat in silence for"
7"She broke the silence, her"
8"He took a slow sip"
9"His eyes flickered to the"
10"She took a breath."
11"He leaned back, eyes scanning"
12"She smiled, a thin, strained"
13"He glanced around the bar"
14"he shot back smoothly, but"
15"He hesitated, then nodded."
16"She raised her glass, and"
17"Their eyes met, a silent"
18"He traced the rim of"
19"She snorted, but there was"
ratio0.379
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences58
matches
0"Aurora's voice sliced through the"
1"The subtle green glow of"
2"His features sharpened, recognition dawning"
3"He blinked, as if he"
4"She had her arms folded,"
5"Rory crossed the room in"
6"The sharp scent of the"
7"She didn't wait for an"
8"Smith rubbed a hand through"
9"His hazel eyes, once sharp"
10"he murmured, lifting his glass"
11"They sat in silence for"
12"Rory’s eyes wandered to the"
13"The mingling conversations around them"
14"She broke the silence, her"
15"Smith said with a dry"
16"Smith’s smile faded."
17"He took a slow sip"
18"Aurora waited, expecting more, but"
19"His eyes flickered to the"
ratio0.931
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"He blinked, as if he couldn’t believe his eyes"
1"She broke, her gaze still directed at the artifacts"
2"He leaned back, eyes scanning her features"
3"Smith admitted, his voice barely above a whisper"
4"Rory stared, the amber liquid reflecting a fractured version of herself"
5"His smile returned, faint but genuine"
6"Aurora stood, the chair scraping loudly on the wooden floor"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
1"Smith admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.055
leniency0.109
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.073
82.4021%