Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQTWA7MX8HH42QE9PPE46Y

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Duration:
48.4s
Cost:
$0.001438

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Look, just get the hell out of my way!” Aurora shoved her way through the throng of bodies, her black leather jacket clinging to her shoulders like a second skin. The Raven's Nest emitted an air of subdued chaos—voices wove indiscernibly in the shadowy corners, laughter tinged with the bitterness of spilled secrets. She weaved between tables littered with half-empty glasses, the air heavy with the scent of stale beer and something unsettlingly sweet. “Aurora!” Silas’ voice boomed from behind the bar, drawing attention like a spotlight in the gloom. He wiped his hands on a rag with that familiar, languid grace, hazel eyes sparkling with both concern and amusement. “You know we no longer serve drinkers in the middle of a fit, don’t you?” She met his gaze, lips curling into a smirk that felt foreign even to her. “Maybe just slightly less judgmental next time?” He chuckled, but the amusement faded as the door swung open, the bell over it chiming merrily. An almost palpable hush fell over the bar, the kind that creeps in like the chill before a storm. Aurora turned, her heart jolting into a reckless beat. There, silhouetted against the neon glow of the ‘OPEN’ sign, stood Eva—an old friend in every sense of the word, yet, undeniably different. “What the hell?” Aurora said under her breath. “Long time no see,” Eva chirped, stepping forward. The playful warmth in her voice barely concealed the awkwardness hanging between them like laundry left out too long in the rain. The electric hum of the bar buzzed with the weight of their history, threatening to suffocate them both. “Yeah… it’s been a while.” Aurora instinctively straightened her posture, forcing her eyes not to flinch at the sight of Eva’s glossy hair, cascading in meticulous waves over her shoulders. She looked polished, the soft blush in her cheeks almost glowing against the deep red of her dress. “Rory! I mean, Aurora! I should have come by sooner.” “Just Rory, please.” She glanced at Silas, who observed the exchange like a conspirator at a heist, his grey-streaked auburn hair bristling with intrigue. A sharp sensation prickled at her wrist where the scar lay, almost echoing the hidden conversations she was not ready to have yet. “Right. Lovely to see you, Rory.” Eva forced a smile that didn’t quite reach her eyes. Aurora could sense how desperate they both were to compress the years of silence, the unsaid thoughts that filled the chasms between them. The buzz of the bar ebbed around them like a tide threatening to swallow them whole. “And you,” Aurora said. The words felt strained, like a rubber band stretched to its limit. “How’ve you been?” “Busy, you know, life... work. Growing up.” Those last two words clanked together like a pair of uninvited guests intruding on a tense reunion. Aurora felt herself clench her jaw. The barge of time hadn’t just drifted past them; it had become a rickety vessel, strewn with the debris of all they had lost. “Work?” she probed, deliberately casual. “Still at that PR firm?” “About to become a partner, actually. Didn’t think I had it in me, but here we are.” Eva’s eyes flickered, an unsettling mix of pride—something Aurora had almost forgotten could burn in the pit of her stomach—and something darker, something like envy. “Good for you,” Aurora said. It came out flat, as if a ceiling had collapsed within her, cutting off any semblance of warmth. The familiar frame of Eva’s success loomed over her like a shadow, reminding her of what had fallen away. The pause that enveloped them felt like a mist parting only to reveal the sharp edges of memories. The accidental coffee spill in the last café they shared, the nights spent drowning in laughter, the dreams they spun like delicate threads before life had unravelled them. “Rory,” Eva began, but Aurora cut her off, a sudden fire igniting her tongue. “Call me Rory again,” she challenged, steel knitting her voice, “and we’re done here.” A glimmer of surprise flared in Eva’s eyes, the tension hanging thicker than before. Silas leaned back against the bar, a half-smirk etched on his face—the kind of smirk that whispered of secrets she would prefer stayed buried. “Alright, Rory,” Eva said, trying to draw levity from the chasm of silence. “It’s not like I’ve been using your full name to torture you. Just a force of habit, I guess.” “Sure.” “So what’s new with you?” Eva’s words tumbled out, a half-hearted attempt at salvaging the fracture between them. “Same old, really,” Aurora replied, the words slipping from her like water through fingers. “Part-time delivery. Trying to avoid past mistakes, you know?” “Heart still racing from Evan?” The airy jest cut sharp, as if Eva had wrenched a knife from its sheath with careless precision. A heartbeat of silence fell between them. Aurora paused. Time itself seemingly bent, the weight of Eva’s tone pulling at old scars. “Not everything’s about him,” Aurora finally said, her voice low and careful, but even she could hear the tremor beneath the surface. “You don’t know what’s happened since…” “Oh, come on, Rory. We all know his impact on you. You were so vibrant—” “Vibrant?” Aurora forced out a laugh that had irony stamped all over it, “You mean ‘naïve’.” Eva recoiled but quickly masked it with a laugh of her own. “We both were back then.” “Except I didn’t escape unscathed,” Aurora shot back, emotions bubbling over, her chest tightening. The weight of Eva’s perfect life gnawed at her, and she couldn’t help feeling like a ghost haunting the flickering recesses of someone else’s success. “You can’t let him define you like that.” “Oh, but he does. You can’t just shove it aside!” She spat with more fervour than intended, startling herself. Around them, patrons exchanged curious glances, the low murmur of voices now brimming with intrigue. Silas’s smirk had morphed into a glint of concern behind the bar, evidently realising just how shredded the air had become. Eva straightened, emotions dancing across her features. “You know Evan was toxic—” “More than that. It’s like a bad hangover stuck in my throat,” Aurora snarled, the words tasting acrid as they broke through her lips. “Rory, I wouldn’t wish that upon anyone.” “Oh really? Spare me pity,” Aurora seethed, her fingers drumming against the bar with intention. “Coming from you, it feels remarkably hollow.” At that, Silas stepped forward, his authority a calming wave against the storm brewing in the subtext of their conversation. “Ladies, this is hardly suitable for a public discourse. A drink on the house to settle things?” “Fine. Let’s drown it,” Aurora replied, unable to suppress the spite that clung to her. She sensed her own vulnerability flickering just within reach, and it sent a thrill of panic clawing at her insides. “Right, let’s drink.” Eva’s voice had taken a tentative turn, but beneath it lay an invitation they both understood—confrontation suspiciously veiled under layers of urbanity. Silas slid two glasses filled with amber liquid onto the bar, the scotch sparkling like trapped sunlight. “Cheers,” Aurora said, raising her glass. “Cheers,” Eva mirrored, but their gazes didn’t connect. They stood perpetually apart, time teasing them with memories unspoken; distance filled with all the insufferable things left unsaid—like the unravelling of their friendship, the roots that had once tied them were now frayed and coated with dust. With one decisive movement, Aurora brought the glass to her lips. The burn washed over her, stinging away her restraint, igniting long-buried frustration and the bitterness of dreams that had somehow slipped through her fingers like grains of sand. And yet, within it, lingered an undeniable intermingling of hope and despair. This was fireworks in the sky, a duel not of fists and blades but of camaraderie lost to time and redefined in agony. In the dim light of The Raven's Nest, under the watchful gaze of the past, they both took another drink—two friends whose paths had wound apart, now colliding at last within the unchanging embrace of silence, waiting for the thunder to follow.
total_cost0.0014382800000000001

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Aurora finally said [finally]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.568
leniency1
rawRatio0.04
effectiveRatio0.04
81.70% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1366
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"deliberately"
2"really"
3"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1366
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"tinged"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count2
3
word"palpable"
count1
4
word"chill"
count1
5
word"sense of"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count2
7
word"electric"
count1
8
word"weight"
count3
9
word"cascading"
count1
10
word"intrigue"
count2
11
word"echoing"
count1
12
word"silence"
count4
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"loomed"
count1
16
word"tension"
count1
17
word"etched"
count1
18
word"racing"
count1
19
word"perfect"
count1
20
word"glint"
count1
21
word"dancing"
count1
22
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"tinged"
1"gloom"
2"familiar"
3"palpable"
4"chill"
5"sense of"
6"warmth"
7"electric"
8"weight"
9"cascading"
10"intrigue"
11"echoing"
12"silence"
13"flickered"
14"stomach"
15"loomed"
16"tension"
17"etched"
18"racing"
19"perfect"
20"glint"
21"dancing"
22"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences67
matches
0"a thrill of panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences67
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences87
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1354
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1051
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.9
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Aurora20
Eva16
Silas5
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Aurora"
3"Eva"
4"Silas"
places(empty)
globalScore0.549
windowScore0.333
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"quite reach her eyes"
1"something like envy"
2"felt like a mist parting only to reveal"
3"Time itself seemingly bent, the weight of"
4"ehind the bar, evidently realising just how"
52.29% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.477
wordCount1354
matches
0"Not everything’s about him,” Aurora finally said, her voice low and careful, but even she could hear the tremor beneath the surface"
1"not of fists and blades but of camaraderie lost to time"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean28.81
std17.68
cv0.614
sampleLengths
09
165
251
322
468
58
648
748
810
947
1055
1119
127
1347
1410
1542
1642
1746
1814
1914
2038
2132
221
2318
2423
255
2640
2728
2815
2916
3017
3139
328
3355
3412
3524
367
3722
3837
3935
4025
4117
426
4346
4451
4523
4642
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs178
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences87
ratio0.08
matches
0"The Raven's Nest emitted an air of subdued chaos—voices wove indiscernibly in the shadowy corners, laughter tinged with the bitterness of spilled secrets."
1"The barge of time hadn’t just drifted past them; it had become a rickety vessel, strewn with the debris of all they had lost."
2"“About to become a partner, actually. Didn’t think I had it in me, but here we are.” Eva’s eyes flickered, an unsettling mix of pride—something Aurora had almost forgotten could burn in the pit of her stomach—and something darker, something like envy."
3"Silas leaned back against the bar, a half-smirk etched on his face—the kind of smirk that whispered of secrets she would prefer stayed buried."
4"“Right, let’s drink.” Eva’s voice had taken a tentative turn, but beneath it lay an invitation they both understood—confrontation suspiciously veiled under layers of urbanity."
5"They stood perpetually apart, time teasing them with memories unspoken; distance filled with all the insufferable things left unsaid—like the unravelling of their friendship, the roots that had once tied them were now frayed and coated with dust."
6"In the dim light of The Raven's Nest, under the watchful gaze of the past, they both took another drink—two friends whose paths had wound apart, now colliding at last within the unchanging embrace of silence, waiting for the thunder to follow."
71.86% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount248
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.06048387096774194
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.03225806451612903
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences87
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences87
mean15.56
std8.32
cv0.535
sampleLengths
09
121
223
321
416
520
615
715
87
917
1019
119
1223
138
148
1522
1618
1730
1818
1910
2024
2123
2216
2323
2416
254
2612
273
287
2917
306
3124
325
335
3442
355
3618
3719
3818
3928
4014
4114
4214
4324
4413
4519
461
4718
4814
499
93.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5862068965517241
totalSentences87
uniqueOpeners51
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences64
matches
0"She weaved between tables littered"
1"He wiped his hands on"
2"She met his gaze, lips"
3"He chuckled, but the amusement"
4"She looked polished, the soft"
5"She glanced at Silas, who"
6"she probed, deliberately casual"
7"It came out flat, as"
8"she challenged, steel knitting her"
9"She spat with more fervour"
10"She sensed her own vulnerability"
11"They stood perpetually apart, time"
ratio0.188
6.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences64
matches
0"Aurora shoved her way through"
1"The Raven's Nest emitted an"
2"She weaved between tables littered"
3"He wiped his hands on"
4"She met his gaze, lips"
5"He chuckled, but the amusement"
6"An almost palpable hush fell"
7"Aurora turned, her heart jolting"
8"There, silhouetted against the neon"
9"Aurora said under her breath"
10"Eva chirped, stepping forward"
11"The playful warmth in her"
12"The electric hum of the"
13"Aurora instinctively straightened her posture,"
14"She looked polished, the soft"
15"She glanced at Silas, who"
16"A sharp sensation prickled at"
17"Eva forced a smile that"
18"Aurora could sense how desperate"
19"The buzz of the bar"
ratio0.906
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
46.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"She met his gaze, lips curling into a smirk that felt foreign even to her."
1"Silas leaned back against the bar, a half-smirk etched on his face—the kind of smirk that whispered of secrets she would prefer stayed buried."
2"The airy jest cut sharp, as if Eva had wrenched a knife from its sheath with careless precision."
3"They stood perpetually apart, time teasing them with memories unspoken; distance filled with all the insufferable things left unsaid—like the unravelling of the…"
4"The burn washed over her, stinging away her restraint, igniting long-buried frustration and the bitterness of dreams that had somehow slipped through her finger…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"she challenged, steel knitting her voice,"
1"Eva said, trying to draw levity from the chasm of silence"
2"Aurora replied, the words slipping from her like water through fingers"
3"Aurora shot back, emotions bubbling over, her chest tightening"
4"Aurora snarled, the words tasting acrid as they broke through her lips"
5"Aurora replied, unable to suppress the spite that clung to her"
6"Eva mirrored, but their gazes didn’t connect"
36.36% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Eva chirped (chirp)"
1"she probed (probe)"
2"she challenged (challenge)"
3"She spat (spit)"
4"Aurora snarled (snarl)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.295
leniency0.591
rawRatio0.385
effectiveRatio0.227
67.3952%